Mutant Monster RAEG-HAPYP Posted August 24, 2008 Report Share Posted August 24, 2008 Well I decided to make a new fanfic. It takes place in the year 2011. GOOD[spoiler=OC Main Characters]Name: Brad WinfordAge: 18Bio: His family is the 3rd richest family in the U.S. He has many rare cards and decks. Girls seem to like him...a lot:shock::P8)Deck: Zombie Synchro(And 39 more decks:P)Signature Card: Abyss Dragon/Slifer Steven WinfordAge 10Bio: Brad's younger brother. Unlike Brad...he only has a few rare cardsDeck: ???Signature Card: Sprial Serpent/Ocean Dragon Lord Neo Dadleus* Recives it in ep 7 Susan Fudo(:P)Age: 18Bio: Yusei's younger sister and one of Brad's best friends and one of the girls who like him(ONE)Deck: FariesSignature Card: Shinato King of a Higher Plance/Avenging Knight Parshath Yurado Fudo(:P)Age: 18Bio: Yusei's younger brother and Brad's childhood friendDeck: SynchroSignature: Stardust Dragon/Goyo Guardian Shane "Loopy" Raider(not real name)Age: 17Bio ???Deck: DragonsSignature Card: Five Headed Dragon Carol RiderAge: 17Bio: Another on of Brad friends. This one however isn't scared to abmit you know whatDeck: zombie(because she's a HUGE Brad fan)Sigature Card: Vampire GenesisVanessa RiderAge: 17Bio: Carol's sister and...SHE LIKES BRAD ALSO AND ADMITS OMFGDeck: PlantsSignature card: Black Rose Dragon [spoiler=anime characters]Joey Wheeler(cop:P)Age: 33Deck: Red EyesSignature Card: REDMD Yugi Muto(FBI:P)Age: 32Deck: SpellcastersSignature Card: Dark Ultimate AtemAge: YOU KNOWDeck: ???Signature Card: ??? Jaden Yuki(???)Age: 21Deck: HerosSignature Card: Elemental Hero Goldenstar Aster PhoenixAge: 21deck: D herosSignature Card: Destiny End Dragoon BAD[spoiler=Dark Ring] Name: Freeze(not real name)Age: ???Deck: MonarchSignature Card: Mobius Name: LightingAge: ???Deck MonarchSignature Card: Zaborg Name: GregAge: ???Deck: MonarchSignature Card: Granmarg Name: TesAge: ???Deck: MonarchSignature Card: Thestalos Name: RonAge: ???Deck: MonarchSignature Card: Raiza Name: ShadowAge: ???Deck: MonarchSignature: Caius Name: Dante(From Silencerleader)Age: ???Bio: Alone in the world, all he wants to achieve is the satisfaction of destroying all those who have betrayed him...it's time to DUEL!Deck: Monarch Deck 5.0Signature card: Monarch Illusionst VenomAge: Same as Atem(fictonal egyptain lord. Brought back with the darkness)Deck: ???Signature Card: Ancient Serpent DarkraAge: 10000(revived by the darkness)Deck: DARKSignature Card: Alavora Lord of Darkness [spoiler=Bad Anime characters]Yami MarikAge: ???Deck: ???Signature Card: ??? AnubisAge: ???Deck: ???Signature Card: Thenien [spoiler=Other OC's] Korio Age: 19Bio: State ChampionDeck: ???Signature Card: BEWD/Obelisk Name: RyanAge: 22Deck: ???Signature Card: ??? [spoiler=Other anime characters]Seto KaibaAge: 33Deck; DragonSignature: BEUD I'll add more Episode 1: Power!! A dark night in Greece. Ryan and team of archaeologist were digging when... Ryan: What have we here He picks up a tablet... Darkra: FINALLY...mortal you have awaken me. Ryan was scared... Ryan: W...wh...what are you? Darkra: I'm Darkra. You have released the Darkness and now...you'll be mine host Ryan: AHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!! His team hears the scream Person 1: Ryan what's wrong? Are you ok? Person 2: Ryan? Darkra: PERISH MORTALS. BEHOLD MY POWER!!! The ancient temple begins to collaspe Person 1: RUN!!! The entire team manages to run away to saftey Darkra: RUN MORTALS RUN!!! HAAAAAAAAAAA I SHALL PLUGE THIS PLANET INTO DARKNESS.... ................................................................................................. News Person: We have word that a 8.9 earthquake has just hit Beijing. The death and injury is unknown at the moment. Brad: Man ever since that temple collasped, this has been happing all over the globe Steven: Let's change the channel Brad and Steven changed the channel to the state championship. It was lst year's champ Korio vs Jaden. Korio hs 2100 LP left and a BEWD and a Big Piece Golem along with Dragonic Knight. Jaden has 1000 LP left and has a Voltic in ATK mode and a SFW in ATK mode Korio: Blue Eyes...White Lighting!!! A whitish blast destroyed Voltic with ease taking the rest of Jaden's LP with him Jaden: LP 0 Announcer: The winner is Korio Everyone started to cheer as Brad turned the T.V off.. Steven: I'm never going to as good as him Brad and Steven were in the 3rd richest family the U.S. While Brad has lot of powerful and rare cards. Steven only has a few as he just stared a week ago. Steven goes to buy 2 packs from II card store Steven(Though I'm not gonna get anything good, I'll try) He pulls Aqua Spirit, Gravity Bind, Twister, Castle Walls, Gyphron Wing, Sprial Serpent, Tune Warrior, Brionac, Dragon of the Ice Boundary , Command Knight, and Widespread ruin Steven: Not the best cards but they'll help Brad(Dad needs to give him some good cards...) Masked Man: Hey Kid!!! Steven: Yes? Masked Man: Your Brad right? Brad: Of course Masked Man: I know you're good at this game but is your little bro good? We'll find out, Meet me at Kaibaland in 1 hour...Prepare yourself ............................................................................................... Steven: I'm ready... Masked Man: To lose....now let's do this Both went on the dueling platform and it rose. Masked Man and Steven: DUEL They both drew their cards Steven: I'l start He drew Speed Warrior. The other 5 cards in his hand were Marauding Captain , Command Knight,Tri Horned Dragon, Nightmare Steelcage, Stone Statue of the Aztecks Steven: I summon Marauding Captain in attack mode(1200/400) A warrior wearing silver armor and a red cape emerged Steven: I activate my captin's effect to Special Summon Speed Warrior(900/400) and end my turn Masked Man: My turn He drew Double Summon. The other 5 cards were Mad Archfiend, Stop Defense, Archfiend Soldier, Pot of Greed, and Card Trooper Masked Man: I summon Mad Archfiend in ATK mode(1800/0) A crasy looking thing appeard on the field Masked Man: I activate Double Summon so I can Normal Summon my Archfield Soldier(1900/1500). Mad Archfiend Attack his captin Mad Archfiend destroyed the captin with ease Steven: LP 7400 Masked Man: Archfiend Soldier it's your turn Archfiend Soldier destroyed Speed Warrior with ease Stevn: LP 6400 Masked Man: Heh Heh He takes his mask off Korio: Reconize me? Yurado: Hey Brad what's up Susan: Isn't that... Brad: Yep the state champ of California Yurado: He challenged your brother? Brad: Yeah... Korio: Now it's your turn. Steven: I know... He draws Sprial Serpent Steven: I play Stone Statue of the Aztecks in DEF mode(300/2000). I end my turn Korio(Hm...now I can't attack or I get hurt...no matter)Draw... He drew BEWD Korio: Heh... HAAAAAAAAAA Steven: ??? Korio: I tribute both monsters to summon...the Blue Eyes White Dragon!!! The dragon let out a blood currling battle cry Yurado: THE...BLUE EYES?!?!?!? Brad: But...only...K... Korio: Did you think Seto Kaiba was the only one with a Blue Eyes...WHTIE LIGHTING!!! A whitish blast lauched by the dragon destroyed the Stone Statue Korio: Turn end Steven: My turn He draws Sonic Chick Steven: Grrr!!! I activate Nightmare Steelcage which prevents us from attacking for 2 turns. Korio(Don't matter...I got this duel won) Steven: I summon Command Knight in DEF mode(1200/1900). Turn end Korio: My turn... He drew Tune Warrior Korio: I activate Pot of Greed which allows me to draw 2 cards. Hew drew Gene Warped Warwolf and Graceful Charity Korio: Then I activate Graceful Charity which allows me to Draw 3 cards and discard 2 He drew Big Piece Golem, Double Summon, and Synchro Boost and discarded Card Trooper and Big Piece Golem. Korio: I summon Tune Warrior in ATK mode(1600/200) and I activate Double Summon to Normal Summon my Gene Warped Warwolf(2000/100). A 4 armed white wolf thingy emerged Korio: Now I activate Synchro Boost and equip it to my Warwolf. He gains 1 level and 500 atk(ATK: 2500) Now...I Tribute my Warwolf and my warrior to Synchro Summon Red Dragon Archfiend(3000/2000) A redish looking dragon let out a cry Steven: Oh no Yurado: Not good Susan: He can't take those 2 on Brad: We're just lucky he didn't use THAT card. Yurado: What card Brad: ... Susan: Well? Brad: You'll find out soon... Korio: Turn end Steven: Draw... he drew Rogue Doll Steven; I summon Rogue Doll if DEF mode(1600/1000). Turn end Korio: My turn He drew Card of Santiany Korio: I activate Card os Santiany which allows to draw until we have 6 (author's note: COS has it's anime effect here) Korio: I activate Mystical Space Typoon to destroy your cage. Then I activate Magicial Stone Excavation which lets me discard 2 cards to add a Spell card from my grave to my hand. He discarded Mid Piece Golem and Dragonic Knight to add PoG to his hand Korio: Then I activate Pot of Greed so I can draw 2 cards He drew United We Stand and Raigeki Korio: Then I activate Raigeki to destroy all yout monsters Steven: Aw man Both of Steven's monsters was destroyed Korio: Then I activate Untied we Stand and I equip it to my Blue Eyes which gives him 800 for every monster on my side.(ATK: 4600) Red Dragon Archfiend ATTACK HIM DIRECTLY The dragon let out a massive inferno Steven: LP 3400 Korio: WHITE LIGHTING!!! The Blue Eyes's attack knocked Steven down Steven: LP 0 Steven: No I lost... Korio: I know Brad...I know you have a Egyptian God Card Brad: Heh you're not as dumb as I thought Korio: Hmph...we'll have our duel in a week. Be ready... Korio walks away Korio(My Obelisk vs his god card....I look forward to it) Brad(I'll beat him with the power of Slifer. Meanwhile I need to find the thrid god card...where ever it is)... End of Episode 1 Next Episode: Zombie Attack! 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Kale Posted August 24, 2008 Report Share Posted August 24, 2008 interesting fan fic, but you could always describe a bit more. like describing when people walk, and turn their head, facial expressions.. thats all i can see, other than the fact that you like to dog Jaden... XD thats okay with me. ;) seems solid though. thanks for the invite. ~K Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mutant Monster RAEG-HAPYP Posted August 24, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 24, 2008 interesting fan fic' date=' but you could always describe a bit more. like describing when people walk, and turn their head, facial expressions.. thats all i can see, other than the fact that you like to dog Jaden... XD thats okay with me. ;) seems solid though. thanks for the invite. ~K[/quote'] I was distraced by the T.V to add more detail:lol: Thank you for the advice Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Protoman Posted August 24, 2008 Report Share Posted August 24, 2008 very solid and I agree with kale Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mutant Monster RAEG-HAPYP Posted August 24, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 24, 2008 Come one and comment Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luna Lovegood Posted August 24, 2008 Report Share Posted August 24, 2008 Needs more descreption, but I guess thats been said. Gods again, sounds promising. ~Funk Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mutant Monster RAEG-HAPYP Posted August 24, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 24, 2008 I'll try to add more Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
zoloa37 Posted August 24, 2008 Report Share Posted August 24, 2008 Not enough detail for my taste but it is still pretty good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
terriq Posted August 24, 2008 Report Share Posted August 24, 2008 more juice but the flavor is great it needs more description but great Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
staticrevenger Posted August 25, 2008 Report Share Posted August 25, 2008 Wow this was really impressive! Except, as you already know, a bit more detail would make it perfect. Keep going! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted August 25, 2008 Report Share Posted August 25, 2008 THe script format makes the writing really choppy and hard to follow. Also, the chapters feel quite short. I like the characters, though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mutant Monster RAEG-HAPYP Posted August 25, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 25, 2008 Um..thanks tectonix... Anyway...I'll try to add more of a discription from now on(no guarntees) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silencerleader Posted August 25, 2008 Report Share Posted August 25, 2008 Not enough detail for my taste but it is still pretty good. Exactly :'( Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mutant Monster RAEG-HAPYP Posted August 25, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 25, 2008 BUMP Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Huntar! Posted August 29, 2008 Report Share Posted August 29, 2008 fan fic pwns when My cards get featured. :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mutant Monster RAEG-HAPYP Posted August 30, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 30, 2008 fan fic pwns when My cards get featured. :P I have to think. You have so many epic cards Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mutant Monster RAEG-HAPYP Posted August 30, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 30, 2008 BUMP Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
E-Hero King Posted August 31, 2008 Report Share Posted August 31, 2008 i love it its interesting Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mutant Monster RAEG-HAPYP Posted September 2, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 2, 2008 BUMP I hate doing this Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luna Lovegood Posted September 2, 2008 Report Share Posted September 2, 2008 I like it, but I wont another chapter. Also, my Necromancer cards are really good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mutant Monster RAEG-HAPYP Posted September 5, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 5, 2008 Come on people comment Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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