Lucas: PK Freeze (brawl card) (also my first)

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atk: 800 def: 1000 effect: when this monster attacks another monster, that monster Lucas: PK Freeze attacked cannot move next turn

 

rate plz. (my first card)

[Zeppeli Gyro Supreme]

For a first card, it's okay. You've got some errors in your OCG, though. If you'd like to learn some more about creating cards (or writing them in this case) just check out some other people's cards that got good ratings.

[bury the year]

I am not nearly as nice as Slayer, so I'll get it over with quickly.

 

You have no distinction between the card stats, name, and effect. That already drops to a 1.

[~Riku~]

Hey tectonix, that's not nice. Sure he's got some OCG errors here and there, but his card deserves more than a 1! I give it a 4/10.

[bury the year]

Hey tectonix' date=' that's not nice. Sure he's got some OCG errors here and there, but his card deserves more than a 1! I give it a 4/10.

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Read my signature.

[Emperor Godbot]

Agreed with Tectonix.