Dark Knightmare Skull [I never make cards, but I wanted to try]

[Akira]

 

Lore: This card cannot be destroyed by battle. Any battle damage you take from a battle involving this card becomes 0. You can discard 1 DARK monster to destroy 1 Defense Position monster on the field. Once per turn, you can change the Battle Position of one face up monster your opponent controls. If you do, you can not declare an attack this turn.

 

First attempt at a realistic card. Probably screwed up the OCG or something, but I'm sure you kind members will help me with that.

 

Comments?

[K.B. strategist]

Battle Damage

1, not one

face-up

though not necessarily an error, "if you activate this effect" sounds better in this context then "If you do"

 

Pic could use a background, good effect and ocg.

[Akira]

Thanks for pointing out the mistakes, I'll make edits when I get round to it. I'm not too fussed about the pic, I just wanted an interesting/balanced card effect. Also, should I say "can not" or "cannot" because I noticed that I clumsily used both for the card's effect..

[K.B. strategist]

cannot.

[Professor Cobra]

If you use this effect, good pic, use 1 instead of one, good pic, take out the 0 Battle Damage effect. 8/10