Dragon™ Posted February 25, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 25, 2009 Well yeah, basically dragons and wyverns.Anyways, here is just a preview I have written of the current story I am writing.It's called the invasion of Dark Realm. [i know some chapters are short!!!! But some are really long. It's over 3100 words total right now.]Prologue: One day, in the peace full world of Dark Realm, there was a young boy. Who loved robots, he built all different types of robots, small big, medium, almost everything! But one day, he worked for 12 hours straight... And built a masterpiece! But it showed that the robot was evil! Furthermore, investigators found that the young boy was evil to, and was not a human. He was an "Invader" a special advanced robot built by the evil leader of robots "Zangon".... Zangon continued making robots and soon had an Invasion army. He then invaded the peaceful world of Dark Realm... But one day, when this world was in chaos: The legendary heroes of Dark Realm returned from their expedition! The warriors challenged Zangon... But failed... Furthermore, the land was in chaos. But now the heroes have come back for more! Can you handle the challenge that awaits you?! Read in all the chapters! Chapter 1 - The First Outlook: So now the heroes are planning on an assault on the evil villain "Zangon", but they have no resources to build any kind of weaponry or robots. Therefore: the King of Dark Realm gave an order to our heroes that they must go find resources. So the heroes set out on a quest to a different realm called "Light Realm" our heroes know they will face many dangers - but they are willing to face anything that comes against them! They now head down a steep trail, filled with unimaginable types of flowers, trees, and other strange plants. They unfortunately see a monster, looking almost like a clown. With a big grin, it attacked our heroes with its giant face. It jumped back and grinned. Suddenly, it pulled out a small joker’s hat. The hat had bells and the color blue, green, and red. The bells suddenly turn to real skulls! The skulls start screeching flaming darkness. The flames were black. One of the heroes decided to step towards the strange creature. The creature screeches a giant ball of darkness flame at the hero. He instantly falls down in soreness and pain. “No! Strange creature, what have you done with him?!” one of the standby heroes yell. It suddenly screeches more and becomes a giant darkness Minotaur. The Minotaur’s hands are fortunately locked, but he still belches fire. There was a sword one of the heroes had that was unmentioned to the others since he wanted to keep it a secret. He suddenly stabs the Minotaur and it falls down to its death. “Gulp, let’s not mention this to the king, no one would believe us even if this land is mystical.” One of our heroes said. They now walk towards the Light Realm path. Chapter 2 - Attacking the creatures: Now, our heroes were in the Light Realm. As they walked down the path to the woods, they see some strange creatures. Our heroes prepare for battle and start the fight! They slash & bash - but suddenly, 2 more monsters jump out of the bushes, and attack! Our heroes where injured but they survive. They now head to the medical center. But it seems abandoned... they suddenly see an unidentified corpse, holding a special letter... The heroes read the letter, and it says:Dear Alfred,I have been attacked by monsters, and I have fled to the Dark Realm. I´m afraid there are no survivors. I furthermore tell you to keep safe and try to flee. But suddenly, Alfred wakes up, and tells everyone what happened. He explains how the monsters invaded and how he tried to escape, but mostly about the letter. Our heroes decide to make Alfred join their team. Chapter 3 - Defeating the allies Now, that our heroes have Alfred on their team, they are ready to fight the primary allies of the evil Zangon. They now head back to the Dark Realm. As they walk down the path, they see some kind of strange glowing portal. Our heroes step closer, and closer... As they touch the portal, they feel an interdementional force... That sucks all of our heroes in! The heroes now find themselves in a mysterious land in the middle of the woods... They now see some monsters in the distance, but these monsters aren’t machine! These monsters are plasma golems! Alfred explains what they are. He tells our heroes that plasma golems are only formed in the interdimentional world, and that their only weakness is... Lava! The heroes think fast, and are just good enough to create lava with their magical powers. They forge a lava sword, and begin the fight! Our heroes have done it once again, they have destroyed the forces of evil! They now know they must use caution, in this dark misty land... Chapter 4 - An Invasion of Invasions! When our heroes suddenly find a giant army invading the Light Realm, they begin to faint! How could there me Invasions here!? Why are they invading!? Haven’t they already taken control?! Our heroes now see an army of soldiers from the Light Realm! It seems there is more than one thing going on... Our heroes recognize that how could they be in the light realm if they teleported!? They now realize that the teleporter only teleported them to the top of Mt. Hawkice. So our heroes head back to their home land, Dark Realm. They give the king a report of what’s happened, and they also find the King of the Light Realm! He also explains many things about what’s happening. Then he also gives our heroes a Dawn Sword! This is a very powerful sword active against all enemies. But he tells the heroes they must hurry, and they do! Chapter 5 - The Attack of Creatures Just when our heroes think they are safe for now, they notice a strange noise. They look up and see a small strange monster with sharp teeth. They immediately attack.. It was an easy match. They notice something about the teeth... They are covered by... By... Interdimentional slime! The King of Dark Realm gives them a test laboratory. They put the slime in the test tube, and investigate it.They find that it comes from the top of Mt. Hawkice. So our heroes know that they must head back to Mt. Hawkice. They are now walking down the path and back to the portal. They go through it and reach Mt. Hawkice. While they are walking down the path, they see the same monster as they saw in the Light Realm! But now... It’s in a group of 7! We do not know if our heroes can do it - but we must have courage! Our warriors continue fighting, and just when it could not get any worse... A giant monster jumps out! They try pulling on its teeth, and it worked! The monster is now lying down of pain, and our heroes finish it off! The other monsters flee. Now, our heroes continue up the path to the top of Mt. Hawkice. They soon reach the peak. As our heroes walk up the path, one of them notices something. It is a Roc! Rocs are particularly dangerous on high grounds! The hero alerts them and tells them to call for reinforcements. Our heroes see that the Roc is too powerful. Soon, they have come back to the bottom of Mt. Hawkice. Suddenly, a hero drops down on the ground. “Arrgh!” he screams in a strange manner. Our heroes notice there is something on that particular hero… Slime! Chapter 6 – Slime &SlimeAs our heroes reach out to grab the injured hero’s hand, he starts growing claws! Starts getting fur, even his face is turning furry! When it just couldn’t get any worse, he starts growing wings! The hero starts growling. As our other heroes prepare, that hero falls down without another word. They immediately start moving to the hospital in the Dark Realm that was recently made there under the time they were gone. They’re immediately there and start talking to the doctor. He says he has been infected by Roc Slime. This particular slime turns you into a half beast-half man-half flying beast. The way to know that’s it infected is by looking for traces of slime. You start growing claws, then you start growing fur, even you’re face starts turning furry, and finally you grow wings. Another name for this is Curse of the Roc. The only way to treat it is with the leaf of a jungle. This can be found in either The Jungle of Deception, or The Forest of Souls. The doctor tells them that The Jungle of Deception is safer. The Forest of Souls is much dangerous since there are dead interdimentional souls there. One of the heroes say that they should make a decision by tomorrow. (The Next Day) Our heroes have now made a decision. They chose The Jungle of Deception. They now prepare for a travel. But it will be harder since we have 1 less hero. But they must for the sake of him. Our heroes are now on their way on the trail. They cross the interdimentional summit near Mt. Hawkice. Right there, they suddenly stop. They heard something crippling in the woods. “It’s a person! “ yells one of the heroes. The person creeps out of the woods and introduces himself. “Me Jungle Boy, me want join you!” Says the person. “What is your name?” Asks a hero. “Roy, my name Roy!” “Roy? That’s a nice name.” A hero compliments. “Thank--- You---!” Roy says. “You’re welcome to join us. I see you have a crossbow for defense.” A hero says. Yes! “Alright, time to go!” says a hero. Our heroes are now on the trail again. As they walk down the path, some minor monsters appear. Roy suddenly disappears into the woods. Our heroes notice something. The monsters are covered in slime! The monsters immediately start growing claws, fur, and wings! Roy suddenly jumps out of the woods and stabs the monsters with an arrow. “Ahem, thank you.” Says a hero. “You welcome!” Says Roy. “Alright, time to move on, Roy, and all heroes. We must find that jungle!” One of the heroes exclaim. “Alright!” says Roy. As our heroes start to walk down a vine-covered misty trail, they start seeing vines, leaves, and flourishing trees. They also see something called an Imp. The little Imp is carrying a special leaf! “Look! It’s the leaf we need!” A hero says in a loud voice. All the heroes looked at the Imp as they just got a glance while the Imp was running away. Soon the Imp was gone in the thick forest. Soon they walk up a steep hill near some mountain tops. As they were nearing the top, they see a strange stone. The stone has a diamond top that was smooth and shiny. As they reach out to touch the stone, or when they touch it, it shows a name. In the land where our heroes came from, they did not get names unless they where royalty. Our heroes suspect that these are their real names! “Look, says one of the heroes, I think we all should touch it!” All of the heroes touched it. The stone reads: Hero 1, you have courage to be in this special group and therefore we give you the name, Ralf. Hero 2, you are a good friend to serve in this special part of history, so we will give you the name of Galasus. Hero 3, you are brave and strong to help serve the force of dignity and hope towards the defeat of the evil ruler Zangon. Therefore we give you the name Naigatus. And finally hero 4, your name will be Seinar. “Alright, that was odd.” Seinar Exclaims. “Yes.” Ralf says as he nodded. Our heroes now have their names and continue their journey to find the Imp and get the leaf. They are now in a very dark bottom under a very thick canopy. As they get closer in, it gets thicker and thicker. They now see a trail of the Imp. It is a part of its fur. There’s also a burnt stone from the Imps fire. “Look” Says Galasus as he looks deeper down into the cave. Then, everything stopped. It was silent. No birds where screaming, no leaves where moving, no animals where moving. Even the water had stopped dripping. “I see something odd besides nothing moving, I see the Imp!” Naigatus exclaims while he looks even deeper. “Yes, it is.” Says Ralf while he walks into the cave. All our heroes are now walking into the cave. Naigatus suddenly grabs the leaf and hands it to Seinar. Seinar suddenly feels better. “Alright, thank you very much!” Says Seinar. “You’re welcome.” All the heroes exclaim except Seinar. “Time to head back.” Says Naigatus. Now our heroes are walking back down the path. As they walk down, they notice a strange staff. The staff itself was made of pure interdimentional gold. On the top was a bulb. As they look closer at the bulb, it starts glowing rainbow colors. They decide to bring the staff to the archeologist of the Dark Realm. Soon, they were there. When they finally arrived, they take the staff to the archeologist. “This staff… It is the legendary Staff of Rainbows!” The archeologist said in shock. This legendary staff was once owned by the King of Rainbows. He ruled both the Light and Dark Realm. But he was the king only until Zangon’s machines brought his leadership down and took over the throne. Later, the heroes managed to get Zangon away from the throne, but didn’t manage to defeat him. After that they choose a leader depending upon the smartest, most powerful, and brave. They choose the new King of Dark Realm, Miltonius Arthur the Third. He was an old, quite smart, tall man. He was at the age of 54. Soon, our heroes decide to go to the king and ask where to go next. They walk down the golden trail to the king. The path was full of flowers, grass, and beautiful fountains. They are now at the throne room. (The king and our heroes discuss a long conversation and decide a place.) “Well, I have come to the conclusion- you… Ahem… Cough, cough, Zangon’s Castle.” Says the king in a low voice while coughing. “Zangon’s castle?!” Asks Galasus in a loud questioning voice. ”Yes, Zangon’s Castle.” The king replies. “Have you gone mad? Zangon has millions of robotic armies just waiting for us! We don’t have any- the king suddenly stops Galasus.” “No! We must attack! Or he will just destroy us all before we have a chance!” The king screams in a very loud manner. Suddenly, the guards step closer. “No, betrayal or not, make a different decision or we will have to kill you!” screams Ralf. “Very well then, guards, do what you must!” The king screams. “Let’s get these betrayers!” The guards scream. Chapter 7 – Betrayal Suddenly, Roy steps in and shoots the guards. “Now you do what, King?” Asks Roy, “Well then. More guards!” the king screams.. Something suddenly happens. Ralf, suddenly stabs the king with his long sword. Then, there was a moment of silence. “We did what we must.” Ralf says in a sorrow, low voice. The Guards suddenly notice the king is dead, and drop down on the floor in a strange manner. “Moving on!” Screams Naigatus. “Eh-Hah!” The king screams as blood dripped down from him mouth. “You thought that you could destroy me? Zangon?!” The king says as he suddenly takes of his crown, and takes of his coat. “Now do you believe me?” Zangon says as he had just taken of his coat. Zangon was a blood red machine with red eyes. “What?!” screams all of the heroes. “He he…” Zangon says as he suddenly bursts away with a burst of light. “…………?” Naigatus was completely confused and all our heroes where silent for a moment…. Suddenly, the guards took of their coats and armor. The guards where some of Zangon’s minions! This place was Zangon’s castle! “We’ve been tricked!” Says Ralf. Suddenly, Alfred also takes of his coat. He was a head sergeant in Zangon’s army. Almost everyone that they had been given information from was one of Zangon’s minions! Now there was only 1 thing to do; find out where the real king is being held. Our heroes now walk out of the castle as all of the army disappears to who knows where. Who will they get information from now? Yes, the real king. Our heroes come up with numerous places that the king might be. They search the Dark Realm Cellar. Then they search a small house in the woods. Finally, they search the Castle Jail. They walk down a creepy hallway made of granite, in the jail cells where nothing except dead insects. At a glance, Seinar notices a man with a crown and a golden jacket. “Who--- are you---?” The king says. “We are the heroes of Dark Realm. An evil villain called Zangon invaded our land and took our resources. He must have kidnapped you and taken over the throne while he had a clone in the throne. He then took our resources. You where there until we left. You told us to get resources, right when we left, he must have kidnapped you. Is it true that you told us to get resources?” All the heroes explain. “Yes… Thank you for rescuing me.” The king says in a low voice while coughing. “With honor.” Naigatus says. But now, our heroes must continue their journey in destroying Zangon and bringing peace back to the Light Realm. So, they decide to ask the real king if any of their suggestions are sufficient. The king rubbed his old arm against the rusty steel he sat upon. “Well, a strategic suggestion would be to go to the Chorona Mines.” The king suggests. “So, the Chorona Mines, eh? I haven’t heard of that particular area. And is it really a mine?” Seinar asks. “It’s self-explaining. It’s a mine, and it’s called the Chorona Mines. It’s located near the Dessert of Dralazia, which I haven’t mentioned yet. “The Dessert of Dralazia can be found with this map, and next to it is the Chorona Mines. Actually, originally the Chorona Mines were called Chorona Mines D.O.D., which stands for District of Dralazia. The whole surrounding area on this map is the District of Dralazia.” The king speaks. “Alright, so let’s go there guys.” Ralf says. “Ahem, well, there is a capital city in the district, it’s called Derhiakus. You should stop by for supplies, any Magica, and or any weapon and armor supplies. They have some elite items, but they may cost a God load of Gil.” The king replies. “Well, don’t you have some elite items yourself?” asks Naigatus. “Well, I could give you these elite golden knight armor and weapons. And a free set, 1 extra of each just in case something happens.” The king replies. “Wonderful, thank you.” All of our heroes exclaim as they begin to open the jail cell. “Now, time to let you out king.” Ralf says. “Thank you. You will be taken to the armory room at once.” The king replies. ”Yo’ king, wat’ up?” a young voice came from the dark and creepy hallways. Suddenly, a person came walking out of the rusty hallways. “Is me, dude. Yama! “ said the speaking voice. The young boy was dressed with a hood. His face and skin appearance seemed to be black. He had a very, very, very young voice. He rolled his eyes and looked puzzled like he had never seen a real person sitting in a jail cell. “My real names Anthony, butcha’ yall’ can call me Yama.” Anthony says. “We’d prefer to call you Anthony, if that’s alright with you” Seinar and Naigatus said. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.Requiem Posted February 25, 2009 Report Share Posted February 25, 2009 ah, seems interesting. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dragon™ Posted February 26, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 26, 2009 Thanks, I'm thankfull you like it... [XD].... /Bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.Requiem Posted February 26, 2009 Report Share Posted February 26, 2009 It is interesting, but work on your grammar. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dragon™ Posted February 26, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 26, 2009 What is grammar? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.Requiem Posted February 26, 2009 Report Share Posted February 26, 2009 Grammar is how to spell or put together words. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
六兆年と一夜物語 Posted February 26, 2009 Report Share Posted February 26, 2009 Grammar is how to spell or put together words. Yeah. Most users don't like to use proper grammar. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackwing-San Posted February 26, 2009 Report Share Posted February 26, 2009 like X-31 said: It's interesting. and it's pretty good, I mean like if your sitting in a good chair or laying down in your bed with your favorite drink, You could get sucked into the story. But also like X-31 said: need alittle work on your grammer. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dragon™ Posted February 26, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 26, 2009 Lol everything is spelled right... Microsoft word even said so.But maybe some places where I couldn't put together words. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Espeonature Posted February 26, 2009 Report Share Posted February 26, 2009 Whoa. This shouldgo in fanfic! But make a chapter more. But it IS interesting. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dragon™ Posted February 26, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 26, 2009 Woah, espeonature... It's been months since you have posted !Lol, welcome back and thanks for liking it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.Requiem Posted February 26, 2009 Report Share Posted February 26, 2009 It doesn't matter how all the words are spelled correctly it is good to have proper sentence structure. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
六兆年と一夜物語 Posted February 27, 2009 Report Share Posted February 27, 2009 There is a difference between... I have a nice horse.My beautiful horse, John, is also very nice. Obviously, the 1st sentence is dull, but the second is better. Keep in mind that even though you have correct spelling, the order of the words and how you put them together matter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Prince_of_Death Posted February 27, 2009 Report Share Posted February 27, 2009 sorry I havent been on. stupid blackouts happening in town. I wont be on during this weekend but I will be on tonight. I like the preview but i think it would be better in a spoiler, just to save page space but that doesnt really matter to me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
六兆年と一夜物語 Posted February 27, 2009 Report Share Posted February 27, 2009 heh. I got a mini-blackout at my school. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dragon™ Posted February 27, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 27, 2009 Woah, I haven't had a single blackout.Though I'm really sick :(...Also, lol I'm only 8 so I never knew what grammar was until you mentioned it.[i am only 8 years old.]Except I am good at poems. I was a boy,living like a toy.I wanted to destroy,but there was a boy named Roy.He wanted to deploy,but we argued and instead decided to make a decoy.And all of this wasn't true,and the world ends with you. This was the end of the world. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
六兆年と一夜物語 Posted February 27, 2009 Report Share Posted February 27, 2009 Young man...you are amazing. God has gave you a gift. God has given gift of imagination. Although, everyone is born with it, you have an enhanced imagination. I'm actually 11. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dragon™ Posted February 27, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 27, 2009 Cool ;)Anyways,your 11?:)I can do better than that poem.It was just a quick one.:) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Prince_of_Death Posted February 27, 2009 Report Share Posted February 27, 2009 Hmm. I'd like to see it but you really dont have to show us. I can sort of write a poem but its mainly about how I feel and such. I can barely write a story from imagination but I can come up with the plans of the ultimate hotel with great detail. I might be able to open it in the future. it also involves dragons. offtopic: My school had parent confrences yesterday so there was no school but the day before was a blackout. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dxjxc Posted February 28, 2009 Report Share Posted February 28, 2009 I'm 17. Bow to me, all you little peoplez. lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.Requiem Posted February 28, 2009 Report Share Posted February 28, 2009 lol, no that seems like spam. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Prince_of_Death Posted February 28, 2009 Report Share Posted February 28, 2009 I'm 17. Bow to me' date=' all you little peoplez. lol[/quote'] try and make me. see what happens when you try. anyway whats the topic? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dragon™ Posted February 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 28, 2009 Eh, I don't bow down to noobs. [No offense.]Seriously, that is not nice to say.Anyways, that was spam. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dxjxc Posted February 28, 2009 Report Share Posted February 28, 2009 Sorry, I'll fix it if you want. Topic: Best dragon seen in any anime/cartoon, give the name of the show aswell. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Prince_of_Death Posted February 28, 2009 Report Share Posted February 28, 2009 hmm hard to say. "dragoon" from beyblade maybe? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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