Guns, I guess

[StupidFox]

Round Gear: Once per turn: You can Target 1 face-up monster on the field; This card gains 500 ATK and if you do, change it's battle position. Once per turn, you can Target 1 Set card on the field; reveal it. You can Banish this card from your GY: Add 1 "Round Sprocket" from your Deck to your hand. You can only use this effect of "Round Gear" once per turn.

Round Cog: Once per turn: You can Target 1 face-up monster on the field; This card gains 500 ATK and if you do, change it's battle position. Once per turn, you can Target 1 card in your opponent's hand; reveal it. You can Banish this card from your GY: Add 1 "Round Sprocket" from your Deck to your hand. You can only use this effect of "Round Cog" once per turn.

Sprocket: If a DARK Machine monster targets a card: You can send this card from your hand/field to the GY, Banish this card from the GY, and/or return this Banished card to the bottom of your Deck, and if you do, destroy 1 card on the field and if you do that, inflict 500 damage to your opponent.

Shot: Send 1 DARK Machine from your hand/field to the GY: Add to your hand 1 "Round Sprocket" from your Deck, GY, or that is currently Banished. You can pay 1000 LP: Return this card from the GY to your hand. You can only use this effect of "Round Shot" once per turn.

I hate this game/stopped playing years ago/etc- So what do I know.

[Pommelo]

1 hour ago, StupidFox said:

I hate this game/stopped playing years ago/etc- So what do I know.

Ummm... I don't know what to say here... the irony of making cards of a game you hate is... interesting. Leaving aside any dual meaning, I'll say I do detest the current state of the game, but I still love its roots, hence I still make cards. Anyway, given your words, or the fact that there's a "WhoCares" everywhere in each card, I'm not sure if you'd actually want feedback, as I don't know you or your intentions, but I want to help, so here I go.

Your grammar is good, but it can use a bit of polishing, so if you allow me:

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Round Gear: Once per turn: You can target 1 face-up monster on the field; this card gains 500 ATK, and if it does, change its battle position. Once per turn: You can target 1 Set card on the field; reveal it. You can banish this card from your GY: Add 1 "Round Sprocket" from your Deck to your hand. You can only use this effect of "Round Gear" once per turn.

Minor details here, specially using of capital letters where you should use lower caps, also a change in and if you do to and if it does, (source, Shiranui Samurai). Also change it's to its. That's a common grammar mistake I make when I type quickly, so I can relate to that. A bit strange that you start using colon correctly for the first effect, but fail to do so in the second.

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Round Cog: Once per turn: You can target 1 face-up monster on the field; this card gains 500 ATK and if it does, change its battle position. Once per turn: You can choose 1 card in your opponent's hand; reveal it. You can banish this card from your GY: Add 1 "Round Sprocket" from your Deck to your hand. You can only use this effect of "Round Cog" once per turn.

Basically the same as Gear. Important note: You can't "target" cards in the hand, so you use the "Choose" term.

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Sprocket: If a DARK Machine monster targets a card: You can banish this card in your hard or field, OR place this banished card on the bottom of your Deck, and if you do, destroy 1 card on the field, and if you do that, inflict 500 damage to your opponent.

This set of cards works around Sproket, so I'm concerned I understood the effect well. Reason I'm not sure is that part, You can send this card from your hand/field to the GY, Banish this card from the GY. It seems that you want to say sent this thing to the GY, then banish it and proceed, but there's no then conjunction to indicate sequence. What I do in my version is to banish the card right from the start, and clearly separate the other possibility with a capitalized OR. I'm not sure either if it's correct to destroy 1 card on the field without targeting, that's one thing to investigate.

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Shot: Send 1 DARK Machine monster from your hand or field to the GY; add 1 "Round Sprocket" from your Deck, GY, or that is banished to your hand. You can pay 1000 LP: Return this card from your GY to your hand. You can only use this effect of "Round Shot" once per turn.

a semi-colon instead of a colon after GY, because, to quote from the wikia, "Text before the semicolon " ; " (but after the colon, if any) describes anything that happens when that card or effect is activated (such as costs and targeting)."

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About the cards... well, probably you don't want to talk about the meta, right? I'll just mention quickly that they're not exactly too powerful and hence wouldn't be very relevant. I like them, tho, but I have a big question, specially about Gear and Cog. They both target 1 mob on the field, gain 500 ATK and change its battle position... problem is, as the wording is, it causes trouble. Who changes battle position? The target, right? If not, your cards would be kinda useless. So, if I'm right in thinking it is the target the one made to change, then the wording I suggested changes, and it would be:

Once per turn: You can target 1 face-up monster on the field; this card gains 500 ATK, and if it does, change that target's battle position.

It's clearer now, right? And well, the engine is fun, you target stuff, gain ATK, change positions, reveal things, all the while Sprocket has its fun. You know what I'd like? If Gear and Cog could transfer their ATK gain to an Extra Deck monster summoned by using them as material, that'd be helpful.

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Well, I hope this was of help n.n

P.D. Again, I dunno what are your plans, but as for me, welcome to YCM, hope you stay

[StupidFox]

3 hours ago, Rayfield Lumina said:

This set of cards works around Sproket, so I'm concerned I understood the effect well. Reason I'm not sure is that part, You can send this card from your hand/field to the GY, Banish this card from the GY. It seems that you want to say sent this thing to the GY, then banish it and proceed, but there's no then conjunction to indicate sequence. What I do in my version is to banish the card right from the start, and clearly separate the other possibility with a capitalized OR. I'm not sure either if it's correct to destroy 1 card on the field without targeting, that's one thing to investigate.

I dont know how to word this, outside of being a possible clusterfuck-

Basically to get the "destroy 1 card" gimmick, you can send it from your hand or field, or Banish it from your GY, or return it to your Deck from the Banished zone. So a single Sprocket can be used at least 3 times before you'd have to grab it again.

[Pommelo]

1 hour ago, StupidFox said:

I dont know how to word this, outside of being a possible clusterfuck-

Basically to get the "destroy 1 card" gimmick, you can send it from your hand or field, or Banish it from your GY, or return it to your Deck from the Banished zone. So a single Sprocket can be used at least 3 times before you'd have to grab it again.

Aaaaaaha... so, in spite of the effort I put in my reply, the one thing I got as response is a defense of the only thing I misunderstood, and I misunderstood due to poor wording... message received.