Vrdog24 Posted September 9, 2022 Report Share Posted September 9, 2022 Hello everyone! I'm currently making cards based on a roleplay me and my friends are doing, these cards will be based on number monsters except with a more technology based redesign and are solely cyberse type (to fit with the digital theme). Sorry for any PSCT errors, feedback on both the card text and the effect are welcome. I will also answer any questions you guys have for me : ) Card Info: Name: Number T39: Utopic Upgrade Light Cyberberse/Xyz/Effect Materials: 2 level 4 Cyberse type monsters Effect: (This card is always treated as a "Utopia" card) If you control a "Techno" spell: You can also Xyz summon this card by using a Utopia monster you control as material (Xyz materials attached to that monster also become Xyz materials for this card). When an attack is declared: You can detach 1 Xyz material and target 1 monster you control; That card gains attack equal to half its original attack Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pommelo Posted September 10, 2022 Report Share Posted September 10, 2022 3 hours ago, Vrdog24 said: Hello everyone! I'm currently making cards based on a roleplay me and my friends are doing, these cards will be based on number monsters except with a more technology based redesign and are solely cyberse type (to fit with the digital theme). Sorry for any PSCT errors, feedback on both the card text and the effect are welcome. I will also answer any questions you guys have for me : ) Hello there! Congrats on your first post and welcome to YCM Well, yes, there are some issues I detect in the card wording. Honestly, though, I'm pretty rusty from some months of inactivity, so I might be wrong in my comment, but I'll try not to mislead you. - For starters, it strikes me as weird that the first effect has a colon, specially because of the also word that comes after. That means it's only one possibility, hence a Summon condition, and that means it doesn't activate -> it doesn't start a chain -> shouldn't have colon. - Note that Xyz Materials are currently only called materials, just like that. It was correct at some point, but Konami changed this around the Link era, I think. Both the graphic and the written effect says You can detach one one, also it doesn't say from where. When you talk about numbers, use the arabic numerals. When an attack is declared: You can detach 1 material from this card, then target 1 monster you control; that target gains ATK equal to half its original ATK. About the card itself, well, it's... fairly weak. I like how it has not OPTs of any kind, so you can very well activate the effect multiple times in a turn... but that won't last much, then it's either get rid of it immediately with another Summon or keep a vanilla mon with not-so-spectacular stats. Given the current power level of the meta, I'd say a second mild effect has a place in this card, which is overall ok but could be enhanced a bit :) Well, that's it from me, remember that all critique is constructive and meant to be a help. Welcome again n.n Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vrdog24 Posted September 10, 2022 Author Report Share Posted September 10, 2022 1 hour ago, Rayfield Lumina said: Hello there! Congrats on your first post and welcome to YCM Well, yes, there are some issues I detect in the card wording. Honestly, though, I'm pretty rusty from some months of inactivity, so I might be wrong in my comment, but I'll try not to mislead you. - For starters, it strikes me as weird that the first effect has a colon, specially because of the also word that comes after. That means it's only one possibility, hence a Summon condition, and that means it doesn't activate -> it doesn't start a chain -> shouldn't have colon. - Note that Xyz Materials are currently only called materials, just like that. It was correct at some point, but Konami changed this around the Link era, I think. Both the graphic and the written effect says You can detach one one, also it doesn't say from where. When you talk about numbers, use the arabic numerals. When an attack is declared: You can detach 1 material from this card, then target 1 monster you control; that target gains ATK equal to half its original ATK. About the card itself, well, it's... fairly weak. I like how it has not OPTs of any kind, so you can very well activate the effect multiple times in a turn... but that won't last much, then it's either get rid of it immediately with another Summon or keep a vanilla mon with not-so-spectacular stats. Given the current power level of the meta, I'd say a second mild effect has a place in this card, which is overall ok but could be enhanced a bit :) Well, that's it from me, remember that all critique is constructive and meant to be a help. Welcome again n.n Thank you for your feedback : ) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Loleo Posted September 10, 2022 Report Share Posted September 10, 2022 Ray leaves some great comments! Would also love to see some "techno" spells! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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