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Will the authors perform a 2x Psyche Out Combo?

...Nah

Anyways this is Fenrir and Dark's Fan Fiction review! Woooot! We basically do s*** the other reviewers do, except we actually say it and record it at like 1:00 AM. Yeaaah!

[spoiler=Episode 1: Rebecca Black?!?!?!]

[url=http://tindeck.com/listen/xwwj]Click here to listen to [b]darkmmxii_2011.04.02.Sat.00.01.56.mp3[/b][/url]

Fan Fic: Austin Black's Genius Adventure of Genius Town or something

Note: This was recorded pretty early, so some of our jokes are probably pretty damn terrible. That and the quality is probably s***. Probably.
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[spoiler=Episode 2: He's a furry i swear]

Review: [url=http://tindeck.com/listen/jecr]Click here to listen to [b]darkmmxii_2011.04.02.Sat.23.39.55.mp3[/b][/url]

Final Thoughts: [url=http://tindeck.com/listen/ltum]Click here to listen to [b]darkmmxii_2011.04.03.Sun.00.10.42.mp3[/b][/url]

Fan Fic: Kingdom Hearts Remix by Chaos Sonic or w/e

Note: Uhm, we kind of underestimated our time limit. So yeah, we screwed up around the end.

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[spoiler=Episode 3: a game in a game]
Review: [url=http://tindeck.com/listen/sxnb]Click here to listen to [b]darkmmxii_2011.04.08.Fri.16.40.19.mp3[/b][/url]

Final Thoughts: [url=http://tindeck.com/listen/bcye]Click here to listen to [b]darkmmxii_2011.04.08.Fri.17.12.26.mp3[/b][/url]

Fan Fic: YCM: The Game - Chapter 2 Added
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[spoiler=Episode 4: ZORUUAAAAAAAAAA]
Review: [url=http://tindeck.com/listen/qnzm]Click here to listen to [b]darkmmxii_2011.04.09.Sat.20.02.48.mp3[/b][/url]

Part 2: [url=http://tindeck.com/listen/hpdc]Click here to listen to [b]darkmmxii_2011.04.09.Sat.20.38.03.mp3[/b][/url]

Note: Lots of offtopic s***.
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[spoiler=Episode 5: angry japanese man]
Review: [url=http://tindeck.com/listen/sfnu]Click here to listen to [b]darkmmxii_2011.04.16.Sat.22.44.44.mp3[/b][/url]

Note: The beginning was just... Uhm. Blame Dark.
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[spoiler=Episode 6: zekrom four bombs golf club!]
[url=http://tindeck.com/listen/qcwq]Click here to listen to [b]darkmmxii_2011.04.17.Sun.16.59.08.mp3[/b][/url]

Fan fic: Gabriel.
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[spoiler=Episode 7: mIrAcLeS]
Review: [url=http://tindeck.com/listen/zibo]Free MP3 download: [b]darkmmxii_2011.04.29.Fri.22.59.59.mp3[/b][/url]

Part 2: [url=http://tindeck.com/listen/uzgr]Free MP3 download: [b]darkmmxii_2011.04.29.Fri.23.34.07.mp3[/b][/url]

Fan Fic: Pichu's Review thread.

Notes: MIRACLES
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[spoiler=Episode 8: MY LITTLE STEELIX]
Review: [url=http://tindeck.com/listen/gtpc]Free MP3 download: [b]darkmmxii_2011.05.07.Sat.22.30.43.mp3[/b][/url]

Part 2: [url=http://tindeck.com/listen/yerk]Free MP3 download: [b]darkmmxii_2011.05.07.Sat.23.02.23.mp3[/b][/url]

Fan Fic: Moonstone Festival of CLEFFAS THAT SUCK.

Notes: worst. recording. ever.
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[spoiler=Episode 9: HE HAS TO GASP ANYWAYS]
Review: [url=http://tindeck.com/listen/pgmm]Free MP3 download: [b]zekokonoe_2011.06.09.Thu.13.38.01.mp3[/b][/url]

Fan Fic: Yu-Gi-Oh! CP: COSMIC WHATEVER

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[spoiler=BONUS RECORDINGS]
Ice getting trolled: [url=http://tindeck.com/listen/jkrm]Click here to listen to [b]darkmmxii_2011.04.08.Fri.17.52.05.mp3[/b][/url]

Hot Ninetails on Politoad action: [url=http://tindeck.com/listen/ufwv]Free MP3 download: [b]tsa-swifty94_2011.05.02.Mon.17.18.52.mp3[/b][/url]
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PS MODS, does this actually go here?

[size="1"]Disclaimer: If you do not like our reviews, go suck my left nut. - Dark[/size]
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[quote name='The Happy Mask Salesman' timestamp='1301759048' post='5107722']
I was too busy laughing to care how much you must have damaged poor, poor Pichu's dreams.
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Damage? Poor? Pichu? Dreams? HAHAHAHAHAHA!

This is nothing compared to what Crab Helmet did to Pichu.
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I was listening to it and I heard a few skipped frames, it might have just been some lag. Nevertheless, we are really trying to keep this going, but expect us to have a ton of quality and schedule problems.

Glad to see a whole two of you like it, though.
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I sounded kind of off in Episode 2 because literally five minutes before we started recording I saw a bug on my ceiling and I freaked out like hell. But eventually it went away, I recovered from the shock, and mustered up enough courage to sit at my couch and record.

I think Episode 2 was a more "legitimate" review, because Episode 1 was really a joke because it was a Pichu fanfic. Episode 2 was a serious fanfic, and as such I think the review was more applicable and serious.
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[quote name='PikaPerson01' timestamp='1301805787' post='5110051']
*listens to first episode*

The sixth gym in Unova is an airport. Granted, it's emphasized it's only for cargo planes. *shrug*

You didn't really say anything I didn't already think as I read that fic.
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Yeah, I was kind of stressing that there was no such thing as traveling between regions, with the exception of Kanto-Johto. To be fair, I'm not at the sixth gym yet, so I kind of lack knowledge in that aspect.

We aren't really trying to be extremely specific or even serious when we do these shows, by the way. This isn't like Foe Fiction or whatever Roxas posts. We are just dicking around and having fun, but the second episode does have a bit of criticism. As long as people keep listening, we don't mind talking. =)
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Listened to the Kingdom Hearts one.

SPOILER!!!

The prologue is literally what happens in the games. Yeah, it's poorly written, but that is literally what occurs. Sure, the story is a convoluted mess, but that's the source material he was dealt with.

Sea-Salt Ice Cream is a legit thing in the series. So is Munny.

And yeah, Sea-Salt Ice Cream is joked about in the fandom to be sex. Especially Roxas's journal in 358-2 Days. You can literally replace the terms (sea-salt) ice cream with "sex" in Roxas's journal and it still makes sense (or makes even MORE sense.)

What follows is literal, verbatim copypasta journal entries from lawlgamefaqs. As such, spoilers abound.

[spoiler=herpdy derp]Day 8: Entry 2

Axel and I went to Twilight Town today. He taught me a lot.

Before we RTC'd (Returned To the Castle) we swung by the clock tower and had
some sea-salt ice cream. Axel called it the "icing on the cake" after a
successful mission. Well, except there was no cake---just the ice cream.

I don't know what to write in this thing!


---

Day 14: Entry 4

Me and Axel went on a mission to Twilight Town. Afterwards, we went and had ice
cream again up on the clock tower.

He said friends do stuff like that. Or they laugh together. So does that mean
me and him are friends?

---

Day 15: Entry 5

The other members have been teaching me more about how to fight and stuff. It's
going, I guess.

Every day after work, I've been meeting Axel at the clock tower to have
sea-salt ice cream. It really is salty! But still sweet, too. How come it
tastes so familiar?

---

Day 23: Entry 7

Axel left before I woke up this morning. (...)

I was partnered up with No. XIV for today's mission. Xion wore a hood the whole
time and wouldn't say a word to me. Come to think of it, I didn't have a whole
lot to say, either.

Afterwards I went and had ice cream by myself.

---

Day 24: Entry 8

I teamed up with No. XIV again today. We finally talked a little---Xion even
said my name for the first time.

Afterwards I had ice cream by myself again.

---

Day 25: Entry 9

Today was my third day with Xion. I've gotten to know a little more about her.
That's right---she's a girl, with black hair, and she can use the Keyblade just
like me!

I took her out for ice cream afterwards, but I'm saving the WINNER stick. Axel
deserves a reward when he gets back. Xion wants to have ice cream with us from
now on. Maybe we'll be friends.

---

Day 51: Annihilated

(...)

I went up to the clock tower to have ice cream, but nobody else showed up.

---

Day 72: Ice Cream with Axel

Me and Axel went to Agrabah. He seems different now that he's back from C.O.
Ice cream was just the two of us today.

I wonder when me and Axel and Xion will all get to have ice cream together.


---

Day 73: Where's Xion?

After I finished my mission I wanted all three of us to have ice cream, but I
couldn't find Xion.

(...)[/spoiler]

... It just goes on and on like this. >_>

http://www.gamefaqs.com/ds/943346-kingdom-hearts-358-2-days/faqs/58019
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[quote name='PikaPerson01' timestamp='1301805787' post='5110051']
*listens to first episode*

The sixth gym in Unova is an airport. Granted, it's emphasized it's only for cargo planes. *shrug*

You didn't really say anything I didn't already think as I read that fic.
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Yeah, I was thinking that when Dark talked about there being no planes.


[quote name='PikaPerson01' timestamp='1301808731' post='5110132']
Listened to the Kingdom Hearts one.

SPOILER!!!

The prologue is literally what happens in the games. Yeah, it's poorly written, but that is literally what occurs. Sure, the story is a convoluted mess, but that's the source material he was dealt with.

Sea-Salt Ice Cream is a legit thing in the series. So is Munny.

And yeah, Sea-Salt Ice Cream is joked about in the fandom to be sex. Especially Roxas's journal in 358-2 Days. You can literally replace the terms (sea-salt) ice cream with "sex" in Roxas's journal and it still makes sense (or makes even MORE sense.)

What follows is literal, verbatim copypasta journal entries from lawlgamefaqs. As such, spoilers abound.

[spoiler=herpdy derp]Day 8: Entry 2

Axel and I went to Twilight Town today. He taught me a lot.

Before we RTC'd (Returned To the Castle) we swung by the clock tower and had
some sea-salt ice cream. Axel called it the "icing on the cake" after a
successful mission. Well, except there was no cake---just the ice cream.

I don't know what to write in this thing!


---

Day 14: Entry 4

Me and Axel went on a mission to Twilight Town. Afterwards, we went and had ice
cream again up on the clock tower.

He said friends do stuff like that. Or they laugh together. So does that mean
me and him are friends?

---

Day 15: Entry 5

The other members have been teaching me more about how to fight and stuff. It's
going, I guess.

Every day after work, I've been meeting Axel at the clock tower to have
sea-salt ice cream. It really is salty! But still sweet, too. How come it
tastes so familiar?

---

Day 23: Entry 7

Axel left before I woke up this morning. (...)

I was partnered up with No. XIV for today's mission. Xion wore a hood the whole
time and wouldn't say a word to me. Come to think of it, I didn't have a whole
lot to say, either.

Afterwards I went and had ice cream by myself.

---

Day 24: Entry 8

I teamed up with No. XIV again today. We finally talked a little---Xion even
said my name for the first time.

Afterwards I had ice cream by myself again.

---

Day 25: Entry 9

Today was my third day with Xion. I've gotten to know a little more about her.
That's right---she's a girl, with black hair, and she can use the Keyblade just
like me!

I took her out for ice cream afterwards, but I'm saving the WINNER stick. Axel
deserves a reward when he gets back. Xion wants to have ice cream with us from
now on. Maybe we'll be friends.

---

Day 51: Annihilated

(...)

I went up to the clock tower to have ice cream, but nobody else showed up.

---

Day 72: Ice Cream with Axel

Me and Axel went to Agrabah. He seems different now that he's back from C.O.
Ice cream was just the two of us today.

I wonder when me and Axel and Xion will all get to have ice cream together.


---

Day 73: Where's Xion?

After I finished my mission I wanted all three of us to have ice cream, but I
couldn't find Xion.

(...)[/spoiler]

... It just goes on and on like this. >_>

http://www.gamefaqs.com/ds/943346-kingdom-hearts-358-2-days/faqs/58019
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oh my god wat

is that

literally...???

I do remember a friend of mine explaining the plot of the first two games (or just the games released for the playstation 2) and while I was reading the prologue, a lot of the things mentioned struck me as familiar. Doesn't excuse the fact that most of it was pretty much unneeded. I mentioned a bunch of times on how if the prologue IS literally explaining what happened in KH1-2, then it's pretty unnecessary. Considering that the people who read his fan fic will know what happened in KH1-2, they don't need to read a prologue. Reading back, I think the only part that was actually 'new' and lead to his fan fiction was the sentence, "or so they thought." I mean if he REALLY wanted to explain this, he could have at least shortened it to just explaining KH2 or w/e.

But hey, I've never played KH. Maybe he was explaining s*** that others needed to be reminded of/know? Shrug.
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... Damn it! I forgot my favourite journal entry. > >


---

Day 153: No Taste for It

It's hard spending time with Xion, and Axel seems busy, too. I've been having
ice cream alone, but it's just not the same. All I taste is the salt, and my
hands get all sticky. (...)

---


Okay so...


[quote]Maybe he was explaining s*** that others needed to be reminded of/know? Shrug. [/quote]
Then the question becomes whether or not others needed to be reminded. I refuse to... you know... actually read anything longer then 1000 words so I wouldn't know. He makes reference to the Birth By Sleep trio, Xeanhort, Ansem, Xemnas, Riku, Kairi, Sora, Donald, Goofy, and yet other then a quick cameo of two of them (Donald and Goofy) not much comes of explaining the backstory, since it seems to be, from what little I've skimmed, just a fresh copypasta of the first game. (Or the first two games, since Destiny Island doesn't have a town or sea salt ice cream. The town and ice cream parts are lifted from Roxas and Twilight Town.)
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I think he was trying to be clever by creating a segway between the actual KH games and his fanfiction, but it just downright did not work. I don't know how stupid the actual KH plot it, but the way he explained it, it sounds really stupid. He could have just linked us to a Wiki article about KH and KH2 and anyone who didn't know about Kingdom Hearts could have read the story summary (because Sparknotes for video games doesn't exist), if they really wanted to read the fanfic. At least it would have been well-written in comparison to his prologue.
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A little reminder for you, Dark, and Fenrir:

Spellcheck? First off, Spellcheck is not usable unless the word you typed in does not exist. the word "You're" is an existing word, so he couldn't have been abble to change it unless it isn't a real word. Chaos Sonic is probably used to typing in "You're" instead of "your". If you see "You're" in place of "your", just ignore what the actual word is saying and just think he'she is saying "Your".

Just saying. Unless you already realized it.
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[quote name='The Swift Assaulter' timestamp='1301927598' post='5113742']

Spellcheck? First off, Spellcheck is not usable unless the word you typed in does not exist. the word "You're" is an existing word, so he couldn't have been abble to change it unless it isn't a real word. Chaos Sonic is probably used to typing in "You're" instead of "your". If you see "You're" in place of "your", just ignore what the actual word is saying and just think he'she is saying "Your".
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That doesn't excuse the fact that using 'you're' instead of 'your' is pretty f***ing silly. Since the second review was semi-serious, we were taking this s*** semi-serious. Except for the ice cream parts. That was just silly. There is no excuse to use you're instead of your, typing mistake or not. It wasn't a one-time accident either, considering it was there MULTIPLE TIMES. For a 17 yr old, he apparently cannot read his work and correct it himself. Spellcheck is useful yes, but you should also read it yourself/let someone else read it, as you can pass over really stupid mistakes.
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[quote name='The Swift Assaulter' timestamp='1301927598' post='5113742']
A little reminder for you, Dark, and Fenrir:

Spellcheck? First off, Spellcheck is not usable unless the word you typed in does not exist. the word "You're" is an existing word, so he couldn't have been [b]abble[/b] to change it unless it isn't a real word. Chaos Sonic is probably used to typing in "You're" instead of "your". If you see "You're" in place of "your", just ignore what the actual word is saying and just think he'she is saying "Your".

Just saying. Unless you already realized it.
[/quote]

Spellcheck.

Put, yeah, spellcheck doesn't fix grammar mistakes. However, as [s]Fenrir[/s]Rarity said, at age 17 he should be able to recognize such mistakes.
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[quote name='PikaPerson01' timestamp='1301931794' post='5113849']
The whole "reading this for the first time and saying the first thing that pops into your mind" approach is as amateurish as the fics you're trying to lampoon.
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But it's fun. 8D
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