Shadow's Awakening ch1-3(ch3 little sneek peek)

[Toxic-skull]

oK a lot of you by now know me or maybe not but almost all of you here on ycm make comments about my cards OK fine I'm not good making at them but let's see if I'm good at making story's note ALL OF THE WORDS ARE SPELT RIGHT I HAD AN EIDIITOR COME IN AND CORROCT MY STORY hope you all like it rate and commit it and go easy on me first time with it. character descriptions are at the bottom of the pic. ALL ART WORK COMES FROM ME UNLES I SAY OTHER WISE, PLEASE DON'T SAY SOMETHING MEAN ABOUT MY DRAWINGS.

 

i'm not putting up anymore chapters because i don't want to get this stolen from me so when it coped righted then i'll post it for anyone who likes it

 

[spoiler=black creatures]

this time it's not my art all work go's to the da people!

i'm trying to draw my eirions of them but for now theis will be the fire lords pets from hell

 

 

 

[spoiler=Charter's info]

[spoiler= fire lord's info]

Name: Fire Lord

Age:35

Gender:male

bio:he is Reala's father and plans to take over the world with the moon Guardians power.

Personality:very aggressive to every one.

 

[spoiler=Reala' info]

Name:Reala

Age:14

Gender:male

bio:turns out evil at the beginning but makes friends with Midnight and hates his father very much.

Personality:can be very kind but with Aaron around not to friendly.

 

[spoiler=Midnight's info]

Name:Midnight

Age:13

Gender:female

bio:has lost her memory because of being frozen in time she has no idea who her mom and dad were or how she was separated from them. But was forced to join up with Aaron and Zerkcises to find out what was happened to her parents.

Personality:Midnight's audited is normally nice but again with Aaron around their like brothers and sisters fighting.

 

[spoiler= Zerkciese' info]

Name:Zerkciese

Age: 15

Gender:Female

bio:has to put up with Reala, Aaron, and Midnight all ways fighting,trying to prevent someone getting killed because of Aaron

Personality:she is usually quit and and she secretly likes Aaron.

 

[spoiler=Aaron's info]

Name:Aaron

Age:18

Gender:male

bio:hates Reala a lot and with midnight he's just jules that he isn't the moon Guardian that has to save the world.

Personality:he is usually annoying

 

 

[spoiler=Nights' info]

Name:Nights

Age:14

Gender: Female

bio: reala's sister plays the flute

personality:nice to every one excapt to the fire lord.

 

 

 

[spoiler=Shadow's Awakening The Moon Garden

book 1]

[spoiler=Chapter1 The Journey]

Chapter 1 The Journey

As the moon rose from the night sky and the fog thickened I might be

 

the last jester left untouched by the black creatures. It’s fore thousand

 

years into the future, the world is in utter chaos because of them. One

 

year ago this war broke out between the jesters and the black

 

creatures, I never knew my mom and dad. I don’t know if I’m good or

 

bad, though I can control fire, my name is Midnight. My shirt is white

 

and purple, I wear a purple and black vest then I have my life source in

 

the middle of my chest. My pants are also purple, and I were black,

 

silver, and purple knee-high boots, I have two large sensors they are

 

purple and black, I use them for hearing and breathing. I have two

 

purple eyes, I’m the size of a thirteen year old teenager. Now enough

 

about me back to the story, I have decided to fight the black creatures.

 

I jumped out from behind a blown up car and with my fire claw I killed

 

five of them but one was a little quick for me. The black creature had

 

me backed up to a huge trench ready to kill me but just in time a water

 

arrow hit the creature in the head and it fell down to the ground. I let

 

out a breath “whoa that was close” I said then I pushed the body of

 

the black creature into the trench in case if it got up again. When I was

 

able to look at what or who did that a water sword was pointed right at

 

my neck “are you one of them?” It asked “no I’m not one of the black

 

creatures and just who are you anyway?” I replied “my name is Aaron,

 

I’m a water element, and you?” Aaron said “I’m Midnight the fire

 

element. As I looked at him, he was also a Jester, he has two scarred

 

light blue sensors. I could tell his eye was scarred from previous battles.

 

He was wearing clothes similar to mine but they seem to be in better

 

shape then mine.

 

“A fire element that’s impossible the last fire element hasn’t been seen

 

for over two thousand years” he said. But be for I could say anything

 

else Aaron cut me off “and you look like one of the black creatures so

 

then you must be one!” He yelled “I’m not one of them err! I have had

 

enough of this!” The fight began, as we did something happened, to

 

the fire element I once had is now darkness. My powers drained from me

 

and I fainted. When I woke up I was in shackles hanging from a wall and

 

I heard voices “wait, shh I think she’s waking up” one of them

 

whispered. “Urg where am I?” I asked. “We will tell you that later” Aaron

 

said, “you are a fire element right?” Another Jester asked, “yes” I

 

answered suspiciously. “We did tests on you when you were out cold,

 

your not a fire element you’re a shadow element” the same one said

 

again. “What do you mean I’m not fire element and just who are you?” I

 

asked in confusion “I’m Zerkciese and I know this because I’m psychic I

 

can read your energy” she said. As I looked at her, she is also a Jester

 

like Aaron and I but Zerkciese is mostly pink and purple and just like

 

Aaron her clothes are will organized then mine. “Will you mind unchaining

 

me?” I yelled! “Can’t” Aaron answered. “Why?” I yelled again. “Because

 

your power level is too high for you to control” Zerkciese

 

explained. “You need to learn to control your powers” Aaron ignorantly

 

said. “What do you mean I need to learn to control my powers?” I yelled

 

at Aaron, he rolled his eyes “you think you’re so strong don’t you? Well

 

you’re not!” Aaron yelled back at me but got cut off by Zerkciese. “Stop

 

Aaron, we don’t need her getting mad and she won’t help us” Zerkciese

 

hesitated to say. Aaron sighed and looked away from me, “but now that

 

we have her we need to tell her what’s going on” Zerkciese started to

 

say. Aaron let out another sigh and looked at me again. “Will Midnight

 

we think the war was started by the Fire Lord and some how has

 

control of the black creatures” Zerkciese explained “then how does this

 

involve me?” I asked “well we needed more Jesters to fight so I put

 

Aaron in charge of getting more recruits” she said “and Midnight you

 

never had a fire element, it was just your temporary element but the

 

Fire Lord dose have a fire element though” Aaron said. “You also had a

 

family but Aaron and I found you” Zerkciese said. “Then is my family still

 

alive?” I asked “I don’t know maybe” Zerkciese encouragingly said. Right

 

then a little hope came to my face and a little anger went away, “but

 

that still doesn’t explain who I am still and is my name really Midnight

 

then?” I asked “yes it is” a filmier voice said. Aaron and Zerkciese

 

gasped “it’s him!” Aaron yelled. My eyes widened, out of the shadows

 

came a large figure about six foot tall, he had hair it was black with red

 

at the bottom. He had a long red and black cote with long white

 

sleeves, and he had gold, blue, and red cutlets. Then he wore white

 

pants and at the bottom he has strait blood red and black colored

 

boots, he also has blue eyes, and a long sword at his side, and I don’t

 

think he’s even a Jester. “Who” I asked confusion “the Fire Lord”

 

Zerkciese replied “will I’m surprised you don’t remember me Midnight” he

 

said. “Were you hiding in the shadows this whole time?” Aaron

 

asked “yes I was and I see you brought me the Moon Garden hmm

 

maybe I will spear your life’s and make the both of you my personal

 

slaves” the Fire Lord sneered “Moon Garden what’s that?” I asked. The

 

Fire Lords mouth dropped wide open and his eye winded “what did you

 

both do to her, wipe her memory clean or something?” The Fire Lord

 

asked. Zerkciese and Aaron both said no “though I’m surprised you don’t

 

remember me Midnight” the Fire Lord said looking right at me. “So this is

 

the one?” some one else said everyone turned around to see who was

 

talking, another figure came out of the shadows but this time it was a

 

Jester about just a little taller then me though, every thing was the

 

same as the Fire Lord but he had Jester ears instead of hair. “yes this is

 

the Moon Garden I’ve been looking for years now and I finally found her”

 

the Fire Lord whispered. “Who are you even” Aaron asked the mistress

 

Jester“My name is Reala, I’m the one who controls the so called black

 

creatures as you call them” Reala said. Aaron’s face turned bright red

 

with anger “so you’re the one! How do you think I even got these stupid

 

scares in the first place!” Aaron yelled to Reala “that really wasn’t my

 

fault I just tell them what to do I can’t control their actions or who

 

them kill” Reala replied. “Midnight how long can you hold you breath

 

under water?” Aaron whispered “not very long why” I said “oh just

 

wondering no resign at all” Aaron answered. “your bluffing aren’t you” I

 

replied “shh” Aaron whispered again while unchaining me, “so just hand

 

her over so we could be on our mire way we have a world to destroy

 

you know” the Fire Lord finally said. “um yah right like that’s ever going

 

to happen” Zerkciese replied. The Fire Lord looked over to

 

Zerkciese “and why is that never going to happen hmm” he asked

 

Zerkciese, Zerkciese looked at Aaron and nodded “well then it’s time to

 

be on our way Fire Lord” Aaron said starting to smile a I little. “What do

 

you mean?” the Fire Lord asked “I thought you might ask that” Aaron

 

smirked. Aaron started to cast little water ball, it got lager by the

 

minute soon the water ball was a spinning whorl pool, the current got so

 

strong it knocked out the Fire Lord, Reala, and I.

 

 

[spoiler=Chapter 2 The Blood Feud]

 

Chapter 2 The Blood Feud

 

When I woke up I was in a forest it looked so peaceful, a lot better then that old where house I was chained up in, every thing wasn’t blown up or on fire, there is still life in

 

parts of the world that the Fire Lord hasn’t gotten to yet. “ So your finally awake” Reala

 

said, I started looking around all I saw was Aaron and Zerkciese gathering firewood,

 

“where are you?” I asked “up here” he replied. I looked up, Reala was tied up hanging

 

from the tree that I was under. “Um what type of rope is that you’re tied up with any

 

way?” I asked again “water rope”, I looked over to Aaron “oh which reminds me” ”Aaron

 

answered snapping his fingers I looked back at Reala the water ropes tightened around

 

him, Reala starting to scream in pain “Aaron stop! Your hurting him” I yelled. “Midnight

 

don’t you see he’s the enemy he’s the son of the Fire Lord, so he must die!” Aaron replied

 

I shook my head “no I…I’m not going to let Reala die” I said shaking. Reala was still

 

screaming in pain the water ropes were killing him, I got up ran over to Reala and cut the

 

water ropes, he dropped down to the ground with burn marks on him. “Reala at least stopped

 

screaming” I thought to myself, “Reala are you ok?” I asked him “err, I… I’m ok but

 

why do you care? Aren’t you are friends with Aaron and Zerkciese?” Reala said “um…” I

 

looked away from Reala to look at Aaron and Zerkciese and made a sad look, and I

 

looked back at Reala. “no I’m not friends with them and I not black hearted” I said slowly

 

Reala sat up “Midnight why did you untie the prisoner!” Aaron yelled “hey don’t yell at

 

her!” Reala yelled back to Aaron. I watched Aaron and Reala yelling back and forth at

 

each other I walked over to Zerkciese “well we have to do something before they start

 

killing each other” I said.

 

“Ok I’ll hold back Aaron and you hold back Reala got it?” she said. I nodded my head,

 

Zerkciese and I snuck over to Aaron and Reala “on three, one, two three” Zerkciese

 

whispered. Then I grabbed Reala and Zerkciese grabbed Aaron “Zerkciese what are you

 

doing!” Aaron yelled. “Aaron shut up! Why do you even want to kill Reala anyway?” I

 

yelled “Midnight you can let me go know” Reala whispered, I let him go I’m surprised he

 

didn’t run over to Aaron and slam a fire ball in his face. “Though Midnight since you did

 

that your a trader” Aaron suddenly said “Aaron!” Zerkciese yelled while still holding

 

back Aaron “How can you say that !” Zerkciese yelled again slapping him really hard

 

“ow!, Well still I don’t trust her even if she is a stupid Moon Guardian” he said. I looked

 

down at the ground, tears started to form in my eyes one of them slid down my cheek

 

before Reala said something to me “Midnight it’s ok don’t cry” he said in a soft

 

comforting voice, putting his hand on my shoulder “Reala what is a Moon Guardian

 

anyway” I asked, Reala spun me around so we could talk a bit better “well some Jesters

 

call them saviors meaning Moon Guardians can heal wounded or dead Jesters, and very

 

special Moon Guardians have very destructive power and that is what the Fire Lord was

 

after in you” Reala explained, this time wiping away some of my tears. “So I’m not just

 

a stupid Moon Guardian, then I wonder how I became a Moon Guardian” I stated “I don’t

 

think your boy friend can answered that Midnight” Aaron shouted, my face turned a little

 

pink, I hid my head in my shirt hoping Reala wouldn’t say anything. That night Zerkciese,

 

Aaron, Reala, and I were all setting by a camp fire that Reala lit so we would stay warm

 

for the night, the fire smelt like fresh pine wood. Zerkciese and Aaron were asleep not

 

before long I guess Reala went to find food or ran far away from here but I would not

 

blame him who would want to be stuck with Aaron all the time.

But I felt that I wanted Reala to come back, I knew I was safe with him even if he has an

 

evil father. I looked up at the moon, the stars were like little glowing firefly’s through the

 

night sky, though all at once I wish that this was all a dream even if I’m not dieing or in

 

pain, all I really want to know is who I am and I want to know where my mom and dad

 

are. Out of the cold night I started to hear a lyre, it sounded so peaceful it would put

 

someone to sleep, as I was starting to fall asleep, the peaceful lyre stopped and I heard

 

some leaves rustle like someone was jumping from the tree. Reala appeared out of the

 

dark night “where did you go” I asked him, I noticed that he had rope wrapped around his

 

shoulder he must have been the one playing the lyre, “I… umm was just out on a walk” he

 

replied I looked straight into his eyes, they were as blue as sapphires and he gave me that

 

look, don’t ask about the rope, I kept thinking to myself don’t ask over and over. Then

 

something came to my mind that I really needed to know Reala had already sat down near

 

the fire “hey Reala how did your dad I mean the Fire Lord know me?” I asked he took a

 

deep breath “Midnight … I don’t think you really want know that” he whispered “what do you

 

mean I don’t want to know” I asked “ you’re going to force me to tell you aren’t you?” I

 

shook my head yes “well ok you asked but it’s not my fault if you start to cry then,

 

Midnight this might sound weird but your not a real jester. You’re a human that was

 

transformed into a jester twelve years ago, two humans came here to this exact place

 

called Mystic forest a Moon Guardian lived here, one night my father found these two

 

humans and tried to kill them, and the mother human was carrying a little baby girl about

 

one year old and of course they ran from my father tried to kill the baby first, the mother ran as

 

fast as she could but tripped on a tree trunk and broke her leg so the farther of the baby

 

took her and ran and he found the Moon Guardian.

 

 

 

 

[spoiler=Chapter 3 The Moon Guardian’s Resting Place little sneek peek]

Chapter 3 The Moon Guardian’s Resting Place

 

The Moon Guardian said that she could take the little baby and give her

 

a future, the father agreed and the Moon Guardian transformed the

 

baby into a jester and froze her.

 

The Moon Guardian then teleported the transformed baby somewhere so no one would

 

ever find her until she was thirteen” Reala explained, my mouth was open with shock

 

“that’s why I don’t remember anything then” I said “now I answered your question now

 

you answer mine why did you hide your head in your shirt?” he asked “um… I don’t

 

really want to tell you that yet” I answered slowly. Then Reala and I heard this

 

awful noise it was loud enough that I jumped, Reala got up and lit one of his fire balls and

 

looked around Reala gave a sigh “it’s just Aaron snoring” Reala said relieved, I closed

 

my eyes and put my hand over my heart, it was beating fast when I opened my eyes again

 

Reala was gone I looked around Aaron and Zerkciese were gone to though everything

 

was the same I knew I was still in Mystic Forest the lake was still their but their was a

 

huge moon statue in the middle of the lake.

 

 

[Toxic-skull]

piz some one commit i'm not mean 0.0

[ShadowRSonic]

wow. why is there a gap between each line?

Remove them. They look ugly

[ragnarok1945]

actually I think that'd make it a little easier to read the chapter

[Toxic-skull]

wow. why is there a gap between each line?

Remove them. They look ugly

 

actually I think that'd make it a little easier to read the chapter

:roll: well it's a start to awanser your question ShadowRSonic the only resion i did dobble space is because ragnarok is right i thank it's looks better not all crambed up together.

[Toxic-skull]

please people commit on it for the most part WHAT DO I NEED TO DO SO YOU PEOPLE WILL COMIT ON MY STORY!? *i am going to soon be putting up the character profiles*, please some one again commit on my story tell me if i' doing ok on it when i'm finshed on it, i WILL turn it into a real book!!! :begging on my knees: please post rate, and commit on it for the last time.

[ragnarok1945]

hey I'm only waiting for the next chap to go up

[Toxic-skull]

um... it will go up after Christmas day maybe it depends on my editor if she wants to do it, we made a deal that she would edit my story every Saturday... sorry i blame my mom, she's my editor. :roll: she thinks it's her day off. :roll: i need to get a new editor. :roll: any on know a good speller and grammar person?

[ragnarok1945]

it's a good chapter. Looks like there's a lot of curses running around

[Toxic-skull]

yep :D

[ragnarok1945]

are these curses going to get worse, or will they stay the same?

[Toxic-skull]

it will get worse and then at the end it will get better.

[ragnarok1945]

if I were you I'd leave at least one curse that doesn't, it sows the seeds of a sequel

[Toxic-skull]

hmmm... i should do that for midnight's parents... good idea ragnarok1945, thanks ^_^

[ragnarok1945]

I've just seen enough Japanese horror movies for this, though I hate the fact they always make the bad guy win all the time just for the sake so a sequel can be made

[Toxic-skull]

will i don't plan on letting the fire lord win at all.

[ragnarok1945]

that's good. I'm looking forward to a relatively happy ending (just not with all the loose ends tied up)

[Toxic-skull]

oh you'll be surprised what happens...

[ragnarok1945]

you must be planning something big then

[Toxic-skull]

the something big might happen in ch 3 or ch4 one of those and i will post it in bold letters so you will know.

[ragnarok1945]

that's good. I'm looking forward to more of such curses

[Toxic-skull]

sorry every one i will not be updating this untill i have this coperighted and made into a book but i will tell you all on thing Reala might die but it gets realy epic in ch 4 :D

[ragnarok1945]

ok, how long before the copyright happens?

[Toxic-skull]

um... i will make the book in 2009 don't worry i had a really GOOD last night it won't be long.

and the only reason i'm doing this is because so no one will stile my story and publish it them selves

[ragnarok1945]

true, true. There's plenty of stealing and discrediting these days, and people get away with it all the time