The most powerful Demon of Hindu Mythology - Kalyug

[Anarkist]

Technically his name is Kali, but that is extremely confusing because of the MUCH more well known Hindu Goddess Kali. In Hindu spiritualism all of time is split into periods known as "Yugas"; the final Yuga, preceeding the apocalypse, is characterized by man's heart turning to full evil; extreme income inequality, systemic institutionalized racism, wide spread murder, rape and crime--according to Hindu scripture this is the Yuga we currently live in, called "Kali-Yuga" or "Kalyug". (That is why, in my Yu-Gi-Oh! mythological rendering Ive decided to name this Fallen Angel [b]Kalyug, lord of Kali-Yuga[/b].)
He is the embodiment, and source of all evil; it is said a millennia ago he fought the supreme angel, the Seraph Vishnu, to exhaustion but just as Kalyug was about to be struck the death blow he escaped through time, traveling forward to the time we live in now, Kali-Yuga, when he will be at the height of his power. Lord Vishnu is prophesied to be reincarnated on earth (analogous to jesus's second coming) as the mighty "Kalki" who will wage the final battle for all life against the Fallen one Kalyug.

I've been trying to fine tune this card (as well as its rival, the Seraph-God Kalki) literally for YEARS now, so any kind of help would be madd appreciated:
Fallen Angel of Apocalypse, Kalyug - Lord of Kali-Yuga
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3 Level 10 or higher "Fallen Angels" monsters
This card's maximum number of attacks per turn is equal to the number of Xyz Materials attached to it. This card's ATK and DEF are each 500x the number of DARK monsters on the field, and in both player's Graveyards, and Banished Zones. Once per Duel: If this card would be destroyed by Battle or removed from the field by an opponent's Card Effect you can detach all Xyz Materials attached to it; Banish this card. If this card is at anytime Banished by it's own effect you can Special Summon it, and attach up to 5 "Fallen Angel" cards from your Graveyard to it as Xyz Materials. At the End Phase of each of your turns, pay half your Life Points or Banish this card. Once per turn: During either turn, you can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card to activate 1 of these effects: •Skip your opponent's next Draw Phase. •Until the End Phase, your opponent cannot activate Spell, or Trap cards.


ah s**t! im just realizing his cost to keep him on the field--pay half your life points--conflicts with his one time immunity to destruction (Banished by its own effect) so u can just not pay the cost, fulfilling the Banished by his own effect requirement, and special summon him during the nxt turn with 5 xyz materials and the ability to stop the opponent from playing spells, traps or drawing--god im dumb lol
back to the drawing board
this card's effect has been so hard to come up with


and hey, if u hate my card, at least u got to learn some hindu mythology--albeit an extremely loose interpretation mixed with some christianity
--im all about unity
lol

[Dokutah]

there any people hating your card?

 

unless they overreacting to your flaws or the theme, YCM should be neutral (like me L.O.L)

 

as mention before the effect contradict...ill wait the edited post

[Anarkist]

there any people hating your card?

 

unless they overreacting to your flaws or the theme, YCM should be neutral (like me L.O.L)

 

as mention before the effect contradict...ill wait the edited post

oh no no, no one hated on it at all, everyone's been mad respectful but I was just thinking if u anyone ddidnt like it they could at least go 'well I learned something' hahaha:))

 

Im workin on the new version as we speak

[Anarkist]

ARRRGGHH Im actually madd frustrated with this card, I love the art, idea etc. I just cant seem to give him an effect that shows he is this badass time controller/ace monster, as well as one of the 3 most powerful Fallen Angels. His eff is too long and clunky

any help, even if u completely change his eff would be helpful

 

 

3 Level 10 "Fallen Angel" monsters

This card's maximum number of attacks per turn is equal to the number of Xyz Materials attached to it + 1. This card's ATK and DEF are both equal to 500x the number of DARK monsters on the field and in both Graveyards and Banished Zones, as well as any attached to monsters as Xyz Materials. Once per Duel: If this card would be destroyed by Battle or removed from the field by an opponent's Card Effect you can detach all Xyz Materials attached to it; Banish this card. If this card is at anytime Banished by this effect you can pay half your Life Points to Special Summon it, and attach up to 5 "Fallen Angel" cards (monster or spell/trap) from your Graveyard to it as Xyz Materials. During the End Phase of each of your turns pay half your Life Points or Banish this card. Once per turn, during either turn you can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card to activate 1 of these effects: •Skip your opponent's next Draw Phase. •Your opponent cannot activate Spell or Trap cards until the End Phase

[7-ink]

ah s**t! im just realizing his cost to keep him on the field--pay half your life points--conflicts with his one time immunity to destruction (Banished by its own effect) so u can just not pay the cost, fulfilling the Banished by his own effect requirement, and special summon him during the nxt turn with 5 xyz materials and the ability to stop the opponent from playing spells, traps or drawing--god im dumb lol

back to the drawing board

this card's effect has been so hard to come up with

The "At the End Phase of each of your turns, pay half your Life Points or Banish this card." seems to or feel to me like its a maintenance costs, not an effect. Remember how if someone negate Imperial Order with Royal Decree. They still have to pay Life to keep it and destroy itself if you don't, even if the effect was negate, because it not being destroy by an effect. So every turn, half must be pay unless you want it banish with no returning, because cost is not an effect. This god or fallen Hindu god only return if banished by effect.

 

So, fair enough, its not too OP but still very very powerful, five+ attack, that so so much attacking, and then there's the effect to worry about too.

[Dokutah]

first (my personal) fixes:

3 Level 10 "Fallen Angel" monsters

This card can attack all opponent monster once each, if you do this card cannot attack directly this turn. This card's maximum number of attacks per turn is equal to the number of Xyz Materials attached to it + 1. This card's ATK and DEF are both equal to 500x the number of DARK monsters on both player  field,Graveyards,Banished Zones, and attached to monsters as Xyz Materials. Once per Duel: If this card would be destroyed by Battle or removed from the field by an opponent's Card Effect you can detach all Xyz Materials attached to it; Banish this card. While this card is Banished by this effect you can pay half your Life Points to Special Summon it, and attach up to 5 "Fallen Angel" cards from your Graveyard to it as Xyz Materials. During the End Phase of your turns pay half your Life Points or Banish this card for remainder of the Duel. Once per turn, during either turn you can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card to activate 1 of these effects: •Skip your opponent's next Draw Phase. •Your opponent cannot activate Spell or Trap cards until the End Phase

 

i'm adding the multiple attack ability because: "This card's maximum number of attacks per turn is equal to the number of Xyz Materials attached to it + 1."...this effect only to make clear the max number of attack this card can do... when activating its multiple attack effect