Lord Ursus Posted May 7, 2008 Report Share Posted May 7, 2008 This is a very good fan-fic! Has a great potential.But, how did you make those characters? Is it a special site you visited, or did you make it on paint? I am making a fan-fic myself and would like to use such characters... (of course not the ones you made) Please answer me when you have time ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Proffesser Yugi Posted May 8, 2008 Report Share Posted May 8, 2008 cool it is to the tool Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aizen143 Posted May 12, 2008 Report Share Posted May 12, 2008 i like the storyline, it's cool Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RiffMaster Alex Posted May 12, 2008 Report Share Posted May 12, 2008 Well done! The plot seems to fit together and it has well developed characters! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Magma Soilder Posted May 13, 2008 Report Share Posted May 13, 2008 awsome. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skuldur Posted May 13, 2008 Report Share Posted May 13, 2008 awesome fan-fic man i just love it and the duels nice job. 10/10 can't wait for the next chapter Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted May 14, 2008 Report Share Posted May 14, 2008 I wonder when the next chapter will be up? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chaos Impact™ Posted May 14, 2008 Report Share Posted May 14, 2008 nice dude great layout and idea dude. Every chapter is better then the first! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted May 15, 2008 Report Share Posted May 15, 2008 Chaos Impact:You bet!Dimension Lord's getting better at this,that's for sure.Anyway,could we please have the next chapter online soon? (begging like mad at Dimension Lord) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Suzogamori Ren Posted May 15, 2008 Report Share Posted May 15, 2008 nice work D-lord! Very impressive! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spire Posted May 17, 2008 Author Report Share Posted May 17, 2008 Thanks guys. Heres Chapter 8, enjoy. CHAPTER 8- DARK SOUL Lightning roared thought Domino City. The sky was gloomy and obscure. It was completely dead, with no life whatsoever. Who was to blame for this fate?Zak:So a guy called The Dark One is doing all of this? But why?Bryan:I don't know but he wants to rule all dimensions.Zak:Oh yeah! Did he have the Rainbow Dragon?Bryan:I never saw such card weilded by him. Hmmm..that could be how he got his power. The power of the Rainbow Dragon. Who is he?Zak:He must be from the past!Bryan:What? Thats not possible!Zak looked down to the ground, apprehensively.Zak:Actually.......Meanwhile....Max:This deck is sure to win me duels.????:Get him!Max:AHH!!!Suddenly evil Dark Soilders rose from the ground. They knocked Max unconscious with their catastrophic dark powers.????:Take him to The Dark Servants lair.===================================================Bryan:You have a friend called Max Blade, right?Zak turned round, astonished.Zak:How do you know about Max?Bryan:Listen, your friend is in grave danger. We mus-Just at that momment.????:Traitor!The pair turned round to see an unnusual figure. It appeared to be a machine, though you could see a human face though a little hole.Bryan:It can't be! Mecha!Zak:Who?Mecha:I cannot believe you would side with him! Especailly since The Dark Servant ordered you to slaughter him.Zak:What? Kill....me?Mecha:Yes, little boy. Zak:So...you have come to kill me?Mecha:Oh please, I have more important tasks to accomplish. I would just like to say that I am in possesion of one of the chosen ones. Your friend Max, to be exact.Bryan:No! One of the four chosen ones!Zax realesed all his anger but with fear also.Zak:NO!! YOU RELEASE HIM!!Mecha:Ha! No! But heres a gift to cheer you up after you friends dimise. Arise, Dark Soilders!Dark Soilders rose from the ground.Mecha:Destroy them!Mecha fled.Dark Soilder 1:The darkness is upon us.Dark Soilder 2:It is waiting to feast upon your souls.Dark Soilder 3:Duel!Bryan:No fair! Its three on two.????:Make that three on three.Bryan:Who are you?Kai:The names Kai. These things have been destoying the planet! I want to put a stop to it. Let me join you.Zak:Ok. Lets duel!Dark Soilder 1=8000LPDark Soilder 2=8000LPDark Soilder 3=8000LPBryan=8000LPZak=8000LPKai=8000LPBryan:I'll start! I summon Celtic Guardian (ATK/1400 DEF/1200), in attack mode. Then i'll place a face down card. I end there.Dark Soilder 1:I summon Gill Garth (ATK/1800 DEF/1200) in attack position.Zak:My move! I summon Vorse Raider (ATK/1900 DEF/1200). Thats it ,for now.Dark Soilder 2: I play Return Zombie (ATK/1000 DEF/1000) in defence mode.Kai:Its about time! I call upon, Revival Jam (ATK/1500 DEF/500) , in attack position. Then i'll place a face down card. I end my move.Dark Soilder 3: Finally! I draw! HAHHAHAHHH!!! Kai:??????Zak:What is it?Dark Soilder 3:This card is created by the darkness from peoples hearts. I activate Dark Soul! Zak:What! I've never seen that card!Dark Soilder 3:Of corse you haven't you fool!Gill Garth (New Attack)=2800.Return Zombie (New Attack)=2000.Bryan:How did you your monsters get stronger!??!Dark Soilder 3:This card contains darkness, you fool! Dark Soilder 1=4000LPDark Soilder 2=4000LPDark Soilder 3=4000LPBryan=8000LPZak=8000LPKai=8000LPZak:So it requires half your life points. Its still too powerful. Your cheating!Dark Soilder 3:Its a gift from The Dark One. HAHHAH!!! Zak:How can we ever defeat the darkness? To Be Continued. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Atomix Posted May 17, 2008 Report Share Posted May 17, 2008 Awesome, lets see the next chapter Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dalekob Posted May 17, 2008 Report Share Posted May 17, 2008 omg this is so coolim gonna foloow his right to the end...love the characters...love the duels...just love it!!:D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted May 17, 2008 Report Share Posted May 17, 2008 glad you hear & follow my advice,let everyone here know that your fanfic is no.1! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spire Posted May 18, 2008 Author Report Share Posted May 18, 2008 I thank you lord whye. I dunno when chapter 9 will be done, so i'll post a sneak peek for all of you. Sneak Peek- Chapter 9 Rozar:Go The Wicked Deadroot! Attack Zak! Finish him!!!Bryan:No! Zak!Alzar:Now you shall see the true power of darkness! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Atomix Posted May 18, 2008 Report Share Posted May 18, 2008 Cool!!! ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
[email protected] Posted May 18, 2008 Report Share Posted May 18, 2008 cool story enjoy reading it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spire Posted May 18, 2008 Author Report Share Posted May 18, 2008 Thank you all! I really appreciate your comments. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
alvarosv Posted May 19, 2008 Report Share Posted May 19, 2008 I love it! 8/10 but when people talk each person should have a different color. It makes it easier to read. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Protoman Posted May 20, 2008 Report Share Posted May 20, 2008 awesome man this will be great! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spire Posted May 20, 2008 Author Report Share Posted May 20, 2008 alvarosv thanks for the advise. I will use that, thanks. protoman527799 thanks for the comment! ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Parallel Gunshot Posted May 20, 2008 Report Share Posted May 20, 2008 i think there could have been more of a build up between beginning and the start of the duelbut other than that this is awesome^_^ill follow this to the end(Y) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted May 26, 2008 Report Share Posted May 26, 2008 Wow!Even the Wicked Gods have shown their ugly/formless faces here,this is getting better than good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GINGERNINJA69 Posted May 26, 2008 Report Share Posted May 26, 2008 that was really good any more Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kale Posted May 26, 2008 Report Share Posted May 26, 2008 interesting story, I want to know exactly what dark soul does! ^_^ I'm waiting for chapter nine now.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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