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I'm finally finished judging, sorry ffor the wait, took a looong time. 4273 words of Judgment Doom.

 

Grammar: 20% (Whether or not it is worded properly.)

Name: 5% (Coolness of name)

Picture: 15% (Coolness of picture and it's sync with the name.)

Balance: 20% (How overpowered or underpowered it is.)

Effect Quality: 20% (Shows thought put into it, is fairly long.)

Originality: 10% (Its unique-ness)

Little things: 10% (Good Set ID, no circulation.)

 

Wombat the Wanderer’s Obsidiorn, Heart of the Mountain

 

The Card’s Effect:

 

If you have 6 or more cards in your hand, you can Tribute Summon this card with only 1 Tribute. If 4 or more Monster Card Zones on your side of the field are occupied, all Rock-Type mosters on the field gain 500 ATK. If your opponent activates a Spell or Trap Card during your Battle Phase, you can tribute one monster on your side of the field to negate the activation of the Spel or Trap card that and destroy it. If this card is destroyed by battle and sent to the Graveyard, destroy all monsters on your side of the field.

 

OCG-Fixed Effect:

 

If you have 6 or more cards in your hand, you can Tribute Summon this card with 1 Tribute. While 4 or more of your Monster Card Zones are occupied, all Rock-Type monsters on the field gain 500 ATK. If your opponent activates a Spell or Trap Card during your Battle Phase, you can Tribute 1 monster you control to negate the activation of the Spell or Trap Card and destroy it. When this card is destroyed by battle, destroy all monsters you control.

 

Errors:

 

-Should be Level 7, or the first sentence is rather meaningless.

-the word “only” isn’t supposed to be in there.

-one=1

-tribute needs a capital T.

-If=While

-on your side of the field=of your

-monsters is misspelled

-tribute needs a capital T again

-one=1 again

-Spel=Spell

-the word “that” isn’t supposed to be in there

-If=When

-on your side of the field=you control.

 

OCG: 10/20 Could use some work.

 

Name: Nice, but the word “Heart” doesn’t really work, it doesn’t have any resemblance to a heart, or being part of the mountain. Maybe Giant of the Mountain or Soul of the Mountain. 4/5

 

Picture: I like it, but not any sync with the word “heart.” 13/15

 

Balance: Maybe a little underpowered. It’s a bit of a stretch for the first 2 effects, and the third effect doesn’t really balance the last effect. Its stats are weak, since I’m assuming you meant for it to be a 7-star monster given the first effect. 14/20

 

Effect Quality: Well thought out and nice length, although the first sentence is bad since it doesn’t work with the level. 15.5/20

 

Originality: First effect slightly resembles Malicious Edge, but other than that you’re golden. 9/10

 

Little Things: Perfect 10/10

 

10+4+13+14+15.5+9+10=75.5/100 75.5%

 

element8923’s Mechanical Harpie Boy

 

The Card’s Effect:

 

If this card is in defense position, destroy this card. When this card is Normal Summoned or Flip Summoned, add 2 cards from your opponent’s side of the field to their respective decks, and 1 card from your side of the field. This card cannot be destroyed by battle (Damage Calculation is applied normally.) While this card is face-up on your side of the field, your opponent cannot attack monsters on your side of the field with “Harpie” in their name(s).

 

OCG fixed effect: If this card is in face-up Defense Position, destroy it. When this card is Normal Summoned or Flip Summoned, return 2 cards your opponent controls and 1 card you control to the owners’ Decks. This card cannot be destroyed by battle. (Damage Calculation is applied normally.) While you control this face-up card, your opponent cannot select “Harpie” monsters you control as attack targets.

 

Errors:

 

-Cap D and P in Defense Position.

-add=return

-from your opponent’s side of the field=your opponent controls.

-to their respective=to the owners’

-Cap D in Deck.

-mid-sentence text should be at the end.

-period missing after the word “battle”.

-this card is face-up on your side of the field=you control this face-up card.

-monsters with “Harpie” in their names= “Harpie” monsters

-on your side of the field=you control

-attack=select as attack targets.

 

OCG 9/10 needs more effort.

 

Name: It works. 5/5

 

Picture: The background is problematic. The boy itself is decent, but iffy. 12/15

 

Balance: It’s a +1 right of the bat, and ensures safety from battle for all Harpie monsters. That’s really overpowered. Pot of Greed meets Mist Bodies for all Harpies. 10/20

 

Effect Quality: If no Harpie monsters can be attacked, how’s this supposed to be destroyed by battle? Looks hastily done. 13/20

 

Originality: Shows signs of Marauding Captain, Dark Cat with White Tail, and Marshmallon. 6/10

 

Little Things: EN is missing from the Set ID 9/10

 

9+5+12+10+13+6+9=64/100 64%

 

tectonix55’s Delirious Diva

 

The Card’s Effect:

 

During a player’s Standby Phase, remove from play 1 card from their Graveyard. If you cannot, destroy this card. When this face-up card is sent from the field to the Graveyard, both players select 1 of their cards that was removed from play by this card’s effect. Add the selected cards to their respective owners’ hands and return all other cards that were removed from play by this card’s effect to their respective Graveyards.

 

OCG fixed effect:

 

Each player must remove from play 1 random card from their Graveyard during each of their Standby Phases. If either player cannot, destroy this card. When this face-up card is sent from the field to the Graveyard, each player adds 1 card that was removed from play by this card’s effect to their hands. The remaining cards removed from play by this card’s effect are added to their owners’ Graveyards.

 

Errors:

 

-In “During a player’s Standby Phase” “a” is never used and isn’t the proper wording here.

-You can’t randomly do something for your opponent, they must randomly do that thing, check Spirit Reaper: “your opponent randomly discards 1 card.”

Not “randomly discard 1 card from your opponent’s hand.

-You in the second sentence should be either player, since this conflicts with what I said above.

-Both players is outdated, it is now each player, check Magician’s Circle from Champion Pack 4.

-Select is outdated and unnecessary, they just add the cards to their hand.

-to the owners’ hands is not used because there’s no question that it will be to the owners’ hands if it is removed from play. In the case of Grand Mole or Compulsory Evacuation Device, it could’ve been either player’s card originally, but when each player adds 1 of their removed from play cards to their hands, there is no doubt.

-respective is outdated.

-all other cards=the remaining cards. Check Reasoning.

-respective is outdated (again).

 

11/20 Trying new ideas can result in problematic OCG.

 

Name: Awesome. 5/5

 

Picture: The diva looks a little sharp and pencil-ish. And is a little too dark against the background. But it’s still a good picture overall. 14/15

 

Balance: Both players get the same effect, so I’d say it’s balanced. 19/20

 

Effect Quality: You put a good amount of thought into it, and it flows together nicely. 18.5/20

 

Originality: Mild resemblance to Cyber Jar, but otherwise it’s fine. 9/10

 

Little Things: No circulation + good Set ID=Perfect. 10/10

 

 

11+5+14+19+18.5+9+10=86.5/100 86.5%

 

Very Nicely Done!

 

ghosts’ Mega Dark Dragon

 

The card’s effect:

 

When this card is summoned onto the field, you can increase this monsters attack and defence by 500 for each dragon in your graveyard.

 

OCG fixed effect: The original ATK and DEF of this card are equal to the number of Dragon-Type monsters in your Graveyard x 500.

 

Errors:

 

-Cap S in Summoned

-onto is never ever used

-First part of sentence before comma is unnecessary.

-attack=ATK

-defence=DEF

-dragon=Dragon-Type monster

-Cap G in Graveyard.

-Effect is not worded properly.

-Only use 1 question mark in the ATK and DEF, not four.

 

 

6/20 (Not good for a short effect, not good at all.)

 

Name: Ehhh, it’s pretty cool. A little like Megarock Dragon and this would seem like a DARK counterpart despite being completely different, but good enough. 4/5

 

Picture: It shows the sheer size and ferocity of the dragon, he’s bigger than the castle, really shows the majestic glory of a dragon. G’job. I’ve seen the pic a few times but I don’t care about overused pics. 15/15

 

Balance: This could get really big, 5000 ATk with 10 monsters, but with the speed of duels these days it’s really nothing more than I giant beatstick, much like Megarock Dragon, wouldn’t change the meta too much were it to be released. 15/20

 

Effect Quality: Short, rushed, and dismal. Sorry, that’s just how it is. 8/20

 

Originality: Reminds me of stuff like Chaos Necromancer, maybe Megarock a bit, not too original. 5/10

 

Little Things: Perfect! 10/10

 

 

10+5+8+15+15+4+6=63% That’s actually a lot better than I thought you’d do when I first saw it, g’job. Needs a lot of work though, shows little effort and a rushed job. Please consult DJ Osiris’s new sticky to help with your wording.

 

ygo’s Divine Dragon

 

The Card’s effect: Once per turn, by discarding 1 card from your hand all monsters on your opponent’s side of the field are changed to Defense Position. This card gains 100 ATK points for every Dragon-Type monster in your Graveyard When this card attacks a Dragon-Type monster this card looses 1000 ATK points.

 

OCG fixed effect:

 

Once per turn, you can discard 1 card to switch all monsters your opponent controls to Defense Position. This card gains 100 ATK for each Dragon-Type monster in your Graveyard. When this card attacks a Dragon-Type monster, this card loses 1000 ATK after Damage Calculation.

 

Errors:

 

-by discarding=you can discard

-from your hand is outdated

-on your opponent’s side of the field=your opponent controls.

-Don’t say points after ATK, just say ATK.

-every=each.

-Missing period after Graveyard.

-loses is misspelled.

-You didn’t specify whether it loses ATK during the ATK or after the ATK is done.

 

12/20 Pretty good, could use some work.

 

Name: Pretty plain, but it works. 4/5

 

Pic: I like it, although I don’t like the black background. 13/15

 

Balance: It’s balanced enough. Can grow pretty big ATK-wise, but with the speed of duels these days it doesn’t really matter. 16.5/20

 

Effect Quality: I like it for the most part, but the attempt to flow out the ATK boost by decreasing its ATK when it destroys a Dragon-Type monster doesn’t really work because the chance of it going up against a Dragon are relatively low. Fairly good amount of effort 15.5/20

 

Originality: Reminds me of Chaos Necromancer and Red-Eyes Darkness a bit but it’s still pretty original. 7/10

 

Little Things: Set ID should be DC-EN001 7.5/10

 

7.5+7+15.5+16.5+13+4+12= 75.5=75.5% Nicely Done

 

orihime’s Kakashi Hatake

 

The Card’s Effect: When this card is face-up on the field, your opponent can not select “Sakura Haruno”, “Sasuke Uchiha”, or *Naruto Uzimaki as attack targets.

 

OCG fixed effect: As long as you control this face-up card, your opponent cannot designate “Sakura Haruno”, “Sasuke Uchiha”, or “Naruto Uzimaki” as an attack target.

Errors:

 

-When this card is face-up on the field=As long as you control this face-up card.

-can not=cannot

-select=designate when referring to attack targets.

-Naruto Uzimaki isn’t fully in quotations.

-as attack targets=as an attack target.

 

For such a short effect, it’s a little sub-par, but good enough. 12/20

 

Name: Would be better with some sorta caption, such as “Kakashi Hatake, the Chidori Master” or somethin’ like that. Just a name is kinda, meh. :? 3.5/5

 

Picture: It’s good enough, but the background’s a little blurry and it would be better to see him in action, actually doing something other than just standing there looking pretty. 12/15

 

Balance: I haven’t seen the 3 cards in the effect, and don’t know if they loop in with his effect to create some ultimate power effect, but based on just his effect alone assuming the cards listed are vanillas since they aren’t present it’s pretty balanced given his low stats. 16/20

 

Effect Quality: it’s a little short, don’cha think? Not much though put into it, could be done pretty quickly. 10/20

 

Originality: Reminds me of Marauding Captain and Magician’s Valkyria a bit. 6.5/10

 

Little Things: Perfect! 10/10

 

10+6.5+10+16+12+3.5+12=70=70% Not bad, a little plain.

 

Devo20’s Star Bolt Soldier

The Card’s Effect:

 

Spirit of Stars=Galaxcy Solider

If there are no Monsters with the light attribute in your graveyard destrory this card.If this Card is destroyed you may this cards attack points by 1000 to keep it on the field if you cannot this card I s destroyed.

 

“Spirit of Stars” + “Galaxy Soldier”

If no LIGHT monsters exist in your Graveyard, destroy this card. If this card would be destroyed, it is not destroyed and this card loses 1000 ATK. If this card cannot lose 1000 ATK, destroy this card.

 

Errors:

-Robot is not a type, use Machine, it’s exactly the same as robot only it’s a real type.

-Spirit of Stars should be in quotations.

-Put a space between Spirit of Stars and the plus sign.

-Galaxy is misspelled.

-Soldier is misspelled.

-Galaxy Soldier should be in quotations.

-Put a space between the plus sign and Galaxy Soldier.

-Monsters has no capital M

-monsters with a light attribute=LIGHT monster

-graveyard needs a capital G

-If this card is destroyed=if this card would be destroyed.

-Card has no capital C

-comma after if this card would be destroyed.

-may=can.

-decrease is outdated.

-cards needs an apostrophe.

-attack=ATK

-Don’t say points, just ATK.

-to keep it on the field=it is not destroyed

-this card is destroyed=destroy this card.

 

20 mistakes. That’s utterly abysmal, nothing more to say. I STRONGLY suggest you study DJ Osiris’ new OCG sticky as hard as you can. 0/20

 

Name: Cool. 5/5

 

Picture: Black background=bad. Lightning’s pretty unspectacular. 10/15

 

Balance: Eh, it’s ok for a Fusion Monster. A little powerful. 14/20

 

Effect Quality: Looks very rushed, not too long, OCG is terrible. 10/20

 

Originality: Reminds me of a kinda alternative Light and Darkness Dragon, pretty good. 8/10

 

Little Things: Set ID should be STRBL-EN and then a 3-digit number. 7.5/10

 

7.5+8+10+14+10+5+0=54.5 54.5% Needs vast improvement.

 

Tommers2008’s Remoro King Dragon

The Card’s Effect: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by removing from play 3 Dragon-Type monster(s) from your hand or in your Graveyard. This card is removed from play at the End Phase of the turn it was Special Summoned. When this card is Special Summoned destroy all monsters on the field except this card. This card is not affected by Spell or Trap Cards.

 

OCG fixed effect: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by removing from play 3 Dragon-Type monsters from your hand or Graveyard. This card is removed from play during the End Phase of the turn it was Special Summoned. When this card is Special Summoned, destroy all monsters on the field except this card. This card is unaffected by Spell or Trap Cards.

 

Errors:

-The bracketed s isn’t needed, it’s always plural so just use an s at the end.

-in your isn’t needed before Graveyard.

-at=during.

-comma after when this card is Special Summoned.

-not affected=unaffected.

 

15/20 Your improvement is scary. That’s one of the best OCG marks I’ve ever given in my contests.

 

Name: Pretty cool. 4.5/5

 

Picture: Doesn’t look too kingly, but it works. 14/15

 

Balance: Nukes the field and loses your opponent close to half the total amount of LP. A little overpowered even with fact that it only lasts one turn. 14/20

 

Effect Quality: Nice and long, you took your time and put a good amount of though into it. 18/20

 

Originality: Slight resemblance to Judgment Dragon, nothing serious. 9/10

 

Little Things: Set ID is wrong, should be 1ST-EN_ _ _ 8/10

 

8+9+18+14+14+4.5+15=83.5=83.5% You’ve improved greatly, nice work. ^_^

 

TIBONE LUIS’s Behemoth,The Demon Of Animal Strength

 

The card’s effect: Switch this card to face down defence position after it attacks.

 

OCG fixed effect: When this card attacks, flip this card into face-down Defense Position at the end of the Battle Phase.

 

Errors:

 

-Switch=flip

-to=into

-face down=face-down

-Defense is misspelled f we’re going by the way Konaami spells it, which is by American spelling.

-cap d and p in Defense Position.

-after it attacks=at the end of the Battle Phase.

 

Not good for 1 sentence 9/20

 

Name: Of and The don’t have capital first letters in names, there’s already a card called Behemoth, the King of all Animals, and their can’t be 2 Behemoths unless this is a counterpart, which it clearly isn’t. 2/5

 

Picture: That thing is cool. 15/15

 

Balance: Overpowered, has way too much attack for a 4-star, and it’s like Goblin Forces and Giant Orc with a shortened drawback, with more ATK, it should haave a longer drawback. Needs another level. 14/20

 

Effect Quality: 1 sentence. Need I say more? 9/20

 

Originality: As I said, it highly resembles Goblin Forces and Giant Orc, not too mention there’s already a Behemoth. 4/10

 

Little Things: Your disclaimer’s already in your post, you don’t need it in your card, leave circulation blank. Set ID should be ROTD-EN015 6/10

 

6+4+9+14+15+2+9=59=59% More effort required.

 

Raviel Priest WYHE’s Nitro Dragon

 

The card’s effect: "Nitro Synchron"+1 or more non-Tuner monsters

Once per turn, you can remove 1 monster in your graveyard from play, so that this card gains ATK equal to half of the removed monster's ATK until the end of the Battle Phase. When this card destroys a monster in battle, destroy 1 monster on your opponent's side of the field.

 

OCG fixed effect: "Nitro Synchron" + 1 or more non-Tuner monster(s)

Once per turn, you can remove from play 1 monster from your Graveyard. Until the end of your Battle Phase, this card gains ATK equal to half of the removed monster’s ATK. When this card destroys a monster by battle, destroy 1 monster your opponent controls.

 

Errors:

 

-The plus sign needs space on either side.

-You need a bracketed s at the end of non-Tuner monsters, not just an s.

-remove from play ____, not remove ____ from play.

-Cap G in Graveyard.

-You bungled the second sentence a bit, check Phantom of Chaos, it shows what I put, Until the end of your Battle Phase etc.

-in battle=by battle.

-on your opponent’s side of the field=your opponent controls.

 

13/20 It’s alright.

 

Name: Cool! ^_^ 5/5

 

Picture: Background’s a bit bland, and the text and logo at the bottom aren’t good, but it fits with the name and the dragon itself is awesome. 11/15

 

Balance: Really it’s just a big beatstick, but the last part of the last sentence kinda pushed it over the edge. 15/20

 

Effect Quality: Pretty good amount of effort show. ^_^ 17.5/20

 

Originality: Reminds me of Nitro Warrior with the battle phase effect, and the tune from Nitro Synchron. 6/10

 

Little Things: You need a Set ID. 6/10

 

6+6+17.5+15+11+5+13=73.5=73.5% Not bad Raviel Priest, better than the Water contest for sure.

 

Prifior’s The Eye of Faith

 

The card’s effect:

 

The Eye of Unity + The Eye of Chaos

For every turn this card is on the field you may choose 1 of the following effects:

- see 1 card from your opponents deck

- see 1 card from your opponents hand

 

OCG fixed effect:

 

“The Eye of Unity” + “The Eye of Chaos”

Once per turn, you can activate 1 of the following effects:

- See the top card from your opponent’s Deck.

- See 1 random card from your opponent’s hand.

 

Errors:

 

-For every turn=Once per turn

-Comma before you.

-may=can

-choose=activate

-See is at the start of the sentence, so cap the s.

-You need to specify whether it is a random card or the top card or the bottom card of your opponent’s deck.

-opponents needs an apostrophe.

-You need a period at the end of the sentence.

-See is at the start of the sentence, so cap the s. (Again)

-You need to specify whether it is a random card card that you see in your opponent’s hand or not.

-opponents needs an apostrophe. (Again)

-You need a period at the end of the sentence. (Again)

-Faith – God is not a real type. Choose Fairy or Psychic or Spellcaster

-Divine is an attribute used only for the 3 egyptian god cards, if you use it elsewhere, it’s unrealistic.

 

OCG 4/20 Pretty dismal T_T

 

Name: Sure, why not? ^_^ 5/5

 

Picture: I don’t like the black background eating up most of the pic. :( 12/15

 

Balance: Defense is a little steep. 14/20

 

Effect Quality: Pretty short and basic. 12/20

 

Originality: It IS original. ^_^ 10/10

 

Little things: Set ID is bungled. 7/10

 

7+10+12+14+12+5+4=64=64% Keep practicing.

 

Schyster’s Princess Aika Yoshiko

 

The card’s effect: Discard 1 monster from your hand to increase the ATK of this card by 200 points x the Level of the discarded card until your next Standby Phase. When this card destroys a monster as a result of battle, you can Special Summon 1 Warrior-type monster from your Graveyard that has a Level equal to, or lower than, the Level of the destroyed monster. You cannot declare an attack with that monster this turn. When this card is destroyed by a card effect, you can add 1 Warrior-type monster from your Graveyard to your hand other than "Princess Aika Yoshiko".

 

OCG fixed effect:

 

Discard 1 monster. This card gains attack equal to the Level of the discarded card x 200 until your next Standby Phase. When this card destroys a monster by battle, you can Special Summon 1 Warrior-Type monster from your Graveyard whose Level is equal to or lower than the Level of the destroyed monster. You cannot declare an attack with that monster during the turn it was Special Summoned. When this card is destroyed by a card effect, you can add 1 Warrior-Type monster from your Graveyard to your hand except "Princess Aika Yoshiko".

 

Errors:

-from your hand is outdated.

-increase is outdated.

-don’t say points, just ATK

-should be x the number, not x the level. Check Thestalos, Chaos Necromancer, etc.

-as a result of is outdated, it is now by battle, check Maarshmallon etc.

-Warrior-Type not Warrior-type.

-that has a=whose

-unneeded comma

-unneeded comma (again)

-Warrior-Type not Warrior-type (again)

-other than=except.

 

OCG 11/20 (Lotsa outdated stuff, read DJ’s new sticky.)

 

-Name: Ok, could use a captian or some kinda adjective in there. 4/5

 

Pic: It’s good! 15/15

 

Balance: Might be OP’ed since you can do the firsrt effect as much as you want and with all of its search effects…yeah. 13/20

 

Effect Quality: You put a lot of thought and length into it, nice. 20/20

 

Originality: It’s original. 10/10

 

Little things: Leave circulation blank, you don’t have a gold sticker so it’s unrealistic. 7/10

 

7+10+20+13+15+4+11=80=80% Very Nice. ^_^

 

BH10’s Apocalypse the Shadow King

 

The Card’s effect:

 

Dark Heart + 1 Fiend Monster

This card can only be fusion summoned by the effect of ‘Dark Fusion.’ This cards original ATK & DEF is equal to the combined ATK of the monsters used to fusion summon this card. As long as this card is face-up on the field, the field is treated as ‘Pandemonium.”

 

OCG fixed effect:

“Dark Heart” + 1 Fiend-Type monster

This card can only be Fusion Summoned by the effect of “Dark Fusion”. The original ATK and DEF of this card are equal to the combined ATK of the Fusion Material Monsters used to Fusion Summon this card. All Field Spell Cards are treated as “Pandemonium”.

 

Errors:

-Dark Heart needs to be in quotation marks.

-Fiend Monster=Fiend-Type monster

-Cap f and s on Fusion Summoned.

-cards needs an apostrophe.

-&=and

-is=are

-monsters=Fusion Material Monsters

-As long as this card remains face-up on the field is outdated.

-Last sentence is hard to understand, I think you meant for Field Spell cards to be treated as Pandemonium.

1 ? not 4.

 

10/20 Keep practicing.

 

Name: Cool. ^_^ 5/5

Picture: Incredible! 15/15

 

Balance: It’s power fits it since it needs a Fusion monster as material. 18/20

 

Effect Quality: You worked pretty hard on it. 16/20

 

Originality: Reminds me of Evil Heroes 6/10

 

Little Things: Set ID is bungled. 7/10

 

7+6+16+18+15+5+10=77=77% Not bad. Love the pic.

 

DeMeNTeD’s Bloodshot Terror:

 

The card’s effect: This monster cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This monster can only be Special Summoned by Removing 1 Fiend-type monster in your Graveyard from play. You may draw 2 cards during your Draw Phase. If you do this, the ATK and DEF of this monster is halved until the End Phase of your turn.

 

OCG-fixed effect: This monster cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This monster can only be Special Summoned by removing from play 1 Fiend-Type monster from your Graveyard. You can draw 2 cards during your Draw Phase. If you do, the ATK and DEF of this monster are halved until the End Phase.

 

Errors:

 

-Uncap R in removing.

-removing from play _______, not removing ________ from play

-from your Graveyard not in your Graveyard.

-Fiend-Type not Fiend-type.

-may=can

-the word “this” isn’t used, check Gilford the Lightning.

-is=are

13/20 Not bad….

 

Name: Cool. 5/5

 

Picture: Looks a little pencil-ish around the chest and the holo effect should be diagonal, not vertical. 13/15

 

Balance: The drawing effect and Special Summon effect make it pretty cheap advantage-wise. 13/20

 

Effect Quality: Very nice, you worked hard on these. 18/20

 

Originality: Reminds me of card like Gigantes, Aqua Spirit, and Silpheed with the Summoning requirement. 7/10

 

Little things: Set ID should be NBSC-EN001 8/10

 

8+7+18+13+13+5+13=77/100=77% Pretty good. ^_^

 

TheAlmightyAnimator: Too late.

 

1.Tectonix55: 86.5%

2.Tommers2008: 83.5%

3.Schyster: 80%

4.DeMeNTeD: 77%

4.BH10: 77%

6.Wombat the Wanderer: 75.5%

7.Raviel Priest WYHE: 73.5%

8. Orihime: 70%

9. Element8923: 64.5%

10. Prifior: 64%

11. TIBONE LUIS: 59%

12. Ghosts: 63%

13. Devo20: 54.5%

 

Thanks to all contestants for making this possible. ^_^

 

Tectonix I've maxed my reps so you'll get your 3rd rep tomorrow. All other reps have been distributed. ^_^

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Schyster’s Princess Aika Yoshiko

 

The card’s effect: Discard 1 monster from your hand to increase the ATK of this card by 200 points x the Level of the discarded card until your next Standby Phase. When this card destroys a monster as a result of battle' date=' you can Special Summon 1 Warrior-type monster from your Graveyard that has a Level equal to, or lower than, the Level of the destroyed monster. You cannot declare an attack with that monster this turn. When this card is destroyed by a card effect, you can add 1 Warrior-type monster from your Graveyard to your hand other than "Princess Aika Yoshiko".

 

OCG fixed effect:

 

Discard 1 monster. This card gains attack equal to the Level of the discarded card x 200 until your next Standby Phase. When this card destroys a monster by battle, you can Special Summon 1 Warrior-Type monster from your Graveyard whose Level is equal to or lower than the Level of the destroyed monster. You cannot declare an attack with that monster during the turn it was Special Summoned. When this card is destroyed by a card effect, you can add 1 Warrior-Type monster from your Graveyard to your hand except "Princess Aika Yoshiko".

 

Errors:

-from your hand is outdated.

-increase is outdated.

-don’t say points, just ATK

-should be x the number, not x the level. Check Thestalos, Chaos Necromancer, etc.

-as a result of is outdated, it is now by battle, check Maarshmallon etc.

-Warrior-Type not Warrior-type.

-that has a=whose

-unneeded comma

-unneeded comma (again)

-Warrior-Type not Warrior-type (again)

-other than=except.

 

OCG 11/20 (Lotsa outdated stuff, read DJ’s new sticky.)

 

-Name: Ok, could use a captian or some kinda adjective in there. 4/5

 

Pic: It’s good! 15/15

 

Balance: Might be OP’ed since you can do the firsrt effect as much as you want and with all of its search effects…yeah. 13/20

 

Effect Quality: You put a lot of thought and length into it, nice. 20/20

 

Originality: It’s original. 10/10

 

Little things: Leave circulation blank, you don’t have a gold sticker so it’s unrealistic. 7/10

 

7+10+20+13+15+4+11=80=80% Very Nice. ^_^[/quote']

 

wow. i didn't know i wuz such an old-school guy. and yeah, i forgot to make her power-up effect a once-per-turn deal. lol! other people have mentioned that i have an obsession with commas. overall, i'd have to say that yours is the most thorough, honest and accurate judging that i've ever received for any of my cards. thanks man. good job!

 

1.Tectonix55: 86.5%

2.Tommers2008: 83.5%

3.Schyster: 80%

4. DeMeNTeD: 77%

5.BH10: 77%

6.Wombat the Wanderer: 75.5%

7.Raviel Priest WYHE: 73.5%

8. Orihime: 70%

9. Element8923: 64.5%

10. Prifior: 64%

11. TIBONE LUIS: 59%

12. Ghosts: 63%

13. Devo20: 54.5%

 

Thanks to all contestants for making this possible. ^_^

 

i haven't gone over all of the cards you rated, but i agree with the top 3. damn, almost didn't make it! i'm looking forward to other contests you may hold in the future. again, good job!

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Thanks for overseeing my cards & telling me of my improvement.

Next time you'll be having a contest...I'll be watching...

 

P.S.My entries are now released for the site to see & also doubles as a thread celebration simultaneously.

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