My First Dragon Cards

[drosen23]

1 "light" tuner+ 2 non tuners

While this card is face up on the field, the ATK of DARK monsters and Magicians halves. When this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, you can Special Summon 2 LIGHT monsters and 1 DRAGON monster from your Graveyard. 

This card is used to Ritual Summon "Mech Dragon Toshiaki". You must also offer monsters whose total Level Stars equal 9 or more as a tribute. 

This card is also treated as a (Machine) type monster. This card can only be Ritual Summoned with the Ritual Spell card "Mech Dragon Ritual". Once Ritual Summoned, target 2 monsters or spell/trap cards and destroy them. 

 

1 "water" tuner+ 1 non tuner

 

When this card is Summoned, target 1 water monster from your Graveyard and Summon it. That Monster gains 700 ATK points

(2) 7 stars (Fire) monsters

When this card is Summoned on the field, target 1 Fire Monster from your Graveyard and add it to your Hand. Also when that Monster is played on the Field, it gains 650 ATK and DEF points.  

1 "Dark" tuner+ 1 non tuner

Once this card is Summoned, you can target 1 dark Monster from your Graveyard and Summon it. Also once that Monster is Summoned, it gains 600 ATK and DEF Points. 

1 "Wind" tuner+ 2 non tuners

When this card is Summoned, target 2 wind monsters from Your Graveyard and Summon them. Once Summoned they gain 500 ATK Points. If you only have 1 "wind" monster in your Graveyard, Summon it and once Summoned it gains 1000 ATK points.

(2) 7 Star "Earth" monsters 

When this card is Summoned on the field, target 1 Earth Monster from your Graveyard Summon it. Once Summoned, gains 650 ATK Points. 

[cElectricFanG]

First off, Toshaki is a useless card. Honestly, it's just treated as a Machine as well, not that great of a card for a 9-level tribute. Rizark and Alpax are also too hard to even get out, so much so that their effects aren't even worth it. 2 Tuners for Alpax? And a Synchro Tuner for Rizark? Nah, I can pull off better combos with less monsters.

 

Tons of OCG errors. It's Summoned, not played. And use numbers instead of words. (1 instead of one). Words like Graveyard, Summon, Deck, etc. are all capitalized.

 

I don't know about the last one, but it seems like a Xyz FIRE counterpart to Alpax. Try reuploading them.

 

Otherwise, cool concept. The cost for summoning them is a bit ridiculous, but I can see a ton of potential combos with these dragons. Just alter the effects and you'll be good. :)

[drosen23]

First off, Toshaki is a useless card. Honestly, it's just treated as a Machine as well, not that great of a card for a 9-level tribute. Rizark and Alpax are also too hard to even get out, so much so that their effects aren't even worth it. 2 Tuners for Alpax? And a Synchro Tuner for Rizark? Nah, I can pull off better combos with less monsters.

 

Tons of OCG errors. It's Summoned, not played. And use numbers instead of words. (1 instead of one). Words like Graveyard, Summon, Deck, etc. are all capitalized.

 

I don't know about the last one, but it seems like a Xyz FIRE counterpart to Alpax. Try reuploading them.

 

Otherwise, cool concept. The cost for summoning them is a bit ridiculous, but I can see a ton of potential combos with these dragons. Just alter the effects and you'll be good. :)

 

Tell me what you think now. 

[Flash Flyer - Sakura]

To be frank, the Xyz Dragons are going to be extremely difficult to bring out, given their conditions.

If Blaster/Redox weren't limited, then it MIGHT have made them remotely more playable; as they are now, not so.

 

And what do you get out of it? Just reviving a monster for a power boost.

If I wanted to make Rank 7s, I'd rather go into 11 or Dracossack; less requirements and they actually do something worth noting.

 

On that note, all of the Dragons here SS a monster + give it a power bonus. Rizark is good for Xyz setup if that's what you're aiming for. Can't really say what Decks would make good use out of it; probably goes with anything that can afford a LIGHT Tuner + 2 non-Tuners. Koratak at least floats a FIRE monster in the Graveyard, but how often will you be getting it out?

 

Alpax is more reasonable now; though again will only see play in Decks that can run WATER Tuners; Ice Barriers are one of them (to an extent).

 

Toshiaki blows up some backrow (or monsters) when it's summoned, but after that it's just a 3300 ATK beater that's vulnerable to stuff like 101 / Exciton and other relevant removal.

 

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I'd really advise that you read Zaziuma's OCG guide in RC-Singles, because your card grammar needs a lot of work.

[cElectricFanG]

As Sakura said, the cost for these monsters are still too high. Level 7 Earth, okay, with Machina Fortress and Redox that's doable, but why would you trade a Fortress and a Redox to get your EARTH dragon? Not worth it.

 

I Toshaki is pretty good, but it's useless after you Summon it. Actually, most of these monsters are useless after you Summon them. Instead of going for a revive and boost theme, think of something different. Something gimmicky, but could work.

 

It's just your spelling and grammar dude. Find a real Yugioh card and read it, or find a guide (like the one Sakura suggested).

 

Once again, great concept for supporting elemental cards, just rethink them a bit.

[drosen23]

As Sakura said, the cost for these monsters are still too high. Level 7 Earth, okay, with Machina Fortress and Redox that's doable, but why would you trade a Fortress and a Redox to get your EARTH dragon? Not worth it.

 

I Toshaki is pretty good, but it's useless after you Summon it. Actually, most of these monsters are useless after you Summon them. Instead of going for a revive and boost theme, think of something different. Something gimmicky, but could work.

 

It's just your spelling and grammar dude. Find a real Yugioh card and read it, or find a guide (like the one Sakura suggested).

 

Once again, great concept for supporting elemental cards, just rethink them a bit.

 

Suggestions 

[cElectricFanG]

Suggestions 

 

I don't really know, maybe try something like the Madolches? Where it revolves around recycling cards to activate their effect? Like for Rizark, make him a LV 8, then have his effect return himself to Special Summon a LIGHT monster from the Deck, or something. And make the Xyz LV 6 Dragons instead of 7. Make it so they sort of work well together, even though they are meant for specific Attributes. Work your creativity, man, make it strange and exciting and fun!

[Flash Flyer - Sakura]

http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/322020-ocgpsct-thread-writing-your-card-properly/(Zazu's OCG guide)

http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/322332-card-design-guide/(Card description guide, written by our ex-CC moderator, .Saber)

 

Here are the links to the OCG thread; and a guide for making stuff.

[drosen23]

I don't really know, maybe try something like the Madolches? Where it revolves around recycling cards to activate their effect? Like for Rizark, make him a LV 8, then have his effect return himself to Special Summon a LIGHT monster from the Deck, or something. And make the Xyz LV 6 Dragons instead of 7. Make it so they sort of work well together, even though they are meant for specific Attributes. Work your creativity, man, make it strange and exciting and fun!

 

Check out Light Dragon Rizark. What do you think? You have really good advice and seem really chill homy