OCG Trouble, Does this sound Right?

[Dr.Pain]

I am making a card, but i dunno how to word its effect,

Can you guys help me correct grammar on this?

 

When this card attacks a monster in deffence position, remove it from play without applying battle calculations. You may activate one of the effects according to the monster's atribute.

-FIRE: Your oppoent loses 700 life points

-WIND: Both players return one card from the field to their hand

-DARK: Your oppoent randomly discards a card.

-WATER: All spell and trap cards go back to their owner's hands

-LIGHT: Draw a card

-EARTH: Destroy 1 spell or trap card on the field.

[lord ganon]

Besides a couple of spelling errors and a few missing periods, it looks pretty good to me.

[Dr.Pain]

okies thx!

[Doctor]

When this card attacks a monster in Defence Position, remove it from play without applying Battle Damage. You may activate one of the effects' according to the monster's attribute.

-FIRE: Your opponent loses 700 Life Points

-WIND: Both players return one card from the field to their hand

-DARK: Your opponent randomly discards 1 card.

-WATER: All Spell and Trap cards go back to their owner's hands

-LIGHT: Draw 1 card

-EARTH: Destroy 1 Spell or Trap card on the field.

 

ocg errors aplenty

lord ganon doesnt know anything

fixes in bold

[Silent Hunter™]

Hmm... i had a card like this before, so heres a fix

Card:

When this card attacks a monster in Defense Position, remove it from play without applying Damage calculation. Once per turn, you can activate 1 of the following effects based on the Attribute of this card

-FIRE: Inflict 700 Damge to your opponent's Life Points

-WIND: Both players return 1 card from the field to their hand

-DARK: Your oppoent randomly discards 1 card from their hand.

-WATER: Return all Spell and Trap Cards on the field to their owner's hands

-LIGHT: Draw 1 card

-EARTH: Destroy 1 Spell or Trap Card on the field.

Caps "Defense Position" and spell it right, I don't think theres "battle calculation" only "Damage calculation", Fixed the 2nd sentence for ya, fixed the FIRE Sentence for ya and "Life Points" is caps, write the numbers as it is, fixed DARK for ya, fixed WATER for ya and "Spell and Trap Cards" are caps.

[lord ganon]

When this card attacks a monster in Defence Position' date=' remove it from play without applying [b']B[/b]attle Damage. You may activate one of the effects' according to the monster's attribute.

-FIRE: Your opponent loses 700 Life Points

-WIND: Both players return one card from the field to their hand

-DARK: Your opponent randomly discards 1 card.

-WATER: All Spell and Trap cards go back to their owner's hands

-LIGHT: Draw 1 card

-EARTH: Destroy 1 Spell or Trap card on the field.

 

ocg errors aplenty

lord ganon doesnt know anything

fixes in bold

 

You are right, i shouldn't have posted here (considering my own OCG stinks). Sorry.