Yu Yu Hakusho Set

[Cohesive-Outlaw]

Hello, I was bored and so I decided to create a set based off the Anime Yu Yu Hakusho. I'll post the cards up that I've so far made. Of course I'll make more, however. As for the effect cards, I'll make sure to edit this post with their character description.

 

 

Character Description:

Kuwabara is Yusuke's chief rival at Sarayashiki Junior High. Like Yusuke, he isn't the greatest student, but he is an excellent fighter. Next to Yusuke he is a formidable adversary. Kuwabara is driven by an unwavering desire to be the best. Adding comic relief to Yu Yu Hakusho, Kuwabara has an affinity for kittens.

 

Character Description:

Hiei is a fire/ice apparition whose true origins are unknown. He is a master swordsman, and his strength and speed are incredible. However, these are hardly his most fearsome abilities. Typically kept concealed behind a bandanna on his forehead is the Jagan, a mysterious third eye that possesses magical properties. With it he can control weak-minded humans, send telepathic messages, and move objects telekinetically. Hiei is fiercely independent, and his raw ambition drives him to pursue his own agenda at all times. Although he generally cares little for human life, and views others as mere obstacles in the pursuit of his own goals, Hiei strictly adheres to his own unique code of honor. As such, he helps those who help him, and is fiercely loyal to those who have managed to earn his respect.

 

Character Description:

Not actually a human, Kurama has lived for over 300 years and possesses the wisdom and knowledge one would expect of someone his age. He is generally soft-spoken, almost eerily calm, even in the face of great adversity. But this calm exterior belies Kurama's incredible strength. He is a powerful, ruthless warrior, with wisdom and experience. As such, he is a formidable opponent to all he battles., with his abilities to manipulate plants.

 

 

Character Description:

Keiko is Yusuke's closest (and at times, only) friend. She and Yusuke have known each other since they were little children, and although he would never admit it, she is probably the person that he cares most about in the world. As such, Keiko has a unique ability to talk sense into Yusuke when he is being stubborn or unruly. Keiko is one of the leading students in her school. Intelligent, friendly, and outgoing, she is well-liked and respected by her peers. She is confident, self-assured, and at times a bit head-strong. She is brave in the face of danger, and will not hesitate to put herself at risk in order to help a friend in need.

[Dante Dimercurio]

1 word grammar thats all i see with my blind eyes 6/10

[Cohesive-Outlaw]

1 word grammar thats all i see with my blind eyes 6/10

 

Really? I don't see any grammar mistakes, mind pointing them out?

[EvangelionUnit01]

well for kayko, you spell her as keiko on the card and kayko in the description, yes i know both are correct but when you use one spelling format it is best to stick with it to alleviate confusion amoung those less informed; her effect also states 'immediately discarded to the top of the opponent's deck.' for starters you don't use 'discard' when describing an effect that sends cards to the deck, and also in that same sentence you use the term 'CONTROLLER of a monster that attacks this ...' then combine that with '...to the top of the OPPONENT'S deck.'So once again if you use one way of describing something STICK with it, ESPECIALLY in the same sentence since the word controller is the subject. here is an example to better understand the problem of your wording.

 

I play Keiko face down. my opponent attacks it and takes life point damage due to the effect, and the monster he used in the attack gets sent to the top of MY deck because i am HIS OPPONENT.

 

also it's not a big deal but when describing normal monsters (this statement is primarily targeted at Yusuke) you should not put a Summary of what the character has done (several reasons, one it doesn't look right, and second it may have spoilers when the card is based of a character already made, i once saw spoilers that reached into 3/4s of the plot) instead you should simply have a basic description of the card/charater ITSELF, like personalites, goals, so on; however you can still have a summary of what they have done if it would be best for describing that character, but keep it brief. This just came off the top of my head but here is an example for yusuke- He was an average high school delinquent till he sacrificed his life for a young boy. He has been granted a second chance at life, in exchange he must take up the role of spirit detective.

I hope i don't sound like i am being too critical but i am simply trying to help by pointing out these mistakes, everyone needs to have someone else critique their work to truely understand the faults in their work, i know i do. lol

[Cohesive-Outlaw]

You're right. Thanks for pointing that out. I'll fix it as soon as possible. Along with a better picture of Keiko. Please do come look at my cards again when I update it with new cards. Your advice has been much appreciated.

 

Edit: Hmm? No reputation points? I'll have to give you one.

[Cohesive-Outlaw]

My few next new cards that are at least once shown in the Anime.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Descriptions will be later involved, I just want to get through all the monster cards first. Then spell/trap and last rituals/fusions.

[Dante Dimercurio]

OKay these are pretty good 7/10

[Cohesive-Outlaw]

OKay these are pretty good 7/10

 

 

Thanks for the encouragement.