Yu-Gi-Oh! the Incredible Journey of a Hero. episode 1 part 1/2 is out!

[BulletMan]

[spoiler=Its the future. A dark future...]

 

Only a few years from now, 15 years exactly, come The Dark Times....

 

A year or so after now, technology took a giant, dark, step forward...

 

The worlds first portable Duel Discs were born. Yu-Gi-Oh! took the world into a whole new kind of sport. People thought it was but just a nerds card game. But every body soon had interest. It was the worlds #1 sport. Then a man, NO! A creature...had an evil thought....

 

This monster made Yu-Gi-Oh! into a weapon of destruction. He added a device to a Duel Disk with his Deck inserted. He demanded his butler, more of a slave to him, to duel him now. The butler did as he was told and dueled with a pathetic Deck. As they dueled, Every time that butler was hit by an attack, he would suffer from a pain no man thought they would have to ever feel. The poor butler could barely stand after each attack. As his Life Points grew lower, the pain from the devastating device grew stronger.

 

When the butlers Life Points reached 0, the pain grew to such a height that his body was obliterated. He caught on fire do to the high power of the device. He blazed with such fury that he blew up with an equavilant force of a barrel of gun powder. His body was layed to dust; gone. But his soul was not. His soul was captured by another invention this monster, known as Core, made. His soul was stuck, but rested in this machine. His sleep was not a good one. He was in a nightmare. It was no dream nor paradise.

 

His body was no longer his...but his masters, Core. But he had another little device. He scooped the remains of the butlers body. It was no more than ash. He dumped into this machine that he called, "The Dark Clone Maker". When the butlers poor body of ash was dumped, it was blended and added with a secret ingredient.

 

What came out. A Dark Clone of course. The clone had no soul, but could move. Its body was sheer black. It seemed to be of a sticky substance. Its eyes were white and glowed. It was hungry for...souls...

 

 

 

It was capable of walking, talking, and can make its arm into a Duel Disk with a Deck. It stood over 7 feet tall, with sharp-pointy teeth, claws, and legs that belong to an animal. It has no fur or scales. Just Darkness...It would duel pathetic humans and win almost always. When you win(you wish) against a Dark Clone, he melts away to nothing. But if you lose...you go, bye-bye. your soul will be tooken to the machine I just told you about, which is called, "The Eternal Pool". Your body is tooken to "The Dark Clone Maker" where it will be made into a Dark Clone.

 

Core dueled many more times and made his own Dark Clone army that he had total control over. He never losted. These clones were invincible to every thing. Even a...Nuke. His army swept cities with easy strokes, leaving them in ruins. As his clones dueled and won, his army expanded. Only a few would escape.

 

"I wished this never happened," said the mother of the two children, who were about to be devoured by the horrid beasts, the Dark Clones...

 

Core was winning. Will his dream empire become reality? We hope not...

 

The world was in jepardy. If you lost, you were gone. Tooken to the "Eternal Pool" for eternity....Or maybe not.

 

The world was not tooken completely over. For the few who escaped, or won came to the northern part of the world, a very small area that humans still exist that included all of North America, England, most of Europe, some of Asia, and the carribean. The world that was not human populated was where Core and his evil empire lived and build.

 

The ones who escaped by winning knew the Dark Clones weakness. That was to duel them and win. A police squad was made known as "the Bomb Brigade". The Bomb Brigade were duelist who were elite and had decks that were more powerful than ours now. They had to be tough do to the risk of getting wounded during a duel with a Dark Clone. They protected the little bit of the planet we had left.

 

There were different sectors of the Bomb Brigade. Sector 1. America. 2. England. 3. Jamaca. 4. Russia. 5. Japan. 6. Germany. 7. Canada. and 8. France. They all had their own elite group. But on with the story.

 

The technoloy was high. The invention of the Teleporter was sinificant to the Bomb Brigade. Robots exist but have emotions and have there own rights. And a few more but I am not going to tell until we get to that point of time.

 

Now to our hero...

Our hero is part of the elite group of the American Bomb Brigade. He has been spending only a year with his team and is the newest member. He lives in a small building with his Guardian. His name, is not known well. He is nick named, XL. He is called XL for he is...well he is the youngest of his team, only being almost 18. Every body else are in their 20's or older. Now why is he younger than usual? You have to be about 20 to join the elite. He is but 17. He must have talent to have gotten in here. So he is called XL he is the eXtra Large bomb of the Bomb Brigade.

 

Only his Guardian, Welche Jones, knows his name. XL may be young, but he's strong. With his Deck that no one else has, the "Bullet Monsters", he is definitely an elite. Oh, and where are his parents? They are still here, but they live in another part of America. And little does XL know that he has a destiny. Will his destiny be to save the world and will he? What friends does he have and what will take in his life as his journey goes on? Your gonna find out. But be careful. The world of Yu-Gi-Oh! is no longer a game...

 

[spoiler=episode 1:]

part 1/2

 

It was a dark night in the town of Rightman City. The clouds were but little wisps of mist, fleeing through the full moon sky. Only a few stars were up, for the city didn't sleep. Many people were out and about the city. Some were working. Some were just visiting.

 

A building under construction with workers busy doing their jobs. Some were robots, but most were humans. They were working on the building or beneath it. All of them had yellow construction helmets. Most were wearing bright-orange coats as well.

 

They were on their night shift. Today they couldn't have a break, for the Rightsman City tower was over due on its building date. Almost complete they were. The only parts they still needed were the parking lot and the top of the building. Every thing was going fine. Right?

 

A worker on the bottom floor of the building was working on making some cement. Stirring hard and as fast as a tractor trying to pull a heavy load of hay, he managed. His fellow workers weren't to far from him, working on the parking lot themselves. Another was drilling on a part of the parking lot, for they placed a pipe in the wrong place. And now they are trying to re-construct that pipe. He has ear plugs on.

 

One of the workers yelled to the one drilling, "Hey Bill! Were going on a coffee break. Want to come join us?"

 

The worker was still drilling away, not responding.

 

"Alright! We'll just leave you to your work! Man he must want that raise..."

 

As that worker drilled, he would take a break for a moment afterwards and take his ear plugs out. Then when he stopped, he noticed his fellow workers were gone. He was alone. He shrugged and went back to work. Yet he would still take a little break every time after he drilled and take his ear plugs out.

 

The next time he did take a break, he decided to take a little break. He pulled out a sack which had in it the following; a sanwich, a Dr.Pepper, a small bag of Lays potato chips, and a plate. He set up a table on one of the construction boards. He opened his Dr.Pepper and took one big sip. He unwrapped his purely baked sub. He took a sniff of it.

 

"Aw...Still warm".

 

As he took a mouth full, he heard something. He turned around to find, one of the cement making tools was tipped over, leaking cement. He placed his sub on his plate and went to pick it up.

 

"How on earth did this fall over?"

 

He mearly shrugged and went back to his plate. Before sitting down again, he heard something. It sounded like foot steps an olypic runner would take. He heard a dripping noise as well. He got his flashlight and pointed to where the noise was coming from. What he saw was a leaky pipe that was dripping onto a puddle. The worker was paranoid of it and decided just to ignore it.

 

He went back down to eat, when the dripping stopped. He flashed his flashlight around quickly to find that the pipe was no longer leaking. But as he began to point it down, he found the puddle was gone! His eyes grew big.

 

"What the heck is going on?"

 

Then, more footsteps. He began to point his light toward the footsteps. All he saw was nothing. They seemed to grow distant. He began to follow to where the foot steps were coming from. He ran toward a narrow hall that leaded him to the room that would soon become the plumming system for the building. He soon would find himself in a dead end. The footsteps stopped. He flashed his light one more time to find one of his construction workers.

 

"Ah-ha! Wait what?

 

It wasn't a construction worker, but ones one their helmets. He was tricked. He heard the dripping again. He flashed toward a pipe that was leaking and making it into a puddle. He pointed at the puddle. As he did, he looked around and found freshly made foot prints. But they didn't belong to a humans, nor a robots...

 

They belonged to a monster. The worker fell down to what he saw. He knew what they belonged to. The dripping stopped again. He flashed toward the pipe. Sure enough, it stopped leaking. When he pointed to the puddle, it was gone. He began hearing something from above, and behind him...

 

Slowly he turned around. His eyes big and twiching. He finally looked at what he was trying to see; nothing. But that was why he began to really get frightened in the first place. He knew it was coming. Slowly out of the darkness came a Dark Clone! Upside down like a bat, hanging from the pipes, Its eyes glowing like two full moons.

 

It let out a screech of terror into the workers soul. The shock waves from the screech were so powerful, that the pipes began to break, the walls began to crack, and the workers was blown back. The Dark Clones meal was served.

 

But the construction workers were back from their break. They were searching for their fellow worker when they heard the powerful screech.

They ran toward where it was coming from. When they got there, they found their friend captured by the arm of the Dark Clone. He was struggling to get free, but it was no use. He gazed into the open jaws of the Dark Clone only to find more darkness.

 

One of the workers whispered into his phone, "Bomb Brigade, we got a Dark Clone on our hands. Track the signal before its to late. Hurry!"

 

The Dark Clone looked around to see the workers right infront of him.

 

"A full course tonight I see. YOUR NEXT PUNY HUMANS!!!"

 

But from some where else...

"Sir, I have a call from the Workers in .co. They say they have another clone on the loose."

 

"Tell them I'll be there in a moment. It's show time!"

 

TO BE CONTINUED...

part 2/2 of episode 1 is coming!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

This is the new series I plan on making. If you want to see our heroes cards so far, look at this site:

http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/thread-76585.html

tell about any errors and how did you like my little story?

 

Their coming...

[Kale]

well, this is an interesting story, and your method of description is interesting.

 

you dont elaborate on much, and you describe it like you are a reporter quickly describing the events.

 

that isnt too bad, but it leads the reader to think that you dont know much about what else is going on. slow down, and describe in greater detail what is going on.

 

you had a golden opportunity to show the man's body being destroyed, and his soul being sucked into a machine. but you didnt elaborate, you just let it be. ^_^

 

i would say work on it, but it seems like a good storyline.

 

keep working my friend. ;)

 

~K

[BulletMan]

Actually, I knew I had a golden opportunity for alot of things. But I want it to be kinda like a mystery. For we do not know much about our friend, XL. Or anything. You will find out much in the first episode.

 

But yeah, I didnt do well here. But its my first time. I do think the first episode will have more golden opportunities with alot more action. Which is where you see our hero take on a Dark Clone.

[legendhiro]

sounds awesome! i can't wait to read it.way darker than mine. read mine if you want. its called yu-gi-oh! duel force. i have been working on it for awhile, but have just started posting it.

 

i will wait to rate/critique your story until chapter one is actually finished and will critique all of this and chapter one all as one.

 

keep it up!

[BulletMan]

I have made the first half of episode 1!

[bury the year]

Nice opening. I like the rapid-pace feel of the story. Hope it works out. ^^

[BulletMan]

I hope so

[BulletMan]

BUMP

[legendhiro]

beyond excellent. don't stop writing them. I COMMAND IT! can't wait for the next one ^__^