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[Spire]

Hi, new fan fic here. Read and comment and you will be rewarded 2 Rep points.

 

 

[spoiler=Character Bios]

Max Blade

Age:14

Deck:Dragon/Warrior

Signature Card:Black Skull Dragon

 

Zak Thomas

Age:14

Deck:Beasts

Signature Card:Manticore Of Darkness

 

Jin Yuki

Age:16

Deck:Elemental/Evil Heroes

Signature Card:Elemental Hero Shining Flare Wingman.

 

Robby Wheeler

Age:20

Deck:The Darkness!

Signature Card:Greed Quasar

 

Will be updated when more characters come in.

 

 

 

 

 

[spoiler=Prologe]

 

(BASED 100 YEARS IN THE FUTURE)

The tale begins with a young boy named Max Blade. He is the grandson of the legendary duelist, Ronald Blade, who has passed his deck on to him. He had made his way up to the finals of the pro-legues. His oppenent was Jin Yuki. He was a powerful duelists who followed the steps of his grandfather, Jaiden Yuki, and weilded the Elemental Hero deck. However, Jin was nothing like his grandfather. He dueled for victory and fame. He dosen't care about having fun. Two powerful duelists ready to face off. Who will win?

 

 

[spoiler=Chapter 1]

 

CHAPTER 1- THE EVIL HEROES DEFEAT (PART 1)

 

Announcer: Here it is folks! The moment you have all been waiting for! Max Blade vs Jin Yuki!!

The crowd roared.

Announcer:The winner will take home the Championship title, the loser goes home with nothing but defeat. So, now entering the stage, Max Blade!

White smoke covered the stadium. Suddenly, a figure came walking through it. It was Max. He made his way to the battlefield.

Crowd: *CHEER*

Announcer:Now give it up for the current champ, Jin Yuki!

Jin walked slowly to the battle field. He didn't care about making a good entrance.

Crowd: *CHEER*

Referee:Are you ready? Start!

They swiched on duel disks and drew there cards. Even though Max was up against a tough opponent he was pretty relexed. Jin didn't seem to show any emotion.

Zak: Come on Max!

In the crowd was Zak, Max's best friend. He was quite a talented duelist as he had won the championship five times. Untill of corse Jin came along and took the title off him.

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Max:I'll start! I draw! I activate Polymrastion so I can fuse together Red Eyes Black Dragon and Summoned Skull that are in my hand to summon, Black Skull Dragon (ATK/3200 DEF/2500)! Thats it.

Jin: Do you know? My grandfathers deck isn't the best!

Max: Why are you insulting your grandfathers deck?

Jin: It's not the best. Theres a deck far greater, my own. I enchanced my grandfathers deck with my Evil Heroes.

Max: Are you telling me you have the Evil Heroes?

Jin: Ha! I draw! I use Dark Fusion ,so bye bye Clayman and Sparkman. Now I can summon the mighty, Evil Hero Lightning Golem (ATK/2400 DEF/1500). A huge, evil fiend rose from the ground.

Jin:Your dead! Because my creatures ability allows me to destroy one creature per turn. Golem! Destroy his pitifull monster!

A powerful shower of lightning hit Max's dragon and instantly destroyed it.

Jin: Now my beast! Attack his life points!

The dark creature hit Max with a powerful shock of lightning. He came down to his knees.

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Zak:NO MAX!

Jin: Now you see the power of the Evil Heroes! HAHAHHA!!!

 

To Be Continued.

 

 

 

[spoiler=Chapter 2]

CHAPTER 2- THE EVIL HEROES DEFEAT (PART 2)

 

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Announcer: Max has taken the first hit. Can he revive from this?

Max:My turn Jin! I draw!

Max looked closely at his hand. He couldn't even summon a monster, let alone destroy Jin's Golem.

Max: I'll end my turn.

Jin: Ha! Your making this too easy! My move! I summon, Elemental Hero Wildheart (ATK/1500 DEF/1200). Attack his life points!

Wild Heart leaped into the air and sliced Max with his deadly sword.

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Max: Th..that hurt

Jin: Your pain isn't over yet! Evil Hero Lightning Golem attack!

The dark creature hit Max with a powerful shock of lightning.

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Jin: Draw your last pathetic card so I can end this Max.

Max: My grandfathers deck has no pathetic cards Jin.

Jin: Come up with something origanal you fool!

Max: Fine, I use the magic of Exchange. This let's us look at each others hands and take any card we want.

Jin: Fine heres my hand!

Max: I choose to take your Elemental Hero Neos.

Jin: Humph, my grandfathers favourate card. Take it, I don't see how it will help you.

Max: Now you pick a card from my hand.

Jin:I pick Tri Horned Dragon.

Max: Next I activate, Ancient Rules!

Jin: Oh no!

Max: This card let's me summon any normal level five or above card from am hand and I choose Elemental Hero Neos (ATK/2500 DEF/2100). But wait I dicard a card to ativate Lightning Vortex which destroys all the monsters you control.

Jin: Crap!

Zak: Way to go Max!

Max:Next I activate Mega Morph on Neos, which doubles his power, (New Attack:5000).

Jin:You son of a..

Max: Almost done. I use Double Attack, so by discarding my Red Eyes Darkness Dragon, my Neos can attack twice.

Jin:NOOO!!! That means I lose!

Max: Neos Attack!!!

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Announcer:What a match! Heres your new champ, Max Blade!

The crowed cheered.

Zak: He did it!

Jin left the stadum without saying a word.

MEANWHILE....

In a science lab.

Scientist: I have some of the rarest cards and there still not strong enought to power my time machine! But what! WHAT COULD POWER IT UP!!!!

He slammed his fist on a desk which made a magasin fall of the table. On the front cover was Rainbow Dragon.

Scientist:Of corse! Rainbow Dragon! Looks like I have some stealing to do.

 

 

 

[spoiler=Chapter 3]

CHAPTER 3- ARRIVAL OF THE DARK ONE

 

Max was sitting at in his home, lying down on the sofa, watching TV. He sat thinking about his win over Jin. He was flicking through the channels untill he stopped at the news channel.

News Reporter:The legendy Rainbow Dragon card has been stolen from the Domino museum. Theres no evidence of who the thief is.

Max: No way! It's been stolen?

Max ran out of his house as fast as he could. He soon met up with Zak.

Zak:Did you hear, the Rainbow Dragon card has been stolen.

Max: Yeah. Who would do such a thing?

Just at that momment a scientist on a jet pack came flying past. You could see the Rainbow Dragon in his hand.

Max:Hes got it!

The duo ran and followed him untill they arrived at a damp,old cave. The scientist quickly ran in. The boys soon followed.

Zak:This is some kind of a lab.

Scientist: What are you kids doing here?

Max:Give back the Rainbow Dragon!

The scientist inserted the card to a time machine.

Scientist: No! You see kids I need the power of the Rainbow Dragon to power my time machine so I can steal the rarest cards from the past and future.

Max:NO YOU CAN'T!

Zak ran up the scienst and gave him a hard punch was caused him to faint.

Zak: Quick, let's play with his time machine.

They both got inside the huge machine. Zak pressed a random button. Suddenly eveything started to glow. They were transported to what seemed like the 14 centry.

Max:Cool! But this place is sure dull. Let's go some where else.

Max pressed a button. They were transported to the 7 centry.

Zak: This place stinks let's go somewhere else.

Zak pressed a button. They were transported to what seemed Domino city many years ago.

Max:This is more like it! We're in Domino city 100 years ago. This is when the Battle city tournament was held.

Zak: Hey let's go to the Duelist Kingdom finals.

Max: Yeah!

Zak pressed a button, but nothing happend.

Zak: Whats wrong? Work you stupid thing, work!

Zak kicked the time machine as hard as he could. Suddenly elecric volts came out of the machine. They were transported to their own time.

Zak: What happend?

Max:Hey the Rainbow Dragon was powering this thing up and it's not here.

Zak: We must of left it in the past!

Max:Oh no! If someone finds it, who knows what could happen?

MEANWHILE IN THE PAST 100 YEARS AGO...

Mystery Voice:Hey whats this, Rainbow Dragon. Never heard of it. It looks rare, must be one of my brothers cards.

Suddenly, a dark force came out of the card. The dark energy was transerd to the boy.

Mystery Voice:I feel the darkness! HAHAHAHAH!!!!!!

 

 

[spoiler=Chapter 4]

CHAPTER 4- RISE OF THE DARK ARMY

 

2 days later at home..

Max:With the Rainbow Dragon in the past to whole world could be in danger.

Zak:This is all my fault. If I hadn't of kicked that dam time machine this would not of happend.

Max:Don't say that. Besides nothing bad has happend yet.

MEANWHILE IN DOMINO CITY....

A dark, evil creature suddenly appeared from nowhere.

Creature:The darkness has granted me the power of time travel and limitless dark powers. So this is the period of time where two of the four chosen duelists live. I will need some assistence to find them. Once I defeat them my plan will fall to place, HAHHAA!!!

Many people saw the creature and ran, ran as fast as they could.

Man:AHHH!!! Monster!!!

The man ran off crying, screaming for his life. The creature soon saw a man wearing a duel disk.

Creature:YOU! Duel me!

?????: Who are you?

Creature:Never mind that! Duel me or i'll destroy this city!

The monsters hands began to glow.

?????:NO! Fine i'll duel you. I'll save this city just as my great grandfather did.

The man was called Robby Wheeler. He was the great grandson of the legendary Joey Wheeler. Some say he is even more talented at dueling then Joey.

Creature:Fine, i'll explain the rules. If you win the city is saved. If I win you become my servent of darkness!

Robby:I ain't gonna lose! Let's duel! Wait! Wheres your duel disk?

Creature:HAHAH!! The power of the darkness has given me the power to summon real monsters without a pathetic machine.

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Robby:I'll start!

Robby's heart was beating at a very high rate. He was very intimidated by the creature.

Robby:I summon Rocket Warrior (ATK/1500 DEF/1300) in attack mode. Your move.

Creature: In mear momments the your shall feel the darkness! I summon Dark Jeroid (ATK/1200 DEF/1500) in attack mode.

Robby: Thats weak!

Creature:Not untill he feels the darkness! First of all it's affect activates, so your monster loses 800 points.

(New Attack:700)

Robby:No!

Creature:Now i'll equip him with Dark Energy! Feel the darkness my creature! (New Attack:1500). Now attack!

The creature shot out a powerful dark blast, inflicting alot of pain to Robby.

Robby:AH!!!

Creature:Haha! Look at you suffer!

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Robby:Who are you?

Creature:You may call me The Dark One. The one who will be the ruler of dimensions. Quit now and join me!

Robby:Never! I play Swordsman of Landstar (ATK/500 DEF/1200) in defence mode. I'll place two cards face down and end my turn.

The Dark One:Are you ready! For once I crush you my plan will fall to place! Then I will be the ruler of dimensions! HAHAHHA!!!

 

 

[spoiler=Chapter 5]

CHAPTER 5- GIFT FROM THE DARKNESS

 

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The Dark One:Why don't you just give up?

Robby:Never! I will protect the people I love. I will save this city.

The Dark One:Love? There will be no love when I transform this universe. Quit and join me. Become a powerful ruler and have anything you want!

Robby:Maybe hes right? I get everything I want.

The Dark One:Yes, give in to your darkness!

Robby:What am I saying! I can't!

The Dark One:You won't have a choice!

A figure from faw saw all of this take place. It was Jin.

Jin: (*whispers*) No way!

He quickly hid behind a bush and watched to rest of the duel.

The Dark One:I summon Slate Warrior (ATK/1900 DEF/400). Attack his swordsman!

Robby:Not so fast!

The Dark One:Whats this!

Robby:I activate my trap! Shadow Spell!

The Dark One:NO! Now my monster is unable to attack!

Robby:Yep, and it loses 700 ATK!

(New Attack:1200)

The Dark One:It matters not. Dark Jeroid attack!

Robby:Wait! I use Skull Dice!

The Dark One:What the hell dose that do!?!?!

Robby:Heres how it works. I role a die. What ever number I get is multiplyed by 100. Then you monster loses that much attack. So I need a 3 or above.

The Dark One:Your risking the life of your creature on a simple roll of a dice.

A huge, red dice was roled.

Robby:Come on!

It wrigled and wrigled.

The Dark One:Hmm...

Untill it stopped. It landed on 3.

Robby:Yes! Since your monster has the same amount of attack as my monsters defence nothing happens.

The Dark One:I end my turn.

Robby:My turn! I summon Gearfried The Iron Knight (ATK/1800 DEF/1000) . Then I activate Double Summon so I can summon another creature. So say hello to Panther Warrior (ATK/2000 DEF/1600) Next i'll sacrifise my swordsman so my panther can attack your Dark Jeroid.

Panther Warrior raised its sword. It charged at Dark Jeroid and sliced it with it's sword.

The Dark One:No!

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Robby:Gearfried The Iron Knight attack his Slate Warrior!

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The Dark One: I use Dark Hole! Say goodbye to all your monsters!

Robby:Crap!

A huge dark hole sucked up all of his monsters.

The Dark One: I summon Gill Garth (ATK/1800 DEF/1200). Attack!

It hit Robby with it's razor, sharp claws.

Robby:Ahh!

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Robby:I wont give up! I activate Monster Reborn to get my Swordsman of Landstar (ATK/500 DEF/1200) back. Then i'll sacrifise him to summon the mighty Jinzo (ATK/2400 DEF/1200)!

A cyborg sort of creature rose from the ground.

Robby:Attack Gill Garth!

Jinzo shot out a powerful shock of electricity which destroyed Gill Garth.

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The Dark One:My move! I draw! Ha! I end my turn.

Robby:What are you planing? Jinzo attack his life points!

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Robby:Now i'm winning.

The Dark One:No! Now you have lost! My turn! I activate Change Of Heart!

Robby:Oh no! Now you get my Jinzo! For only 1 turn though.

The Dark One:I don't need a second turn! I activate Limiter Removal.

Robby dropped the cards in hand and fell to his knees. He already knew that Limiter Removal doubles the attack of a machine type.

(New Attack:4800)

The Dark One:Attack Jinzo! Finish it!

Jinzo shocked Robby with blasts of lightning which got him flat on the ground.

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Jin:Wa..? He lost?

Jin ran off.

The Dark One:You remember our deal? You must become my loyal servant.

Robby:Never!!

The Dark One: Feel the darkness my new slave!

The Dark one let lose dark, shadow energy which was being transfered to Robby.

The Dark One:You must not be afraid! The power! The darkness!

Robby struggled to fight but in the end Robby got up. But he got up with the millenium symbol on his forehead.

Robby:I've felt the darkness, master. It has given me power!

The Dark One:Now use the darkness to summon Dark Soiders.

Robby started to glow purple. Soon evil creatures rose from the ground.

The Dark One:Excellent my new slave! I shall rule with you at my side. I have a task for you. Show more people the darkness. Also, defeat the one known as Zak Thomas. He is friends with one of the chosen ones.

Robby:Yes master.

 

 

[spoiler=Chapter 6]

CHAPTER 6- DARK DUELS

 

The sky was covered with dark clouds. It was freezing cold and pitch black.

Robby:My soilders of the dark hear my call.

Creatures rose from the ground.

Dark Soilder:What is it my master.

Robby:Send Dark Soilders to defeat the chosen ones. Send Dark Knight, our newest recruit to duel Zak Thomas. I want to test him.

Dark Soilder:Right away sir.

Robby:Even though The Dark One ordered me to kill Zak, I have more important things to do then wast my time on a kid. Only if he can defeat Dark Knight, will I duel him. I'm going to see Maximillion Pegasus The 3rd anyway. With his help, the Dark Soul card will be created. HAHAHHAHAH!!!!

The next day.....

Jin:I can't beleve Robby Wheeler lost to that thing. What was that thing anyway?

Dark Soilder:He is known as The Dark One.

Jin:Who the f**k are you?

Dark Soilder:Duel me!

Jin wanted to refuse but he knew the only way he could find out what was going on was by dueling.

Jin:Fine! Lets duel!

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Jin:I draw! I summon Elemental Hero Clayman (ATK/800 DEF/2000) in defence mode.

Dark Soilder:Prepare for your defeat!

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Meanwhile...

Max:I feel like something bad is going to happen.

Dark Soilder:Correct! You shall feel the darkness!

Max:Who are you?

Dark Soilder:Duel me!

Max was very scared. He had no idea of what was going on but he knew it was caused be the incident with the time machine a couple of days ago.

Max:Lets duel!

He was extreamly frightened but he knew he had to duel.

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Dark Soilder:I summon Headless Knight (ATK/1450 DEF/1700) in attack position.

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Meanwhile in Domino City....

Zak:Rainbow Dragon is gone because of me.

Dark Knight:Ah, you must be Zak Thomas.

Zak:Who the hell are you?!!?!?

Dark Knight:I am known as Dark Knight.

Zak:What do you want?

Zak shivered. He was very, very, scared.

Dark Knight:Duel me! See the darkness my friend.

Zak:I don't accept.

The Dark Knight drew out a sword.

Zak:Ok I accept!!

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Zak:I'll start! I summon, D.D Crazy Beast (ATK/1400 DEF/1400) in defence mode. Your move.

Dark Knight:I summon Dark Blade (ATK/1800 DEF/1400). Then i'll equip him with Axe Of Despair.

Zak:What dose that do?

Dark Knight:It raises my monsters attack by 1000!

(New Attack:2800)

Zak:You still can't touch my life points.

Dark Knight:Oh really? I use Stop Defence to swith your monster to attack mode!

Zak:No! Please no!

Dark Knight:Attack with Dark Slash!

Dark Blade stabbed D.D Crazy Beast with it's sword which easily destroyed it.

Zak:NO!

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Zak:AHHH! Why did that hurt?

Dark Knight:I have the power of darkness you fool!

Zak:The power of darkness?

Dark Knight:Yes and soon you shall die! And I'll please The Dark One and The Dark Servant! HAHAH!!

 

 

[spoiler=Chapter 7]

CHAPTER 7- FROM THE DARKNESS TO LIGHT

 

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Zak: I summon Battle Ox (ATK/1700 DEF/1000) in defence mode.

Dark Knight:Look at you hiding behind your monsters! Ha!

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Jin:Go Elemental Hero Bladedge! Attack!

Bladedge struck the creature with full force.

Dark Soilder:ARHH!! But I still have more life points then you.

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Jin:You think I care?

Dark Soilder:You will feel the darkness!

Jin:Feel the darkness? Why dose that sound so familiar. Oh!

 

 

Quote:

You shall see the light!

Thats why! Sartourius and the light 60 years ago! If that was The Light of Destruction, then this must be The Powers of Darkness. This thing must be controlled by it.

Dark Soilder:I summon Ryu Kishin (ATK/1000 DEF/500) in defence mode.

Jin:HAHAHAHAH!!

Dark Soilder:What's so funny?

Jin:You! Your such an idoit!

Dark Soilder:What do you mean? With a monster in defence mode my life points are safe.

Jin:Oh really? Bladedge attack Ryu Kishin!

Bladedge easily destroyed Ryu Kishin.

Dark Soilder:AHH!! Whats happening!?!?

Jin:Even though your monster was in defence mode, the difference between my monsters attack and your monsters defence come out of your life points.

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Dark Soilder:No! I'm sorry master! AHHHH!!!

The creature vanished.

Jin:What's going on?

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Dark Soilder: Shadow Ghoul (ATK/2700) attack his Red Eyes Black Dragon!

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Max:AHH!! No! Red Eyes!

Dark Soilder:Are you ready to give up?

Max:Never! I tribute my Mirage Dragon and Luster Dragon to summon Tri Horned Dragon (ATK/2850 DEF/2350).

Dark Soilder:No!

Max:Next i'll ativate Mega Morph.

Dark Soilder:Oh no!

Max:I guess you already know that it doubles my monsters attack.

(New Attack:5700)

Max:Attack!

Shadow Ghoul was destroyed.

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Dark Knight:One more attack and you die! Attack myGaia The Fierce Knight!

Zak:Wait! I use Negate Attack! Now your attack is negated and your battle phase ends.

Dark Knight:I end my turn.

Zak:(Come on heart of the cards, guide me) I draw! Yes!

Dark Knight:You seem happy about dying.

Zak:No, I'm happy about winning.

Dark Knight:What!

Zak:I use Soul Exchange.

Dark Knight:And that dose what....?

Zak:If I tribute this turn I can use your monsters as the tributes.

Dark Knight:Oh crap!

Zak:So I sacrifise your Gaia to summon my ultimate beast! Manticore of Darkness (ATK/2300 DEF/1000)!

Dark Knight:Ha! That creature isn't powerful enough to finish me off. Next turn i'll crush it.

Zak:There won't be a next turn! I activate Wild Natures Release!

Dark Knight:No! Not that!

(New Attack:3300)

Zak:It raises my monsters attack by its defence points.

Dark Knight:It's still too weak!

Zak:Wow! I didn't know that. I activate Mega Morph, so my monsters attack doubles!

(New Attack:6600)

Dark Knight:No! I can't lose to a kid!!!

Zak:Finish it!

The creature slashes the knight with its claws, dropping him to his knees.

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Dark Knight:AHH!!! HELP ME!!!!

Suddenly a dark spirt appeared.

Spirit:Your soul.

Dark Knight:AHH!! PLEASE HELP!!!

Zak wanted to walk away but he knew it wasn't the right thing to do.

Zak:Manticore of Darkness attack!

The spirit vanished. Suddenly, the darkness around Dark Knight was gone. The dark armor of his vanished. Then their sitting, was a well known figure.

Zak:No way! Your the general of the army!

Bryan:Actually, i'm his son Bryan.

Zak:Whats going on here?

Bryan:I will tell you everything I know.

 

 

[spoiler=Chapter 8]

CHAPTER 8- DARK SOUL

 

Lightning roared thought Domino City. The sky was gloomy and obscure. It was completely dead, with no life whatsoever. Who was to blame for this fate?

Zak:So a guy called The Dark One is doing all of this? But why?

Bryan:I don't know but he wants to rule all dimensions.

Zak:Oh yeah! Did he have the Rainbow Dragon?

Bryan:I never saw such card weilded by him. Hmmm..that could be how he got his power. The power of the Rainbow Dragon. Who is he?

Zak:He must be from the past!

Bryan:What? Thats not possible!

Zak looked down to the ground, apprehensively.

Zak:Actually.......

Meanwhile....

Max:This deck is sure to win me duels.

????:Get him!

Max:AHH!!!

Suddenly evil Dark Soilders rose from the ground. They knocked Max unconscious with their catastrophic dark powers.

????:Take him to The Dark Servants lair.

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Bryan:You have a friend called Max Blade, right?

Zak turned round, astonished.

Zak:How do you know about Max?

Bryan:Listen, your friend is in grave danger. We mus-

Just at that momment.

????:Traitor!

The pair turned round to see an unnusual figure. It appeared to be a machine, though you could see a human face though a little hole.

Bryan:It can't be! Mecha!

Zak:Who?

Mecha:I cannot believe you would side with him! Especailly since The Dark Servant ordered you to slaughter him.

Zak:What? Kill....me?

Mecha:Yes, little boy.

Zak:So...you have come to kill me?

Mecha:Oh please, I have more important tasks to accomplish. I would just like to say that I am in possesion of one of the chosen ones. Your friend Max, to be exact.

Bryan:No! One of the four chosen ones!

Zax realesed all his anger but with fear also.

Zak:NO!! YOU RELEASE HIM!!

Mecha:Ha! No! But heres a gift to cheer you up after you friends dimise. Arise, Dark Soilders!

Dark Soilders rose from the ground.

Mecha:Destroy them!

Mecha fled.

Dark Soilder 1:The darkness is upon us.

Dark Soilder 2:It is waiting to feast upon your souls.

Dark Soilder 3:Duel!

Bryan:No fair! Its three on two.

????:Make that three on three.

Bryan:Who are you?

Kai:The names Kai. These things have been destoying the planet! I want to put a stop to it. Let me join you.

Zak:Ok. Lets duel!

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Bryan:I'll start! I summon Celtic Guardian (ATK/1400 DEF/1200), in attack mode. Then i'll place a face down card. I end there.

Dark Soilder 1:I summon Gill Garth (ATK/1800 DEF/1200) in attack position.

Zak:My move! I summon Vorse Raider (ATK/1900 DEF/1200). Thats it ,for now.

Dark Soilder 2: I play Return Zombie (ATK/1000 DEF/1000) in defence mode.

Kai:Its about time! I call upon, Revival Jam (ATK/1500 DEF/500) , in attack position. Then i'll place a face down card. I end my move.

Dark Soilder 3: Finally! I draw! HAHHAHAHHH!!!

Kai:??????

Zak:What is it?

Dark Soilder 3:This card is created by the darkness from peoples hearts. I activate Dark Soul!

Zak:What! I've never seen that card!

Dark Soilder 3:Of corse you haven't you fool!

Gill Garth (New Attack)=2800.

Return Zombie (New Attack)=2000.

Bryan:How did you your monsters get stronger!??!

Dark Soilder 3:This card contains darkness, you fool!

Dark Soilder 1=4000LP

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Zak:So it requires half your life points. Its still too powerful. Your cheating!

Dark Soilder 3:Its a gift from The Dark One. HAHHAH!!!

Zak:How can we ever defeat the darkness?

 

To Be Continued.

 

 

 

Heres the prologe:

 

(BASED 100 YEARS IN THE FUTURE)

The tale begins with a young boy named Max Blade. He is the grandson of the legendary duelist, Ronald Blade, who has passed his deck on to him. He had made his way up to the finals of the pro-legues. His oppenent was Jin Yuki. He was a powerful duelists who followed the steps of his grandfather, Jaiden Yuki, and weilded the Elemental Hero deck. However, Jin was nothing like his grandfather. He dueled for victory and fame. He dosen't care about having fun. Two powerful duelists ready to face off. Who will win?

[Empolion7654]

Great Prologe. I can't wait for the first chapter.

 

 

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[Jack Witt]

pretty good, has a lot of potential

[Seth]

Sounds exciting!

[Ultimate Ryan]

sounds cool!

[harhar]

Not bad not bad at all

good job :)

[Spire]

Heres Chapter 1:

 

CHAPTER 1- THE EVIL HEROES DEFEAT (PART 1)

 

Announcer: Here it is folks! The moment you have all been waiting for! Max Blade vs Jin Yuki!!

The crowd roared.

Announcer:The winner will take home the Championship title, the loser goes home with nothing but defeat. So, now entering the stage, Max Blade!

White smoke covered the stadium. Suddenly, a figure came walking through it. It was Max. He made his way to the battlefield.

Crowd: *CHEER*

Announcer:Now give it up for the current champ, Jin Yuki!

Jin walked slowly to the battle field. He didn't care about making a good entrance.

Crowd: *CHEER*

Referee:Are you ready? Start!

They swiched on duel disks and drew there cards. Even though Max was up against a tough opponent he was pretty relexed. Jin didn't seem to show any emotion.

Zak: Come on Max!

In the crowd was Zak, Max's best friend. He was quite a talented duelist as he had won the championship five times. Untill of corse Jin came along and took the title off him.

Max=8000LP

Jin=8000LP

Max:I'll start! I draw! I activate Polymrastion so I can fuse together Red Eyes Black Dragon and Summoned Skull that are in my hand to summon, Black Skull Dragon (ATK/3200 DEF/2500)! Thats it.

Jin: Do you know? My grandfathers deck isn't the best!

Max: Why are you insulting your grandfathers deck?

Jin: It's not the best. Theres a deck far greater, my own. I enchanced my grandfathers deck with my Evil Heroes.

Max: Are you telling me you have the Evil Heroes?

Jin: Ha! I draw! I use Dark Fusion ,so bye bye Clayman and Sparkman. Now I can summon the mighty, Evil Hero Lightning Golem (ATK/2400 DEF/1500). A huge, evil fiend rose from the ground.

Jin:Your dead! Because my creatures ability allows me to destroy one creature per turn. Golem! Destroy his pitifull monster!

A powerful shower of lightning hit Max's dragon and instantly destroyed it.

Jin: Now my beast! Attack his life points!

The dark creature hit Max with a powerful shock of lightning. He came down to his knees.

Max=5600LP

Jin=8000LP

Zak:NO MAX!

Jin: Now you see the power of the Evil Heroes! HAHAHHA!!!

 

To Be Continued.

[Atomix]

awesome, I like how you ordered it

[Spire]

Heres Chapter 2:

CHAPTER 2- THE EVIL HEROES DEFEAT (PART 2)

 

Max=5600LP

Jin=8000LP

Announcer: Max has taken the first hit. Can he revive from this?

Max:My turn Jin! I draw!

Max looked closely at his hand. He couldn't even summon a monster, let alone destroy Jin's Golem.

Max: I'll end my turn.

Jin: Ha! Your making this too easy! My move! I summon, Elemental Hero Wildheart (ATK/1500 DEF/1200). Attack his life points!

Wild Heart leaped into the air and sliced Max with his deadly sword.

Max=4100LP

Jin=8000LP

Max: Th..that hurt

Jin: Your pain isn't over yet! Evil Hero Lightning Golem attack!

The dark creature hit Max with a powerful shock of lightning.

Max=1700LP

Jin=8000LP

Jin: Draw your last pathetic card so I can end this Max.

Max: My grandfathers deck has no pathetic cards Jin.

Jin: Come up with something origanal you fool!

Max: Fine, I use the magic of Exchange. This let's us look at each others hands and take any card we want.

Jin: Fine heres my hand!

Max: I choose to take your Elemental Hero Neos.

Jin: Humph, my grandfathers favourate card. Take it, I don't see how it will help you.

Max: Now you pick a card from my hand.

Jin:I pick Tri Horned Dragon.

Max: Next I activate, Ancient Rules!

Jin: Oh no!

Max: This card let's me summon any normal level five or above card from am hand and I choose Elemental Hero Neos (ATK/2500 DEF/2100). But wait I dicard a card to ativate Lightning Vortex which destroys all the monsters you control.

Jin: Crap!

Zak: Way to go Max!

Max:Next I activate Mega Morph on Neos, which doubles his power, (New Attack:5000).

Jin:You son of a..

Max: Almost done. I use Double Attack, so by discarding my Red Eyes Darkness Dragon, my Neos can attack twice.

Jin:NOOO!!! That means I lose!

Max: Neos Attack!!!

Max=1700LP

Jin=0LP

Announcer:What a match! Heres your new champ, Max Blade!

The crowed cheered.

Zak: He did it!

Jin left the stadum without saying a word.

MEANWHILE....

In a science lab.

Scientist: I have some of the rarest cards and there still not strong enought to power my time machine! But what! WHAT COULD POWER IT UP!!!!

He slammed his fist on a desk which made a magasin fall of the table. On the front cover was Rainbow Dragon.

Scientist:Of corse! Rainbow Dragon! Looks like I have some stealing to do.

[Guest Supreme Gamesmaster]

Nice fic! I would just be a bit more descriptive of events in general; we aren't really getting much character development. Critiquing specific areas below.

 

Genre Maintenance: 5/6. Comments: This is a pretty typical YGO fic, in script format and without good descriptions. I would describe events and thoughts in greater detail.

Plot Concept: 3/6. You haven't really given us a plot yet. Sure, a scientist wants to steal a card to power his time machine, but what will that do?

Character Development: 3/6. It isn't really there. We can understand their general personalities, but we know nothing of their pasts or any detail of their personalities.

Conventions: 4/6. Some noticable spelling/grammar errors, but nothing major.

Attention Keeping: 3/6. There's no real drama, which is probably caused by the lack of description.

Overall: 60%. The big thing here is more description. That alone will improve every area of the fic. Don't be afraid to go overboard with the details.

 

Notes: Instead of the +2 reps promised, could you just join the RP linked to in my sig?

[Atomix]

awesome chapter lol but I don't think Evil Heroes can be defeated that easily

[Spire]

Well thanks but i've only posted 2 chapters. The scientist isn't the true villlian. But because of him the true villian is born. It will become more clear after a couple more chapters. Thanks for the rate. I'll cheack out your rp.

[Davok]

Very good!

[Spire]

I have done the character bios. It will be updated when more chacters come in the story. Check it out if you wish. (There at the first post).

[Victory]

Very Nice!

I Like The Ordering And Plot

[familygamer!!!]

this is kinda cool :)

[bury the year]

It's interesting, but a bit short...

[Spire]

CHAPTER 3- ARRIVAL OF THE DARK ONE

 

Max was sitting at in his home, lying down on the sofa, watching TV. He sat thinking about his win over Jin. He was flicking through the channels untill he stopped at the news channel.

News Reporter:The legendy Rainbow Dragon card has been stolen from the Domino museum. Theres no evidence of who the thief is.

Max: No way! It's been stolen?

Max ran out of his house as fast as he could. He soon met up with Zak.

Zak:Did you hear, the Rainbow Dragon card has been stolen.

Max: Yeah. Who would do such a thing?

Just at that momment a scientist on a jet pack came flying past. You could see the Rainbow Dragon in his hand.

Max:Hes got it!

The duo ran and followed him untill they arrived at a damp,old cave. The scientist quickly ran in. The boys soon followed.

Zak:This is some kind of a lab.

Scientist: What are you kids doing here?

Max:Give back the Rainbow Dragon!

The scientist inserted the card to a time machine.

Scientist: No! You see kids I need the power of the Rainbow Dragon to power my time machine so I can steal the rarest cards from the past and future.

Max:NO YOU CAN'T!

Zak ran up the scienst and gave him a hard punch was caused him to faint.

Zak: Quick, let's play with his time machine.

They both got inside the huge machine. Zak pressed a random button. Suddenly eveything started to glow. They were transported to what seemed like the 14 centry.

Max:Cool! But this place is sure dull. Let's go some where else.

Max pressed a button. They were transported to the 7 centry.

Zak: This place stinks let's go somewhere else.

Zak pressed a button. They were transported to what seemed Domino city many years ago.

Max:This is more like it! We're in Domino city 100 years ago. This is when the Battle city tournament was held.

Zak: Hey let's go to the Duelist Kingdom finals.

Max: Yeah!

Zak pressed a button, but nothing happend.

Zak: Whats wrong? Work you stupid thing, work!

Zak kicked the time machine as hard as he could. Suddenly elecric volts came out of the machine. They were transported to their own time.

Zak: What happend?

Max:Hey the Rainbow Dragon was powering this thing up and it's not here.

Zak: We must of left it in the past!

Max:Oh no! If someone finds it, who knows what could happen?

MEANWHILE IN THE PAST 100 YEARS AGO...

Mystery Voice:Hey whats this, Rainbow Dragon. Never heard of it. It looks rare, must be one of my brothers cards.

Suddenly, a dark force came out of the card. The dark energy was transerd to the boy.

Mystery Voice:I feel the darkness! HAHAHAHAH!!!!!!

[starly]

wow 10/10

[Atomix]

let me guess, the boys the super villain

[Spire]

^ Correct but I think you would be suprised to find out who the boy really is. I am working on Chapter 4 now.

[Wyhe]

to be honest,it needs some (a lot) improving (like try to competsate the short duels with more drama) & put more vivid descriptions in it (for further help,go to the yugioh section of fanfiction.net,there are some writers who are extremely talented)

before I forget,my scoring for the series (so far):3.6/10

[Yuuki Ortez]

It's the start of something.

5/10

Like it was said add more description.

[Spire]

Both of your ratings should go up as the story progresess. This is just the begining. No fan fic starts off that exiting. Keep reading and you will see a change.

[Jadewiz]

I like this anfic. some spelling error's here and there but overall really good, 8/10