Lord monster Posted April 3, 2008 Report Share Posted April 3, 2008 can chapter 4 start Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darkrai777 Posted April 3, 2008 Author Report Share Posted April 3, 2008 You find out how the potal appears later and he didn't care because he needed that portal. And I do care about grammer. *edit* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lord monster Posted April 3, 2008 Report Share Posted April 3, 2008 when is chapter 4 comming out! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted April 3, 2008 Report Share Posted April 3, 2008 If you care about grammar, (notice the a) you should use it properly. Just saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darkrai777 Posted April 3, 2008 Author Report Share Posted April 3, 2008 Here Chapter 4! Chapter 4- Light vs Dark (Part 2) Steven- 8000LP- 2 cardsHunter- 8000LP- 3 cardsYugi- 8000LP- 5 cardsJoey- 6400LP- 5 cardsHunter: Sengenjin attack Joey’s life points!Sengenjin attacked Joey with its deadly hammer, taking 2750 life points. Steven- 8000LP- 2 cardsHunter- 8000LP- 3 cardsYugi- 8000LP- 5 cardsJoey- 3250LP- 5 cardsJoey: I’m sorry Yugi, I’m letting us down.Yugi (Atem): My move! I summon Gazelle the King of Mythical Beasts (ATK1500/DEF1000) in defence mode and end my turn.Hunter: Ha! That can’t scratch my Sengenjin.Steven: My move! I sacrifice my Decoy Dragon to summon Luster Dragon #2 (ATK2400/DEF1400). Now attack Joey’s life points!Joey: I’m done for! If those two dragons attack me!Yugi (Atem): I activate my trap!Steven: TRAP!Yugi (Atem): I use Mirror Force! It destroys all your monsters.Steven: No! I end my move.Joey: I use Scapegoat! It let’s me summon four sheep tokens. Then I summon, Panther Warrior (ATK2000/DEF1600). By sacrificing a sheep my Panther can attack. Attack his life points! Panther Warrior slashed Steven with its sword.Steven- 6000LP- 2 cardsHunter- 8000LP- 3 cardsYugi- 8000LP- 5 cardsJoey- 3250LP- 4 cardsJoey: I end my turn.Hunter: I summon Vorse Raider. Sengenjin attack Gamma! Vorse Raider attack Gazelle!Both of Yugi’s monsters were destroyed. Yugi (Atem): Why do you work for someone who is insane?Hunter: How do you even know master Raven?Yugi (Atem): In a duel tournament. After losing, he said he was going to rebuild the universe. By collecting the energy of the world’s strongest creatures, he can r-Hunter: Just make your move!Yugi (Atem): Fine! I draw! I sacrifice Joey’s tokens to summon the great, Obelisk The Tormenter! Daniel: No way!Steven and Hunter were speechless as they watched the monster rise from the ground.Yugi (Atem): Attack Sengenjin! Fist of Fate!Obelisk struck Sengenjin with its mighty fists.Hunter: No! Steven- 6000LP- 2 cardsHunter- 6750LP- 3 cardsYugi- 8000LP- 5 cardsJoey- 3250LP- 4 cardsSeven: My move. Steven shook, he was staring into the face of an Egyptian god. I play Mirage Dragon (ATK1600/DEF600) in defence mode. I end my move.Joey: My turn! I use Fissure! It destroys your monster!Steven: CRAP!!!Joey: Then I summon Rocket Warrior (ATK1500/DEF1300). Attack that kids life points.Steven was struck by a rocket, losing 1500 life points.Steven- 4500LP- 2 cardsHunter- 6750LP- 3 cardsYugi- 8000LP- 5 cardsJoey- 3250LP- 3 cardsJoey: I’ll sacrifice, Rocket Warrior so my Panther can attack your life points! Panther Warrior slashed Steven with its sword.Steven- 2500LP- 2 cardsHunter- 6750LP- 3 cardsYugi- 8000LP- 5 cardsJoey- 3250LP- 3 cardsHunter: I switch my Vorse Raider to defence mode and end my turn.Yugi (Atem): Obelisk, attack the little boy’s life points with Fist of Fate!Steven: NO! I’ll lose the duel!Hunter: Vorse Raider! Help Steven!Vorse Raider took the hit. That cost Hunter a lot of life points.Steven- 2500LP- 2 cardsHunter- 4650LP- 4 cardsYugi- 8000LP- 5 cardsJoey- 3250LP- 3 cardsSteven: Thanks, Hunter.Hunter: How can we beat Obelisk? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
elamental hero's Posted April 3, 2008 Report Share Posted April 3, 2008 cool me and my bro lord monster was acting that Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Deucalion Posted April 3, 2008 Report Share Posted April 3, 2008 Really quick point: Servant, not Servent. Not a bad storyline, although it is re-using older characters. The plotline isn't too bad, and I can see you've put quite a lot of effort into the duels. Umbra is right, though, spelling and grammar could use some work. I'm going to say 7/10, but perfect the grammar and have more character development in the next chapter and I'll raise it to 8/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
elamental hero's Posted April 3, 2008 Report Share Posted April 3, 2008 20/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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