Barren Heroes so far (Includes a new one! :) )

[Phantasm12778]

So I recently had been told I made a small mistake in my posting... so I thought I would transfer everything here! I also made a new Barren HERO! Barren HERO Shaded Sun, based off everyone's favorite GX GY effect E hero (or at least, its my favorite), Elemental HERO Necroshade! Constructive Crits only! 

[Loleo]

Hi, I would be happy to critique these cards if you posted their text outside the cards, just makes it wasier to comment on. Breif overview they look wonderful and play off of heroes while being fairly standalone. 

[Phantasm12778]

9 minutes ago, Loleo said:

Hi, I would be happy to critique these cards if you posted their text outside the cards, just makes it wasier to comment on. Breif overview they look wonderful and play off of heroes while being fairly standalone. 

In order of creation:

Lone Spark: If this card is Normal or Special Summoned: discard one random card from your opponents hand. You can send one "Barren HERO" monster from your hand to the GY; Discard one random card from your opponents hand.If this card is used as Fusion Material for the summon of a "Barren HERO" Fusion monster, that monster gains 500 ATK and gains the following effect: If this card is Fusion Summoned, each player sends the top card of their Deck to the GY, then discard one random card from your opponents hand. You can only use each Effect of "Barren HERO Lone Spark" once per turn

Bubble Baron:If this card is Special Summoned: Draw 2 cards. you must control no other monsters to activate and resolve this effect. If this card is the only card in your hand, you can Special Summon it. You can send 1 "Barren HERO" monster from your hand to the GY; Draw 1 card, then discard 1 card. If this card is used for the Fusion Summon of a "Barren HERO" Fusion Monster, that monster gains 500 ATK and gains the following effect: (If this card is Special Summoned forgot to be added) Each player draws two cards then place two cards on the bottom of the Deck in any order. You can only use each effect of "Barren HERO Bubble Baron" Once per turn. You can only Special Summon "Barren HERO Bubble Baron" once per turn

[Loleo]

2 hours ago, Phantasm12778 said:

In order of creation:

Lone Spark: If this card is Normal or Special Summoned: discard one random card from your opponents hand. You can send one "Barren HERO" monster from your hand to the GY; Discard one random card from your opponents hand.If this card is used as Fusion Material for the summon of a "Barren HERO" Fusion monster, that monster gains 500 ATK and gains the following effect: If this card is Fusion Summoned, each player sends the top card of their Deck to the GY, then discard one random card from your opponents hand. You can only use each Effect of "Barren HERO Lone Spark" once per turn

Bubble Baron:If this card is Special Summoned: Draw 2 cards. you must control no other monsters to activate and resolve this effect. If this card is the only card in your hand, you can Special Summon it. You can send 1 "Barren HERO" monster from your hand to the GY; Draw 1 card, then discard 1 card. If this card is used for the Fusion Summon of a "Barren HERO" Fusion Monster, that monster gains 500 ATK and gains the following effect: (If this card is Special Summoned forgot to be added) Each player draws two cards then place two cards on the bottom of the Deck in any order. You can only use each effect of "Barren HERO Bubble Baron" Once per turn. You can only Special Summon "Barren HERO Bubble Baron" once per turn

Lone Spark: If this card is Normal or Special Summoned: discard one random card from your opponent's hand. You can send one "Barren HERO" monster from your hand to the GY; Discard one random card from your opponent's hand. If this card is used as Fusion Material for the summon of a "Barren HERO" Fusion monster, that monster gains 500 ATK and gains the following effect: "If this card is Fusion Summoned: each player must send the top card of their Deck to the GY, then discard one random card from your opponent's hand. You can only use each Effect of "Barren HERO Lone Spark" once per turn

(opponent's has an ' only grammatical correction)

This card is very brutal and even delinquent duo which makes your opponent discard 2 cards is banned still. I think this card would be ok if it lost either the first or second effect, preferably just add the second effect's cost to the first effect.

 

Bubble Baron: If this card is Special Summoned: Draw 2 cards. you must control no other monsters to activate and resolve this effect. If this card is the only card in your hand, you can Special Summon it. You can send 1 "Barren HERO" monster from your hand to the GY; Draw 1 card, then discard 1 card. If this card is used for the Fusion Summon of a "Barren HERO" Fusion Monster, that monster gains 500 ATK and gains the following effect: (If this card is Fusion Summoned forgot to be added) Each player draws two cards then place two cards on the bottom of their Deck in any order. You can only use each effect of "Barren HERO Bubble Baron" Once per turn. You can only Special Summon "Barren HERO Bubble Baron" once per turn. 

(Changed "Special Summon to Fusion Summon for consistency, for the fusion effect changed "the deck" to "their deck" as it is a little more clear idk if there is any precedence for this, but I personally think it sounds better.

Almost perfect! I would argue you shouldn't have to discard for the second effect because it is already 1 for 1. Other than that, perfect!