Reketsumi Tirayuka Posted November 17, 2008 Report Share Posted November 17, 2008 This thread should be deleted... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daxinator Posted November 20, 2008 Report Share Posted November 20, 2008 *clapping* nice chapters kid 10/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Reketsumi Tirayuka Posted November 20, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 20, 2008 *clapping* nice chapters kid 10/10 Thank you very much... And I will be giving you addition reputation. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stigma_Horrizone Posted November 20, 2008 Report Share Posted November 20, 2008 Really nice 10/10 for it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Reketsumi Tirayuka Posted November 20, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 20, 2008 Really nice 10/10 for it Thank you very much. I will add to your reputation for giving me a rating. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted November 20, 2008 Report Share Posted November 20, 2008 Perfectly done. You're absolutely awesome for a writer. Keep this up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Reketsumi Tirayuka Posted November 20, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 20, 2008 Perfectly done. You're absolutely awesome for a writer. Keep this up.Thank you for the compliment. Adding positive reputation to your score. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Ixigo Posted November 21, 2008 Report Share Posted November 21, 2008 Slow down the pace. Focus more on characters than events. Give us more insight into your world, don't rush into things else the setting becomes blurry and expendable, and the fanfic is reduced into a series of random duels. Take your time. There's no rush. The effort is decent, but you need to take things more slowly. You already give away too much and kill a lot of interest, plus most of the supposedly unique things in your story are taken in unexplainable stride by your characters. You think any doctor would give a boy that sprouted from a newborn baby's mouth to an orphanage at the mother's request? That's ridiculous, and that's just the start of it. Focus more on realism and less on bending the laws of the universe to serve your plot. For now, I can only give this a 6/10. Sorry, but I'm not one to hold back when reviewing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted November 21, 2008 Report Share Posted November 21, 2008 Don't worry about some of the reviews. Trust me, the ygo fic I posted on ff.net received reviews along the lines of "I've seen the unborn write better than this." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nexev Posted November 21, 2008 Report Share Posted November 21, 2008 true but Ixigo knows what he is talking about, not only that but how did Semaj know Nerid's deck instantly, in his first duel he found out her strategy before she even went, that doesn't seem physically without cheating, it is good however, espically for a guy who only posted 5 times Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Reketsumi Tirayuka Posted November 21, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 21, 2008 Thanks for the very helpful feedback, Ixigo. I will definitely make HUGE changes to the storyline, and as a side note, I am going to ask Umbra to delete chapter 1 for me, as it doesn't seem to want me to delete my own posts. I will add positive reputation for the rating, even if it is lower than I like, because I am doing this to get better, not because I am better... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted November 21, 2008 Report Share Posted November 21, 2008 We appreciate your writing for us. We'll be waiting for the next chapter. I'm sure it'll be great. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Reketsumi Tirayuka Posted November 21, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 21, 2008 I know I must sound like a perfectionist, but I am not trying to be perfect. I just want all of you guys to know that I can do better than I already have, and am restarting. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Ixigo Posted November 21, 2008 Report Share Posted November 21, 2008 Well, yeah. I didn't mean to be discouraging or anything, and it wasn't really that bad, else I wouldn't even have bothered posting. I was just giving pointers on how to improve. Glad to see someone who actually wants to become better, for a change. Keep it up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted November 21, 2008 Report Share Posted November 21, 2008 I know I must sound like a perfectionist' date=' but I am not trying to be perfect. I just want all of you guys to know that I can do better than I already have, and am restarting.[/quote'] Don't worry. You're doing great. And every fic has its share of flaws, there's no exception to this rule. I'm sure what else you've got in store will be great when it goes up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Ixigo Posted November 21, 2008 Report Share Posted November 21, 2008 My advice is not to restart - rather, stick with what you have, and when you've finished what you deem a suitable portion, go back and rewrite it. That's how all books are written. A really bad first draft comes first, and then the author keeps improving it. My favorite author only sends his books for editing when he has written the fourth draft. Keep writing, but try to fix the problems with it. That's a sure-fire way to get better, whereas if you start from scratch, you'll just get frustrated and get nowhere. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted November 21, 2008 Report Share Posted November 21, 2008 that's not necessarily true for someone who's only written 2 chapters. Depending on the entire fic's length, maybe in the first two chaps he hasn't fully thought out what is to be written yet Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted November 21, 2008 Report Share Posted November 21, 2008 Post deleted. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Reketsumi Tirayuka Posted December 1, 2008 Author Report Share Posted December 1, 2008 The name of my post says it all... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted December 1, 2008 Report Share Posted December 1, 2008 We're not too keen on deleting threads here. So, this thread will be locked. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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