Yu-Gi-Oh! Crimson Deulist Chronicles (Chapter 6 is up, feedback appreciated)

[Aelsthla-Mental]

Pretty good, mwahaha! go Bermuda! Oh wait, Virmire LV 5 could destroy it with it's effect! NOOOOOOOO!

*cough*

 

anyway, when you click Cloudian-Bermuda, you get 'calm before the storm'.

 

Anyway, good job still. You should probably fuse chapter three and four together, but meh.

[Jadewiz]

That small error is fixed. or some reason, when i upload bermuda from the card maker, it uploads calm before the storm instead :?

[Aelsthla-Mental]

well, thats fixed, but one more thing.

 

why is Warrior of Vimire LV7 only able to be special summoned by LV10?

[Jadewiz]

Bah, i'll fix that right now.

 

good eyes.

[Archangel of destiny]

Nice chapter,keep up the great work

[Jadewiz]

I'll try to.

 

 

Anyone else wanna give feedback?

[Jadewiz]

El bumpeth?

 

I love the fact that even when im giving away reps, no one reads this. lol.

[Archangel of destiny]

can't wait for the next chapter

[DarkForce™]

dude go look at my fan-fic.(Jadewiz) And look at the intro Your a main character!

[Protoman]

awesome man the is awesome can't wait till next chapter.

[Chaos Impact™]

brilliant fan fic, brilliant characters and brilliant everything

[Jadewiz]

The new chapter (Conclusion to the duel) will be up in the next week.

 

Thanks for the great comments!

 

Trust me, no one will expect the ending to this duel.

 

Not even me. :shock:

 

OK, maybe i do know the end...

[Protoman]

Wow this is suspenseful and great at the same time.

[Chaos Impact™]

i'll join

Name: matt tucker

Age: 16

Deck: Six Samurai Swarm Deck

Signiture card: Great Shogun Samurai

Personality: Keeps his head down until he gets into a duel his true passion of the game shows up in his duels. Lives in Hawaii

Apperance: Tall, blonde hair slight tan from living in hawaii

[WindupRabbitFan14]

Good so far ^_^

[Kale]

good fic so far, but my one nitpic is that they go to fast! But youre fixing that already with chapter 4, so all's good. ^_^

 

I can't wait for the next one....

[Wyhe]

oh man,another cliffhanger. (smart strategy BTW)

I'm now officially addicted to your fanfic now.

[Jadewiz]

Wow! thanks for the great feedback everyone!

 

Last part of their duel will be up tonight, promise.

[Jadewiz]

[align=center]Chapter 5: Zack Vs. Kye Part 2

 

Kye: I've got to think of something, and fast! That Bermuda is stronger than my Warrior... Wait a second...

 

*Kye looks at his Hand. He realizes he needs one card to defeat Bermuda and Zack, and it happens to be his face down card!*

 

Kye: Hold up one second Zack! I'm not delaying a thing! I'm going to destroy your Bermuda and the rest of your life point's in one turn!

 

Zack: Try it! Your Warrior cant get past my Wall! It's only 3000 Attack!

 

Kye: Not when I play my Face-down! Go, "MegaMorph"!

 

Zack: Hah! All you did is reduce your Warriors attack to 1500!

 

Kye: Dont be so sure, Zack! Next I play my own "Wall of Revealing Light", And I pay 4000 of my own Life Points! Bringing me down to 2400 Life Points raises my Warrior's attack to 6000!

 

Zack: Even so, with that amount of attack, you cant take out my Bermuda AND my Life Points!

 

Kye: Maybe not right now, but I'll be able to after I play "DNA Surgery", Making my Warrior of Virmire a Machine-Type monster. I'll then play "Limiter Removal", which doubles the Attack of any Machine-Types on the field, Bringing my Warrior up to 16000!

 

Zack: No...

 

Kye: Now go, Warrior of Virmire, Obliterate his Life Points and end this duel!

 

*The Warrior does as he is commanded, and races forward. The Wall suddenly breaks and crashes down. The Cloudian is destroyed into mist and flies in different directions. Then, with one giant slash, the duel is over. Zack falls to his knees. He has lost.*

 

Zack's LP: 0

Kye's LP: 2400

 

*Kye walks over to Zack, still on his knees in shock*

 

Kye: You OK?

 

Zack: Yeah... I'm alright.

 

*Zack stands up slowly and smiles and Kye*

 

Zack: That was probably the best duel I've ever had. Here, you deserve this.

 

*Zack holds up his Cloudian Bermuda to Kye. Kye puts his hand over the card, and pushes it back down*

 

Kye: Keep it.

 

Zack: Huh?

 

Kye: Keep it, I can tell you have a strong connection with that card, i'd never take away something like that. Besides, what am I gonna do with that in a Dark Guardian deck?

 

Zack: ...Well, I dont wanna let you go empty handed... I got it! Here, take this.

 

*Zack takes Kye's hand and places a plastic red teardrop button in his hand*

 

Kye: Whats this?

 

Zack: A Crimson Teardrop. When you get 3 of these, you get to duel Anthro.

 

Kye: *Shocked* ANTHRO!?

 

Zack: Yup, THE Anthro.

 

Kye: Thanks!

 

*The two shake hands*

 

Zack: Well, What are you waiting for? Go get two more!

 

Kye: I'll get on that!

 

*Kye runs off, Eager to get the last two Crimson Teardrops,while Zack walks the oppisite way, Smiling at the duel that they had just had*[/align]

 

Whew!

 

What a chapter!

 

Feedback please?

[Wyhe]

good chapter there!I would love to see more from you,so advance

[Aelsthla-Mental]

not the dreaded limiter removal!

 

Three Crimsom Teardrops? Only three? Must be hard to come by.

 

Aahh well, good chapter.

[Wyhe]

Wait,I just realised a flaw: you protray Limiter Removal as an equip spell,yet it's a quick-play in reality.

 

Advice from the LORD:Get card effects right in a duel.

[Jadewiz]

Fixed that little messup, I guess it was the way I worded it... Or I was extremely tired and forgot it was a Quick-Play.

 

And Yes, Aelsthla, They are hard to come by.

[Jadewiz]

El Bumpeth

[Jadewiz]

Chapter 6: Tear's Dont Fall (Heh, B4MV) will be up saturday night.