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  • 3 weeks later...

Okay.................................4/10 because mark

never seems to lose and you do know when somebody talks it is a new paragraph ................. dot.

ugghhhh......you're such a spammer...........

Mark's the main character! Take Jaden for example. He only lost like, twice!

RATE THE FAN FIC, NOT HOW I START A PARAGRAPH!!!!

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You asked me a series of questions and comments, AB72. I will answer them.

 

Q. the duel was messed up.

A. How?

Q. xavier????? thats more pointless then jose or loushcie

A. unlike "loushcie", it is a real name.

Q. half of the cards they activated didn't have names.

A. Name some.

Q. why dark worlds and not lightsworns.

A. A shadowy figure using Lightsworns? I don't think so.

Q. mark cheated

A. How?

Q. half the cards that xavier attacked with weren't even summoned.

A. Really. Name some.

Q. this reminded me of season 4 or 5 were the seal of orichalcos.

A. Huh?

Q. why would he just tell mark his name.

A. So I don't have to call him " the cloaked figure" all the time.

Q. how does that make the duel easier

A. He was ragging on him.

Q. aren't they so possed to be at a childrens trading card game school not regular school.

A. In Chap. 1 the teacher says, "Open your Duel Guides"

Q. why would he lay in bed and think about the duel he won if he won.

A. He was mainly thinking about Serene, and not much about the duel.

Q. i'm pourpesely not captilazing amd adding ?

A. What?

Q. why would he stay at school till dusk.

A. To study.

Q. wouldn't the teacher tell him to leave.

A. No, say he was studying in the library.

 

That good enough? Please restate the questions I put "What?", "How?", "Huh?", or "Name some."

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How was the duel messed up.

Why was it so short.

Name some of the cards that xavier did not summon.

Lots of darkworlds.

How did mark cheat.

U can't set cards face up,they could in the anime but since serene has a sacred beast i don't think so.

I don't know like that one were xavier discard two darkworlds and lots of others.

U know where the biker dudes and Mi wanted to get souls for the lavathin.

that was just something random.

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Okay,i ill make a fair judge.

To AB72:It is his fan fic.So if he refuse to change,dont force him to.Thus,this is only the beginner he can lose later.

To Crystal Beast:Chapter 2,Marzin's first turn.He cant summon directly the Lava Battleswamp.

 

8/10.Clear and good.

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Okay' date='i ill make a fair judge.

To AB72:It is his fan fic.So if he refuse to change,dont force him to.Thus,this is only the beginner he can lose later.

To Crystal Beast:Chapter 2,Marzin's first turn.He cant summon directly the Lava Battleswamp.

 

8/10.Clear and good.

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he actually uses double summon and sacrifices kuriboh

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Hey dude, just so you know, Lava Battleguard gets pumped up for every Swamp Battleguard you control and Swamp Battleguard gets pumped up for every Lava Battleguard you control. Lava doesn't pump up lava, nor does Swamp pump up Swamp. Look up the cards you want to use in your fan fic on yugioh wikia to be sure of their effects. Other than your effect error, this fan fic is incredible. I suggest giving the "Almighty One" a DARK deck if he is evil.

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