Aelsthla-Mental Posted September 11, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 11, 2008 You got that right. I rushed at the end, didn't have much time to finish it. Dunno quite how the duel felt off though... Perhaps Erebos talked too much, but that is his character. Perhaps the fact that he should have released the berserker instead of whatever monster that didn't need a release in his hand for the ritual? Nah, there was a reason for that... Did I overuse his hand? Nope, Joshua should still have had three cards, and Erebos funnily enough has only one, or maybe two, i think i miscounted in the end. Perhaps Erebos really did talk too much, he didn't talk as much last chapter... Oh, i dunno. If I did I would have probably edited it already... Little help finding it? Edit: As funny as the coin landing on it's edge would be, i'm afraid SOMEONE has to win the coin toss. It's a pity i know, but aahh well. Edit2: Speaking of edits, I edited chapter four slightly. Anyway, did you notice any little clues? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted September 12, 2008 Report Share Posted September 12, 2008 Ch 4-I think that the duel was great on its own right, but the cliffhanger was somewhat pointless since the duel was already decided on that coin itself... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aelsthla-Mental Posted September 12, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 12, 2008 Meh, it was mainly to see if people would think of conspiracy's involving the coin. Aside from tectonix, no conspiracy theories. Dissapointing. I mean, what if it turns out Erebos is possessed and the duel is somehow reset? What if an effect of a card in Erebos or Joshua's graveyard comes back to save the day and keep the duel going? Come on people, use your imagination! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted September 12, 2008 Report Share Posted September 12, 2008 I guessed that you made the cliffhanger for a reason... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aelsthla-Mental Posted September 12, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 12, 2008 Aahh, but as far as you know I could have merely said that to hide a stupid mistake! Well, keep on guessing, dunno how long until the next chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aelsthla-Mental Posted September 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 13, 2008 *Bump* Edited the 'what reviewers noticed so far' to include an e.g. by me. Maybe I'll add more, I just don't know. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aelsthla-Mental Posted September 17, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 17, 2008 *Bump* Chapter five added. The most frustrating chapter so far! First the computer crashes making me lose half the story, then I somehow nearly deleted chapter four from the first post. Turned out i had run out of room, it took me a surprising while to figure that out. So... oops? Anyway, since that happened I wouldn't be surprised in my frustrated state that more errors slipped under the radar then usual. So while reading, remember any errors you see and report them please. I now have chapter five on the second post. Anyway I better get to making copies of the chapters. Don't want that scare EVER again... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zetsumei75 Posted September 17, 2008 Report Share Posted September 17, 2008 Great chapter. Now the coin thing isn't irritating me, since I saw how it landed. Either way, part of the story repeated near the middle. You may want to fix that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aelsthla-Mental Posted September 18, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 18, 2008 Bah, I knew either a section would be deleted or repeated. Fixed. Good spotting :). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted September 20, 2008 Report Share Posted September 20, 2008 so the main char didn't win,but din't lose as well I like how you portray Erebos, he's like those TV station people you should also put up the cards on the site,so that we won't be blur blur when we see the cards Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aelsthla-Mental Posted September 20, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 20, 2008 Sounds like a good idea... I'll put em on the third post I suppose. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted September 20, 2008 Report Share Posted September 20, 2008 Sounds like a good idea... I'll put em on the third post I suppose.while you're at it, try putting up your Life archetype If you can't find them, I can PM them back to you with better OCG Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aelsthla-Mental Posted September 20, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 20, 2008 That would be nice, would you? Although odds are the Life cards would be appearing MUCH later, my other fanfic hadn't had Josh dueling Michael, and that fanfic is up to the invasion being very close. Wait... I may have said too much. Heh; anyway, I better get on it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aelsthla-Mental Posted September 23, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 23, 2008 *Bump* Cards so far have been completely updated. Check out the first posts, I think it was the fourth or fifth. You may notice some cards are 'smudged out'. I'm sure you can use your imagination as to why they are :). Oh, and I have a rep to give! All you have to do is find something in chapter five... I have a line from a certain book. Aside from one word it is exactly the same as from the book. Here's the trick. I CAN tell you what book it is if you ask, BUT if you don't own the book, it won't help, will it? Not to mention if someone ELSE has the book, it will help them. You can ask pretty much anything, but I may not answer it, specifically on words or letters on the line most likely. Just so you know, only one line at a time. No cheating now :). Maybe it's a bit difficult, but meh. If it takes a while I may do easier questions, if you get it easy, maybe harder ones. If no-one bothers to answer, I'll probably not do it anymore. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted September 23, 2008 Report Share Posted September 23, 2008 finally you showed us your cards...so your main char's deck is a Chemical subtype deck but won't it be better to post a separate thread under the custom cards section Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aelsthla-Mental Posted September 23, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 23, 2008 ...Hoh boy. NOW you tell me. As for chemical sub-type. I've considering changing it, as they really have no effect connection. Really they should either be a type in their own right or have chemical in all their names. Probably having chemical in their name would be the best idea. I guess I'll consider putting the cards in the "Written Card" section later. Well, I suppose I could just go 'copy and paste'. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted September 24, 2008 Report Share Posted September 24, 2008 Booknameplz. I want a challenge. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aelsthla-Mental Posted September 25, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 25, 2008 Ok then. It is... Artemis Fowl: The Arctic Incident And don't fret, it isn't a generic line e.g. 'He said'. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aelsthla-Mental Posted September 25, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 25, 2008 Sorry for the rather quick bump, but the next chapter has been put up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted September 26, 2008 Report Share Posted September 26, 2008 ‘And cut,’ Erebos murmured, pausing the camera. ‘Take five people, that’s a wrap.’ Wasn't that line from a different Artemis Fowl book? Like the one with Opal? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aelsthla-Mental Posted September 26, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 26, 2008 You do realize Opal is in pretty much every second book right? *pauses*. Wait, so far she IS. Book two, book four, book six... Yep. isn't that funny? Well, Close enough anyway. You got the right line, but it was actually said by Foaly. check out page 217 of The Arctic Incident if you don't believe me! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted September 26, 2008 Report Share Posted September 26, 2008 You do realize Opal is in pretty much every second book right? *pauses*. Wait' date=' so far she IS. Book two, book four, book six... Yep. isn't that funny? Well, Close enough anyway. You got the right line, but it was actually said by Foaly. check out page 217 of The Arctic Incident if you don't believe me![/quote'] I did know it was said by Foaly; I just guess the post got misinterpreted. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aelsthla-Mental Posted September 26, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 26, 2008 I figured as much a minute after i sent my own post, ahh well. Still good job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aelsthla-Mental Posted September 28, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 28, 2008 *Bump* Sorry, I may not update the chapters for a bit. I got to do two stories for this Still, I'll get to it. The fact that it's the holidays now will help. So... what do people think of the "Freezing Fitzgerald"? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted September 28, 2008 Report Share Posted September 28, 2008 *Bump* Sorry' date=' I may not update the chapters for a bit. I got to do two stories for this Still, I'll get to it. The fact that it's the holidays now will help. So... what do people think of the "Freezing Fitzgerald"? like the idea...in fact I plan to use the Dark Synchro idea for ch 40 of my fanfic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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