Christian-Exodia Posted October 18, 2008 Report Share Posted October 18, 2008 As you know, most people have made TV or video game-related fan fics.However, I won't.I'll be making chapters in the real life of a teen.Here I go:Chapter 1:As Devon walked out of his house to go on a date(He's about 17), Devon saw a flashback in his mind about not his past told by his parents, but the REAL truth.He had been a orphan before he could remember. He kept going to his car. When he got in the car, he put in the CD of his favorite band, Disturbed. He kept driving while listening to "Inside the fire" He said: "Rock on!" silently. Then he went to pick up his date, Julie.Thta's the end of chapter one Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CeDeFiA Posted October 18, 2008 Report Share Posted October 18, 2008 Chapter.. one..... is.. only a paragraph?!Make it longer, and use better grammar Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AB72 Posted October 18, 2008 Report Share Posted October 18, 2008 Cool main charecters name but way too short. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Christian-Exodia Posted October 18, 2008 Author Report Share Posted October 18, 2008 Okay, it's just like a little start into it. This is only the beginning. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted October 18, 2008 Report Share Posted October 18, 2008 you could try to make a chapter a lot longer than just that alone... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silver Lining Posted November 28, 2008 Report Share Posted November 28, 2008 I think it was cool. You did a good job just ignore those other guys. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brushfire Posted November 28, 2008 Report Share Posted November 28, 2008 Chapter.. one..... is.. only a paragraph?!Make it longer' date=' and use better grammar[/quote'] Nothing more need be said. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Christian-Exodia Posted November 28, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 28, 2008 This is a OLD FF.Let it die Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brushfire Posted November 28, 2008 Report Share Posted November 28, 2008 OH SH--! Why do I ALWAYS end up posting in necro-bumped threads?! v.vBrowa will know what I'm on about.Man, I need to keep my eyes open more. Sorry. =/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Christian-Exodia Posted November 28, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 28, 2008 No prob!Just look at at the thread date Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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