the alpha Posted October 19, 2008 Report Share Posted October 19, 2008 Here's My 2nd Fanfic,I belive it's better than the first oneand it's definitely Longer.Hope you Like ItChatacters:*PS:The main character here is the same in my last Fanfic but the 2 fanfics have nothing to do with each other.The only reason i chose the same name is because it's my name.---------------------------------------------------------------------------------Name:Ayman Miri(Everyone knows him as the alpha)Nobody knows his true identity but Rex and his brother because he always wear a black mask.Age:15Deck:Raviel-BurnAppearance:Long Black Hair,Average height,brown eyes,always wears a red t-shirt With the Phrase " NO nonsense" written on it. Loves to duel.Clan:Apocalypse------------------------------------------------Name:Rex KalrotAge:14Deck:Ancient gears+Cyber DragonsAppearance:Black Spiked hair,Black eyes,Wears a Grey T-Shirt with a mysteryous symbol on it.Cocky,and thinks he's the best duelist.Clan:Apocalypse------------------------------------------------Name:Joey Moto(Yugi's Son)Age:16Deck:Yugi DeckAppearance:Yellow spiked hair,wears the same clothes his father used to wear.But unlike his father,he is careless and undependable.Clan:Apocalypse------------------------------------------------Name:Adel Miri(Ayman's Twin)Age:15Deck:Water-Exodia-B.Skull DragonAppearance:Black long hair,Average height,Brown Eyes,Always wears a Black T-shirt with a red jacket on top of it.Clan:Armageddon------------------------------------------------Name:Lizzie GreenAge:17Deck:Removing+TokensAppearance:Blonde Long Hair,Blue Eyes,fair skin.Clan:Armageddon------------------------------------------------Name:Leonard DiagoAge:19Deck:Damage Reflector..(Like Magic Cylinder and Reflect Bounder)Appearance:Red hair,Brown eyes.Clan:Armageddon------------------------------------------------Name:Russel SkwimmerAge:17Deck:Trap cards (NO SPELLS OR Monsters)Appearance:Blue hair,Green eyes.Clan:Giants------------------------------------------------Name:Harry monsfordAge:16Deck:FireAppearance:Brown hair.Fair skin,black-eyes.Clan:Giants------------------------------------------------Name:Clark FlintAge:21(Winner of 5 World Championships)Deck:Sacred Beasts + Pyramid of light(Sphinx)+The Wicked God CardsAppearance:White hair,Green-eyes,Always wears the 5 medals he won in the world championships.Clan:The Elite------------------------------------------------Name:Gary SpellfordAge:14Deck:WaterAppearance:Blue spiked hair,Blue-eyes,he calls himself "THE BLUE MAN"Clan:The Elite------------------------------------------------Disclaimer:Most of the Deck Lists are Designed by someone named derekوI don't know him but i downloaded his recipes from the net.SO THNX DEREK* Prologue:*The world of duel monsters was divided into clans. Each Clan have a one card copy painted by Chumley huffington. the duelist who isn't a member of a clan joins a Yearly Tournament. In this tournament,all non-clan members must compete,After the tournament ends,based on the skills of the duelist,one of the 3 clans sends an invitation to the duelists,the ones who doesn't get an invitation,compete in the next tournament. During one of the tournaments,2 twin brothers Adel and Ayman,Syrian duelists,competed in this tournament,they dueled each other in the finals,and the duel ended with a DRAW.Ayman got an invitation to the APOCALYPSE clan,and Adel was invited to the ARMAGEDDON clan 5 years ago. This day they are the Leaders of their clans,and they're also....The worst enemies. Being the leaders,they get to compete in a yearly tournament called the elite tournament. Only the greatest 2 members from each of the 3 clans can join this tournament,and the winner gets an invitation to the 4th clan:THE ELITE. Now,IT'S TIME TO DUEL.* Episode 1:It's Time To Duel It was noon when The Alpha was meeting with Joey Moto and Rex Kalrot,The best 2 duelists in the Apocalype clan.Rex:Master,Who will you choose to be the Apocalypse Duelists in the tournament? Joey:Is it going to be me,or Rex? The Alpha:I don't know,you're the best Apocalypse duelists,but unfortunately,only one will represent our clan with me. Joey:The tournament is next week master,you might wanna hurry up. The Alpha:I know but i can't concentrate with all this pressure. Rex:I think the best way to decide is a duel. Joey:A duel? Rex:Yes,Between you and me,the winner compete in the elite tournament. Joey:You're on. Mean While: Adel:Hear me Armageddons.I think the Armageddon duel tournament was the proof that Lizzie is the best duelist in this clan,beide me. Lizzie:That's true,i kicked all of your asses. Adel:And that's why,me and Lizzie will compete in the elite tournament next week. Leonard:What about me boss?Won't i compete in the tournament. Adel:Hell no,you got defeated by Lizzie in the finals,why do you think i even started this tournament? Leonard:You mean the tournament was to choose the Elite tournament competer. Adel:Exactly,that's why lizzie's in and you're out. Leonard:(Thinking)Damn i,if it wasn't for that ......i could've been the one who compete in the tournament. Adel:Everyone dismissed. Adel:Lizzie,you wait,i need to talk to you. Lizzie:What boss? Adel:I know you're a great duelist,and your deck is undefeatable.But this is the greatest tournament in the whole universe,the top 6 are included. Lizzie:I know that chief. Adel:Yes you do,but i want to make sure that you'll be ready when you duel my brother,that's why i wanted to give you this card,with this card,his best monsters will be completely destroyed. Lizzie:Your brother? Adel:Yes,Ayman Miri. Lizzie:Who is he? Adel:Ayman Miri,my brother....is THE ALPHA. Lizzie:Oh My God,THE ALPHA is your brother?The Master of The Apocalypse? Adel:Yes he is,My brother and my enemy. Lizzie:WOW,your familly is really great. Adel:There's no greatness in my familly,the only great part of it is me. Lizzie:Come on,The alpha is one of the greatest Duelists in the world,he's one of the few that are nominated to be the next king of games. Adel:The king of games is clark Flint.And if anybody's going to defeat him and declare himself The Next King of games it's going to be me,by winning this championship. Lizzie:Then i guess you'll be needing the card you gave me. Adel:I don't need a card to make me defeat my brother,don't forget that he never defeated me. Lizzie:Then why are you so angry of him. there was a moment of silence while Adel was thinking about the fight he had with his brother. Adel:I don't wanna talk about it. Lizzie:Why not? Adel:You don't have to know,now if you wanna defeat the alpha you should take this card. Lizzie took the card and added it in her deck. Adel:Trust me,if you knew how to use it,you will defeat him and take him of the crown. Lizzie:If that's all i have to do then consider it done. Meanwhile: Joey:i summon queen's knight in attack mode(ATK:1500),and set 1 card face down.Your turn. Rex:I special summon Cyber dragon,(ATK:2100),then i summon ancient gear soldier. Joey:Before you enter your battle phase i activate Waboku.Which makes me take no damage during this turn,also my monsters cannot be destroyed by battle. Rex:Then there's no use for my to attack.I end my turn. Joey:Prepare yourself,I summon king's knight(ATK:1600)and when king's knight is summoned while Queen's knight is on the field,i can automatically summon my,Jack's Knight(ATK:1900) Rex:What's the use,non of them is powerful enough to destroy my Cyber dragon. Joey:Well,hehe,This can,i activate Polymerization to fuse my 3 monsters and perform the ultimate monster in my deck:Alkana Knight Joker(ATK:3800) Rex:This is impossible,it's the legendary Knight,i didn't know you finally obtained it. Joey:I had to Retrieve my Father's Deck,and this card was with my father's best friend,the one i was named after. Rex:Joey wheeler? Joey:Exactly,now prepare yourself,Alkana Knight,Attack his Ancient gear soldier. Rex:1500Joey:4000 Joey:And with that i end my turn. Rex:I'm undefeatable,you may have the king of games' deck,but you will never be the king of games as long as i'm here.I draw. Rex Smiled looking at the card he just drew. Rex:Goodbye Mr.Moto i activate Power bond to fuse 2 cyber dragons in my hand with the one on the field to preform the ultimate:Cyber End Dragon(ATK:4000) Joey rubbed his eyes as he saw a new version of Cyber Dragon on his opponent's side,only this time,it had 3 heads. Rex:And due to my Power bond's Effect,His Attack is doubled.(ATK:8000) Joey:8000 Attack,this is even stronger than my father's gods. Rex:Yes it is,now Cyber End Dragon,Attack his Joker. Rex:1500Joey:0000 Rex:I think i'll be the 2nd representer of The Apocalypse. The Alpha:Yes you will,Now go prepare your deck,i need to talk to Joey. After Rex leaved the room The Alpha was talking to Joey. Joey:What's Wrong with me,I summoned my best monster but that wasn't enough. The Alpha:Don't blame yourself,you said it yourself,this monster is stronger than the god cards. Joey:You don't understand,i must blame myself for being so fool.I could've won. The Alpha:How?That was impossible. Joey:Alkana Knight Joker's Effect allows me to negate the effect of a spell or trap or an effect monster by discarding a card of the same type. The Alpha:Then why didn't you? Joey:Because i was fool enough to watch my opponent summoning his best monster,because i wanted to see what power bond does. The Alpha:You don't know what power bond does? Joey:NO,i was too busy collecting my father's deck os i forgot to learn the effects of the other important cards. The Alpha:Mistakes happen,and we learn from our mistakes.You know what you need? Joey:What? The Alpha:You need to stop trying to be your father,you need to be yourself.You should Find out what are the other good cards,and collect what goes with you Deck.You don't just copy the deck someone else used. Joey:You're right. The Alpha:And if you did it before the tournament,i'll let you duel Rex again and see really who's the better duelist. Joey:You're on.I'll be googling right now. Joey left the room and The Alpha was thinking:What a fool boy,all he needs is to be focused and not following his father's footsteps,and he'll be the next king of games.* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted October 19, 2008 Report Share Posted October 19, 2008 Deck:Trap cards (NO SPELLS OR TRAPS) Lolwut? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
the alpha Posted October 20, 2008 Author Report Share Posted October 20, 2008 Wait until the Episode he plays:Deck List:Call of the hauntedCeaseFireDark Temple's Bribe X3Dimension Wall X3Dust Tornado X2Embodiment of Apophis X3Magic CylinderMagic Drain X2Malevolent CatastropheMetal Reflect Slime X3Mirror ForceNeedle CeilingOrdeal of A TravelerPhoenix Wing Wind Blast X3Sakuretsu Armor X2Skull Zoma X3Stronghold The Moving Fortress X2Torrential TributeTrap DustshootTriageWabokuWall of Revealing LightWidespread Ruin X2 That makes them 40 Trap cards, PLZ Rate or Comment Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Supreme Gamesmaster Posted October 20, 2008 Report Share Posted October 20, 2008 WTF. There is no plot. All this is, is names with colons and cheesy dialogue. There are no characters, no descriptive language, NO PLOT. This doesn't even deserve to be called a fanfic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
the alpha Posted October 20, 2008 Author Report Share Posted October 20, 2008 I know it's not great,but it's not bad.Well i always take votes.If i get 5 negative votes before i get 5 positive votes i'll lock this thread.The vote is by posting not by a POLL.Anyway that's your opinion Supreme gamesmaster. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
:^) Posted October 20, 2008 Report Share Posted October 20, 2008 It's ok (Thats a plus) But where is my set mentioned Didn't notice it T_T Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
the alpha Posted October 20, 2008 Author Report Share Posted October 20, 2008 Your set is in my next next fanfic.I have this completed so is the one after it,and i'm making now the one after it(Your set included in this one)i'll PM you when it's ready Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
the alpha Posted October 21, 2008 Author Report Share Posted October 21, 2008 For the ones who Like it:Here's Episode 2Episode two:The Elite Tournament *The Week passed very quickly and the 6 contenders were gathered downown to compete.Clark Flint was watchin thinknig:"All these people came here to watch and find out,who is going to be the next persopn who will join the ELite,the next person who will be my slave". "Ladies and Gentlemn,The Elite Tournament's contenders are:The Alpha and Rex Kalrot from The Apocalypse" "Adel Miri and Lizzie Green presenting the Armageddon" "Russel Skwimmer and Harry Monsford Presenting the Giants" "And Last but not least,Gary Spellford Presenting the hosting caln....The Elite,in the 2nd round" "The Tournament Table is like this: The Alpha VS Harry Lizzie VS REX Russel VS Adel" "So What are we waiting for,Let the duels begin" 1st Duel was between the alpha and harry monsford,the winner of the last elite tournament and the Newbie of the Elit clan. The Alpha:Let's Duel. Harry:Let's Duel. The Alpha:I set 1 defense position monster and i end my turn. Harry:I activate the field spell,Molten destruction which increases the ATK of all fire monsters on the field by 500 and decrease their DEF by 400. Now i set 2 cards face down and 1 monster face down,Your turn. The Alpha:If your face dow monster is a fire monster then your the most stupid duelist i've ever seen. I summon solar flare dragon(ATK:1500).But thanks to you spell card his ATK is increased by 500 which makes it 2000. Now solar flare dragon attack his monster.Solar flare dragon attacked the face down monster and it was UFO turtle(DEF:800) Harry:You just activated both of my trap cards,Backfire and Backfire,When my fire monster is destroyed,you get 500 damage to your LP,and their's 2 Backfire(S) on my side of the field. The Alpha:3000 Harry:4000 Harry:Plus,i can special summon another UFO turtle from my deck because you destroyed 1 on the field.(ATK:1900) The Alpha:I set 2 cards face down and i end my turn.Due to my Dragon's effect,each you take 500 damage during each of my End Phases. The Alpha:3000 Harry:3500 Harry:I tribute my UFO turtle to summon....Thestalos,the firstorm monarch(ATK:2900) and when Thestalos is summoned,i choose 1 card in your hand,and if it's a monster,you take damage equal to the level of the selected monster X 100. The Alpha:ha ha ha,well,go ahead and choose. Harry pointed at 1 card in The Alpha's Hand.It was ceasefire(Trap) The Alpha:I think i won't take any damage.Right? Harry:Right,Now,Thestalos,attack his solar flare dragon. The Alpha:I don't think so,i activate Gravity Bind,now all LV 4 or higher monsters cannot attack as long as this card is on the field. Harry:Fine,your turn. The Alpha:I think you'll love this,I summon another Solar Flare Dragon(ATK:1900).Now each turn you'll get 1000 damage. And if that's not good enough,i activate Meteor of destruction and chain it with Just dessert. Meteor of destruction gives you 1000 damage and just dessert will give you 500 damage to your LP. The Alpha:3000 Harry:2000 The Alpha:1 turn and you're done.Hahaha,I am the Alpha,i was called this because of a reason,the reason is,I AM THE ALPHA DUELIST. Harry:I still have 2 turns Idiot. The Alpha:1,Now i'll end my turn.and we'll see about how many turns you've got left. The Alpha:3000 Harry:1000 Harry:I'll draw. The Alpha:Excuse me,you were right you don't have 1 turn,you don't have any turns at all,i activate ceasefire which inflicts 500 damage to your LP for each Effect monster on the field. Harry:NOOOOOOOOOOO The Alpha:3000 Harry:0000 The Alpha:I told you,I AM THE ALPHA DUELIST.Now scram,i have other people to defeat. Commenter:"That was one heck of a duel,i think this deck is hard to defeat,but it's possible,Now the second Duel Begins"* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
:^) Posted October 22, 2008 Report Share Posted October 22, 2008 It's really good ^_^ 7/10... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
the alpha Posted October 24, 2008 Author Report Share Posted October 24, 2008 Episode three:"Second duel:What's Next?" The Commenter:"Hello everybody and welcome.to the 2nd duel in the Elite Tournament,the duel will start in a couple of minutes" Lizzie:I thought i'd be dueling Aym....I mean The alpha. Adel:So did i,but apparantly there's been a change in tables,anyway this 1 is his best friend since childhood,i know his deck like i know mine,He's using a Cyber dragon and Ancient Gear Deck,His Main strategy is to summon Cyber twin dragon with future fusion or Cyber End Dragon by Polymerization or Chimeratech Overdragon. Lizzie:Is There a certain way to summon Chimeratech? Adel:Yes,It's his Most dangerous Combo,He activate Future fusion to send all the ancient gears in his deck along with 1 cyber dragon. Then he Activates Overload Fusion and remove all machine monsters in his graveyard to summon it. Lizzie:That sounds Dangerous,hehe,But it won't last because of my strategy. Adel:Don't Get too cocky,remember...This is the elite tournament,which means that there's no Weak Opponent. Lizzie:Got that boss,anything else? Adel:Yes,Give me the card i gave you to defeat The Alpha and take this,you'll get that back when you duel The Alpha. Lizzie took her deck from the duel disk and searched it until she found the Card and gave it to Adel,she took another Card from him and Put in the deck,then shuffled it and headed towards the Duel Arena. Adel:And remmember,dont' use it until.........The Commenter's voice came over his while Lizzie was heading to the Arena. The Commenter:"Ladies And gentelmen,It's the duel between the Apocalypse And The Armageddon...It's The Duel of a life time" Lizzie:Let's duel *********. Rex:There's no reason to curse *****.Let's Duel. Lizzie:Ladies first.I set 1 card face down and i set 1 monster face down,i activate Dimensional Fissure.Now all cards are removed from play instead of being sent to the Graveyard. Rex:Puff,That's Bad. Lizzie:I know.Your Turn. Rex:I activate Ancient gear castle,then summon ancient gear Soldier,That Means a counter on my Castle.And also,My Castle's Effect Gives him an exra 300 ATK points.(ATK:1600) Rex:Ancient Gear Soldier,Attack. Lizzie:I'm afraid you'll lose 400 LP,Beacause my face down monster is:Banisher of the Light(DEF:2000) Rex:3600 Lizzie:4000 Rex:Damn it,I set 1 card face down and it's your turn. Lizzie:Now,for my greates combo,I activate my face down....Ojama Trio. Rex:That means extra 3 monster for me. 3 Ojama Tokens were summoned at Rex's side of the field. Lizzie:But when 1 of them is destroyed,you take 300 damage. Rex:I don't Care,I have 4 monsters protecting my field. Lizzie:That's About to change cos' the combo isn't done yet,because i tribute the 4 monsters on your field to summon 2 Lava Golems on your side of the field.(ATK:3000)(Each) Rex:yuppy, More powerful monsters to me. Lizzie:I'm trying to ignore you but you're too stupid to be ignored. Rex:I will not Give you the honor and respond. Lizzie:Anyway,since the 3 tokens are destroyed you tak 900 Damage. Rex:2700 Lizzie:4000 Lizzie:Now,I set 2 cards face down.Go for it. Rex:I draw. Lizzie:oh,did i mentioned Lava Golems's Special Effect? Rex:I'm a pro,i know it,during each of my Stanby Phases i take 1000 Damage to my LP Lizzie:And there's 2 Lava Golems. Rex:700 Lizzie:4000 Lizzie:I activate mystical Space Typhoon to destroy your castle.And set 1 card face down. Rex (Thinking):She made a huge mistake summoning those golems on my field.She's going to face the wrath of my Favourite monster. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Supreme Gamesmaster Posted October 25, 2008 Report Share Posted October 25, 2008 I know it's not great' date='but it's not bad.[/quote'] It's bad. And my opinion is highly respected on this forum. See my upcoming FF. There's still no real plot. Just random duels, cheesy dialogue after names, and overused segments of storyline. Your attempt to create a proper narrative has failed. Also, a deck with all Traps cannot have no Spells or Traps. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
the alpha Posted October 27, 2008 Author Report Share Posted October 27, 2008 Sorry.I meant No Spells or monsters,i edited it and i edited Leonard's Deck too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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