Umbra Posted June 17, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 17, 2008 Mine doesn't have any characters or dialogue (I suppose it's much like the documentary that got lost among the films)' date=' but I worry about my sentencing. I occasionally have very long sentences that feature a lot of commas and in the end I fear that people may miss the point I was originally trying to get across. Any suggestions on how I could fix this would be very useful. Thanks, Frunk.[/quote'] Basically, you ask how to get rid of them commas, and shorten down the sentences? Basically: Outspacing. If you feel that you've written too much, the Enter button is your friend, if only for a single click. Also, punctuation and sentence reconstruction. In some places where you would have placed a comma, end the sentence there, and write the rest in another sentence. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frunk Posted June 18, 2008 Report Share Posted June 18, 2008 Alright. I'll try that in my next chapter. Thanks a lot! :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted July 6, 2008 Report Share Posted July 6, 2008 Since I'm starting on my own fanfic too, this guidelines can really be useful to me now as I'm a greenhorn at this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted July 12, 2008 Report Share Posted July 12, 2008 I have a question:How many fanfics can 1 do at 1 time? (because I have an idea for a new one) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted July 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 13, 2008 I would consider two fanfics as maximum. Descriptions section updated with new text and examples. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted July 20, 2008 Report Share Posted July 20, 2008 I would consider two fanfics as maximum. Descriptions section updated with new text and examples.oh,thanks for the info. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Deucalion Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 Just a general point I want to make. This: Character 1: I am currently talking! Character 2: Talking? O rly? Character 1: Yes rly. Character 2: No wai! Character 1: Yes wai! Character 3: I only got one line... Is horrible. Horrible, horrible, horrible. I adamantly refuse to read any fan fiction with this format. It is hideous. Here, we write literature. The format above, is for scripts. Unless any of you are actually planning to make an episode of YuGiOh, (which is damn unlikely), DO NOT USE THAT FORMAT. It cuts so much out. You can't attach emotion, adverbs, etc, without putting them in brackets after the speaker, and even then, it completely ruins the flow. It just doesn't work. This: "I am currently talking!" shouted Character 1 angrily, his face blushing red with shame. "Talking? O rly?" mocked Character 2 cynically, as she looked at Character 1, contempt clear in her eyes. "Yes rly." whispered Character 1, attempting to hide his emotions from Character 2. "No wai!" Character 2 announced, before walking away, unwilling to even look at Character 1. "Yes wai!" Character 1 begged, desperately pleading for Character 2 to come back. "I only got one line..." said Character 3, his sinister eyes watching them from a distance. See? The latter format works so much better, and flows nicely, because you can attach and interweave descriptions and actions without having to use an abrupt: Character 1 [Angrily]: All your base are belong to me! [Walks away] Which just looks horrible, and doesn't flow at all. Anyway, that is my writing rant for the day. To quote the Terminator "I'll be back!" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted August 23, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 I sort-of covered that under Descriptions, but your post stays, considering the massive amounts of correctness it has. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JG. Posted September 21, 2008 Report Share Posted September 21, 2008 This is great! I want to start a Fanfic thread but i didnt know how to write it. Thanks! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daikun Academy Posted September 23, 2008 Report Share Posted September 23, 2008 Hullow me again so I guess that I need help with one Fan Fic I made here is the Link please in thsi site put how many suck my fic....http://www.fanfiction.net/secure/live_preview.php?storyid=4197340&chapter=1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted September 23, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 23, 2008 What exactly did you need help with? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daikun Academy Posted November 7, 2008 Report Share Posted November 7, 2008 ' pid='1154899' dateline='1222202105']What exactly did you need help with? Hmmmmm exactly the help I need is that somebody tell me what my fan fic need less characters' date=' less card , more action I dunnoOh! by the way sorry by the delay i was bussy on the school[hr']Oh Hmmmm did you read all the chapters? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RyanAtlus Posted January 1, 2009 Report Share Posted January 1, 2009 Damn that all made sense o.O Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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