Hioco Posted April 25, 2008 Report Share Posted April 25, 2008 Hi i am hioco and this is my first fan-fic Please Comment now i have read the guide lines and im sure they have helped but please dont go to hard on me cause this is my first ^_^ So Main Characters=====================================Scott Brown11 Years OldFrom Pallet TownWants to become a pokemon master=====================================Proff Brown38 Years OldPokemon ProffesorFrom The Orange IslandsScotts Dad=====================================Mrs Brown34 Years OldChefFrom Pallet TownScotts Mum=====================================Bulbasaur2 Weeks OldScotts PokemonFrom The Kanto Region=====================================All pokemon from Every Region----------------------------------------------------------[spoiler=Chapter 1] [align=center]It was a typical day for Scott Brown and his Pokemon Bulbasaur as they walked through the pleasures of Pallet town. Scott: Hey Bulb im hungry what do you think about lunch? Bulbasaur: Bulba Bulbasaur ^_^ Scott: Ok then lets go find mom They both change direction and start to make their trip home Scott: Mom im home Mrs Brown: Ok dear dinners on the table you and bulbasaur can just dig in Scott: Thanks mom, bulbasaur lets eat Bulbasaur: Bulbasaur ^_^ As Scott and bulbasaur are eating they here a knock on the front door Mrs Brown: Hold on Hold on! She opens the door with a smile on her face and a brush in hand Proff Sam: Hi Mrs brown i have come for Scott his Dad says he has some exicting news for him Mrs Brown: Ok sam just give me a second Proff Sam: Sure, oh and can you tell him to bring bulbasaur Mrs brown: Ok, Scott! Scott: Yeah mom? Mrs Brown: Sams here he says your father has some exciting news for you Scott: Cool! Mrs Brown: Oh and dont forget to bring Bulbasaur Scott: Do i ever? Scott and bulbasaur run out of the door with excitement and start to follow sam up to the lab. As they get through the front door Scotts dad and his pokemon assistant Pikachu is there to greet them Scott: Dad!! Proff Brown: Hi Scott, has Sam told you what the exciting news is yet? Scott: No i think he wants to give you the pleasure of doing that right Sam? Proff Sam: Sure Proff Brown: Ok then i guess i get to see that smile on your face, well here it is there is a new Pokemon Colosseum in Cerulean City and it is for novice young trainers like you and i have signed you up Scott: Awsome dad you are so cool how did you- Scott gets interrupted by his father Proff Brown: Hold on there i have not got to the exciting part yet Scott: What do you mean dad? Proff Brown: Well i think you should already know that you cant win in a Colosseum without six pokemon Scott: Dad are you saying? Proff Brown: Im saying you have not got 1 pokemon anymore, you have six Proff brown hands him five pokeballs containing these five pokemonRaltsCharmanderSquirtlePichuEevee Scott: Dad i am speechless thanks!!!! Scott goes over to his dad and gives him a hug and goes off to his house to tell his mom he is going to Cerulean City[/align] [spoiler=Chapter 2] [align=center]Scott: Mom!!!!! Mrs Brown: Whats the matter dear? Scott: Look what Dad just gave me Scott shows all of his new pokemon to his tired mom Mrs Brown: Oh aren't they cute Pichu: Pi Pi ^_^ Mrs Brown couldn't leave the Pokemon alone she had fallen in love with all of them Scott: Mom... I kinda need you to stop hugging my pokemon Mrs Brown: Aww but they are so adorable Scott: But i need to get them ready for battle Mrs Brown: Battle? Scott: Yeah there is kinda some exiting but sad news i need to tell you... Mrs Brown: Well come sit down dear and you can tell me anything Scott: Ok here goes... See Dad has signed me up for a Colleseum in Cerulean City and i kinda have to leave home for a while Mrs Brown: So what you mean is that you are going to become what you have always hoped and dreamed of becoming? Scott: Well if you look at it that way.. yeah i guess Mrs Brown: Well then dear go for it if this is what you want i think you should go for it Scott: Thanks mom your the best Mrs Brown: Well i suppose you better head off to bed and get ready for your big adventure Scott: I guess so... Scott Goes off to bed thinking about his tactics for tommorow Mrs Brown: Scott wake up rise and shine today in adventure day! Scott: Mom im already awake I couldnt sleep last night i was to excited about today Mrs Brown: Well then lets get you up and dressed Scott gets dressed and whizzes downstairs with his mom Scott: Mom im going out the frong garden for a while i need to train Mrs Brown: Okay dear but remember you said you wanted to leave at lunch Scott: Dont worry mom i havent forgot Scott heads off outside to train his pokemon Scott: Right for the first battle I send out you Pichu Pichu comes flying out of a ball onto the floor and ready for action! Scott: Ha Ha nice intro Pichu Pichu: Pi Pichu ^_^ Scott: And your opponent is..... Ralts! He throws another pokeball into the air and ralts fly's out Scott: Okay guys i need this to be clean we dont want any serious injury's Pichu: Pi Pi ^_^ Ralts nods its head as it starts to focus on pichu Scott: Pichu go, Quick Attack! Pichu speeds out after Ralts Scott: Ok ralts now dodge Ralts didnt move quick enough and gets hit by pichu Scott: C'mon Ralts get your head into it, are you okay? Ralts nods again Scott: Ok Ralts confusion A purple wave comes out of ralts and hits Pichu hard Scott: Pichu you okay? Pichu: Pichu! Scott: Right now then Spark!! Pichu send bolts of lighning down onto Ralts. Ralts goes down and wont get back up Scott: Good job pichu He runs over to Ralts and see's if it is ok Scott: Well done buddy you fought well Scott hears his mom shout him from the kitchen and goes into the house Scott: Whats the matter mom? Mrs Brown: It's 11:30 you might want to start packing Scott: I already have i might leave early and get a head start what do you think? Mrs Brown: Sure They both give each other a hug and say their goodbyes Scott: Bye Mom Mrs Brown: Call me!! Mrs Brown waves as scott runs of through viredian forest. Scott reaches the forest sign and wonders where to go Trainer Marcus: Hey there little fella where you headin? Scott: Cerulean City but i'm king of lost can you help me? Trainer Marcus: Sure buddy im goin that way to wanna walk with me? Scott: Sure i could use the company Scott and his newly found friend marcus walk through the forest together both talking to each other about their lives. Scott finds out that he is going to the Colleseum to and that he might have to battle him when the time comes Scott: So wh- Scott gets interupted by 2 wild pokemon Scott: Its a beedril and a butterfree!!! Trainer Marcus: Growlith Go! Scott: Charmander I choose you! They both launch pokeballs into the air and both thier pokemon come flying out Charmander: Char!!! Growlith: GRRRRRRR! They both use their battle cry to try and scare the pokemon away but it doesn't work! Marcus: Growlith Ember!! Growlith fires a little flame out of its mouth and aims for butterfree. Scott: Ha Ha my Turn! Chamander Flamethrower He fires a ling stick like flame out of its mouth and again goes for butterfree.Buterfree takes both hits and falls to the ground. Marcus: Hell yeah! Scott: Now thats what im talkin about! But all of a sudden the beedrill hits growlith with a poison sting Marcus: GROWLITH!! Growlith goes flying and hits the ground with a loud thud Scott: Charmander Flamethrower! Charmander yet again fires a long sticklike flame at the beedrill.Beedrill Dodges! Scott: Charmander Ember!! He fires only a little flame this time but only catches a part of the beedrill's wing Scott: Pokeball GO!! Scott launches a pokeball into the air attempting to catch Beedrill.It rolles a few times but then stops, Scott is confused he doesn't know if it is safe to go near it yet Marcus: What are you waitong for go and get it then! Scott: Is it safe Marcus: Of course it is! Scott goes to pick it up but it disappeares! Scott: Okay where the hell has my pokemon gone Marcus: How many pokemon did you say you had before you caught that Beedrill? Scott: 6 why? Marcus: Then it has gone to a Poke comp in every Pokecentre Scott: What do you mean? Marcus: I mean it has been transferred to a computer in the Pokecentre and you have to go swap a pokemon to have that one Scott: Swap it forever??? Marcus: No! you are only allowed 6 pokemon at a time... Scott: Oh i get it now Marcus: Took you a while buddy ha ha Scott: I'm not a fast learner... They both take off and head for Cerulean City Marcus: Well here it is Caerulean city Scott: Wow i can't belive i'm here! Marcus: Here follow me i've been here before Scott: Thanks ^_^ Scott and Marcus both go towards the Colleseum hoping to get in Guard: Forms please Scott: Here ya go Marcus: Here it is mate They both hand the guards there forms and head inside the building Marcus: What number is your room Scott? Scott: 135 Marcus: Nice we are in the same room Scott: Oh sweet! They both head off to their room Marcus: Now this is what i call 1st class! Marcus jumps onto the bed and gets himself comfertable Scott: Look here it's a note telling us who are first opponents are Marcus: Sweet! They both stare at the sheet of paper Scott: Misty? Marcus: Ha ha sorry buddy you gotta facy misty the towns Gym leader Scott: What! To be continued![/align] [spoiler= Chapter 3] Scott: Marcus are you kidding me! Marcus: Sorry bud... Scott: But i haven't even had a chance to use all of my pokemon! Marcus: Well then lets go train! They both unpack and go to the training center. Scott was ready for a challenge but a little scared that he was going out early... Scott: Ready? Marcus: Sure, Go tododile! Scott: ok... Ralts out you come Again pokeballs are tossed into the air and two pokemon shot out. Marcus: Now we are playing an official tournament battle. That means first to 3, you know what i mean? Scott: Yeah Marcus: Well then... Tododile Watergun! Scott: Ralts dodge it But the watergun was to fast and it hit ralts hard. Scott: Ralts! You okay?? Ralts: Ralts! Scott: Good now psychic! Tododile was surronded by pruple and was confused. He ran at ralts but then he blasted him away with a brain wave. Marcus: Tododile you ok? Tododile: Todo... He hit the floor knocked out. Scott: Is Tododile ok marc? Marcus: Yeah, You done well buddy. He put him back into his pokeball and took another from his pocket. Marcus: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
starly Posted April 25, 2008 Report Share Posted April 25, 2008 are cool Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hioco Posted April 25, 2008 Author Report Share Posted April 25, 2008 Sorry i dont get what you mean did you miss-type? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
starly Posted April 25, 2008 Report Share Posted April 25, 2008 urh yeh i guess can i join the fan fic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hioco Posted April 25, 2008 Author Report Share Posted April 25, 2008 no sorry i want to make this one on my own but thanks for asking Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kid Posted April 25, 2008 Report Share Posted April 25, 2008 Its a bit short :? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted April 26, 2008 Report Share Posted April 26, 2008 [spoiler=If you care about grammar, read this part of the review]The grammar is somewhat alright. I, as in "I did that" or "I'm here" is ALWAYS capitalized. Also, you miss commas every here and there. The plot seems thought out quite well, and is nicely presented. Rating: 54% Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hioco Posted April 26, 2008 Author Report Share Posted April 26, 2008 Thanks for the comments umbra and kid but kid it is short but its only one chapter i have lots more cominng and i am currently on chapter 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chaos Impact™ Posted April 26, 2008 Report Share Posted April 26, 2008 Its a bit short :?i agree with kid Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Victory Posted April 27, 2008 Report Share Posted April 27, 2008 Very Nice Please MAke More Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hioco Posted April 27, 2008 Author Report Share Posted April 27, 2008 Chapter 2 is up guys Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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