Deity Mitsu's Self-Made Songs-5th Song Posted

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This one takes the cake. Deeper meaning is woven into the lyrics. Work on adding more verses' date=' I saw that there was one verse, then two chorus's. Usually a song goes

 

intro

verse 1

(Pre chorus, optional)

chorus 1

verse 2

(pre chorus, optional)

chorus 1 repeat

Verse 3 (smaller)

(pre chorus, off by a little to the first two pre chorus's)

chorus 2 (Off by chorus 1 by a couple of the rhyming words)

Outro.

 

I think you know this, but I think you should add a verse 2 to the new song you just made, but hey, if you want to, don't, its cool as it is. Just remember, the talent is there, utilize it as you wish.

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"Verse 3" is called a bridge.

 

And also, it's more boring if you follow an outline. I think DM's songs are fantastic the way they are.

 

They are, hands down. But, if there only 2 minutes long, he MIGHT want to attempt to add more, if he can, make it better if he feels it. I never at any point stated that he SHOULD use the outline, I stated that a song "Usually" follows that pattern. Deity, do what you will, but if you ever feel like adding more to something, I think it will become better.

 

your right,when I did my old recordings none of my songs were longer then 3 and a half minutes.But,keep in mind that I haven't added instrument solos or breaks.i do get your point though,and I'll try to make some longer lyrics to see how you like them compared to the rest.

 

Sounds good, you know how to write music?

[Deity Mitsu]

Like sheet music for instruments?I only ever studied guitar tabs and tuba music in band:P,as well as percussion and piano/keyboard.