~The Dark one~ Posted April 27, 2011 Report Share Posted April 27, 2011 [spoiler='Plot'] Ah yes the plot... The organisation called Good Helpers has taken over the world and is ruling with an iron fist. Many of today's younger people have hated this very much. One 20 year old named Chenea Montusia Has planed to start a rebellion. This has been hard because he has had to haggle and trade to get all the weapons he has. He is forming a small group of maybe 10 -20 people and is already planning to Overthrow the nearest city Chongason. [/spoiler] [spoiler='Accepted Apps']Username: Pokefanatic Characters Name(First and last):Chenea Montusia Age(14-20 please): 20 Gender(/Male or female): male Bio( at least 3 lines): Chenea is a very proud person. He has always been the kind of guy who stood up for people when no one else would. He has been kicked out from many schools and is labeled as a bad kid. His mom and dad abandoned him when he was 3 at an orphanage. He has lived on the scraps that he could find and the food that the orphanage gave him. His life was starting to turn around until the "Good helpers" As they call themselves overthrew the world. now he is starting a rebellion against them to overthrow them. Weapons:Sword, Knife, and Throwing stars[/spoiler] [spoiler='rules'] No metta gaming no god modding No power playing No short posts (for new members it is under 3 lines. For more advanced under 4) 1 rule break- its ok it happens 2 rule breaks - you can do better 3 rule breaks- fix it 4 rules break- banned from IC and OOC for one day 5 rule breaks- leave and don't come back [/spoiler] [spoiler='APP'] Username: Characters Name(first and last): Gender(/Male or female): Age (14-20 Please): Bio( at least 4 lines): Weapons: Powers: [/spoiler] [spoiler='My APP'] Username: Pokefanatic Characters Name(First and last):Chenea Montusia Age(14-20 please): 20 Gender(/Male or female): male Bio( at least 3 lines): Chenea is a very proud person. He has always been the kind of guy who stood up for people when no one else would. He has been kicked out from many schools and is labeled as a bad kid. His mom and dad abandoned him when he was 3 at an orphanage. He has lived on the scraps that he could find and the food that the orphanage gave him. His life was starting to turn around until the "Good helpers" As they call themselves overthrew the world. now he is starting a rebellion against them to overthrow them. Weapons:Sword, Knife, and Throwing stars [/spoiler] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tourmaline Posted April 27, 2011 Report Share Posted April 27, 2011 May I ask about "metta gaming"? I've read RP rules everywhere and know how to RP, but I've never heard of the term. What does it mean? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sweetie Belle Posted April 27, 2011 Report Share Posted April 27, 2011 [quote name='Pokefanatic' timestamp='1303946418' post='5172594'] Ah yes the plot... [b]And so many gaps to go with it.[/b] The organisation called Good Helpers has taken over the world and is ruling with an iron fist. [b]No back story on these Good Helpers? Where do they come from? Do they have a leader? Also, explain how they are ruling "with an iron fist." Are they using military force? Economical inflation? Or "iron fist" could sometimes be good, as Julius Caesar. DETAILS! CLARIFICATIONS![/b] Many of today's younger people have hated this very much. [b]Define today. I have no idea what time frame this takes place in, nor WHERE it is.[/b] One 20 year old named Chenea Montusia Has planed to start a rebellion. [b]Where did this boy come from? No back story again. [/b] This has been hard because he has had to haggle and trade to get all the weapons he has. [b]Your app states he has a sword, a knife, and throwing stars. Not much trading needed to get them, and not much difficulty to MAKE HIS OWN.[/b] He is forming a small group of maybe 10 -20 people [b]So, you think that 10-20 people could overthrow a city? Look up the Bay of Pigs Invasion. Since you say that the Good Helpers rule with an iron fist.[/b] and is already planning to Overthrow the nearest city Chongason. [b]Now I know we aren't in this universe. Where is Chongason? What city is Chenea in? What country? LOCATION, LOCATION, LOCATION.[/b] [/quote] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~The Dark one~ Posted April 27, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 27, 2011 [quote name='Hinagiku Katsura' timestamp='1303947290' post='5172644'] May I ask about "metta gaming"? I've read RP rules everywhere and know how to RP, but I've never heard of the term. What does it mean? [/quote] [color=#474747][font=tahoma, verdana, arial, sans-serif][size=2]This means using information that your character would have no way of knowing in character. For example, if Alice’s father recently died and hasn’t told anyone about it or let information slip, then Bob, who she just met on the street, isn’t going to console her about the loss of her father. Why? He would have no way of physically knowing. Doing this is disrespectful to a character’s intentions and plotting.[/size][/font][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dwarven King Posted April 27, 2011 Report Share Posted April 27, 2011 Umm...why did ElectricKirby's post lose a rep? He makes good points. Your RP is lacking in some information there bud. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sweetie Belle Posted April 28, 2011 Report Share Posted April 28, 2011 [b]Username:[/b] The Helpful Douchebag [b]Characters Name[/b]: Oblarken Mooglethrop Babalabababa Trolldormorgen the 14,578,368,156.2394850476105[sup]th[/sup] [b]Gender:[/b] Male [b]Age:[/b] 17.95427856324542189945 [b]Bio:[/b] Oblarken originates from Blarkatroll, a large citadel near to Gortrolaboo. His parents were in close connections with the leaders of the Good Helpers, giving him a lot of freedom. He had access to pretty much anything he wanted. He would order alcoholic beverages on a daily basis. For about a year, he would have a hangover every morning, and a stranger in his bed. But his body eventually became accustomed to the effects of the alcohol. He moved to Trolbalunka, where he got word of a rebellion, plotting to overthrow the Good Helpers. Knowing that this would cause him to lose everything he has, he joined the cause to make sure that it didn't succeed. [b]Weapons:[/b] Motion-sensor bombs, landmines, and small-scale plutonium bombs. He also has sniper rifles and an RPG launcher. He also wears bullet-proof armor, with matching shin guards and gauntlets, made of Gorbotrolloplaxitrollium, the hardest metal on the planet. [b]Powers:[/b] He can resist radiation that is normally harmful or even lethal to whatever species he is. He also has super strength. He also has regeneration. As long as a part of him is unscathed, he regenerates from it within minutes. He also has the ability to make people explode, and spontaneous combustion. ^^Exactly what happens if your plot has infinite gaps, and your rules are vague. Also, you didn't listen when I tried to help you. Well, haters gonna hate. By the way, you're missing Advanced Clause. Also, counter neg. Tomorrow. When it lets me. [quote name='Dwarven King' timestamp='1303948761' post='5172749'] Umm...why did ElectricKirby's post lose a rep? He makes good points. Your RP is lacking in some information there bud. [/quote] Care to balance it? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dwarven King Posted April 28, 2011 Report Share Posted April 28, 2011 [quote name='ElectricKirby' timestamp='1303949229' post='5172779']Care to balance it? [/quote] Already done. You're plus one now. Alright, my turn to exploit the gaps! ;D Username: Dwarven King (Obviously ) Characters Name(first and last): Zee Alote Goofingale Gender(Male or female): Male Age (14-20 Please): 19 Bio( at least 4 lines): Zee was born on planet Oogingode in the dimension called Artflark. There he was know as the greatest magician! That was because he used REAL magic. But, alas, he grew bored. So he used his awesomely, epicly, amazing, magical skills to rip open a portal to a new world in a different dimension. Once there, he decided he would entertain himself by taking out the ruling people. So he teamed up with people to do so. Weapons: Double bladed waraxe that weighs a ton, M16 with infinite bullets, frag grenades, mini nuke launcher (like off of Fallout 3), and an electro ray gun thingy. Powers: He creates an imprentrable shield, can make people evaporate, and can enter people's minds and make them do what he wants. Oh, and he can be invisible. Fix the gaps and I'll consider joining this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Amazing Avian Posted April 28, 2011 Report Share Posted April 28, 2011 Dude, you seriously need to organize this. Provide back stories for your character and the Good Helpers and give us an idea of what their political structure is. Is the government communist, democratic, a monarchy, what the hell is it? And the RP is titled War Leaders, therefore there must be more than one group of people rebelling. Now fix all the plot holes (too many to count), and stop being a prick to people who are trying to help you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
..:Spitfire:.. Posted April 28, 2011 Report Share Posted April 28, 2011 [quote name='ElectricKirby' timestamp='1303949229' post='5172779'] Also, counter neg. Tomorrow. When it lets me. [/quote] I got that for you. This RP is atrocious. Your plot is missing so much, and your app is even more. There's no appearance on the App, so my character could be a giant slimy bug monster with 26 eyes! No personality, so the character could act in so many ways, with no defined way. Your plot doesn't state anything about anyone having powers, nor does it state what level of weaponry there is. And, as Kirby said, you're missing the Advanced Clause. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Half Vamp Riku Posted April 28, 2011 Report Share Posted April 28, 2011 [quote name='Random Dude' timestamp='1303950517' post='5172873'] Dude, you seriously need to organize this. Provide back stories for your character and the Good Helpers and give us an idea of what their political structure is. Is the government communist, democratic, a monarchy, what the hell is it? And the RP is titled War Leaders, therefore there must be more than one group of people rebelling. Now fix all the plot holes (too many to count), and stop being a prick to people who are trying to help you. [/quote] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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