Rapidfire Posted December 20, 2013 Report Share Posted December 20, 2013 Tense: Do you remember. When your touch burned me in ways I couldn’t say. In ways which turned my insides out. In ways which made me want more. Maybe it was just sexual tension Or maybe it was all the stress Maybe it was our humor that made me Wrap my leg around yours and trace circles into your skin When you held my hand and it broke all of my bones. So tender yet so firm. How could I not flail with pure agony. When we broke apart. How comfortable And petrifying it was How eagerly I wrapped my arms back around you. The way our muscles tensed And our hearts pounded. Snapping my ribs One By One (my writing) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bahamut - Envoy of the End Posted January 9, 2014 Report Share Posted January 9, 2014 Sorry rapid, been meaning to respond to this for ages having read it earlier. Really nice piece. Not a whole lot I can say about it as I'm not great with the indepth review and its length, but I really enjoyed it in a way that I can't really explain. I loathe to use the phrase 'I was touched by it' or 'how deep and meaningful' as that all sounds cliche and meaningless, and I can't really explain how or why it does but regardless I really... I dunno what... but it was good. :) Edit: I forgot about the like system til just now, so like. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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