Number 60: Aeon the Time Diety

[flowerviolence]

 
(I really like making number monsters <3 )
 
Lore: 3 Level 4 Monsters
When this card is Xyz Summoned, send all other cards back to their owners hands. This card gains ATK equal to the number of cards that left the field by this effect x300. This card cannot attack the turn you activate this effect. Once per turn, you can detach 1 Xyz material from this card to Special Summon 1 Level 4 or lower monster from your graveyard.
 
For the number reference, it is pretty obvious. 60 seconds in a minute, 60 minutes in an hour. So his effects are sort of "Reversing time" by sending cards back to the hand and reviving dead monsters. CnC much appreciated!
 
BEFORE You mention something about no protection, that is done on purpose and most likely won't change. This card can become a serious beater if played properly! (19 cards maximum on the field PLUS Two Field spells and Four Pendulums. UP TO 7500 ATTACK! Of course that requires the field being full. This card will probably be lucky to see 3000 ATK.) If you think this card still needs protection, you cray.

[I Hate Snatch Steal]

Freudian? As in relating to that wacky psychologist?

I'd recommend you change the name unless you have a good reason for keeping it as is.

 

Onto the card itself:

Let me attempt to fix the card text so uses correct card grammar:

 

Lore: 3 Level 4 Monsters

When this card is Xyz Summoned: return all other cards to their owners hands. This card gains ATK equal to the number of cards returned to the hand by this effect x300. This card cannot attack the turn you activate this effect. Once per turn, you can detach 1 Xyz material from this card, then target 1 level 4 or lower monster in your graveyard; Special Summon that target.

 

A few notes on my correction:

With the current wording, any fusion, sychro, or xyz monster will not contribute to the ATK gain, since they don't reach the hand. You could change "This card gains ATK equal to the number of cards returned to the hand by this effect x300." to This card gains ATK equal to the number of cards that left the field by this effect x300." if you didn't want that.

 

I changed the special summon effect so it targets, since most effects of that style do (monster reborn and call of the haunted for example). As is, you are able to detach 1 material, then special summon the monster you just detached from the graveyard, since its in the graveyard when you select a target. Given the theme of time rewinding, I think this is fine.

 

Review:

 

I agree with you that it doesn't need protection. Its other effects are good enough without that. Returning all other cards to the hand is powerful, but for 3 materials its also fair. The second effect seems decent to me as well.

[flowerviolence]

Freudian? As in relating to that wacky psychologist?
I'd recommend you change the name unless you have a good reason for keeping it as is.
 
Onto the card itself:
Let me attempt to fix the card text so uses correct card grammar:
 
Lore: 3 Level 4 Monsters
When this card is Xyz Summoned: return all other cards to their owners hands. This card gains ATK equal to the number of cards returned to the hand by this effect x300. This card cannot attack the turn you activate this effect. Once per turn, you can detach 1 Xyz material from this card, then target 1 level 4 or lower monster in your graveyard; Special Summon that target.
 
A few notes on my correction:
With the current wording, any fusion, sychro, or xyz monster will not contribute to the ATK gain, since they don't reach the hand. You could change "This card gains ATK equal to the number of cards returned to the hand by this effect x300." to This card gains ATK equal to the number of cards that left the field by this effect x300." if you didn't want that.
 
I changed the special summon effect so it targets, since most effects of that style do (monster reborn and call of the haunted for example). As is, you are able to detach 1 material, then special summon the monster you just detached from the graveyard, since its in the graveyard when you select a target. Given the theme of time rewinding, I think this is fine.
 
Review:
 
I agree with you that it doesn't need protection. Its other effects are good enough without that. Returning all other cards to the hand is powerful, but for 3 materials its also fair. The second effect seems decent to me as well.

I knew of that psychologist. But just wanted a cool name for the card. I will change it to something more relevant though.

Other than that, thanks for the tip on the card wording! That is one thing I have always struggled with while making cards. So again, thanks :3