blue-eyes Posted August 26, 2007 Report Share Posted August 26, 2007 This is my last fan fic for a while, I just want to try tips I got. This is about two boys that are rivals named Sasuke Ver and Ryan Potter. I'll make the cards later. CHARACTERS: LOOKS: NAME: Sasuke VerAGE: 15DECK: mixFIRST APPEARANCE: episode one-Sasuke vs Ryan LOOKS: NAME: Ryan PotterAGE: 15DECK: mixFIRST APPEARANCE: episode one-Sasuke vs Ryan LOOKS: NAME: Misty DanisonAGE: 15DECK: angelsFIRST APPEARANCE: episode one-Sasuke vs Ryan LOOKS: NAME: Carrey RossAGE: 16DECK: aquaFIRST APPEARANCE: episode one-Sasuke vs Ryan LOOKS: NAME: Ash GordonAGE: 17DECK: cyberFIRST APPEARANCE: episode two-The Cyber Man LOOKS: NAME: Bella TimmAGE: 17DECK: cyberFIRST APPEARANCE: episode two-The Cyber Man Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
blue-eyes Posted August 26, 2007 Author Report Share Posted August 26, 2007 Added more characters. Episode one-Sasuke vs Ryan Sasuke Ver was walking through a long hallway. A man came up.Man: Sasuke what are you doing? Are you going to battle Ryan Potter or not!Sasuke: Yes I am.The man led Sasuke through a long tunnel. They were standing in a big areana. A boy was standing there.Sasuke: Hello Ryan.The boy just walked on to a stage.Man: Go Sasuke.Sasuke walked onto the stage aswell.Ryan: Sasuke you go first.Sasuke: I draw then play Dragon Team in ATK mode (1500\1500) now it effect is if I get to draw two cards if I discard one card and then I end my turn. (4000 LP)Ryan: I draw then I play Cyber Blast this let's me destroy all your monsters on the field and then I summon Fish Of The Unkown in DEF mode (0\2000) now I gain 1000 life points thanks to his effect and I end my turn. (5000 LP)Sasuke: I draw then put two face-downs cards then I tribute Kid Magician and Dragon Of Silence to play Blue Metal Dragon in ATK mode (2700\2300) and Blue Metal Dragon attack his Fish Of The Unknown and I end my turn. (4000 LP)Ryan: I draw and then play Dragon Scream so I lose 2000 life points but you also lose 2000 life points then I summon Cyber Warrior in ATK mode (1700\1800) and end my turn. (3000 LP)Sasuke: I draw and play Destroy this let's your monster go to the graveyard for one turn and now Blue Metal Dragon attack his life points directly and now I play Fusion I fuse my Blue Metal Dragon and my other two Blue Metal Dragon to play Blue Metal Ultimate Dragon in ATK mode (5000\5000) and I end my turn. (2000 LP)Ryan: I draw and summon Zombie Of Life in DEF mode (1400\1400) and I then play Zombie Power-Up this raise my Zombie Of Life by 1000 ATK points now I end my turn. (300 LP)Sasuke: I draw then summon Zombie Of Darkness in DEF mode (1000\1000) now if I attack your Zombie Of Life both monsters are destroyed now attack his Zombie Of Life and Blue Metal Ultimate Dragon attack his life points derictly.Ryan: Fine but it ain't over.Ryan then walked off. Sasuke saw a man with a red cloak on over in the corner.Misty: good job.Carrey: Yeah good job. next episode: episode two-The Cyber Man Hope you liked it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
blue-eyes Posted August 31, 2007 Author Report Share Posted August 31, 2007 Sorry but at least tell me if it is good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
darkguy00000 Posted September 1, 2007 Report Share Posted September 1, 2007 Um... why did he attack with Metal Dragon, THEN summon Ultimate when he could have won in one turn? Stuff like that ruins fanfics. Also probably because this is your about seventh attempt at a fanfic, people have just lost interest. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
blue-eyes Posted September 1, 2007 Author Report Share Posted September 1, 2007 I need some deleted. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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