Asriel Dreemurr Posted December 15, 2014 Report Share Posted December 15, 2014 I'm free right now, so I'll give you a full-blown review if you'd like. Go ahead if you like. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyng Posted December 15, 2014 Report Share Posted December 15, 2014 Basic information is obviously satisfactory.Dire wolves being apex predators isn't anything unsurprising, but since you're clearly going Fire & Ice theme the size is justified, rather than the size of the extinct breed of reality was. Their ability to use Nen is a bit...odd for me, at least. From my understanding Nen seems like something only sapiens would really to make use of, what with having to understand how to even open one's Aura Nodes - the fact these wolves can somewhat use it is odd. In this dog's case with a telepathic bond I could perfectly understand it, but it being a norm is bad taste. Then again, Charles Atlas world.Picture is a picture, size is appropriate based on which wolf you're going for. The glowing eyes are interesting though and might be a point you could choose to elaborate upon - does his eyes glow? Or rather does he have eyes of a colour that your app hasn't specified?I've already explained my stance on beasts and Nen. His natural traits are, well, obvious, but necessary to explain so I am unsurprised they're there. Not sure what to think about how they are so agile whilst able to be silent - a lot of mass moving at such speeds would not normally have a way to remain hush-hush about it. Seems odd to me. Then again, Charles Atlas. Besides that, you haven't discussed stamina. He can have as much agility as he likes, but how much stamina does he have to maintain it?All in all, sound companion for your Hunter. There are bits I am iffy on, but based on the setting there's no need to really change anything. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asriel Dreemurr Posted December 15, 2014 Report Share Posted December 15, 2014 Well thanks for the opinion, Kyng. I guess I need to go back and make a few modifications though so things make sense, but I'll explain here since you seemed to want one. The ability of the species to use Nen was just an idea I came up with that seemed to make sense with the setting. After all, it seems like the kind of world where all sorts of magical beasts would be running around, so if you're an apex predator you'll need to have similar abilities just to take down your prey. Admittedly I did that with no real idea of what the rest of the world would be like, but it felt right at the time. As for the matter of their stealth, I suppose I need to remember that not everyone knows as much about animal behavior as I do...or maybe just that people don't make the same sorts of assumptions I do. The stealth was meant to come across as when they slow down and stalk through the undergrowth, not when they're charging along to try and run down their prey. As for their stamina, I suppose I ought to address that as well. All in all, thanks for goin' over it for me. Edit: Oh, and I forgot to mention that Rexxus' eyes don't glow. The picture I found that I liked the most just happened to have glowing eyes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Admiral_Stalfos19 Posted December 15, 2014 Report Share Posted December 15, 2014 I've been wondering how to ask this question I have for quite some time, but I suppose it's about time I spat it out. It has something to do about a new race I wanted to create before starting on my app. ... Alright, say I wanted to create a race of sapien-bovine people called Tauren, just as an example, and then say I wanted one lot to have bison-like traits in appearance and another lot to have buffalo-like traits in appearance, and have them worship these respective animals despite having otherwise similar cultures. Would I be able or unable to class both of these groups as the same race of Tauren right off the bat with that information, or would it depend on how much detail I manage to give about each group's lifestyles and how similar they are to one another? I'm assuming the latter, but I can't be certain :/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aix Posted December 15, 2014 Author Report Share Posted December 15, 2014 I've been wondering how to ask this question I have for quite some time, but I suppose it's about time I spat it out. It has something to do about a new race I wanted to create before starting on my app. ... Alright, say I wanted to create a race of sapien-bovine people called Tauren, just as an example, and then say I wanted one lot to have bison-like traits in appearance and another lot to have buffalo-like traits in appearance, and have them worship these respective animals despite having otherwise similar cultures. Would I be able or unable to class both of these groups as the same race of Tauren right off the bat with that information, or would it depend on how much detail I manage to give about each group's lifestyles and how similar they are to one another? I'm assuming the latter, but I can't be certain :/They can be the same race, sure. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asriel Dreemurr Posted December 15, 2014 Report Share Posted December 15, 2014 And I tweaked Rexxus' app to hopefully make a bit more sense and explain things better than it did before. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Love of Ghibli Posted December 15, 2014 Report Share Posted December 15, 2014 Dire wolves being apex predators isn't anything unsurprising, but since you're clearly going Fire & Ice theme the size is justified, rather than the size of the extinct breed of reality was. Their ability to use Nen is a bit...odd for me, at least. From my understanding Nen seems like something only sapiens would really to make use of, what with having to understand how to even open one's Aura Nodes - the fact these wolves can somewhat use it is odd. In this dog's case with a telepathic bond I could perfectly understand it, but it being a norm is bad taste. Then again, Charles Atlas world. . The ability of the species to use Nen was just an idea I came up with that seemed to make sense with the setting. After all, it seems like the kind of world where all sorts of magical beasts would be running around, so if you're an apex predator you'll need to have similar abilities just to take down your prey. Admittedly I did that with no real idea of what the rest of the world would be like, but it felt right at the time. . To clarify this thing about Nen being used by beast. It is perfectly logical for that to happen. All animals have aura nodes so it is possible for all animals to have aura nodes opened for them. There is an arc in HxH where a group of super ants learned and mastered Nen techniques. Granted this was after they started eating humans, but all of them already had aura nodes. The way these ants had their aura nodes opened was by having one super ant use a Nen powered punch and forcefully opened the aura nodes of the others. Therefore I would think that it is perfectly logical for a wolf to know of Nen if it's Master is the one who opened its nodes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maeriberii Haan Posted December 15, 2014 Report Share Posted December 15, 2014 I somewhat finding it funny that even if the only continent (out of three) listed in the database for now is based on Asia, none of the characters right now have an asia-ish name. Not something to worry about, just a small fun fact. Then again, it's not really asia, and this is not earth. But yeah... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyng Posted December 15, 2014 Report Share Posted December 15, 2014 To clarify this thing about Nen being used by beast. It is perfectly logical for that to happen. All animals have aura nodes so it is possible for all animals to have aura nodes opened for them. There is an arc in HxH where a group of super ants learned and mastered Nen techniques. Granted this was after they started eating humans, but all of them already had aura nodes. The way these ants had their aura nodes opened was by having one super ant use a Nen powered punch and forcefully opened the aura nodes of the others. Therefore I would think that it is perfectly logical for a wolf to know of Nen if it's Master is the one who opened its nodes.A HxH-unedumacated plebian thanks you for the clarification. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dad Posted December 15, 2014 Report Share Posted December 15, 2014 Hmm. Too many people for my liking. That, and I'm more busy than I thought. Consider my application withdrawn. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aix Posted December 15, 2014 Author Report Share Posted December 15, 2014 Oh yeah, guys, just saying but it's nice to have non-combat abilities. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
宇佐見 蓮子@C94 Posted December 15, 2014 Report Share Posted December 15, 2014 Aix, is it possible to turn limbs into aura and then manipulate it? I feel like it would be a good idea for my devil-loli. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aix Posted December 16, 2014 Author Report Share Posted December 16, 2014 Aix, is it possible to turn limbs into aura and then manipulate it? I feel like it would be a good idea for my devil-loli.If you mean to turn your limbs into extra aura, then no.Also, I've edited the Nen system to add some details. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Love of Ghibli Posted December 16, 2014 Report Share Posted December 16, 2014 The vast majority of my app is finished...Just have to do the "Misc." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aix Posted December 16, 2014 Author Report Share Posted December 16, 2014 You don't have to do misc. [hr] [spoiler=Jack Whitechapel]The Bloody Star Name: Jack Whitechapel Age: 25 Gender: Male Race: Human [hr] [spoiler=Appearance] A moderately tall, and extremely fit man. He is not usually covered in blood, and his natural hair color is red.[/spoiler] [hr] [spoiler=Personality]Cocky, and pretentious, Jack has been one often described to talk too much. He is very outgoing and actively engages others in pleasantries and conversations, particularly those he is about to kill. His rather odd sense of humor lets him see something amusing or ironic in every situations, and he is able to be witty in his own little way. Despite his boisterous exterior, Jack is a very intelligent and calculating person. He is a cunning fighter, capable of properly gauging situations and predicting and manipulating the outcome, but while he is highly confident in his own abilities, if something goes wrong he is easily prone to maniacal tantrums. Despite being outgoing, Jack does not actual commit to things like friends, instead being completely egocentric and only helping others if he feels it would benefit him in the end. As a complete hedonist, he is constantly doing things to suit himself. Long ago, he determined that morals were useless and contrived, and decided there was no need for him to follow the rules of society. He does not hold grudges and gets over his tantrums easily, thus he is able to change sides at a moment's notice. His only goals are to enjoy and have fun in life. While he does enjoy the high life and riches, his greatest pleasures are in fighting capable opponents. He does not like to spoil himself, however, and decides only maximize his experience by picking to only fight seriously against top-class enemies and only every once in a while. He is making an exception to his restraint however, after learning about the "feast of a century" - the existence of 108 powerful Nen users said to appear.[/spoiler] [hr] [spoiler=Biography]Born to an affluent and daring missionary family visiting the poor countries to the south, Jack was exposed early on to the contrast between his parents' uptight and Utopian morals and the lawlessness of the poor. At the age of ten, his parents were brutally massacred before his eyes by burglars, and managing to escape on his own, he became a proper resident of Meteor City, a lawless city that does not officially exist in the eyes of the civilized world. Emerging five later to became a genius assassin of the Mafia, he restored with his own hands a privileged lifestyle and now pursues his own objectives in addition to taking occasional high-classification jobs for the Mafia.[/spoiler] [hr] [spoiler=Abilities]Immense Physical Abilities In the underworld, Jack is referred to as a monster. His base physical abilities allow him to smash boulders, and run up the side of buildings without requiring the use of Nen. He moves faster than the eye can follow, and is capable of easily dodging and even catching bullets. In addition, he is highly flexible and is able to squeeze through small spaces.Assassination Arts Jack wields no weapons nor does he use any recognized martial art, instead he utilizes unarmed assassination techniques as well as his extreme reflexes to fight opponents. Users of these techniques employ a very natural use of Nen. Claws: A technique brought upon extreme control over one's body, Jack is capable of shaping his fingers and fingernails into extremely sharp claws which can shear through skin. This is his primary form of offense, and he prefers to simply rip enemies apart with his claws and immense strength. Shadow Stepping: Jack naturally does this and makes absolutely no noise while walking. Rhythm Echo: A technique that confuses the eye and the senses, by moving and fluctuating greatly in speed and position to create a series of afterimages. A small amount of Nen is leaked subconsciously to enhance this effect, spreading Jack's presence over a large area and convincing the brain that he has countless clones. This confusion also induces nausea and hence lowers one's guard. Nen Mastery Jack is a master at Nen, able to use it to fortify his abilities to great extents. However, he is in a constant state of Zetsu unless engaging in open combat and simply uses his high mental fortitude to ward of psychic Nen attacks and his extreme reflexes to dodge everything else. Only if he feels he is fighting a dangerous opponent in an open space will he use Ryu. In order to maintain his Zetsu, even when attacking, he does not use Nen unless absolutely necessary.Nen Ability - Phase Step A specialist ability perfect for assassins to surprise enemies. If Jack steps on a shadow, he can phase out of existence. While phasing his presence is completely erased in every way, shape, and form. He cannot be detected or hurt, however any Nen abilities attached to him still follow him. In this state, he is also able to walk through walls, but he is only able to rejoin the physical world after stepping on another shadow. The weakness of this ability is the time limit, he can never rejoin the world again if he disappears for more than five minutes. He can also make someone else phase with him, his limit is around one person or a small car for phasing. When phasing, everything goes out of focus except for shadows. Anyone phasing with him can step out on their own and also have the same time limit as him. [/spoiler][/spoiler] [hr] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asriel Dreemurr Posted December 16, 2014 Report Share Posted December 16, 2014 Oh yeah, guys, just saying but it's nice to have non-combat abilities. Well, it's not very interesting to hear about a character's skills in mathematics, or how he can tell where a wine was made just by the taste. Also, a telepathic link is technically a non-combat ability. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyng Posted December 16, 2014 Report Share Posted December 16, 2014 When'll we be starting? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maeriberii Haan Posted December 16, 2014 Report Share Posted December 16, 2014 When'll we be starting? Still waiting for some apps to be finished. When they're done, we'll start immediately. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aix Posted December 16, 2014 Author Report Share Posted December 16, 2014 Well, it's not very interesting to hear about a character's skills in mathematics, or how he can tell where a wine was made just by the taste. Also, a telepathic link is technically a non-combat ability. Not necessarily math, but stuff like tracking, vehicular mastery, knowledge of certain fields like history or zoology, craftsmanship, disguise, first aid, etc. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyng Posted December 16, 2014 Report Share Posted December 16, 2014 Not necessarily math, but stuff like tracking, vehicular mastery, knowledge of certain fields like history or zoology, craftsmanship, disguise, first aid, etc.Well, in that case I will get to work on updating the app. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asriel Dreemurr Posted December 16, 2014 Report Share Posted December 16, 2014 Huh. You know, some of those are skills that Alaster might have due to his training... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LordCowCowCowCowCowCowCowCow Posted December 16, 2014 Report Share Posted December 16, 2014 I just would like to say if everyone else finishes apps and I don't start it, I'm still not sure I will be a part of this anymore so I don't want to hold anyone up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asriel Dreemurr Posted December 17, 2014 Report Share Posted December 17, 2014 Updated my app to what I believe should be the final version. Just added some noncombat skills. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
scooterulez Posted December 17, 2014 Report Share Posted December 17, 2014 Sorry to say, but I'm going to have to resign my app. Things came up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maeriberii Haan Posted December 17, 2014 Report Share Posted December 17, 2014 Reminder for people who has not started/finished their app that we'll start around 20th or 21st. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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