Basherbelding Posted September 19, 2007 Report Share Posted September 19, 2007 Ray Switched On the TV to watch the lotto he got out his lotto Ticket out and waited a few minutes....Then The Lotto Announcer Woman Turned on the lotto Machine....The Number balls Went round and round then the first number is reveled Number 5 "Cool Five to go!" Said Ray..The next number was number 12 "whoo! Shouted Ray (4 more to go)...The next number was number 3 "Oh My" Ray Jumped out his seat at this point...(3 more to go)Next number number 32! "C,mon!" Shouted Ray (2 more to go)....Next number..Number 33! "Yes.yes.yes"Shouted ray (one more)the last number number 13!!!"I WON I ACTUALLY WON!I AM RICH!" He Shouted Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luna Diviner Posted September 19, 2007 Report Share Posted September 19, 2007 good but it could be a bit longer. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Basherbelding Posted September 19, 2007 Author Report Share Posted September 19, 2007 Yes The other chapters will be longer (the action ones) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MikeGallo Posted September 19, 2007 Report Share Posted September 19, 2007 Ray Switched On the TV to watch the lotto he got out his lotto Ticket out and waited a few minutes....Then The Lotto Announcer Woman Turned on the lotto Machine....The Number balls Went round and round then the first number is reveled Number 5 "Cool Five to go!" Said Ray..The next number was number 12 "whoo! Shouted Ray (4 more to go)...The next number was number 3 "Oh My" Ray Jumped out his seat at this point...(3 more to go)Next number number 32! "C' date='mon!" Shouted Ray (2 more to go)....Next number..Number 33! "Yes.yes.yes"Shouted ray (one more)the last number number 13!!!"I WON I ACTUALLY WON!I AM RICH!" He Shouted[/quote']That is a whole chapter? Way to short. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Basherbelding Posted September 19, 2007 Author Report Share Posted September 19, 2007 Yes i know the next chapter is longer about double that there is a fight in it i am adding it tomorow :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Supreme Posted September 20, 2007 Report Share Posted September 20, 2007 wish to see a great chapter!!bash i added you to my story and did not kick you off even though you lost lol but you will be in next chapters Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Basherbelding Posted September 20, 2007 Author Report Share Posted September 20, 2007 Ha Ha lol THANK yOU! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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