Guest Star Posted June 25, 2008 Report Share Posted June 25, 2008 Bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Exiro Posted June 25, 2008 Report Share Posted June 25, 2008 Woah Remix, this fan-fic is great! I can't wait till I'll be featured :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Noble Legend Posted June 26, 2008 Report Share Posted June 26, 2008 Excellent, best Fan-Fic i've ever read, it kept me wanting to read more, and more, until there is none leftt!!!!!>!!! :( Make more, love it, 10/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Dinosaur Posted June 26, 2008 Report Share Posted June 26, 2008 As awesome as ever Remix! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Star Posted June 26, 2008 Report Share Posted June 26, 2008 *Duel Spirit World* Riley was afraid. The man staring at him showed no expression. He just stared at Riley. It was almost as if he had no feelings; like he lived to destroy. He didn't look like a regular human, and Riley knew he wasn't a duel spirit. He'd never felt as scared as he did now. It was like he was staring down Death himself. Riley: L..look, we don't have to duel. I'll just give you these cards if you want them. He reached in his pocket to take out the Tormentor cards, but they weren't there. ???: There are no cards. It was a test. I wanted to see if you'd pick up the cards, and you did. That means you are one of the tormentor's successors. It's quite obvious that you have one of your own Tormentor cards, and that is why you picked up the other 3. Riley's hands were shaking. This guy spoke with no expression. He spoke as if he had no emotions. Riley: I...I have no idea what you're talking about. I'm not one of the Tormentor's successors. I don't even know who the Tormentor is. He stopped talking. For a second he thought the world was spinning. It was as if he was trapped in a never ending labyrinth. He couldn't see straight. Suddenly, he saw an image of Obelisk the Tormentor. That's when he realized what the man was talking about. ???: Say whatever you would like to. We are going to duel, and I am going to obtain the last Tormentor card. Riley knew that he was going to have to duel this guy. There was no other choice. So he activated his duel disk. The duelist continued to stare at Riley, and activated his own duel disk. ???: So, shall we begin? Riley: I guess so. ???: You'd think that one of the Tormentor's successors wouldn't be afraid of anything. Riley: I'm not one of the Tormentor's successors! ???: Deny it all you want. I still won't believe you. Now, let's duel. Riley slowly picked up a card from his Deck. Riley: Uh..I summon Thunder Knight (1300/1200). My Thunder Knight gains 400 attack points for each Thunder-Type monster on the field, so his attack increases to 1700. (1300 + 400 = 1700) Riley: Your move. ???: That's the best you can do? I summon Dark Sprocketer (400/0) in Defense Mode. A small creature appeared on the field. ???: I'm not done yet though. You see, when Dark Sprocketer is Normal Summoned, I can discard 1 card to increase its Level by 1. That means it is now a Level 3 monster. Next, I activate the Spell Card Double Summon. With this, I Summon Vampire Orchis (1700/1000). Alright. Now that I have the required monsters on the field, I will Synchro Summon the most powerful monster you'll ever see. This creature is known as Black Rose Dragon (2400/1800). Nathaniel laughed, and the shadow of a huge, plant-covered Dragon appeared behind him. Next Time: The Blade of Cylix! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Parting Shot Posted June 26, 2008 Report Share Posted June 26, 2008 Excellent as usual (except for the stuff I pointed out over MSN :P). Can't wait for Chapter 48 ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dad Posted June 26, 2008 Report Share Posted June 26, 2008 Not bad remix, not bad. What am I saying that was AWESOME! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Star Posted June 26, 2008 Report Share Posted June 26, 2008 Thanks for commenting. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Ruby Posted June 27, 2008 Report Share Posted June 27, 2008 nice chapter ;) sorry it took me so long to comment >.< Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Star Posted June 27, 2008 Report Share Posted June 27, 2008 nice chapter ;) sorry it took me so long to comment >.< Thanks, and don't worry about it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Noble Legend Posted June 27, 2008 Report Share Posted June 27, 2008 That was great, I enjoyed it a lot :), can't wait to see more :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Exiro Posted June 27, 2008 Report Share Posted June 27, 2008 Yay, I'm featured! :) Remix, I just can't describe how good this is. I love EVERYTHING about it, everything. The names are good, it's easy to read through it, the duels are cool, and I love the fact that you use background/intro music. I should start reading from the beginning. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted June 27, 2008 Report Share Posted June 27, 2008 Aren't they creatures that were talked about in Legends? They're not real. Random perhaps unintentional LotT reference is random. And you're totally mistreating the Tormentor cards. With all the backstory behind them, I would have expected more. And we don't even get a hint of what Nathaniel looks like. (I know, since I designed him, but still) Besides, Nathaniel never wanted the Tormentor cards in the first place. If you are going to use an external character, treat him right. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Dinosaur Posted June 27, 2008 Report Share Posted June 27, 2008 When are you posting episode 48? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chaos Impact™ Posted June 27, 2008 Report Share Posted June 27, 2008 very well done can't wait for number 48 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Star Posted June 27, 2008 Report Share Posted June 27, 2008 [center][IMG]http://i212.photobucket.com/albums/cc210/YamiStartrainer/HiddenLegacyBanner.png[/IMG][/center][IMG] [center][url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bhOYwQejCzw][IMG]http://i212.photobucket.com/albums/cc210/YamiStartrainer/OpeningThemeBanner.png[/IMG] [/url][/center][url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bhOYwQejCzw][IMG]http://i212.photobucket.com/albums/cc210/YamiStartrainer/OpeningThemeBanner.png[/IMG] [center][u]Episode 48: The Blade of Cylix[/u][/center][u] [On the last Hidden Legacy: Rayori defeated a duel spirit, known as Ancient Gear Knight, in a duel. After the duel, the Knight returned to the duel spirit world, and Rayori went there with him. Upon arriving there, Rayori found a blade that bared resemblance to the weapon wielded by Vorse Raider. He then met an individual known as Exiro. Riley’s game with the mysterious duelist also got underway. The problem for Riley is, the mysterious duelist Synchro Summons a monster known as Black Rose Dragon. What’s a Synchro Monster, and can Riley take it down?] *Duel Spirit World* The large creature rose up from behind Nathaniel. It was a large black dragon, and it was covered with roses. Riley’s was trembling with fear. It was as if someone was holding him in place while he tried to run. He couldn’t move; the overwhelming amount of fear had glued him to the very spot in which he stood. Riley: [i]What in the world is that thing? [/i] Nathaniel smiled. So far, Riley was reacting just the way he wanted him to. Nathaniel: Don’t worry, you’ll die soon enough. Nathaniel didn’t laugh after making that comment; he just continued to stare at Riley. It seemed as if Death was coming for Riley. He had never felt such fear in his life. As Nathaniel’s dark brown eyes stared at him, he felt like he was staring into an abyss of death; a place where he would soon be trapped for all eternity. Sure, he had defeated Shadow, but even that duel wasn’t as scary as this one. Normally, Riley didn’t get scared of things, but this duel was another story. As the Dragon finally landed on the field, it opened its mouth and fired a large blast of dark energy. The blast smashed into Riley’s Thunder Knight and destroyed it. Riley: Thunder Knight! What happened? Nathaniel: You see, when Black Rose Dragon is Summoned, all monsters on the field, except for the Dragon itself, are destroyed. Riley: That means I’m going to take a lot of damage! Nathaniel: Now then, Black Rose Dragon, attack directly with Black Rose Blast. The Dragon fired another destructive blast at Riley, and he collapsed from the pain of the attack. Riley’s Life Points: 1600 Nathaniel’s Life Points: 4000 Riley saw Ace and Crystal in his mind. Although he was in a great amount of pain from the attack, he could still see what was going on around him. He thought for a second about why he had just seen Ace and Crystal. Maybe it was some sort of sign; someone telling him to believe in himself. [url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BAJQ6rvdrcQ]Background[/url] Nathaniel continued to stare at Riley. His deep brown eyes, so differential from that pale hair, seemed to penetrate any defense Riley could muster. Riley forced himself to stand up. He couldn’t focus very well, and he realized that he was bleeding; probably from when he fell to the ground. Nathaniel: So, you decided to stand up? Riley began to speak. Riley: I’ve told you already, I am not one of the Tormentor’s successors. If you refuse to listen to me, then I’ll have to prove it to you! Riley’s hands weren’t shaking anymore. He was speaking with a lot more confidence. Nathaniel kept his gaze on Riley, but didn't show any reaction. Riley: Sure, the attack from your Dragon hurt, but that doesn’t mean I’m going to quit! I have friends that I care about, and I’m going to save those friends, and the world, from destruction. Nathaniel: Do you even believe that yourself, Riley? Even as we speak, I can see your morale draining away from you. I have seen worse cases than you, Riley. I didn't spare them either. You should just give up here and now. Riley put his hand on his shoulder. Riley: Sure I can barely stand up! Sure I probably have no chance of defeating you! That doesn’t mean I should sit on the ground and cry about it! Nathaniel: You just don't see it, Riley. You have absolutely no chance of success. And once you are defeated, my master will- Riley: Are you going to end your turn or what? Nathaniel placed a card face-down. Nathaniel: I end with a face-down. Riley: Here goes nothing! My move! I Summon Thunderking (1900/800) in Attack Mode! Nathaniel: I activate the Trap Card, Chaos Rose. Thanks to this card, the monster you just Summoned is destroyed, and you lose 1000 Life Points. Riley’s Life Points: 600 Nathaniel’s Life Points: 4000 A large black rose appeared on the field. It fired a blast at Thunderking, and destroyed it. Then, it disappeared. Riley grinned. Nathaniel: What exactly are you smiling about? Riley: You’re about to find out! I wanted you to destroy Thunderking! See, since you destroyed one of my Thunder-Type monsters during this turn, I’m allowed to activate the Spell Card Static Rebirth! When this card is activated, I can Special Summon 1 Thunder-Type monster from my Graveyard as long as the monster I Special Summon wasn’t destroyed during this turn! So, I’ll bring back Thunder Knight! Nathaniel: Your monster’s attack points are nothing compared to the attack points of my Black Rose Dragon. Riley: Thunder Knight’s attack is low, but I have a monster that can crush your Dragon! See, by discarding Thunder Dragon (1600/1500) from my hand, I can add 2 Thunder Dragon from my Deck to my hand! *Duel Spirit World – Exiro’s House* Exiro walked over to the table in his kitchen. He picked up a book, and turned a few pages until he arrived at a page that had a picture on it. A tear rolled down his cheek, and he shut the book. Then, he placed the book back on the table and walked out of his house. *Duel Spirit World* Nathaniel: *What’s he planning?* Riley: Check this out! I activate the Spell Card Polymerization! With this, I’ll fuse the 2 Thunder Dragon in my hand to Summon Twin-Headed Thunder Dragon (2800/2100)! Both of the Thunder Dragons fused to create a large Dragon with two heads. As it appeared on the field, it roared. Riley: Twin-Headed Thunder Dragon, attack Black Rose Dragon with Electric Blast! Riley’s Life Points: 600 Nathaniel’s Life Points: 3600 Nathaniel: I’m surprised you were able to destroy my Black Rose Dragon. Riley: I’m not! Thunder Knight, attack his Life Points directly with Static Strike! Don’t forget, Thunder Knight gains 400 attack points for each Thunder-Type monster on the field. Since I have 2, he gains 800 attack points. That means his attack is 2100! (1300 + 400 + 400 = 2100) Riley’s Life Points: 600 Nathaniel’s Life Points: 1500 Riley: I’ll place a card face-down. Your move. Nathaniel: Riley, do you actually think you have a chance of winning? Riley: I’m sure I can win! Nathaniel: You’ll probably think differently after you see this card. I Summon Lonefire Blossom (500/1400) in Defense Mode. Now, I’ll Tribute Lonefire Blossom to Special Summon Gigaplant (2400/1200)! A large plant arose from the ground. Nathaniel: Gigaplant has an ability of its own! When it’s Summoned, I can Special Summon 1 Plant-Type monster from my Graveyard. I’ll Summon Black Rose Dragon! The large, rose-covered Dragon appeared on the field once again. Nathaniel: Since my Dragon was Special Summoned, all monsters on the field except Black Rose Dragon are destroyed! Black Rose Dragon fired another blast, and all monsters on the field except it were destroyed. Nathaniel: Black Rose Dragon, attack Riley’s Life Points directly and end this game. The attack hit, and Riley’s Life Points dropped to 0. Riley’s Life Points: 0 Nathaniel’s Life Points: 1100 Nathaniel turned around, and walked away. Riley was sent back about 10 feet by the attack. He landed on the ground, and passed out. Next Time: Exiro’s Inner Spirit! Author's Notes: Umbra wrote some of the descriptions and speech in this Episode. He only wrote stuff for Nathaniel. I didn't develop the Synchro Concept anymore, but I will in the next Episode. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dad Posted June 27, 2008 Report Share Posted June 27, 2008 NOOO! Not Riley! Lol, good ep Remix. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Parting Shot Posted June 27, 2008 Report Share Posted June 27, 2008 Well, except for the fact that Gigaplant is a Gemini monster so it doesn't get it's effect until after it's summoned again so Nathaniel's win is totally bogus, it's another great chapter :P P.S. Poor Riley :( Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Ruby Posted June 27, 2008 Report Share Posted June 27, 2008 nice chapter, and i hate that giga plant effect >.< that damn frlf >.< nice job btw ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Dinosaur Posted June 27, 2008 Report Share Posted June 27, 2008 As amazing as usual. Nothing really more to say since I've said it 20 times already. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Star Posted June 28, 2008 Report Share Posted June 28, 2008 [center][IMG]http://i212.photobucket.com/albums/cc210/YamiStartrainer/HiddenLegacyBanner.png[/IMG][/center][IMG] [center][url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bhOYwQejCzw][IMG]http://i212.photobucket.com/albums/cc210/YamiStartrainer/OpeningThemeBanner.png[/IMG] [/url][/center][url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bhOYwQejCzw][IMG]http://i212.photobucket.com/albums/cc210/YamiStartrainer/OpeningThemeBanner.png[/IMG] [center][u]Episode 49: Exiro's Inner Spirit[/u][/center][u] [On the last Hidden Legacy: Riley finally got past his fear of Nathaniel, and tried his hardest to win the duel. Nathaniel used the power of Gigaplant to bring back Black Rose Dragon, and won the duel. After he lost, Riley was sent flying, and passed out.] *Diamond City* Jesse: This is the building that Shadow works at. Warrior Dai Grepher: Do you think he is here now? Jesse: I dunno. It’s a possibility, but I haven’t seen Shadow since his duel with Riley ended. He might not work here anymore. Warrior Dai Grepher: Let’s go inside and see if we can find him. Jesse: Sounds good to me. Jesse ran up to the door of the building. Just as he began to open the door, he heard a voice from behind him. Guard: I remember you kid. You’re the one that got me fired. Jesse turned around and instantly recognized the person that was talking to him. It was the guard that he defeated to get into the building that Shadow worked in. Jesse: How did I get you fired? Warrior Dai Grepher looked at Jesse. Warrior Dai Grepher: Who is this guy? Jesse: This guy used to be one of Shadow’s guards. I defeated him in a duel four months ago. Guard: The kid got me fired. When he defeated me, Shadow fired me because I wasn’t good enough to defend him. Jesse laughed. Jesse: I’m sorry that you’re not a good duelist. Guard: If I’m not a good duelist, you should have no problem dueling me again. Jesse: If you want a duel, I’ll give you one! The Guard laughed. Jesse looked at Warrior Dai Grepher. Jesse: This duel won’t take long. Warrior Dai Grepher nodded. Guard: I’ll finally get my revenge on you for getting me fired! Jesse: We’ll just see about that! Guard: I’ll go first. I Summon Gemini Lancer (1800/1400) in Attack Mode. Next, I’ll play 1 card face-down and end my turn. Jesse: My move! I Summon Crystal Beast Sapphire Pegasus (1800/1200) in Attack Mode! Thanks to its Special Ability, I can Crystallize one of my Crystal Beast monsters! I’ll chose Crystal Beast Emerald Tortise (600/2000). Alright, Crystal Beast Sapphire Pegasus, attack his Gemini Lancer with Sapphire Strike! The large, white Pegasus fired a blast of blue energy at the Gemini Lancer. The Fish-like creature responded by smashing Pegasus with one of its spears. Gemini Lancer exploded into pixels, and Sapphire Pegasus turned into a Sapphire Crystal. Jesse: Since my Pegasus was destroyed, it turns into a Crystal! Now, I’ll activate the Spell Card Rare Value! You select 1 of my Crystallized Crystal Beasts, and I send it to the Graveyard and draw 2 cards! Guard: Fine, send the Pegasus to the Graveyard. Jesse: Don’t worry Pegasus, I’ll bring you back soon enough. I’ll throw down a face-down and end my turn. Guard: Finally. I thought you’d never finish. I Summon Future Samurai (1600/1200) in Attack Mode. Now I play the Spell Card Double Summon. With this, I can Normal Summon another time this turn. So, I’ll Second Summon my Future Samurai! Future Samurai, attack his Life Points directly with Future Blade! The Samurai hit Jesse with its blade. Jesse’s Life Points: 2400 Guard’s Life Points: 4000 Guard: I end my turn. Jesse: Check this out! I Summon Crystal Beast Topaz Tiger (1600/1000)! Topaz Tiger, attack his Future Samurai with Topaz Incisor Shred! When Topaz Tiger declares an attack, it gains 400 attack points! (1600 + 400 = 2000) Guard: I activate the Trap Card Gemini Destruction. When you attack a Gemini monster that has been Second Summoned, I can activate this card. When this card is activated, all monsters on your side of the field are returned to your hand! Jesse took the Topaz Tiger from his field and placed it in his hand. Jesse: I’ll end my turn. Guard: Now I’m going to win this duel and get my revenge! I Summon Aquarian Alessa (1500/500) in Attack Mode. Now, Future Samurai, attack his Life Points directly with Future Blade! Jesse’s Life Points: 800 Guard’s Life Points: 4000 Guard: Aquarian Alessa, attack his Life Points directly with Aqua Blast! Jesse: Sorry, but I’m activating Crystal Sword! By sending a Crystallized Crystal Beast to the Graveyard, I can destroy 1 monster on your side of the field. I choose your Aquarian Alessa! Guard: I’ll win on my next turn then! I end my turn. Jesse: I Summon Crystal Beast Topaz Tiger (1600/1000) in Attack Mode! Now I activate Crystal Release! This increases Topaz Tiger’s attack by 800 points! (1600 + 800 = 2400) Topaz Tiger, attack Future Samurai with Topaz Incisor Shred! Don’t forget that Topaz Tiger gets an extra 400 attack points when it attacks! (2400 + 400 = 2800) Jesse’s Life Points: 800 Guard’s Life Points: 2800 Jesse: I end my turn. Guard: I’ll place one card face-down and end my turn. Jesse: No monsters huh? I’ll give you a monster! I Special Summon Grinder Golem (3000/300) on your side of the field! When Grinder Golem is Special Summoned on your side of the field, I get 2 Grinder Tokens (0/0) on my side of the field! The Guard laughed. Guard: I was going to lose the duel, and you gave me a monster with 3000 attack points. What were you thinking? Jesse: I was thinking of activating my Creature Swap Spell Card! Now, I’ll give you a Grinder Token, and you give me a monster. All you have is Grinder Golem, so that’s the monster I get! Guard: So you gave me the monster on purpose? Jesse: Yes I did. Now, Grinder Golem, attack his Grinder Token with Dark Strike! The large Golem attacked the smaller Golem, and destroyed it. Jesse’s Life Points: 800 Guard’s Life Points: 0 Jesse: So much for that revenge! Guard: I will get my revenge on you! The Guard walked away. Warrior Dai Grepher: That was a good duel. Jesse: Thanks! Next Time: Rainbow Ruin! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Parting Shot Posted June 28, 2008 Report Share Posted June 28, 2008 Lol, a good duel always warms the heart :P Excellent as usual ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Ruby Posted June 28, 2008 Report Share Posted June 28, 2008 YAYYAYYAYYAY, Crystal Beasts :D but no Ruby Carbuncle :cry: These duels are short, lol Can't wait for Rainbow Ruin, make sure you show Ruby OR ELSE!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dad Posted June 28, 2008 Report Share Posted June 28, 2008 Crystal Beasts FTW! Good ep. Short, but good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yogg-Saron Posted June 28, 2008 Report Share Posted June 28, 2008 Nice Fan-Fic star, I really liked Episode 48 the best! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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