Gaara...Nuff Said!

[allywayjack]

This is my first post hope you enjoy my Gaara's.

[Chidori]

There are pretty cool.....Gaara pwns

[SushiTheLegend]

Pretty much broken and too many OCG errors, all in all epic failure.

[Kouen Kitsune]

I thought they were very well made.It looks like you put alot of effort into making them and I know I couldn't make cards that good.

[toukotamago]

All pretty good, but WTF is with Divine Gaara. Was that really in the series?

 

Also, specify weather Gaara's Defense attack is caculated with its ATK or DEF points.

 

Overall, I like them ^_^ 8/10

[overheat]

IMG codes plz

[RedRecker]

Ok, now that I'm here, prepare for a long post. I can see you're a new member, so I'd like to welcome you to Yugioh Card Maker for a start and hope you enjoy it here. I'll congratulate you on the effort I can see you've made, these being your first cards, and you've made quite an interesting Gaara set here, so you get points for originality. However, there are some mistakes that I'd just like to point out for you. Now I'm not trying to pick on or insult you, just trying to help and give you advice for future card making.

 

1. Gaara of the Sand

This card can declare an attack while in face-up Defense Position.

 

Interestingly enough, you're first mistake here was in the name, you capitalised 'the'. Now i suppose, technically it could be that way if you really intended it to be like that, but then that would leave you with a mistake in your next card, when you mention a card's name in the text it must be EXACTLY the same as in the name. Also I noticed you added a new type. Now, people make new types all the time and I don't really have a problem with it but if you are going to do that, just give him the one type, not both. (Making new types makes them far more unrealistic and I personally prefer to use existing types, but in the end it's your choice). Ok, for the text, the important changes here are you need to state he's face-up and its called Defense Position, not Mode.

 

2. Dark Revelations <-- Spelling mistake here

Tribute 1 "Gaara of the Desert" on your side of the field to Special Summon 1 "Fiend Gaara" from your hand or Deck to your side of the field. This card cannot be returned to your hand or Deck from the Graveyard.

 

Most important things to remember here are; 1. Numbers are always in numerical form 2. you don't need to say (you select position) if you just say Special Summon without stating position then selection is a given 3. Capitalisation words Deck, Graveyard, Special Summon(ed) 4. mention your side of the field, unless you want to be able to Tribute an opponent's Gaara for this effect 5. It's Tribute not Sacrifice, as far as I'm aware (think I have heard of it used somewhere though).

 

3. Fiend Gaara (I like this one)

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by the effect of "Dark Revelations". When this card is Special Summoned successfully, destroy all other monsters on the field (except "Divine Gaara"). Increase the ATK and DEF of this card by 600 points for each monster destroyed by this effect. If your opponent controls a face-up "Divine Gaara" this card can only declare an attack against "Divine Gaara".

 

You did real good with this one. Other than the OCG errors here or there, I really liked the effect. It's very original. I like this whole Light and Dark thing you've got going on here, you must have been drinking a lot of Guinness :D. Thing here, was sentence structure and the capitals again, Normal Summon(ed) and Set are among some of the words always capitalised.

 

4. Divine Ascent

Sacrifice 1 "Gaara of the Sand" on your side of the field to Special Summon 1 "Divine Gaara" from your hand or Deck to your side of the field. This card cannot be returned to your hand or Deck from the Graveyard.

 

Just the same mistakes as your second card here. I'm sure you'll learn all you need to and improve in time. Not much to say on this other than that.

 

5. Divine Gaara (what the hell? :?)

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by the effect of "Divine Ascent". When this card is Special Summoned successfully, destroy all DARK monsters on the field (except "Fiend Gaara"). If your opponent controls a face-up "Fiend Gaara", the ATK and DEF of this card are equal the ATK and DEF of "Fiend Gaara" (If 2 or more "Fiend Gaara" exist on your opponent's side of the field, take the highest ATK and DEF) and this card can only declare an attack against "Fiend Gaara". Increase the ATK and DEF of this card by 200 points for each LIGHT monster in your Graveyard.

 

I like this one too, very good effect. All you need to work on here is sentence structure and OCG. Also to remember, an attribute like LIGHT or DARK are always in full capitals, and you don't need to mention attribute if your saying 'a DARK monster' for example. I used ot make this mistake a lot (in fact I think I still need to change it on one of my cards lol).

 

To sum up, I really liked this set you've made, nice to see something fresh and originally in the sea of Naruto Cards that pop up here. If you like Naruto, please check out my set too. Hope this is helpful.

 

Oh and if you want a rating (7/10) for effort and originality. I liked how you used artwork instead of anime pics too, but they could have been slightly better quality (ecspecially on the first one). It would be nice if you gave credit to the artists too.

[linkpkm]

Ok' date=' now that I'm here, prepare for a long post. I can see you're a new member, so I'd like to welcome you to Yugioh Card Maker for a start and hope you enjoy it here. I'll congratulate you on the effort I can see you've made, these being your first cards, and you've made quite an interesting Gaara set here, so you get points for originality. However, there are some mistakes that I'd just like to point out for you. Now I'm not trying to pick on or insult you, just trying to help and give you advice for future card making.

 

1. Gaara of the Sand

This card can declare an attack while in face-up Defense Position.

 

Interestingly enough, you're first mistake here was in the name, you capitalised 'the'. Now i suppose, technically it could be that way if you really intended it to be like that, but then that would leave you with a mistake in your next card, when you mention a card's name in the text it must be EXACTLY the same as in the name. Also I noticed you added a new type. Now, people make new types all the time and I don't really have a problem with it but if you are going to do that, just give him the one type, not both. (Making new types makes them far more unrealistic and I personally prefer to use existing types, but in the end it's your choice). Ok, for the text, the important changes here are you need to state he's face-up and its called Defense Position, not Mode.

 

2. Dark Revelations <-- Spelling mistake here

Tribute 1 "Gaara of the Desert" on your side of the field to Special Summon 1 "Fiend Gaara" from your hand or Deck to your side of the field. This card cannot be returned to your hand or Deck from the Graveyard.

 

Most important things to remember here are; 1. Numbers are always in numerical form 2. you don't need to say (you select position) if you just say Special Summon without stating position then selection is a given 3. Capitalisation words Deck, Graveyard, Special Summon(ed) 4. mention your side of the field, unless you want to be able to Tribute an opponent's Gaara for this effect 5. It's Tribute not Sacrifice, as far as I'm aware (think I have heard of it used somewhere though).

 

3. Fiend Gaara (I like this one)

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by the effect of "Dark Revelations". When this card is Special Summoned successfully, destroy all other monsters on the field (except "Divine Gaara"). Increase the ATK and DEF of this card by 600 points for each monster destroyed by this effect. If your opponent controls a face-up "Divine Gaara" this card can only declare an attack against "Divine Gaara".

 

You did real good with this one. Other than the OCG errors here or there, I really liked the effect. It's very original. I like this whole Light and Dark thing you've got going on here, you must have been drinking a lot of Guinness :D. Thing here, was sentence structure and the capitals again, Normal Summon(ed) and Set are among some of the words always capitalised.

 

4. Divine Ascent

Sacrifice 1 "Gaara of the Sand" on your side of the field to Special Summon 1 "Divine Gaara" from your hand or Deck to your side of the field. This card cannot be returned to your hand or Deck from the Graveyard.

 

Just the same mistakes as your second card here. I'm sure you'll learn all you need to and improve in time. Not much to say on this other than that.

 

5. Divine Gaara (what the hell? :?)

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by the effect of "Divine Ascent". When this card is Special Summoned successfully, destroy all DARK monsters on the field (except "Fiend Gaara"). If your opponent controls a face-up "Fiend Gaara", the ATK and DEF of this card are equal the ATK and DEF of "Fiend Gaara" (If 2 or more "Fiend Gaara" exist on your opponent's side of the field, take the highest ATK and DEF) and this card can only declare an attack against "Fiend Gaara". Increase the ATK and DEF of this card by 200 points for each LIGHT monster in your Graveyard.

 

I like this one too, very good effect. All you need to work on here is sentence structure and OCG. Also to remember, an attribute like LIGHT or DARK are always in full capitals, and you don't need to mention attribute if your saying 'a DARK monster' for example. I used ot make this mistake a lot (in fact I think I still need to change it on one of my cards lol).

 

To sum up, I really liked this set you've made, nice to see something fresh and originally in the sea of Naruto Cards that pop up here. If you like Naruto, please check out my set too. Hope this is helpful.

 

Oh and if you want a rating (7/10) for effort and originality. I liked how you used artwork instead of anime pics too, but they could have been slightly better quality (ecspecially on the first one). It would be nice if you gave credit to the artists too.

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I agree but thinks its rather 6/10

[allywayjack]

Thanks for the constructive critisism. I'll keep it all in mind and do some editing and update soon.

[Best-Card-Maker164]

hey allwayjack i have a queston bout Gaara of the Sand card u made.

 

when he is in def positon he can atk but does he use his atk power or his def power to atk with???