goofy archetype

[Petar Blazi]

i dont know what im doing with my life

the archetype is cool because you can xyz summon with banished cards

just ignore the hypotenuse ai shit at the bottom of the images (its an ai image generator i used for the art because i cant draw for shit loool)

[Pommelo]

This is actually not too bad, Eye like it.I find it funny that people insist in calling materials "Overlay Unit" Is that an anime term? Well, while it actually sounds cool, you should avoid it, it's material (not even Xyz Material, just "material", the former was correct for a time but Konami simplified it). Another thing to note about the Xyz is that it massively Summons Eyes, but the wording should be "as many "Eyelement" monsters as possible" because right now it says "all", and that doesn't work.

Also avoid saying "points". All face-up "Eyelement" monsters gain 500 ATK/DEF. 

Spells do never have (Quick Effect). That is reserved for Effect Monsters. Spells can have Spell Speed 2 Effects, yes, also known as Fast Effects, and I'm not talking about Quick-Play Spells, but for that, you need a structure similar to (my typical example I've used a million times) Ancient City - Rainbow Ruins bullet effect 3. As you can see, it's a QUick-Like effect that you can apply in response of something.

The Trap... has a Quick-Play symbol, reserved for Spells... you need to remove that lol. And the wording.

Target a number of monsters on the field equal to the number of your banished "Eyelement" monsters; destroy them.

My feedback is starting to feel all over the place, but yeah, it should help a little lol. I'm tired.

[Loleo]

19 hours ago, Rayfield Lumina said:

This is actually not too bad, Eye like it.I find it funny that people insist in calling materials "Overlay Unit" Is that an anime term? Well, while it actually sounds cool, you should avoid it, it's material (not even Xyz Material, just "material", the former was correct for a time but Konami simplified it). Another thing to note about the Xyz is that it massively Summons Eyes, but the wording should be "as many "Eyelement" monsters as possible" because right now it says "all", and that doesn't work.

Overlay Uniits is indeed an anime term

[Pommelo]

3 hours ago, Loleo said:

Overlay Uniits is indeed an anime term

thanks for clarifying, I've seen that so many times and I'm like... eh? Clearly not a YGO anime person, I am xD