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Yu-Gi-Oh!: The story of a Legend continues... (Finished)

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*shrugs* That doesn't matter because I know there's a sequel' date=' which will improve matters later on

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It won't be that bad. The ending will just be...very open.

Nothing will truely be decided. I'm getting rid of Gandrios, the throw away villain. And of his master too.

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and make another villain even more evil or something?

 

You mean' date=' like a villain with an actual plan?

...haven't tought of a villain actually.

This book's main villain is someone increddibly evil villain, voiced by I ain't tellin ya!. There. That was the plot twist.

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Just finished reading Part I and I must say, it's shorter than expected. I didn't think it would be so short. But it was pretty good. Things you could improve on. Use that thing called Enter. Seriously, whenever doing dialouge, always make a new line when doing so. I was able to follow it but dang that was annoying. Next as far as I see constructing dueling style could be improved. Though I could be wrong since I've only read Part I. But yeah you broke out the power a bit too early in my opinion. Should have waited a bit before, jumping the gun with a Ultimate Dragon but eh. Let's see what else there is to read. Well that's all for now. If no one posts by the time I finish reading the second part (after I eat), I'll edit this post to give my second opinion. But so far overall pretty darn good. Ja Ne

 

Yami-Atemu, son of Yugi.

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Just finished reading Part I and I must say' date=' it's shorter than expected. I didn't think it would be so short. But it was pretty good. Things you could improve on. Use that thing called Enter. Seriously, whenever doing dialouge, always make a new line when doing so. I was able to follow it but dang that was annoying. Next as far as I see constructing dueling style could be improved. Though I could be wrong since I've only read Part I. But yeah you broke out the power a bit too early in my opinion. Should have waited a bit before, jumping the gun with a Ultimate Dragon but eh. Let's see what else there is to read. Well that's all for now. If no one posts by the time I finish reading the second part (after I eat), I'll edit this post to give my second opinion. But so far overall pretty darn good. Ja Ne

 

Yami-Atemu, son of Yugi.

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Thanks!

Just like in the series, I wanted it to seem unlikely for the mùain character to win his first Duel. In the anime, the Pilot Duelists all were suposedly strong. (Kaiba, Cronos and Ushio)

The duels get crap starting from chapter 6...

You signed your post by "Ja Ne". Does that mean you're Dutch?

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Just finished reading Part I and I must say' date=' it's shorter than expected. I didn't think it would be so short. But it was pretty good. Things you could improve on. Use that thing called Enter. Seriously, whenever doing dialouge, always make a new line when doing so. I was able to follow it but dang that was annoying. Next as far as I see constructing dueling style could be improved. Though I could be wrong since I've only read Part I. But yeah you broke out the power a bit too early in my opinion. Should have waited a bit before, jumping the gun with a Ultimate Dragon but eh. Let's see what else there is to read. Well that's all for now. If no one posts by the time I finish reading the second part (after I eat), I'll edit this post to give my second opinion. But so far overall pretty darn good. Ja Ne

 

Yami-Atemu, son of Yugi.

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Thanks!

Just like in the series, I wanted it to seem unlikely for the mùain character to win his first Duel. In the anime, the Pilot Duelists all were suposedly strong. (Kaiba, Cronos and Ushio)

The duels get crap starting from chapter 6...

You signed your post by "Ja Ne". Does that mean you're Dutch?

 

NO that's Japanese for See ya

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I never saw Kuriboh as impatient (personally for me I never judge physical size with age)

 

Littlekuriboh is the maker of YuGiOh the abridged series.

He made references to huge amounts of fans complaining about him taking a break.

 

I don't mind that you do. For now, that is.

I promise there'll be a new chapter this weekend.

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