My First Cards. Yay....

[Corporal]

Since I had this account for almost a year and haven't technically made cards for the sake of card making, I guess now is the best time to start.

 

Pokemanz:

 

At the end of a Damage Step that this card attacked or was attacked increase it's original ATK and DEF by 200. Once per turn you may select 1 face-up monster your opponent controls and flip it face-down. That card's position cannot be changed until the End Phase of your opponent's next turn, except with a card effect. If you activate this card's effect, this card cannot attack this turn and has its original ATK and DEF increased by 100.

 

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned, except by tributing one "Bulbasaur" you control with an original ATK of 1500 or higher. At the end of a Damage Step that this card attacked or was attacked, increase it's original ATK and DEF by 300. Once per turn, you can select 1 monster your opponent controls. You can either place a poison counter on the monster(Monsters with poison counters lose 200 ATK and DEF during each Standy Phase for each poison counter and are destroyed if their ATK or DEF drops below 0 due to a poison counter's effect) or flip it into face-down defense position(The card's position cannot be changed except by a card effect). If you activate either of these effects, this card cannot attack this turn and has its original ATK and DEF increased by 200.

 

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned, except by tributing one "Ivysaur" you control with an original ATK of 2000 or higher. At the end of a Damage Step that this card attacked or was attacked, increase it's original ATK and DEF by 300. When this card declares an attack against a WATER monster, destroy the monster before applying damage calculation and increase this card's original ATK and DEF by 100. Once per turn, you can select 1 monster your opponent controls. You can either place two poison counters on the monster(Monsters with poison counters lose 200 ATK and DEF during each Standy Phase for each poison counter and are destroyed if their ATK or DEF drops below 0 due to a poison counter's effect), or flip the monster into face-down defense position(The position cannot be changed, even with a card effect). If you activate either of these effects this monster cannot attack this turn and has its original ATK and DEF increased by 200.

 

[Zigzix]

congratz on you'r first cards these are pretty cool keep em coming 8.5/10 you didn't make up types as well thats what i like to see ^_^ you managed to put me in a good mood

[Corporal]

congratz on you'r first cards these are pretty cool keep em coming 8.5/10 you didn't make up types as well thats what i like to see ^_^ you managed to put me in a good mood

 

Thanks.

 

I just noticed I didn't give Ivysaur Pokemon-status, so I'll fix that.

[900antani900]

Man, these are great cards! You have to work only on the images...;)

[Corporal]

Man' date=' these are great cards! You have to work only on the images...;)

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I sort of like my pictures having a dullness to them, it adds a sort of blending effect which makes them look more realistic, though I should try finding a new Ivysaur card.

[3cchiFr3ak]

Hey, once an Effect Monster leaves the field, all stats they gained will be lost so you don't have to include that in it's effect. Nice pictures but I've seen those before, try finding some unique ones. Since I only read Bulbasaur's effect (lol hate me, I'm lazy), I just want you to know that there is an OCG way of saying it's effect. Happy YCMing.

[Corporal]

Hey' date=' once an Effect Monster leaves the field, all stats they gained will be lost so you don't have to include that in it's effect. Nice pictures but I've seen those before, try finding some unique ones. Since I only read Bulbasaur's effect (lol hate me, I'm lazy), I just want you to know that there is an OCG way of saying it's effect. Happy YCMing.

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I thought I should've included that as its increasing original ATK as opposed to basic ATK increases, but thanks for the heads up. What's the OCG for his effect? I want these to get better for when I make a complete set.

[3cchiFr3ak]

Hey' date=' once an Effect Monster leaves the field, all stats they gained will be lost so you don't have to include that in it's effect. Nice pictures but I've seen those before, try finding some unique ones. Since I only read Bulbasaur's effect (lol hate me, I'm lazy), I just want you to know that there is an OCG way of saying it's effect. Happy YCMing.

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I thought I should've included that as its increasing original ATK as opposed to basic ATK increases, but thanks for the heads up. What's the OCG for his effect? I want these to get better for when I make a complete set.

 

It wouldn't be any fun if I just told you straight up will it? Just read the TCG card effects. =)

[Corporal]

Hey' date=' once an Effect Monster leaves the field, all stats they gained will be lost so you don't have to include that in it's effect. Nice pictures but I've seen those before, try finding some unique ones. Since I only read Bulbasaur's effect (lol hate me, I'm lazy), I just want you to know that there is an OCG way of saying it's effect. Happy YCMing.

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I thought I should've included that as its increasing original ATK as opposed to basic ATK increases, but thanks for the heads up. What's the OCG for his effect? I want these to get better for when I make a complete set.

 

It wouldn't be any fun if I just told you straight up will it? Just read the TCG card effects. =)

*Sigh*

Can you link me to a TCG card with a similar effect at least?

[Monkey]

wow, thes are pretty good for your first cards, 8/10

[3cchiFr3ak]

I guess I could. :) Give me a second, I'm dueling right now...

[Corporal]

I guess I could. :) Give me a second' date=' I'm dueling right now...

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Done?

[3cchiFr3ak]

I guess I could. :) Give me a second' date=' I'm dueling right now...

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Done?

 

I lied. And I was kind of rushing it. :\ It looks fine to me, except for a few exceptions. You use commas a lot and some should not be there.

[Silver93]

You have writen a lot at "Venuzaur",can someone tell what is writen there,i can`t see

[Doctor]

the pictures arent bad

ocg looks pretty solid as well

8/10

[staticrevenger]

I'd have to disagree with the solid ocg statement as the same mistakes are repeated all over the place ;)

 

Mistakes are only VERY minor so let's begin :)

 

no need to say WATER-attribute, just WATER.

one=1 always use the number, don't say one.

 

PM me if you need more help :)

[bandai]

oh whooopieee....pokemon cards >_

[Corporal]

I'd have to disagree with the solid ocg statement as the same mistakes are repeated all over the place ;)

 

Mistakes are only VERY minor so let's begin :)

 

no need to say WATER-attribute' date=' just WATER.

one=1 always use the number, don't say one.

 

PM me if you need more help :)

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Is my newly edited Bulbasaur perfect OCG-wise now?

[3cchiFr3ak]

For Bulbasaur's effect, if you say "If this card did not attack during your Battle Phase..." that means that you must initiate/declare battle that turn first, was that what you wanted? And ATK/DEF is written "ATK and DEF" in the YGO OCG. Lastly, try and shorten your effects.

[Corporal]

For Bulbasaur's effect' date=' if you say "If this card did not attack during your Battle Phase..." that means that you must initiate/declare battle that turn first, was that what you wanted? And ATK/DEF is written "ATK and DEF" in the YGO OCG. Lastly, try and shorten your effects.

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1) How should it be worded then?

2) I guess I was looking at an old YGO card when I looked for how to write it.

3) K

[3cchiFr3ak]

1) Once per turn, you can select 1 face-up monster your opponent controls and flip it into face-down Defense Position. If you activate this effect, this card cannot attack until your next turn... etc.

 

2) I see.

 

3) =)

[TheGiver]

srry 4/10

[Corporal]

@That Guy:

 

I was about to take that as a serious rating until I saw that card in your sig...

 

1) Once per turn' date=' you can select 1 face-up monster your opponent controls and flip it into face-down Defense Position. If you activate this effect, this card cannot attack until your next turn... etc.

 

2) I see.

 

3) =)

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Thanks for the help.

[TheGiver]

7/10 because one of them is of the pokemon card