The Paths of Destiny (PG-13)

[Phantom Roxas]

If you didn't realize it, here was the cast.:

 

Warrior of Zera as "Zera" (Obvious)

Desrook Archfiend as "Dead Desrook Archfiend" (Lulz)

Goblin of Greed as "Baal" (Just off the top of my head)

Sand Gambler as "Mitsuo" (Think about it)

Gambler of Legend as "Deleng" (Credit goes to BlueKyuubi for this)

 

Baal probably won't have much of an impact on Zera's fate. I'm trying to think of how I could work in Darklord Zerato if possible, but I have an idea for Mazera Deville.

[Phantom Roxas]

Bump. Any suggestions for Main Antagonists?

[Wyhe]

perhaps teh archfiends...or the dark world monsters

[Phantom Roxas]

I was definitely going to use the Archfiends. The Dark World might appear, but they probably won't be as important.

[Umbra]

I suspect the Archfiends to have direct connection to Zera, the gradual influence of their realm turning the warrior into a field like themselves.

 

Maybe the Dark Magician archetype?

[Phantom Roxas]

Well, Zera took down one of their Desrooks. It might have been a weak Archfiend, but you never know.

 

I suppose I could include the Dark Magician Archetype, but where?

 

By the way, do you have any comments on the new chapter?

[Umbra]

I believe you were looking for a main villain?

 

Either way, the episode was quite a good one. I only have one thing to nit-pick on: What is a "gambler's suit"? Sand Gambler's outfit looks more like a waiter, or something.

 

Apart from that, the Gamblers seem like an interesting duo, and Baal became a real favorite. (Reminds me a bit of Neku. O.O)

[Phantom Roxas]

I don't know, it was the best I could come up with to describe Sand Gambler, I'll fix it.

 

The Gamblers aren't really a duo as far as I'm thinking, but I suppose I could give them a shared history.

 

I can sort of see why you could compare Baal to Neku, but their ultimate fates will be extremely difficult.

 

When did you get TWEWY anyway?

[Wyhe]

maybe you could include a part where the archfiends try to convince Baal with wealth to convince Zera to join them...

[Phantom Roxas]

Ooh, an interesting idea! I'll consider that.

 

By the way, I've decided to give the spotlight to Grepher in the next chapter.

[Solcloud]

nice job roxas

[Phantom Roxas]

Thanks. Any suggestions for future chapters?

[A●O●J]

Mazzera Deville and the archfiends are my favorite cards so this fan fic is like teh bestest thing ever for me, lol. Perhaps you could make the archfiends some how sabotage Zera when he is in the sanctuary of the sky by like blaming him for some act of evil, which gets him banished from the sanctuary, which makes him so deppressed or something that he goes looks toward the archfiends for guidance or something.

 

I also like the idea of dark worlds being involved that Wyhe said. (Dark Worlds are my other favorite cards,lol). Perhaps the Dark Worlds could be the enemys of the archfiends, but their both antagonists.

 

I assume since you had Gigobyte in the first chapter that your also going to have Gagagigo and Giga Gagagigo in as well correct? Does that mean Invader Of Darkness and Maruading captain will be in his story as well? Its about time someone did Gagagigo some justice.

Excellent fan fic.

[Phantom Roxas]

Mazzera Deville and the archfiends are my favorite cards so this fan fic is like teh bestest thing ever for me' date=' lol. Perhaps you could make the archfiends some how sabotage Zera when he is in the sanctuary of the sky by like blaming him for some act of evil, which gets him banished from the sanctuary, which makes him so deppressed or something that he goes looks toward the archfiends for guidance or something.

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Yes, the Archfiends will be pivotal to Zera's corruption, but I'll consider your idea.

 

I also like the idea of dark worlds being involved that Wyhe said. (Dark Worlds are my other favorite cards' date='lol). Perhaps the Dark Worlds could be the enemys of the archfiends, but their both antagonists.

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I've been planning that from the beginning.

 

I assume since you had Gigobyte in the first chapter that your also going to have Gagagigo and Giga Gagagigo in as well correct? Does that mean Invader Of Darkness and Maruading captain will be in his story as well? Its about time someone did Gagagigo some justice.

Excellent fan fic.

 

Gagagigo's story is my absolute favorite. Yes, Invader of Darkness and Marauding Captain will be in this, but not for a while.

[Nexev]

Awesome^2

 

Villian ideas are as followed (im good at making ideas and would probably make good fan fics except im not a good writer)

Mystical Shine Ball-The villain is always who you least expect

Paladin of the Cursed Dragon- A fallen hero who tried the same thing that Zera did and died, now is an undead who seeks to prevent other's from finding it until it's after life ceases.

Beserk Dragon- Paladin of the Cursed Dragon's main muscle, formerly a Blue Eyes

Dark Ruler Ha Des- a demon who made Paladin of the Cursed Dragon who he is, he s not evil but seeks to prevent the fairies from gaining power, power which they would use to eradicate the zombies, a large number of which are actually peaceful

Roscuro (Sky Scourge Enrise)-A powerful entity with the power of foresight among other godlike powers, he guides the events of the story through manipulation, convincing Ha Des to stop Zera from reaching Sanctuary in the sky as well as convincing Kozacky that Gagigio can be useful as a weapon for the Dark World (Kokazy and his assistant Magical Scientist are menbers of the Dark World, they just aren't in the dark world archetype) disguises himself in the mortal world as D.D.M. - Different Dimension Master.

Dark Grepher and Darklord Zerato- created by Roscuro to test the valor of Dai Grepher and Zera, their job is to convince their light counterparts to succumb to the darker parts of their mind

Airknight Parshath: An archangel with more corruption than Baal. Believes that only only fairies deserve to reach the Sancutary regardless of alighnment and even thinks the world would be better of without Dark attribute monsters, despite the fact that their is just as many evil light monsters as there are evil dark monsters. Tries to stop Zera but fails and trades his soul to Roscuro for power (Avenging Knight Parshath, and when he goes on a killing spree murdering innocent fiends, Neo-Parshath, the Sky Paladin) however his time with power eventually runs out and he is forced into the prisions of Pandemonium (the closest thing to duel monster hell) and escapes as Darknight Parshath (this one is afriad of Zant and attacks Dai Grepher planning on gaining more power before retaking Zera)

Dark General Freed : the cruel military dictator of the place Dai Grepher lies at (or somewhere else, he's adjustable) is encountered by Gogiga Gagagigo which makes the good in him start to resurface seeing how evil such a righteous man like Freed could become (he didn't know they were separate beings) Created by Roscuro as what could have happened to Freed if he had his brain warped like Giga Gagagigo

 

other charecters:

Zera the Mant- A enity placed inside Zera's sword by Roscuro, fiercly loyal to Zera and while his appreance won't change it's personality is a primitive reflection on Zera's soul

Sky Scourge Norleras - Roscuro's brother, guards and governs the Graveyard (the realm of the dead) while Enrise governs the living. Disguises himself in the mortal world as Gravekeeper Chief

Sky Scourge Invicil- Roscuro's brother guards over the realm between life and death, judges sous before sending them into the after life, and is the leader of the Sky Scourge Brothers brothers. Disguises himself in the mortal world as Sanwitch, a young begger/hermit who can judge the world unobserved

[Final Fantasy Revolution]

This was an awesome Fan Fic. I really liked the idea of advancing the stories on a lot of the yugioh card such as the charmers and the archfiends. I though it was creative to make The Sanctuary in the Sky a secret place that the second central character wanted to quest for. Please keep writing this, and I will keep reading this if you keep writing it ;)

 

10/10 for originality and overall creativity

[Phantom Roxas]

Mystical Shine Ball-The villain is always who you least expect

 

Definitely not.

 

Paladin of the Cursed Dragon- A fallen hero who tried the same thing that Zera did and died' date=' now is an undead who seeks to prevent other's from finding it until it's after life ceases.

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Interesting.

 

Beserk Dragon- Paladin of the Cursed Dragon's main muscle' date=' formerly a Blue Eyes

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I really can't see him formerly being a Blue-Eyes.

 

Dark Ruler Ha Des- a demon who made Paladin of the Cursed Dragon who he is' date=' he s not evil but seeks to prevent the fairies from gaining power, power which they would use to eradicate the zombies, a large number of which are actually peaceful

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I already have something planned for Dark ruler Ha Des.

 

Roscuro (Sky Scourge Enrise)-A powerful entity with the power of foresight among other godlike powers' date=' he guides the events of the story through manipulation, convincing Ha Des to stop Zera from reaching Sanctuary in the sky as well as convincing Kozacky that Gagigio can be useful as a weapon for the Dark World (Kokazy and his assistant Magical Scientist are menbers of the Dark World, they just aren't in the dark world archetype) disguises himself in the mortal world as D.D.M. - Different Dimension Master.

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I can definitely see that you intend for him to be the main antagonist. If I do include him, his name would be Enrise. I'm not sure how he would tie in with the Dark World though. Why D.D.M.?

 

Dark Grepher and Darklord Zerato- created by Roscuro to test the valor of Dai Grepher and Zera' date=' their job is to convince their light counterparts to succumb to the darker parts of their mind

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No, Grepher and Zera become them.

 

Airknight Parshath: An archangel with more corruption than Baal. Believes that only only fairies deserve to reach the Sancutary regardless of alighnment and even thinks the world would be better of without Dark attribute monsters' date=' despite the fact that their is just as many evil light monsters as there are evil dark monsters. Tries to stop Zera but fails and trades his soul to Roscuro for power (Avenging Knight Parshath, and when he goes on a killing spree murdering innocent fiends, Neo-Parshath, the Sky Paladin) however his time with power eventually runs out and he is forced into the prisions of Pandemonium (the closest thing to duel monster hell) and escapes as Darknight Parshath (this one is afriad of Zant and attacks Dai Grepher planning on gaining more power before retaking Zera)

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I plan to include him, but I have yet to decide about Enrise.

 

Dark General Freed : the cruel military dictator of the place Dai Grepher lies at (or somewhere else' date=' he's adjustable) is encountered by Gogiga Gagagigo which makes the good in him start to resurface seeing how evil such a righteous man like Freed could become (he didn't know they were separate beings) Created by Roscuro as what could have happened to Freed if he had his brain warped like Giga Gagagigo

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I already have something planned for him.

 

other charecters:

Zera the Mant- A enity placed inside Zera's sword by Roscuro' date=' fiercly loyal to Zera and while his appreance won't change it's personality is a primitive reflection on Zera's soul

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An entity sealed inside the sword. That's actually a very interesting idea.

 

Sky Scourge Norleras - Roscuro's brother' date=' guards and governs the Graveyard (the realm of the dead) while Enrise governs the living. Disguises himself in the mortal world as Gravekeeper Chief

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So he's basically the Grim Reaper? That makes some sense as to why he's Gravekeeper's Chief.

 

Sky Scourge Invicil- Roscuro's brother guards over the realm between life and death' date=' judges sous before sending them into the after life, and is the leader of the Sky Scourge Brothers brothers. Disguises himself in the mortal world as Sanwitch, a young begger/hermit who can judge the world unobserved

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Invicil is a woman.

 

This was an awesome Fan Fic. I really liked the idea of advancing the stories on a lot of the yugioh card such as the charmers and the archfiends. I though it was creative to make The Sanctuary in the Sky a secret place that the second central character wanted to quest for. Please keep writing this' date=' and I will keep reading this if you keep writing it ;)

 

10/10 for originality and overall creativity

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:( I wanted a different review in this thread.

[Nexev]

Mystical shine ball was a joke anyway. The reason D.D.M. - Different Dimension Master is Enrise is if you compare the two they actually look alike,, and replace Bezerkers Dragon with Red-Eyes Zombie Dragon and make a different backstory for him. Also the Sky Scourges run like this: the sky scourge are gods who rule over life and death, Enrise lives over the living and manipulate events so their is always conflict because in conflict your true self is shown, Incivil judges who lives, who die, and where they go in death, Norleras makes sure nothing bad happens in the land of the dead and no one escapes the land of the dead, (except if Enrise and Invincil want a Zombie for the living world) Invincil disguises herself as Petit Angel, which allows her to observe the mortals unnoticed.

 

Also Sancutary in the Sky and Pandemonium are actually pieces of heaven and hell brought to the mortal plane where archlords/archfiends started inhabiting them, because of this Norleras has some power over these places.

 

new characters

Spirit Ryu: Dai Grepher's companion, when in tough times the fuse to make Ryu Senshi,tries to get through to his companion after his fall into Dark Lucius.

Dark Grepher: A personallity of Dai Grepher created by Enrise from his desire to become more powerful. Surfaces when Dai Grepher starts to lose a battle, his evil personallity starts to become more and more dominant, causing Dai Grepher to seek more power through the archfiends.

Dark Lucius: Dai Grepher after his search for power causes him to trade his soul to Terrorking for power, he's as evil as Giga Gagagigo and kills those he once called friends

Terrorking: leader of the Archfiends, knows of Enrise's existance and fears hims but is arrogant to everyone else. Frequently sends heros into the path of darkness

Imprisioned Queen Archfiend: coleader of the archfiends, killed years ago but escaped hell and leads her forces in the afterlife, seeks to overthrone Norleras

Reign-Beux: OVerlord of Dark World, wants to conquer everything but generally leaves the people he conquered alone, knows about Enrise, doesn't trust Kozacky

Blue Eyes Ultimate Dragon: Friend of Paladin of the Cursed Dragon, when he became who he is she became worried and looks for him. Knows about Enrise and is good friends with Black Luster Solider

Black Luster Solider:Envoy of the beginning . The representation of all good in the world. Minion of the Sky Scourge Enrise, arch enemy of Chaos Emperor Dragon and friend of Blue Eyes Ultimate Dragon

Chaos Emperor Dragon: Envoy of the end. The representation of all that is evil in the world. Minion of Norleras since he is good at keeping strong beings under control.He however secretly is trying to gather 4 dragons to form the F.D.G. and overthrow Norleras

Chaos Sorceror: The guardian of magic and servant of Invincil

Demise and Ruin: King and Queen of Armageddon respectively. They are the heads of the capital of Armageddon, the capital city in the afterlife, knows about Norleras.

Warrior Lady of the Wasteland: Rival of Dai Grepher, about equally powerful as him, frequently partners with Mystic Swordsman. Eventually gets sent into the Different Dimension by Invincil and is trained by D.D.M. to become D.D. Warrior Lady, loves with D.D. Warrior and after on laast fight with Dai Grepher leaves to D.D. to live with D.D. Warrior

Mystic Swordsman: partner of Warrior Lady of the waste land (starts in LV2 form) he has a crush on her and fights Dai Grepher to earn her respect. When she gets sent to D.D. Mystic Swordsman searches for her and is distraught when he learns of her affection for D.D. Warrior but takes it in strides and they go separate ways. He then fights Dark Lucius but is too weak and flees He trains extensively and eventually levels up and fights Dark Lucius who has also leveled up by slaughtering his former comrades. Mystic Swordsman is winning but reinforcements come and drive him off. Later archfiends destroy his village and a mad Mystic Swordsman levels up and with Fusion Sword Mursama destroys half of the archfiends, including Terrorking Archfiend. However Dark Lucius LV8 appears with Sword of Dark Rites and kills Mystic Swordsman, assuming leadership of the remaining Archfiends

[Phantom Roxas]

A lot of these contradict the ideas I have planned. This is actually pretty good material you have though. You could make your own fanfic.

[Nexev]

Not great at writing sadly, though I can be a great help to those making it.

[The Oncoming Storm]

Hey Rox. It's me, Guilty Spark, again. This is interesting, and i'll give you some other character ideas some time. Here's one-

 

Dark Magician - Once an evil rogue sorcerer, he is now the leader of all good spellcasters. He uses his power to protect and defend the weak and abolish the dark side. Tries to make Zera and/or Gagagigo see the light, and almost turns himself.

[Phantom Roxas]

My friend is already trying to get me to fit in Dark Magician Girl and Blue-Eyes White Dragon. Right now I just want to focus on Warrior Dai Grepher's introduction.

[The Oncoming Storm]

fari enough.

[Nexev]

I demand an update or I will hit on the head with a banana!

[Phantom Roxas]

I was working on Chapter 3, realized it sucked, so I crumpled up the paper and shredded it. I'm restarting, but I personally think it's better than what I was working on before.