Tornadus - Therian Forme

[Sunn O)))]

You can only use each effect of "Tornadus - Therian Forme" once per turn When this card is summoned: Target 1 face-up card on the field; shuffle that target into the deck. At the end of the Damage Step, if this card attacked and is still on the field: You can return this card to your hand; Special Summon 1 Level 4 or lower monster from your hand. It cannot attack this turn. If this card is returned from the field to your hand: Gain 1000 Life Points.

 

rate/love/hate/CnC/fix my OCG, etc

 

Also, looking for a better name.

[Zeppeli Gyro Supreme]

You basically made a Raiza with an improved effect and better DEF. Not much to say.

[vla1ne]

The effect and stats pretty much require that it at least be level 7. the effects (bounce upon any summon, self-bounce upon completed attack, replacement SS and healing upon sucesful self-bounce) are too good to be summoned off of one tribute. you may want to at least remove either the SS effect, or restrict the summon bounce to tribute summon and/or once per turn clause.

[Sunn O)))]

The effect and stats pretty much require that it at least be level 7. the effects (bounce upon any summon, self-bounce upon completed attack, replacement SS and healing upon sucesful self-bounce) are too good to be summoned off of one tribute. you may want to at least remove either the SS effect, or restrict the summon bounce to tribute summon and/or once per turn clause.

Is that better?

[vla1ne]

Yeah, but the last thing I'd probably do would be make the level4 summon /1000 LP gain be a choice like:
You can only use each effect of "Tornadus - Therian Forme" once per turn. When this card is summoned: Target 1 face-up card on the field; shuffle that target into the deck. At the end of the Damage Step, if this card attacked and is still on the field return this card to your hand. If this card is returned from the field to your hand, activate one of the following effects:
Special Summon 1 Level 4 or lower monster from your hand. It cannot attack this turn.
Gain 1000 Life Points.

or something along those lines. I stopped keeping up with ocg for a few formats, so I might be wrong about the wording, but I think It got the general idea across.

[Sunn O)))]

Yeah, but the last thing I'd probably do would be make the level4 summon /1000 LP gain be a choice like:
You can only use each effect of "Tornadus - Therian Forme" once per turn. When this card is summoned: Target 1 face-up card on the field; shuffle that target into the deck. At the end of the Damage Step, if this card attacked and is still on the field return this card to your hand. If this card is returned from the field to your hand, activate one of the following effects:
Special Summon 1 Level 4 or lower monster from your hand. It cannot attack this turn.
Gain 1000 Life Points.

or something along those lines. I stopped keeping up with ocg for a few formats, so I might be wrong about the wording, but I think It got the general idea across.

I wanted to accurately portray Tornadus. First effect is supposed to be Hurricane. Second effect is U-turn, and the third effect is Tornadus' ability, Regenerator.

 

I guess having all of them could be a bit op, but gaining 1000 isn't much. Unless you plan on stalling and stuff.

[vla1ne]

I guess having all of them could be a bit op, but gaining 1000 isn't much. Unless you plan on stalling and stuff.

copying is good and all, but the 1000 gain would have come after you already popped a card back to deck and got an attack in. the 1st bounce effect can be used even off of CotH, so having a 2nd effect that nets more advantage then raiza would be very broken.

This way, it still has both effects, but it's not stacked into instant R4 fodder + free life points.

But I might be explaining this wrong since I'm lacking sleep.