Silent Omega Posted February 4, 2009 Report Share Posted February 4, 2009 [spoiler=Introduction]"250 years have passed ever since the dimensional hole was created.Our people has suffered greatly because of those creatures.Maybe the only one who can stop them are the good guys.....and my son Alex." ~ John Sanders [spoiler=Characters]Name:Alex SandersAge:19Digimon:Dorumon-Dorugamon-Dorugreymon-Dorugoramon-AlphamonBio:He found Dorumon when the Hole was created.Ever since then both of them were good friend.Now he has to stop the Hole. Name:John SandersAge:34Digimon:Hagurumon-Thunderballmon-Cyberdramon-Justimon(Rarely uses digimon)Bio:He was a soldier during the Hole.He found Hagurumon and teached him to have manners.Both of them were seperated When Hagurumon accidentally got knocked into the Hole. Name: Stephanie McPhilleasAge: 24Appearance: Digimon: Renamon-Youkomon-Doumon-KuzuhamonBio: Stephanie is the daughter of the well-renowned McPhilleas clan in Britain, and is as a result rich and spoiled. Because of her parents not restricting her, she has taught herself several dark, magical arts. Because of the Dark Arts she had taught herself, this affected her Renamon as well, as she digivolves into Youkomon, Doumon and Kuzuhamon rather than Kyubimon, Taomon and Sakuyamon. Name: Fredrik CarystonAge: 19Appearance: Digimon(s): Flamedramon(nickname Blaze) and Weregarurumon(nickname Fang)Bio: Fredrik is pretty much of a regular kid when first looked upon. But, should someone ever underestimate him, they´re in for a big surprise! He is very well trained in the Martial Arts, all of them! And he is so skilled indeed, that he is sometimes able to beat his own Weregarurumon in occational sparring matches! His Flamedramon and Weregarurumon are infected by a virus called the "Digi-Halter Virus", a virus which is believed to have been created right after The Hole, and is able to halt any Digivolution or De-Digivolution, meaning that they´re stuck in their forms. Name:Steven Hartixov(Har-ti-kov)Age:19Digimon:Dorumon-Reptiledramon-Grademon-AlphamonBio:He is best friends with Alex and there is something weird between them.Born on the same day,Same first and last digivolutions. [spoiler=Chapter 1] Alex: "What!!!But I've......"' ????: "I know...sorry but you're not welcome anymore" Alex: "What!!!!!" Alex hangs the phone Alex: "Man now I won't be able to see Dad." ??????: "You need to calm down Alex" Alex:" Calm down?!!!Those guys just stopped my connection with Dad!Now we'll never now about it Dorumon!!!!" Dorumon: "Relax.....maybe we need to find your so called rival" Alex: "Any reason why we need to find him?" Dorumon: "Well we'll need all the help we can remember?And we need 5 people including you to go through the portal." Alex: "Right" Alex and Dorumon then heads out of the house. Alex: "Well i know he lives in 1123 Mercy Street" Dorumon: "Just one problem" Alex: "What?" Dorumon: "Well i kind of had a problem with one of the police there hehe." End of chapter 1 [spoiler=Chapter 2] Stephanie: "Those fools are trying to defy aren't they Renamon." Renamon: "Yes they have,They have defied our rules and we have to kill them don't we?" Stephanie: "No....we'll watch them for now." Renamon: "Very well master...it IS your decision." ---meanwhile---Alex: "Ok, what did you do Dorumon?" Dorumon: "Nothing, one of the police officers just pissed me off and then I...." Alex: "Why would you do that?!" Dorumon: "It's not my fault!!!That police officer had it coming!!!" Alex: "Ok whatever!!!Lets just go" Dorumon: "OK OK....." Alex and Dorumon then runs to 1123 Mercy Street Alex: "Ok...Here I go." Alex rings the bell and a man the same age as him answered the door. ?????: "Oh....Hello there....Alex" Alex: "Yeah hello Fredrick" Fredrick: "So what's going on with your digimon?" Alex: "Oh nothing.Just a trained them a bit....may i come in?" Fredrick: "Make yourself comfortable" Alex then went inside the house and sat on a couch next to Fredrick. Alex: "So listen I know your Father and Mother have been- Fredrick: "Shut up!My Parent were captured and i don't need to remind my self of that!" Alex: "Yeah?Well heres News...Your Parents are inside the Hole." Fredrick: ".......In the Dimensional Hole?" Alex: "Yeah that's right, now I need 5 people to come with me inside the Hole and destroy it....So will you join me?" Fredrick: "Well....." Flamedramon & Weregarurumon: "Do it....Join him" Fredrick: "Well if my partners want to join then I'm in" Alex: "Alright we need 3 more people....Just one tiny problem though." Fredrick: "What is it?" Alex: "Well the next person is....Stephanie McPhilleas" Fredrick: "Uh-oh....." End of Chapter 2 [spoiler=chapter 3] Alex: "So why don't we just go now?" Fredrik: "Because Alex......Well fine let's just go" Alex,Fredrik and digimon walk to the front of Stephanie's house Alex: "Well this is it" Fredrik: "Yep sure is...." Alex ringed the bell and Stephanie answered it Stephanie: "What do you want Alex...Hey there Fredrik"(Stephanie liked Fredrik ever since a long time ago) Fredrik: "Uh yeah Hi Stephanie....Any way Long story short we need 5 people to go in the Dimensional Hole." Stephanie: "Yeah so....." Alex: "So we need you to come with us" Stephanie: "Ok" Alex: "Awww i knew it-Wait!!Did you say ok?" Stephanie: "Yeah..." Fredrik: "Alright so who's next..." Alex: "Well theres always Steven" Fredrik: "Oh no not him..." Alex: "What's wrong with him?" Fredrik: "Well it's just that you guys are weird together" Alex: "Oh come on were just friends anyway we're going now" Alex took Stephanie and Fredrik's hands and dragged them into Steven's house Alex ringed the doorbell and Steven's mother answered it SM: "Oh Hi there Alex" Alex: "Hi there mrs.Hartixov mind if i see Steven?" Sm: "Oh sure go ahead" Alex and company entered Steven's room Steven: "Oh hey what's up Alex,Dorumon,and Company" After all the explaining Steven agreed but one thing. Steven: "You have to beat me in a duel" Alex: "I accept!!!" Alex and company went out the backyard. Alex: "Dorumon you ready?" Dorumon: "Always ready!!!" Steven: "Ready?" Dorumon: "Oh yeah" Alex: "go Digivolution!!" Alex held up a digivice and there were words which spelled out DIGIVOLUTION,Steven did the same thing. ReptileDramon: "Oh yeah!!!!" Dorugamon: "Yeah!!!!" Alex: "Go Dorugamon Cannonball!!!!" Steven: "Reptildramon Ambush crunch!!!" The 2 digimon were hit badly but kept going Alex: "Alright then.....We've had the battle it's a tie" Steven: "I agree...." The 4 were out of breath Alex: "Ok then..now we...rest" Everybody slept that night inside Steven's house End of Chapter 3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted February 4, 2009 Report Share Posted February 4, 2009 Can I suggest a character? Pleeeeaaaasssseee??? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted February 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 4, 2009 Sure go ahead. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted February 4, 2009 Report Share Posted February 4, 2009 Sweet!! I got two, if you don´t mind: Name: Stephanie McPhilleasAge: 24Appearance: Digimon: Renamon-Youkomon-Doumon-KuzuhamonBio: Stephanie is the daughter of the well-renowned McPhilleas clan in Britain, and is as a result rich and spoiled. Because of her parents not restricting her, she has taught herself several dark, magical arts. Because of the Dark Arts she had taught herself, this affected her Renamon as well, as she digivolves into Youkomon, Doumon and Kuzuhamon rather than Kyubimon, Taomon and Sakuyamon. Name: Fredrik CarystonAge: 19Appearance: Digimon(s): Flamedramon(nickname Blaze) and Weregarurumon(nickname Fang)Bio: Fredrik is pretty much of a regular kid when first looked upon. But, should someone ever underestimate him, they´re in for a big surprise! He is very well trained in the Martial Arts, all of them! And he is so skilled indeed, that he is sometimes able to beat his own Weregarurumon in occational sparring matches! His Flamedramon and Weregarurumon are infected by a virus called the "Digi-Halter Virus", a virus which is believed to have been created right after The Hole, and is able to halt any Digivolution or De-Digivolution, meaning that they´re stuck in their forms. Hope the Bios isn´t too long and hope they get accepted! ^_^If they get accepted, could you put their profiles(without the pics) in the Character spoiler? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted February 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 4, 2009 Accepted and which one is good and bad or are they both good or bad? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted February 4, 2009 Report Share Posted February 4, 2009 YAY ^_^ ^_^ About Evil/Good side: Stephanie is kinda half good/half bad since she is once in a while able to control herself, but most of the time, her Dark Magic is possessing her mind, making her evil. And Fredrik is 100% good! Also: Like chapter 1, but I kinda prefer the other writing format. But no grammar problem as far as I can see, so good job! Can´t wait for the next chapter! When will it be up? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted February 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 4, 2009 I'll be making it today maybe. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted February 4, 2009 Report Share Posted February 4, 2009 Was that it? That, my friend, was not a chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted February 4, 2009 Report Share Posted February 4, 2009 Hey, Umbra. Not to try and be cocky, but let him be! Some writers write long chapters, and some write short, that´s just a thing to accept, man! But, yeah, it was kinda short. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted February 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 4, 2009 Well Chapter 2 is a bit longer than Chapter 1. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted February 4, 2009 Report Share Posted February 4, 2009 Well, nice chapter......Buuuuuuuuuut, it could be a little longer future chapters? BTW: My characters are awesome, exept that you spelled "Fredrik" wrong. It´s no C in front of K, just Fredrik, okay? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted February 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 4, 2009 Ok next time I post the chapters will be longer but for now i have to read your Fanfiction The Time legion. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted February 4, 2009 Report Share Posted February 4, 2009 Nice ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted February 5, 2009 Report Share Posted February 5, 2009 Keepimg things alive for you, buddy! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Warden Posted February 5, 2009 Report Share Posted February 5, 2009 hmmm, sad, length somethimes overpasses value. make them longer, please Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted February 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 5, 2009 Well i will make the next chapter longer Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted February 5, 2009 Report Share Posted February 5, 2009 Nice new chapter, although I do really think you should try and write in the other format, since the Script Form leaves out important details of, for example, the surroundings, the characters emotions, and the dialouges are easier to follow in the other form(don´t know what it´s called). Anyways, great fan fic!! Hope to see chapter 4 soon, and I hope it´s a long one! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted February 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 5, 2009 I think it will be long i will write it soon i hope. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted February 6, 2009 Report Share Posted February 6, 2009 What I meant was that you need to describe places, not just write up a dialogue. This is a novel, not a script, and it should be treated that way. Take a look at the Grammar Freak's Guide to Fanfiction for a perfect example on how to write descriptions. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted February 18, 2009 Report Share Posted February 18, 2009 Keeping things alive here Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Recommended Posts
Archived
This topic is now archived and is closed to further replies.