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Knight''s Title Book 1~ Secret of the Hyuuga: Finished. Now Discusing FanFic

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Ok, this is a HUGE crossover story with a ton of action.

[spoiler=[b][u]Character Profiles[/u][/b]]

[spoiler=Princess Azula][img]http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/avatar/images/thumb/e/ef/Azula_001.JPG/250px-Azula_001.JPG[/img]
Name: Azula
Age: Around 17.
Personality: Vicious, always wants to be perfect. "Almost isn't good enough for her."
[url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pF1MVI5VDrs&feature=related]Azula's Theme song[/url]

Bio: The Daughter to the Fire lord. She is on a mission for Master Dartz to capture Neji. We also know that Dartz has been controling her to do his bidding, he has eliminated her and has taken away her powers.[/spoiler]

[spoiler= Master Dartz][img]http://www.retrojunk.com/img/art-images/doomdartz.jpg[/img]
Name: Dartz, Prince of Atlantis.
Age: Looks to be in his mid 20s but is really over 10,000 years old.
Personality: Charming. Almost never loses his temper. He is the embodiment of evil itself. He also won't take no for an answer. You wouldn't want to meet this guy in a dark alley.
[url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=p6JxqM6AQx0&feature=related]Dartz's Theme song[/url]

Bio:The main Antagonist of this Fanfic. Dartz lives in a huge fortress called Tragic Kingdom, a collosal castle with many traps. He has captured Neji and is awaiting the arival of the knights so his minions can eliminate them one by one.[/spoiler]

[spoiler= Neji Hyuuga][img]http://media.giantbomb.com/uploads/0/1425/203836-neji_large.png[/img]
Name: Neji Hyuuga
Age: 14
Personality: A bit cold. Usually leaves everything to fate and destiny, but ever since he has made friends, he has overthought his ways.
[url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Tnb4ivXPJyU]Neji's Theme song[/url]

Bio: The main Hero and Victim in this Fanfic. He is a member of the Knight's Title, an organization made up of teens who all have special powers or talents. He has the power of the Byakugan. Neji is currently trapped in Dartz's fortress, and his Byakugan has not worked ever since his deadly fight with Azula. But Neji is about to discover something unbelievable very soon.......[/spoiler]

[spoiler= Hermione Granger][img]http://content.answers.com/main/content/wp/en/5/57/Hermione_poster_detail.jpg[/img]
Name: Hermione Granger
Age: 14
Personality: A bookworm. Has a sweet heart and is always nice to people. But mess with her firends and you're dead.
[url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wtpPP0VBOVw]Hermione's Theme song[/url]

A member of Knight's Title. She is a witch that can perform magic at will. The 3rd person to join the Title. Has a crush on Kellach. Hermione has a huge grudge on her formal rival, Pansy Parkingson, she wants to take her down very soon. She has also shared a kiss with her one true love, Kellach Masons.[/spoiler]

[spoiler=Aang][img]http://brainstuff.universalconstructors.com/images/stories/Avatar-The-Legend-Of-Aang-PS2/Avatar-The-Legend-Of-Aang-PS2.jpg[/img]
Name: Aang the Avatar
Age: Looks to be 12 but he is really over 100 years old.
Personality: Very Childish and loves to have fun. Is one with nature and loves the outdoors. But when he is in battle, there is no stopping him.[url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EhygH2zBm8Y]Aang's Theme song[/url]

A member of Knight's Title. He is the Avatar, the controler of the elements of Fire, Air, Earth, and Water. Likes to have fun but when time to fight, he's ready.[/spoiler]

[spoiler=Kellach Masons][img]http://ww2.wizards.com/books/Mirrorstone/Images/Knights/Kellach.jpg[/img]
Name: Kellach Masons
Age: 14
Personality: A very witty and smart guy. Loves to be sarcastic and is usually cracking jokes. He is very easy to make friends with. In battle he uses his wits more than his fists.
[url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7MuJ7grHsEw&feature=PlayList&p=B675DF1E5124B091&index=14]Kellach's Theme Song[/url]

The Leader of Knight's Title. He is an extremely powerful wizzard who founded the title 3 years ago. He has a crush on Hermione. He will stop at nothing to help his friends out. Kellach and the others are full bent on saving Neji, and they are about to set off for Tragic Kingdom. He has saved Jake from his awful illness and they are ready to go. It is also now known that Kellach is the only one Neji has told about his cursed mark on his forehead.[/spoiler]

[spoiler=Jake Long][img]http://www.toondisneymedianet.com/showcontent/DC/programming/americand/americand_i/bruckner.jpg[/img]
Name: Jake Long
Age: 14
Personality: Loves to be the center of attention. Sometimes is funny. He is a great friend to have.
[url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zSiVk57IaKY]Jake's Theme song[/url]

A member of the Knight's Title. He was the 2nd person to join and is one of Kellach's best friends. Jake can turn into a dragon at will. He is ready to fight now that Kellach has cured him.[/spoiler]

[spoiler=Sasuke Uchiha][img]http://imgserv.ya.com/galerias2.ya.com/img/b/b84adad41321bafi3.jpg[/img]
Name: Sasuke Uchiha
Age: 15
Personality: Not a touchy feely person. Has had a very rough past which made him this way.
[url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CLqlS1_y43U]Sasuke's Theme song[/url]

A member of the Knight's Title. Usually quiet, Sasuke is a ruthless opponent in battle and will stop at absolutly nothing to achieve his goal. He has a wicked older brother who is unnamed in the fanfic. (Yes I know it's Itachi...)[/spoiler]

[spoiler=Ty Lee][img]http://media.imeem.com/p/FI1y-lnI8H.jpg[/img]
Name: Ty Lee
Age: 16
Personality: Bubbly, Cute and very fun to be arround.
[url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ExBBEAK8Ccc&NR=1]Ty Lee's Theme song[/url]

One of Dartz's minions. She knows the body structure of a human and she knows how to destroy her opponents from the inside out. . . . . . but not withoout having a bit of fun first![/spoiler]

[Spoiler=Pansy Parkinson][img]http://i252.photobucket.com/albums/hh27/Amberjade-rin/anime_girl_fav4236.jpg[/img]
Name: Pansy Parkingson
Age: About 15
Personality: She's a b!tch who wants power.
[url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lRqoIHZpWUU]Pansy's Theme song[/url]

One of Dartz's most trusted servants. She secretly is madly in love with him. She has a great hate for Hermione Granger, they have crossed paths before. She has the power to control plants and she can also turn her own body plant-like.[/spoiler]

[spoiler= Amy Rose][img]http://i165.photobucket.com/albums/u74/shushichan/014amy.jpg[/img]
Name: Amy Rose
Age: 14
Personality: Cute, Sassy, very fasionable. She is definitly in the know on the latest clothing line. She is also very headstrong at some times.
[url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kMVTgW0T3ng]Amy Rose's Theme song[/url]

A member of Knight's Title. She is sassy, classy, fasionable, and super cute, but tick her off, and you WILL get the hammer.....
She is also the leader of the Interrogation unit in the tower.[/spoiler]

[spoiler= Knuckles the Echidna] [img]http://www.freewebs.com/maxisrich/knuckles.jpg[/img]
Name: Knuckles the Echidna
Age: 16
Personality: Headstrong, tough, but he does have a sweet side...not that many people see that side though.......
[url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=e_Sm7COVB1c]Knuckles' Theme song[/url]

A member of Knight's Title. He is tough, strong, and hot headed. Knuckles usually counts on his own fists for the heat of battle. He is also In the interrogation unit in the tower.[/spoiler]

[spoiler= Shadow the Hedgehog][img]http://50years.crafty-mime.net/sonicx/screens/35/097shadow.jpg[/img]
Name: Shadow the Hedgehog
Age: ???
Personality: Cool, but you can tell that he has had a rough past.[url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hJdNnvwE9eY&feature=related]Shadow's Theme song[/url]


A Member of the Knight's Title. He Is a fast, agressive, cold hearted guy who knows how to fight with the ultamite chaos emeralds. He is also a member in the Interrogation Unit in the Tower.[/spoiler]
[spoiler= Mimic][img]http://th02.deviantart.com/fs38/150/f/2008/359/7/5/Gremleye___Pokemon_Acanthite_by_nintendo_jr.png[/img]Extreamly crappy pic I know....
Name: Mimic
Age:????
Personality: Cruel, sadistic, and absolutely insane
Mimic is one of the 3 protecters of Tragic Kingdom. His body is specialy formed so that the fibers withing him can morph, causing him to shapeshift. In the past, Mimic has been in a few nasty fights with Shadow..[/spoiler]
[spoiler= Kimimaro Kaguya][img]http://th05.deviantart.com/fs22/300W/f/2007/337/5/4/Kimimaro_by_Melllorine.jpg[/img]
Normal

[img]http://i248.photobucket.com/albums/gg188/luxatearna/kimimaro-cursed20seel201.jpg[/img]
2nd Form

[img]http://th00.deviantart.com/fs14/300W/i/2007/109/9/5/Curse_seal_2_Kimimaro_by_Zeke_Asakura.jpg[/img]
Final Form

Name: Kimimaro Kaguya
Age: 15
Personality: Cold, has a heart, but rarely shows it. That spirit was broken long ago.
Kimimaro is Dartz's most loyal servant and is the last of the three guardians of tragic kingdom. He fights using his bones and he won't let anyone pass through his domain. He is one tough cookie.[/spoiler][/spoiler]

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[spoiler=Plot of Secret of the Hyuuga]

[b]A Mega X-over! Naruto, Harry Potter, Yu-Gi-Oh, Avatar, Sonic the Hedgehog and more! Dartz (Yu-Gi-Oh) wants the power of the Byakugan all to himself, so he captures Neji Hyuuga and imprisons him in a castle. Now it is up to Knight's title to save the day! On the journey, The friends face harsh obsticals to help save Neji from the clutches of evil.[/b][/spoiler]

[spoiler= Book 1: Secret of the Hyuuga][spoiler=Chapter 1: An Offering] CHAPTER 1

An Offering.

A dark and foreboding castle looms over a mountain village of decrepit and death. Tragic Kingdom was a bleak and sinister fortress where there is murder, blackmail, and a ruler most diabolical. Inside this castle sits a man with very long lightning-blue hair, a white billowing garb, and yellow and blue eyes that would pierce your soul. He sat in his chair that was engraved with carvings of snakes in his shrine room. A star-like pendant he hung from his neck. Suddenly, the man heard a tap, tap, tap on his door.

“Ah, so you decided to come, Princess Azula.”

A woman stepped from out of the shadows and into the room.

“You were not followed, I presume?” Said the man with a calm air in his tone. His voice was forceful, and yet rather charming at the same time. The woman named Azula nodded. She was in a red, warrior princess uniform. Her long, black hair was tied in a plait and was held in a gold clip with the fire nation insignia. She had a beautiful face, her lips were a ruby red, and her eyes a seething scarlet, just like her tempered ambition.

“What do you want?” Said Azula curtly.

“I have a proposition for you.” Said the man, keeping his calm tone.

“I’m listening.”

“You are the great princess Azula, daughter to the fire lord. I know you can inflict severe pain to your enemies without killing them. It has come to my attention that one of our enemy’s powers is growing. We CANNOT allow this to occur. Bring the child to me, and I shall deal with the child personally.”

“Why should I help you?”

“Because you wouldn’t want to disappoint me, would you?”

The man’s eyes shined. His pendant glowed. Azula’s eyes turned an eerie red. And the star-shaped symbol burned on her forehead.

“Yes, master Dartz.”Said Azula in a zombie-like tone.

“Good,” said Dartz. He laughed a menacing laugh.

“Muhuhuhuhahahahaha! Then I believe it’s time to reveal who your target is!!”[/spoiler]
[spoiler=Chapter 2: Neji Hyuuga]CHAPTER 2

Neji Hyuuga.

Neji Hyuuga lay on his bed, staring at the ceiling. He was a fourteen year old boy who had a mysterious gift. Neji had the power of the Byakugan, or the power to see beyond the human eye. Well, that’s no surprise because all Hyuuga members had that power. Neji had long, brown hair, and he always wore this hat that had thin dog ends that billowed in front of him. He had bandaged tape on his entire right side of his body, his chest, his are, his leg, but not his face. He wore a beige, fighters Hyuuga battle jacket with whit stripes. He had blue sandals that always silenced his footsteps. And on his forehead, was a ninja’s headband. It was a blue strip of fabric he tied to his forehead. And on the fabric was a thin slab of lightweight steel with a symbol of the village from where he came from, the leaf village. Neji’s pure white eyes stared blankly into space. You would think he was blind, but he could see much better than most people.

His room was pretty normal. His bookshelves were cluttered with books, scrolls, kunais, and other papers a ninja would need for a mission. His walls were a brownish tan. His bureau was filled with shorts, pants, shirts, undergarments, and jackets. On his desk were pictures of his friends, Hermione, Kellach, Jake, Amy, Shadow, Aang, Sasuke, and Knuckles. There was a book light, (which he always used) a stack of brainteasers, (for he had a very high IQ for his age) and a journal which he now wrote seldom in. Neji was part of and born in the Hyuga Clan, a skillful family with white eyes and use the technique called Juken, or the gentle fist, where they inflict internal damage instead of external. However, he was upset. He walked to the mirror, starred blankly at his reflection, and removed his headband. Where the headband once stood had now shown a mark, a curse. On his head was the mark of the second branch. For you see, the Hyuuga clan had 2 different branches, the main branch, and the second branch that supports it. Neji, unfortunately, was in the second branch, the lower class. The mark on his forehead looked like an X with 2 lines on each of its left and right sides in the color of bright green.

He was ashamed of his mark. Even though he was the most powerful Byakugan holder, he would never have the liberty to aspire or be appreciated, just because his father was born seconds after his uncle, who was the clan leader. His father… …

“Ungh!” Neji punched his wall, he was a failure to become a somebody at birth; his destiny was already decided. He sighed.

“NEJI! BREAKFAST!!” It was Hermione. Neji took one more look in the mirror, put on his headband, sighed, and headed for the kitchen.[/spoiler]
[spoiler= Chapter 3: Dragon Pox]CHAPTER 3

Dragon Pox.

Neji walked into the kitchen, grumbled, and poured himself a bowl of “Cinnamon toast crunch”. Hermione was in her pink pjs and slippers, her long, curly, amber brown hair was a mess. She was sipping orange juice and munching on a “toaster’s strudel”. Neji pulled up a chair next to Hermione, and began eating.

“Morning, Hermione.” He said.

“Morning Neji,” said Hermione in a sleepy tone,

“Did you sleep well?”

“Actually, I slept quite well thank you, oh good morning Aang.” Aang slumped over to a chair across from them, and indulged himself in the morning suduko puzzle.

“Oh hey guys!” said Aang, keeping his head stuck in the suduko paper. Aang was 12 years old. He was bald and had a blue arrow tattooed to his head. He was an Airbender.

“So, how’s Jake doing?” asked Neji as he was munching his cereal. Aang and Hermione both looked at each other for a moment, then said to Neji, in unison,

“Not good.” Jake was a 13 year old teen with green and black hair with bright blue eyes, thick black eyebrows, oh, and he could turn into a dragon. A couple of days ago, Jake came down with a case of dragon pox, a nasty little illness. Hermione looked it up on the internet when Jake began to feel sick. She had been looking for the cure to the sickness for days.

“So no luck then.” sighed Neji, sipping hot cocoa.

“No, he looks awful!” replied Aang with a turn of the suduko page. A tall, lanky boy then walked in the kitchen, he was wearing a purple robe. His long, blond hair was trailing behind him. He had a big grin on his face.

“Ah, Kellach, I see you’re awake.” said Hermione in a soft voice. The boy named Kellach then grabbed a green apple from the pantry and said, “Boy guys, Jake looks-“

“Awful, yeah.” Said Hermione, grimacing.

“I just checked up on him, he’s asleep now.” said Kellach.

“Oh, let’s go see him-“

I really would advise you not to, WAIT!” shouted Kellach. Kellach blocked the door.

“We should let him rest.” said Kellach. The other 3 moved in on him. Aang and the gang came to Jake’s door.

“NO, DON’T!!” Aang opened the door, and gasped! Aang and the others crowded into the room. The room was typical to any teen. There were Blue walls, closets full of skate gear and music, a computer on a desk, cell phones and Ipods, the usual. That, except what was in the bed. Aang peered at the bed, and he saw . . . . . nothing.

“Oh dear,” said Hermione.

“Ohhhhh, Aang, is that you?” a muffled voice came from below the covers. The covers were pulled off the bed. Hermione shrieked.

“Oh, come on, is it really that bad?” Jake was under the covers, and he was a wreck. He was wearing his red pajamas. Jake had red, little bumps all over his body. His skin was also a tint of gray. Jake touched his face. His skin sagged where he touched it.

“Ahhhhhhhhhhhh!!” Jake screamed.

“Look in a mirror, Jake,” said Neji meekly. Jake stared at his bedroom mirror, and he shrieked like a girl.

“I look terri . . . . Terri . . . . Terri . . . . Ih, ih, Ah, Ah, Ah”

“HIT THE DECK!!” yelped Aang.

“HE’S GONNA BLOW!”

“Ah, Ah, Ah Ahchoo!” A plume of fire erupted from Jake’s mouth, hit a “Get well soon!” card, and incinerated it.

“Augh, I feel like I was hit by a truck,” moaned Jake.

“You look like it too!” smirked Kellach.

“Oh, shut up, Kellach,” scolded Hermione. All of a sudden, they heard a crash from the front door. Sasuke, a 13 year old boy with black hair and a blue shirt with the Uchiha symbol (which looks like a fishing bobber) ran in the room. His body, covered in sweat, he looked exhausted. He took a deep breath, then said,

“We got company.”[/spoiler]
[spoiler=Chapter 4: Fire, Ice, and Lightning Strike]CHAPTER 4

Fire, Ice, and Lightning Strike.

All of the kids ran to the main room of the building. What they saw made them all tense up.

“Hello, Knights,” Azula was standing in the living room, along with 2 other girls. Pansy Parkinson was a girl with long black hair that was tied in 4 downward ponytails. She had a dark green garb with little tassels hanging from the cuffs. The tassels looked like plant vines. On Azula’s right, was Ty Lee. She was a girl in her mid teens with dark brown, long pony tailed hair. She had short, skinny fire nation clothes on.

“We’ve come for someone.” said Azula in a fierce rage.

“Well, your luck’s ran out, you aren’t getting em’.” said Kellach confidently.

“Fine then,” said Azula calmly, and then she shouted,

“Girls, Plan B!” The 3 girls ran for the kids in a rage, a frightening frenzy in their eyes.

“RUN!!” shouted Kellach.

Sasuke ran up the stairwell, and into the game room. He ran to the closet, and waited for someone to appear so he could strike. Suddenly, he felt a sharp pain in his left arm.

“Hey, Handsome!!” said Ty Lee jubilantly. She kicked Sasuke right in the chest.

“How did she, Argg!” Sasuke toppled out of the closet and was sprawled on the floor. Sasuke tried to get up, but Ty Lee did a back flip and jabbed him in the back.

“Ugh!” Sasuke went down. His arm and now his back were numb.

“How can you fight me without your jutsu?” giggled Ty Lee. Sasuke crawled off the floor, and Ty Lee went to jab him again. Sasuke moved his head in front of her. She jabbed his skull bone, and cracked her fingers.

“Ow! Ow, Ow, Ow, OW!!” Ty lee bent over, clutching her fingers.

“How can you fight me without your fingers?” grinned Sasuke. He took 4 kunai knives from his pocket, and threw them at Ty Lee. They pinned her clothes to the wall.

“You thought you could beat the power of the Uchiha!?” Sasuke’s eyes turned red. Black dots formed on them.

“Sharingan!” shouted Sasuke, as he brought his mobile left arm to his mouth.

“Now to finish this!” Sasuke took a deep breath.

“Fire style, Phoenix flower jutsu!!”

Hermione ran to the kitchen, gasping for breath. She took out her wand and flicked it at the pots and pans in the cupboard. The pots and pans smashed together and made a living, breathing steel wall. She commanded the wall to move in front of the door of the kitchen.

“Phew!” she said. She then put her wand tip in the air and whispered, “Muffliato.” An invisible sound barrier spread against the room.

“Good,” she thought, “She can’t get to me.”

“Oh no?” Seriously, Hermione, if that’s the best you’ve got, then that’s just pitiful.” Pansy was in the room; she held her wand right at Hermione and shouted,

“SECTUMSEMPERA!!” Invisible knives slashed at Hermione’s body. Her robes were shredded; she had some deep cuts in her arms. Blood dripped from her wounds. Her cheek was cut. Pansy’s arm shot out forward; her skin on it began to turn green and thorny. Hermione had then realized that she was fighting a plant being. Pansy’s grip got tighter as she wrapped the thorn arm tighter against Hermione’s body. Hermione coughed blood; she was being strangled to death. She then came up with a plan. She struggled for her wand; she had dropped it when she was grabbed. She lunged for her wand as the thorns cut deeper into her skin. She grabbed her wand, pointed it at Pansy and gasped out,

“GLACIUS!!” A huge burst of Icy wind flew out of Hermione’s wand. Pansy began to freeze. Hermione easily broke out of the deadly grip. She was gasping for breath. Pansy was frozen solid. She was like a statue.

Neji stood his ground.

“So,” said Azula as she got into battle position,

“It’s just you and me.” There was a long silence. Neji got into Gentle Fist formation. It happened in an instant; Azula shot blue fire out of her fingertips at Neji. He ducked, but the end of his hair got slightly singed. Neji then closed his eyes. He took a deep breath, and put his index finger to his forehead. And he opened his eyes.

“BYAKUGAN!” Shouted Neji as he opened his eyes. His veins along his eyes swelled.

“Now, beware the Gentle Fist!” Neji ran to Azula so fast, she took a step back in shock. Neji slammed his fingertips into Azula’s arm. A burst of blue chakra was thrust into Azula’s arm.

“Argh! I see, you fight like Ty lee, destroy the enemy from the inside out.”

Azula’s arm was throbbing in pain. She tried to shoot fire out, but she couldn’t, Neji stopped the fire control in Azula’s left arm. Neji struck at Azula’s chest, aiming for the heart.

“Not so fast!” Azula took her fingertips in her right hand and dug them into Neji’s arm. She blocked his attack, he couldn’t move away!

“Ungh” Neji groaned, he was paralyzed, she had punctured a nerve. Azula stepped back. She removed her fingertip from his arm, he was standing, but he was immobile. Azula took her middle and index finger and stuck them together. Neji saw that she was gathering power for an attack. “Now, DIE!” Her fingers cracked with blue electricity.

“FEEL THE WRATH OF THE FIRE NATION!! She blasted her fingers at Neji, and a bolt of lightning struck him. Pointblank. In his left Eye. Neji’s eyes instantly returned to normal; he didn’t have time to feel the excruciating pain, for the shock make him loose consciousness, he was a bloody mess. He fell to the ground. His breathing stopped. Neji was dead.[/spoiler]
[spoiler=Chapter 5: Aftermath]CHAPTER 5

Aftermath.

Neji was floating. Floating. He felt like he was made of thin air. He was so peaceful.

“So”, he thought, “This must be what death feels like, it’s not so bad. Maybe even a little comforting.”

“Disappointed in you… … . . Disappoint….ed.” Neji heard a soft voice from beyond. Suddenly, all was white.

“I’m very disappointed in you, Azula.” Neji awoke in a dank cell. He was lying in a moldy old bed. There were bars in front of him. He felt sick; his head felt like it would burst.

“Byakuga- AGH!” White-hot agony shot through his head like a bullet. He heaved over the side of the bed. Neji shivered in fear. Where was he?

“I’m very disappointed in you, Azula.” Neji heard a sharp, but forceful voice.

“You dull twit; I wanted you to kidnap him, not nearly KILL him.” Said Dartz in a cold, snide hiss.

“I’m sorry, master Dartz, he nearly killed me.” Azula’s right arm was in a splint.

“I don’t care if he tore you apart, I WANTED HIM ALIVE!” Bellowed Dartz, his blue and yellow eyes were flaring in anger. Dartz took a deep breath to regain his composure.

“You greatly anger me, now pay the price.” Dartz pendant glowed, a star shaped symbol burned onto Azula’s forehead. The second he touched her, a red and blue flash hit Azula. She shrieked in agony. She shook as if she were having some sort of horrific seizure. Dartz took his index finger and pressed it on Azula’s forehead. Neji could see that Dartz’s whole hand was glowing an eerie red. Azula screamed even louder. Neji saw Dartz sucking the very energy from her. Dartz had a malevolent smile on his face. The nightmare lasted for about a minute.

“That’ll teach you to do as you’re told!” seethed Dartz, blue energy was crackling in the air; Neji could feel the energy in the air. Azula’s body went limp. Neji didn’t know if she was alive or dead. Dartz snapped his fingers. 3 servants dressed in all white suits appeared in a flash of light.

“You two,” barked Dartz, “Take this filth to her room. Two servants picked up the limp Azula, and took her out of the prison block hallway.

“And you.” Dartz was staring at the smallest of the servants. Neji felt the hairs on the back of his neck stand up. He knew what was coming, and so did the servant.

“Oh please, I’m begging you master Dartz! Have Mercy!” The young boy cried and sobbed; Neji felt so sorry for the poor child. Dartz took his middle and Index finger and pointed it at the boy. What happened next would haunt Neji’s nightmares forever. A blue lightning bolt just like Azula’s shot out of Dartz’s fingers. It hit the boy pointblank in the face. He was dead before he hit the ground. But before the corpse hit the floor, Dartz picked up the boy by the neck and tossed him out the window. Neji heard the body hit the ground seconds later with a grisly thud. Dartz flicked his hair and laughed.

Neji was terrified. He was trying to calm himself. But how could he calm down after THAT? Dartz then turned around and looked him straight in the eyes.

“Sweet dreams, Neji.” said Dartz in a soft, sinister tone. Dartz began to walk out of the prison hold, the opened the door.

“YOU’RE NEXT!” spat Dartz, and he slammed the door, leaving Neji in fear.[/spoiler]
[spoiler= Chapter 6: Interrogation] CHAPTER 6

Interrogation

Pansy woke in a chair. She was bound to it by rubber and steel bands. She looked to Ti Lee, who was in the same position as she was.

“Arg, ngh, let me go!” snarled Pansy as she tried to claw at the bindings. 3 characters then emerged from the shadows. They all wore black sunglasses and suits, except for the one in the middle. She wore a black and light brown dress shirt with a matching skirt. She was wearing a pink tie. She had pink fur all over her body; which shocked Pansy.

“So Amy, where were they found again?” Said the man on the girl named Amy’s left.

“Well, Knuckles, Pansy was in the kitchen, and Ti Lee over there was in the game room.” Said the man on the right to Knuckles. Knuckles had red fur all over his body.

“Shadow, what happened to Ti’s clothes?” Snickered Knuckles.

“Ah,” said Shadow with a grin, “Sasuke charred them a bit when he performed his Phoenix flower jutsu.”

“Quit it you two!!” Whispered Amy loudly, whipping off her sunglasses. Amy then slapped Pansy’s face, hard.

“Argh!” Groaned Pansy. Shadow then stepped in front of Pansy.

“Where is Azula?” Shadow said sternly.

“Oooooo, pick me, pick me!!”

“Yes, Ti Lee.” Sighed Amy.

“OMG!! Where did U get that cute outfit?!” Gushed Ti Lee.

“Oh, they had a sale at Aeropostale!” Giggled Amy.

“OMG!! U just HAVE 2 let me borrow it!”

“K! O so totally!” The two girls screamed a high pitch yell of excitement.

“HEY, WE’RE TRYING TO INTERROGATE THEM, NOT INVITE THEM TO A SLUMBER PARTY!!” Knuckles fumed.

“Fine,” Amy said, looking disappointed, “Back to business.”

“Now I will ask you 2 again, where is Azula?” said shadow, loosing his patience.

“Why should we tell you?” Scoffed Pansy. Amy took out a huge, pink hammer from her case on her back. She slammed the cartoon-like hammer on Pansy’s feet.

“YEOWCH!” Pansy shrieked, “Alright, ALRIGHT! She went back to Dartz, to Tragic Kingdom, YEOW!” Amy slammed her feet again.

“What was that for?” she said.

“That was for fun.” Smirked Amy. Shadow went up to Ti Lee.

“Where’s Neji?” Ti Lee didn’t answer. Shadow slapped her across the face.

“WHERE IS NEJI?!” Bellowed Shadow, spit streaming from his mouth.

“Azula kidnapped him, and took him to Tragic Kingdom.” Sighed Ti Lee, defeated. Shadow went to slug Ti Lee.

“SHADOW! She told us what we wanted.” Knuckles said.

“Oh yeah, right.” Said Shadow sheepishly.

“Well, you got your stupid information,” Pansy said, sounding irritated, “Now let us G-“

“AHHHHHHCHOOOOOOOO!” The 5 of them heard a LOUD earsplitting sneeze from a couple floors above them. Knuckles, Shadow, and Amy stared at each other for a second, the 3 sighed then all said,

“Jake.”[/spoiler]
[spoiler= Chapter 7: To Cure a Dragon]
CHAPTER 7.

To Cure a Dragon.

A couple of floors above, Kellach, Hermione, Sasuke, and Aang had just dodged a fireball from Jake. They were in his room, and the fireball hit the wall and left a big, gaping hole. Kellach saw this and ran to the shattered wall and waved his hands in complex and intricate patterns on the wall. Almost instantly, wood and nails came flying out of nowhere and began to rebuild the wall on itself. Hammers began nailing planks of wood to the walls. Then a paintbrush whizzed past Hermione and Sasuke, with a paint bucket followed the brush as the 2 tools began to repaint the wall. The entire spell took about 30 seconds.

“There,” said Kellach, “Much better.” The wall was rebuilt.

“Oh! Wait! One more thing.” Kellach chanted words in an unknown tongue and blew out onto the wall. Shelves reappeared on the wall, and all the photos that were charred, restored.

“Whew, finished!” said Kellach and he flicked his thumb as the shelves dusted themselves.

“Ok. . . . That was real Snow White like, except there were no creepy animals.” Said Sasuke, looking calm and bored. Knuckles then ran into the room in frenzy.

“We know where Neji is!” shouted Knuckles triumphantly.

“Well, where is he?” asked Sasuke.

Knuckles’ face fell a little. He took a deep breath, and then said with a grimace, “Tragic Kingdom.” Kellach’s jaw dropped. Hermione turned pale. Sasuke swore. Aang gasped. Jake launched into a fit of coughing.

“Argh!” Kellach swore. “He’s there? Guys, Neji is in grave danger. None of you understand that better than I do,” said Kellach shakily, “I was once captured by Dartz, I nearly died. We have to; no we MUST save him, NOW!”

“But Kellach,” said Hermione, “To get to Tragic Kingdom, we need to fly.”

“And Jake is needed for the transportation.” Added Knuckles.

“Then that settles it,” said Kellach, “We cure Jake” He took out a small bottle from his spell component pouch on his belt. There was a light blue potion floating in the small vial. He uncorked the bottle with his teeth.

“Wish me luck.” Said Kellach, and he drank the potion in one gulp. Nothing happened.

“What’s supposed to happen?” said Sasuke, looking doubtful.

“Just hang on!” shot Kellach and Hermione together. Minutes passed.

Kellach said, “Well, I guess the potion didn’t wor.” Suddenly, Kellach began to cough and sputter. His legs became wobbly and weak. He began to fall over. Kellach felt weak. He fell forward to the floor.

“Kellach!” Hermione cried, and caught him as he fell. Kellach was unconscious in her arms.

“Ugh, oh.” Kellach’s eyes opened, and a light blue aura surrounded him.

“Whoa.” Knuckles stammered. Kellach got to his feet, and walked over to Jake, who was lying in bed, looking sickly. Kellach took out a pink powder from his spell component pouch, and sprinkled it over Jake. Jake was about to sneeze from the powder, Kellach cringed and backed away; but Jake yawned instead and fell into a deep sleep.

“The potion I drank was a mind stimulant; it will raise my magic abilities tenfold,” said Kellach making a face, “However, it does taste terrible!” Kellach took a very deep breath, and put his hands over Jake’s body. A blue Aura cloaked Kellach’s arms, and he firmly placed his hands over Jake’s chest. The light blue aura fell upon Jake. Jake was still fast asleep from Kellach’s spell. Kellach began to chant in an Unknown language. All of a sudden, a bright light illuminated from Kellach’s hands. Kellach’s hands began to shake, Jake levitated above his bed. Beads of sweat dripped from Kellach’s face.

“Help…. Me.” Groaned Kellach. Sasuke ran to help Kellach in any way he could. He pushed Kellach by the back and flowed some of his chakra to Kellach. Sasuke began to go weak.

“No!” shouted Hermione. She quickly whipped out her wand and shouted, “APISKI!” A white light erupted from her wand and enveloped the 3 boys. All three collapsed. Jake landed back on the bed, still asleep. Sasuke was down on one knee, breathing heavily. Kellach was unconscious on the floor, the blue aura was gone. Hermione ran to is side.

“Kellach, oh Kellach!” sobbed Hermione. The room went silent. Everyone was tense. Hermione knelt beside him, and then kissed him. On the cheek.

Kellach’s eyes fluttered, and then opened. He looked up at Hermione.

“That’s why I’m the leader of the Knight’s Title.” And he kissed her back, long, on the lips. They hugged each other, Hermione cried. Kellach smiled and hugged her tight to his chest.

“Hey I know you 2 are having a lovey dovey moment right now, but We Have a Friend to save!” Everyone looked around to see who spoke. Jake was out of bed and ready to go.

“Alright,” said Kellach, getting up and straightening himself. “Let’s go save Neji!”[/spoiler]
[spoiler= Chapter 8: The Caged Bird]
CHAPTER 8

The Caged Bird.

Neji was tossing and turning in his moldy old bed in the cell block. He was feverish, muttering in his sleep.

Neji was in a small, kind of eerie room. He was 5 years old. He was sitting next to his father, Hizashi Hyuuga. Neji then realized where he was, He was in the Hyuga battle temple. His cousin, Hinata Hyuga was sparring with her father, Hiyashi Hyuuga. Neji was watching the battle in awe.

“Wow,” young Neji said, “Father, do you think this as inspiring as I do?” Hizashi put his arm around his son, laughed, and said, “Neji, my son, I am amazed at how joyful you are. That is what puts a smile on my face.” His pale eyes beamed at Neji.

“Oh!” Hinata got her father, Hiyashi in the chest. He fell over and swore. He coughed a bit of blood. He looked furious. He glared at Hizashi and closed his eyes. All of a sudden, Neji’s father began to howl in pain, clutching his forehead.

“AHHHHHAAAHHHGGGG!” growled Hizashi as he clawed at the cloth wrapped around his forehead. Behind the cloth was a mark, an X shaped symbol with 4 lines was etched onto his forehead. The mark looked inflamed; the veins around his forehead were bulged.

“Neji. . .” groaned Hizashi as he began to foam at the mouth.

“Neji!” Barked Hiyashi, opening his eyes. Hizashi’s body went limp. “Go to your room, forget what you just saw.” Neji walked to his lifeless father’s corpse.

“Father? Father?” Neji’s eyes brimmed with tears.

“Father! Father!” Neji was crying in hysteria.

“FATHER! FATHER!!”… … … … . .

“Father, Father,” groaned Neji in his sleep. His eyes fluttered, but then he went back to sleep. . . . . . . . .

Neji was in Kellach’s bedroom. There was a huge bookcase all around the room. There were jars with spell components on shelves. Neji was sitting on Kellach’s bed. Kellach was sitting in a chair in front of him; he was sitting backwards. Kellach stared back at him.

“So Neji, what is The Caged Bird thing you keep mumbling about in your sleep?”

“WHAT DID YOU SAY!?” Shouted Neji, he was glaring at him.

“Don’t lie, I know you have been hiding it, show me.” Neji removed his headband and Kellach saw the mark. Neji cleared his throat, took a deep breath and said,

“I got this Caged Bird mark branded on me when I was 3 years old.” Said Neji, “it’s a curse that the main branch put on the second branch to do their bidding. The mark represents the sad reality of never being able to have your own destiny. They can torture us with the mark as well. They just need to concentrate and just like that the mark eats at our brain. My father was tortured to death by my uncle, Hiyashi Hyuuga. There is more,” said Neji before Kellach could speak, “There is another reason why the second branch gets branded. It is because we protect the Secret of the Hyuuga; the Byakugan. When we would die, enemies would pry into our heads and extract the power of the Byakugan from us, they would use it for evil. But with the curse mark, our minds are impenetrable. The clan is safe. There Kellach, that is all I can tell you.” Neji finished his story. Kellach looked solemn.

“OK, Neji. I promise not to tell anyone about your secret.” Kellach smiled. Neji nodded his head,

“Thank you Kellach . . . . . . . . .

“I Knew. . . I could . . . count . . . on . . . you. . .” Neji woke up. He yawned. Pale moonlight shone through the grimy window in the cell. He yawned. The mark on his forehead greeted him from his sleep. Neji rubbed his eyes. His sight in his left eye was back, but he doubted he could use Byakugan. Neji then saw something he hadn’t seen before, on the wall. The bricks they were all the same grey color, except for one on the bottom middle. The brick was blue. Neji leapt out of bed, and pushed at the blue brick. It moved aside. And Neji saw a small tunnel. He saw a window of opportunity, and squeezed his body inside. The tunnel was cramped, dark, and dusty. He began to crawl forward, working his way through on his knees. The place looked very old. He took a left, a right, and down a small hill. The tunnel was even smaller here. So small, Neji had to slide on his stomach to even get through the tunnel. A few minutes later, Neji came to a dead end. He was stuck in the dark. Neji felt around the walls of the tunnel for a brick to push out, and he found one. Using most of his strength, he pushed the brick out, crawled out of the dank tunnel, and gasped![/spoiler]
[spoiler= Chapter 9: The Power of the Orichalcos]
CHAPTER 9

The Power of the Orichalcos.

Neji was in a small shrine/altar room. There were candles lit everywhere. And the walls were covered from bottom to top with tiles and ruins of people on them. He looked around. There was a shrine-like throne in the room. Behind the throne was an altar. There were 3 small chambers that snaked up to the ceiling. On the altar in front him was a star shaped symbol painted on the wall. In the middle of the altar was a podium pillar. On the pillar was a beaten up book. Neji walked over to the pillar. The book had the same star shaped symbol etched on the cover, yet around the star was an array of odd symbols and characters he had never seen before.

“Byakugan,” whispered Neji, making signs with his hands. A small flash of pain shot through his head.

“Arg!” growled Neji. His eyes instantly went back to normal as he removed the Byakugan. Neji then opened up the musty old book. A huge cloud of dust and ash flew off the pages and enveloped Neji in a thick fog. Neji began to sneeze. He covered his mouth and nose to prevent breathing in the toxic air. He flipped through the book. On many of the pages was the same symbol, but this time it was branded on someone’s forehead. He began to read the passages.

“The power of the Orichalcos is an evil and demonic power to control. It is said that orichalcum stones have the power to test the evil in any living person’s soul. If you pass, you are granted a power beyond mere mortals. However, if you fail,”

Neji read on with more interest, “-if you fail, the Orichalcum will overpower you; corrupt you. I myself have taken the test and passed with full marks. Some other filth, though can’t handle the power, they are too weak, they are brainwashed, consumed by their own evil,”

Neji turned the page,

“February 26, 2008. . . . . BC! This book is old!” Neji gasped, then kept on reading,

“I am now 5,000 years old! The orichalcum keeps me alive, immortal. But to stay alive I must devote my life to capturing souls of the living. Recently, I have been testing people with the orichalcum, many have lost their souls to its divine power, and it has strengthened me greatly!”

“Wait a minute,” said Neji, coming to the dawn, “Brainwashing? Evil? Orichalcos? This must be Dartz journal. But that must mean . . . . . he’s over 10,000 years old!”

“AND WHAT A 10,000 YEARS IT HAS BEEN!” Neji’s blood went cold. “What are you doing with my private journal?!” seethed Dartz. Neji was speechless. Neji got into fighting position.

“Oh please. Do you really wish to fight me?” said Dartz, “you’d die in seconds!”

“You, you vile, old, demonic man!” said Neji through clenched teeth.

“But what about the POWER!” Cackled Dartz, “power you couldn’t dream about! Look around you. See all these tiles? They all contain people’s souls lost to the Orichalcos! Hundreds! Thousands! Millions! And they all benefit to my strength! The Orichalcos chose me to be its ruler. I am evil itself!” Dartz’s body crackled with blue electricity, “Now, I’ll ask you again. Do you really wish to fight me?”[/spoiler]
[spoiler= Chapter 10: The Storm]
CHAPTER 10

The storm

Kellach, Jake, Shadow, and Hermione burst out of Jake’s room at a break neck pace.

“How ya feeling Jake?” asked Kellach opened the door to the courtyard.

“Eh, still a little sick, but I’m bete, bete, ehh, ah, Ahchoo!!” Jake sneezed, but the usual flames did not come out.

“Sorry I couldn’t snuff out the whole cold completely,” said Kellach sheepishly, scratching his head, “at least I removed the coughing, itching, red dots, ugly skin, and fever. Couldn’t remove that sneeze of yours, they were a doozy. But I cured the large fireballs!” Chuckled Kellach as if he just told a really funny joke only he understood.

“OK, we know where Neji is, we just need to get there, now.” Said Shadow, speeding through the court yard. The courtyard was breathtaking; many different flowers and fruits grew plentifully along the pathway. There were many trees with pure green leaves. The air outside was warm and calming. The foursome then came to a fountain in the middle of the courtyard. In the middle of the fountain was a statue of a dragon; a sword clutched in its hand. There were 4 silver bowls placed around the statue.

“You all know what to do,” said Kellach. “I hope Neji’s caged bird mark protects him from Dartz’ power. . .” Thought Kellach.

“NOW!” he shouted.

Kellach and Hermione chanted words out loud. Jake spit fire into the 4 bowls. Shadow took a chaos emerald and placed it in the dragon’s mouth. The 4 put a hand onto the statue. Kellach and Hermione stopped chanting.

Silence . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . then, the statue was set afire! The 4 bowls of fire turned into 4 snaking roots of fire that curled around it. Ancient characters appeared on the fire. The chaos emerald glowed painfully bright. The sword in the dragon’s hand fell, and plunged into the ground. The ground began to rumble. Then, miraculously, 4 silver dragons erupted from the earth. They were shiny, majestic, and strong. Kellach and the others each hopped onto a dragon and flew off into the bright air.

It had been three hours flying in the air. The foursome was irritable, freezing, miserable, and overall exhausted. It was raining. There was a slight breeze in the air.

“Kellach… any...any grub left?” said Jake weakly as he sighed loudly, “Kellach? Kellach? Keeeeeeelaaach? Aw man!” Kellach was conked out on his dragon; he was snoring like a whale, a drop of spittle hanging out of the corner of his mouth.

“Augh, how the hell can he sleep through this? Groaned Hermione as she waved her wand. She conjured 2 earplugs and stuffed them deep into her ears. Shadow was trying to read the map to Tragic Kingdom. He yawned. The clouds in the sky began to grow dark. A thunder clap woke up Kellach.

“Wah, huh?” Kellach got upright, and wiped the spit off his robes and face, “Where are we now?”

“About 3 hours away from home, I think we are about half-an-hour away from Tragic Kingdom.” Said Shadow half asleep.

“I, Ahchoo, think we are. . . Ahchoo, getting closer then…. Ahchoo, Ahchoo, ATCHOO!!” said Jake between fits of sneezing. Hermione then noticed Jake’s horrible condition and took out a small glass vial with a green substance floating in it from her robes.

“Here,” said Hermione sleepily, “drink.” She handed the bottle to Jake. His chest was huffing and heaving. He couldn’t stop sneezing.

“DRINK THE DAMN BOTTLE!” Hermione yelled, irritated. Jake then managed to swallow the contents. The concoction was thick. Then Jake’s color retuned to his face, he stopped shivering, his sickness ceased. A look of joy spread across his face.

“I can breathe again!” Shouted Jake with utter delight. His face then instantly scrunched up in disgust, “BLECH!! This is nasty!” He stuck out his dragon tongue, “I’m una throw uhp!” He took out a toothbrush and vigorously began to scrub his tongue. The other three friends laughed for the first time it felt like in weeks. “Ugh, u guys are harribul, u alh su-“Jake was interrupted by an earsplitting crash of lightning.

“Man that lightning crash wasn’t too far from here.” Said Shadow, suspiciously. The wind then picked up, and the rain fell on them like thousands of tiny little needles.

“Ack! This wind and rain is murder! Everyone hold on to your dragon, you never know what might happen during a storm.” Shouted Kellach over the howling wind and crashing thunder.

“Yaaa!!” Screamed Jake as a bolt of lightning nearly missed his head.

“Now guys calm down,” said Shadow, “Like Kellach said, you never know what will happen during a-“A white streak of lightning struck right through shadow and his dragon. The dragon did a nosedive, and then began to fall, with Shadow plummeting to the ground, unconscious.

“Whoa, Kellach, you were right.”[/spoiler]
[spoiler= Chapter 11: The Chasm]
CHAPTER 11

The Chasm

“SHADOW!!” shouted Hermione. The three remaining dragons went berserk.

“What’s going on?!” Gasped Jake.

“The dragons are scared of the lightning after they saw one of their own kin get killed.” Answered Kellach. The 3 struggled to hold on to their dragons, but then, Jake lost his grip and began to fall. He smashed into Kellach and sent him downward to the earth with him. Hermione then jumped off her dragon and freefell, her hair whipping about her. She then realized that the ground was very close.

“Holy… Spongify!” she shouted as she pointed her wand to the ground. Nothing.

“Spongify!!” she shouted again. Nothing.

“SPONGIFY!!” Nothing happened. She braced herself for landing. Shadow, Jake, Kellach and Hermione crashed into the trees and fell down through the branches, and made a slightly bumpy land on the dirt. The 4 were dazed and confused. Surprisingly, Shadow was the first to speak.

“Oh my aching head. . . .” said Shadow, “Well at least we’re alive.” He panted.

“Well hoorah for that,” groaned Kellach sarcastically, rubbing his sore behind.

“Um. . . . where exactly are we guys?” Asked Hermione, her voice faltering. They landed into some sort of dark forest. The trees completely covered them in darkness. The rain fell on them like a wave. There was a hill that led up to a mountain and a slope like area that leads downward next to the mountain. Jake then pointed up to the mountain.

“From the looks of it, about an hours walk from Tragic Kingdom.” He was pointing at the castle. It loomed over them like a shadow. They were so close, and yet so far.

“That will take forever!” groaned Shadow.

“Not if we fly,” answered Jake, “Dragon up! Dragon up! Dragon up?”

“I was afraid of this. . . .” sighed Hermione, “Guys, it appears that our powers are gone, my spell for a soft ground didn’t work, Jake can’t turn into a dragon, and I’m guessing you can’t cast spells Kellach. And Shadow, your dark energy is completely sapped away. I’m guessing that the storm was what did it. But you know what? We can still do this! We don’t need powers to survive this mountain! We can get through this! If we just put our minds to it, and keep calm, we are unstoppable!!” Hermione finished her little speech. Shadow stared at her for a good 5 seconds, then breathed out,

“Yeah. . . . . we’re all gonna die.” Hermione glared at him.

“Oh yeah Shadow?” Snarled Hermione.

“Yeah! You couldn’t last 5 minutes out here without here without your little magic stick.”

“MAGIC STICK!?” Exploded Hermione.

“Yeah, and Jake, you can’t go one day without TV or food!”

“WHAT!?”

“ENOUGH!!” Shouted Kellach, his voice raised high, “OK, we need to get a grip and calm down before we kill each other. Now we need to find a way out of this forest. Jake, Shadow. You two go left downward to the slope and find a way into the castle. Maybe there is a secret tunnel or something. Hermione and I will hike up right the mountain to the castle. Ok. Let’s go.”

“You heard him Jake, let’s go.” Said Shadow starting downward to the bottom of the hill.

“Alright Hermione, you ready?” Said Kellach.

“Yes, let’s go.” She replied. So the two groups parted ways to find an entrance to the castle.

Kellach and Hermione began the trek upward to the castle. They the forest was thick; they had to be careful to not fall over the hill. This was hard because it was very hard to sense the direction in the dark forest. The rain had died down.

“I wonder where that lightning came from. I mean, one minute it was clear, and then a second later, we are fighting for our lives in a gale.” Said Kellach, “It was so sudden.”

“I know, it’s kind of creepy.” Answered Hermione.

“Yeah, who knew that our powers could be taken away so easil-“Kellach suddenly lurched forward, and vomited over the edge of the cliff. He clutched at his head. He fell to one knee. He was breaking out in a cold sweat.

“MUHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!! Kellach, you’d better hurry, time’s running out!” Kellach was hearing laughter from all around him.

“Please. . . . . stop. . . .” Moaned Kellach.

“Kellach? What’s going on? Are you ok?” asked Hermione, sounding worried. Kellach began to scream. Kellach heard nothing but Dartz rising voice, laughing and taunting him.

“Your dear friend is about to meet his end. MUHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!! JUST TRY TO STOP ME!!”

“GET OUT OF MY HEAD!!” Kellach couldn’t take the torture, “AAAAAAAAHHHHHHH!!” Kellach was wailing in agony. Hermione acted fast, she took out her wand, pointed it at Kellach’s head and said,

“Oclumense!” Nothing happened. “Damn!” she thought, “Our powers are still gone.” Kellach’s mouth began to foam, he was shaking, then. The screaming stopped, he stopped shaking. He went limp, and he fell. Hermione quickly picked him up before he hit the ground.

“We need to get to the tower,” Said Hermione as she lifted Kellach, “Up we go now.” She carried him up the mountain for another 10 minutes until. . . . . .

“The castle, Tragic Kingdom,” breathed Hermione. She was standing in front of a huge colossal black castle with huge towers, and the sides were covered in iron spikes. There was one balcony on the top of the tower. The large Iron Gate was in front of her. The only thing stopping her now was. . . . A deep chasm. She looked down. The chasm seemed to have no bottom.

“Now all we do is cross the chasm, not too difficult.” She said. Kellach was coming to.

“Put me down Hermione, I can walk.” Said Kellach. He was breathing heavily, he was still pretty weak. He then swiveled, lost conscious and fell forward. Right for the chasm.

“Oh no!!” Hermione gasped as she tried to grab him before he fell, she failed. Kellach was now heading to the bottom of nowhere.[/spoiler]
[spoiler= Chapter 12: The Cursed Army]
CHAPTER 12

The cursed army

Shadow and Jake were running down the long hill, they already saw the castle looming over them. They came to the slope, and turned upward; there WAS a secret path to the castle. The 2 began to walk up the hill.

“Shadow, I feel a lot better.”

“Good to hear that, now let’s get to this castle!” The friends were coming closer to the tower. They reached the top of the hill. They were then on a flat plateau, the castle was straight ahead. They began to walk through the plateau.

“You know,” said Shadow minutes later. They were in the middle of the plateau, “This seems easy, too easy.” As if on command, about a hundred forms were emerging from the earth. They were lizard-like; a shade of purple. They had steel armor all over the joints of their bodies. They also had gruesome blades jutting out of their arms. They were big, bad, and scaly. The army of lizards formed a wall in front of Jake and Shadow.

“Damn, these lizards are blocking our way.” Said shadow.

“Yeah; if we had our powers we could plow right through these guys.”

“We can still fight.”

“They’re taller than us and we would be ripped in half like a couple of phonebooks if we just charged at them.”

“I know, but we have to do something.” Said Shadow. Jake looked around, and spotted a crack in the plateau.

“I think I know how we can bypass the scary lizard freaks”

Shadow and Jake found a small crack in the plateau to crawl into.

“This small tunnel might lead somewhere!” Jake said exuberantly, “all we need to do is keep following this path; it must lead into the castle or something!” They kept crawling deeper, the tunnel sunk deeper, and Jake and Shadow had to crouch lower to the ground. Soon, the path was so narrow, they couldn’t move any further.

“Hey Jake, why’d you stop moving?” Said Shadow, who was behind Jake.

“Uh, I think I’m stuck.” Said Jake quietly.

“Well, try to get unstuck, because my back is killing me, Groaned Shadow, “Not such a good idea, huh?”

“Yeah, did not think that one through,” Replied Jake as he grunted and groaned; trying to push himself forward, “come on; let me-“All of a sudden, Jake felt a swell of energy from within. Their powers were back! Shadow got the same feeling as well.

“Heh, looks like the effects last only an hour.” Jake then froze.

“What did you just say Shadow?” asked Jake, his voice cracking.

“I said that the effects only lasted an hour.” Shadow repeated. Jake then had a bad feeling. He then remembered what Hermione said an hour ago to him when she gave him the medicine.

“Here, drink. You’ll feel better. But be careful, the potion only works for an hour.” Jake realized, and then began to feel sick. His nose itched. He breathed deeply. Jake itched at his nose. It was still itchy. He sniffed, BAD IDEA. Jake’s body began to contract; he held his hand to his nose.

“What are you doing?” asked Shadow.

“I. . . . I. . . . I’m gonna sneeze.” Said Jake, his voice wavering and shaking.

“Are you crazy? You’ll roast us alive!! Try to hold it in!” Yelped Shadow.

“I . . . ah, I’ll try.” Shadow pushed at Jake’s feet to get him free, but it was no use; Jake was going nowhere. Minutes passed, the only sound that could be heard was Jake’s wild breathing, trying to keep his mouth shut. Shadow was still trying to free Jake by pushing as hard as he could. Jake was struggling not to sneeze, his chest hurt, his eyes watered, his lungs ached; he just had to sneeze!

“Ah. . . ah. . . Bra. . . .Brah. . . Brace yourself Shah. . .Dow,” Wavered Jake, “I can’t hold it in any longeh. . .Ah, ah, ah,” Shadow closed his eyes. They were going to die. If they weren’t engulfed in the flames, the fire would eat up the oxygen and they would suffocate. All of a sudden as Shadow was saying his prayers, they heard a cracking sound.

“Uh oh.” The ground fell beneath them.

“AHHHHHHHHH!!” The 2 fell through the floor. Shadow hit ground first; hard. Then Jake fell on top of him.

“OW!”

“So, ah,ah, ah, sorry Shadow.” Sniffled Jake.

“That’s ok.” Replied Shadow. The 2 seemed to have landed into some sort of prayer room. There were stained glass windows of gods all around them.

“Good news! We’re in the castle!” cheered Shadow. At this, a group of sorcerers in black and white robes circled the 2. They were chanting a spell. Then around THAT circle were a group of the scary lizard beasts. They were surrounded.

“Bad news. We’re in the castle.”[/spoiler]
[spoiler= Chapter 13: The Gate]
CHAPETR 13

THE GATE

Kellach was falling fast. Hermione and Kellach had gotten their powers back, she could feel it. But Kellach was unconscious therefore useless. Hermione acted fast and jumped in the chasm after him.

“Carpe retractum!” She pointed her wand at Kellach. A rope came out of her wand, and wrapped around Kellach, she was flung like a slingshot towards him. She quickly grabbed him, and then realized that now she was closer to death than before. The bottom of the chasm was coming fast. They were gonna crash!!

The army of evil surrounded Jake and Shadow. The Orechalcos symbol was burned on each of the monsters. The chanting grew louder; the sorcerers appeared to be in the middle of some sort of ritual. Jake’s nose was still itching like crazy; he lost concentration, and could not hold it any longer.

“Ah, ah, ah, ah, ATCHOO!!!” It was like the gates of hell opened up. Out of Jake’s mouth came a huge, white-hot ring of fire, which grew and grew until it filled the whole room, Shadow and the army was set on fire. A huge crack in the ceiling formed, and the fire escaped upwards in the direction. Shadow was Alive; he was protected with his dark barrier created at the last minute. It ended. Jake was on the floor laughing.

“Did you see that?! Aw, I feel sooooooo much better! It all whooshed out of me!” laughed Jake.

“If there was a time I could thank your cold, this would have been the time,” grinned Shadow. All of a sudden the 2 heard sounds of screaming from above. They looked up, wondering what it was.

Kellach came out of his daze. The second he knew where he was, he screamed and held onto Hermione. The chasm’s floor then glowed a bright red.

“YAAA!!” Kellach then clasped his hands together and formed a protective shield around him and Hermione. The ground below cracked, and a colossal column of fire enveloped them. They were flying through the fire at a breakneck speed. They fell through the crack, and landed on 2 people. The 4 people were sprawled on top of each other. The protective shield protected the 4 from harm during the collision.

“Ow, my aching. . . . . KELLACH!!” Shouted Jake.

“SHADOW!” Exclaimed Hermione. The 4 kids hugged each other. They had made it into Tragic Kingdom alive.

“Alright guys,” said Kellach, “Do you 2 know how to get out of this room?” Jake grabbed Kellach’s head, and turned him towards the opposite wall. On the opposite wall, was an enormous door. The door had a gold trim. It was made of pure sapphires. There were 2 large golden door knockers with emerald snakes curling around them. Kellach laughed then said,

“Well I guess that answers our question.”

“Dartz must have a lot of bucks to drop for this grand gate.” Said Shadow. The foursome ran for the door.

“WAIT!” It was Hermione. She ran up to the gate with them, and pulled out a bottle with a blue potion in it. She uncorked the bottle.

“It’s Essence of Dittany, drink up!” The 4 drank deep from the concoction. The second it ran down their throats, they felt a warm sensation. Kellach’s sprains healed. Jake and Shadow’s skin recovered, and Hermione’s cuts were sewed together. It tasted refreshing, like lime and watermelon.

“Ah, now that we’re all healed,” said Kellach, “let’s go find Neji!” The 4 pushed on the door, and entered into the beyond, unknowing for what horrors awaited them behind the door.[/spoiler][/spoiler]
The other 8 chapters are posted on the thread.




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From now on, I will post the chapters on other posts. Not on my first one. I ran outta space......
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Really? I never thought of that. This kind of reminded me of a huge battle in a castle. Well' date=' not huge, but just a fierce battle between enemies, like Soul Caliber or something like that.

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I've played Soul Calibur 2, 3 and 4, and I do admit it's like that, but I chose Capsule Monsters because it's not the traditional way of ygo whereas SC is a traditional way of fighting.

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Well, I always wanted him to be more than a dulist...so I gave him a couple "Powers" he had while under the Orrechalcos. He hs been and alwals will be one of my favorite villans in Anime, he would have done better in a show other than Yu-Gi-Oh. (His season was my favorite, had the coolest cards and the coolest plot!)

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