sironthemage Posted June 28, 2008 Report Share Posted June 28, 2008 12:00 am "CLICK!" was the sound the door made when the 14 year old boy picked the lock to enter "The Johnson's Duel Shop." He crept in with ease closing the door behind him. He then walked over to a nearby counter and jumped over it. "CLICK" was the sound made by the lights turning on. The boy froze knowing that he was caught. An old man walked in from the back door. He looked as if he had exepected this to happen. The Old Man: What is your name son? At the sound of the old man's voice, the boy ran to the door he entered. But before he could touch the handle of the door, he felt a yank on his collar. Boy's thoughts: This old man is fast! The boy's heart dropped. He knew the consequences for stealing Duel Monster Cards. The Old Man: What is your name son. Noris: My name is Noris sir. Noris noticed that the old man's face didn't show any anger, which made it easier to tell him his name. The old man loosened his iron grip on Noris's collar. Tenjii: Well my name is Tenjii. May I ask why you are in my shop at this time? Don't you know that my shop opens at 1pm and closes at 9pm? Noris: Yes sir. I just........... wanted to get some cards for my friends. Tenjii turned around and folded his arms. Tenjii Well I could juist send you off to the PPM (Perunga Punishment Center) Noris fell down to his knees. His heart fell and he felt cold. He could see it now. Inmates taking food of his lunch tray that wasn't even worth eating, and some guy named Bobby asking him to read uncensored letters sent by his girlfriend. Noris: NO, PLEASE! DON'T SEND ME THERE. I'LL DO ANYTHING. The old man was shaking up with laughter. Tenjii: Don't be so dull boy. I was just being sarcastic. The 2 symptoms came quickly. First, Noris was confused then he was angry. Noris: You old bag! How dare you scare me like that. you could have given me a heart attack at my young age. Tenjii's laugh became an uproar. Noris: WHAT IN THE HELL IS SO FUNNY! Tenjii's laugh faded away.He wiped the tears away from his eyes for laughing too hard. Tenjii: Oh, you should have seen the your face. You looked liked a liile wining baby. Noris's face flushed with embarrasment. Tenjii; Look here Sonny. I won't send you to the PPC on one condition. You have to duel me and win. Noris smirked Noris; I accept. The End Make sure you guys look for Chapter 1 to see how this duel turns out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sironthemage Posted June 28, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 28, 2008 Please excuse some of my mistakes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yogg-Saron Posted June 28, 2008 Report Share Posted June 28, 2008 Nice, a bit short, buts its a Prologue.....Good job? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sironthemage Posted June 28, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 28, 2008 Nice' date=' a bit short, buts its a Prologue.....Good job?[/quote'] Thank you. I promise to make the Chapters longer. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sironthemage Posted June 28, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 28, 2008 Please read my story and comment it. I don't even care if you don't like it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kale Posted July 1, 2008 Report Share Posted July 1, 2008 okay, first: dont double post... i know its been three days, but you double posted twice... ^_^ anywho, to the fan fic. this is an interesting prologue, and the dialogue was god up until the end. something was just... lost as it got to the end.... i cant put my finger on it. ^_^ nothing really happened in this one, so i cant exactly rate it... but a fair rating for this would be an 8/10. ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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