BlackAsAWhiteWall Posted December 24, 2013 Report Share Posted December 24, 2013 i suspected that i made it in 2 minutes sorry i will fix it soon sorry Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted December 24, 2013 Author Report Share Posted December 24, 2013 Alright Vigilante...Kyng helped me up and we came up to these points for App. [spoiler=The Points] - Name does not reflect Bio (since when does anyone in the Amazon name people Abel Destin, which is clearly not a Tribal Name? Bio also does not state a Name Change took place) - Very Skilled Hunter and Warrior, yet personality indicates he'd never want to even pick up a sword. - Desolation is not an Element. - Carries one-handed sword: would be arrested if seen carrying such weapons in a public space without a license which he clearly doesn't have. - Manipulates disease, yet does not have said element. - Seems to confuse disease with poison: both are /very/ different things - Paralyzing Glare: all he has to do is look at you and keep looking at you. Doesn't seem to require any concentration, can be abusive. - Desolating Slash: all he has to do is keep slashing you and he makes you sick. Extremely overpowered. - How would this fellow live in Atlas? It is a modern city, and I have a feeling he doesn't even wear clothes that aren't included on his appearance, nor does he have a job. [/spoiler] If you can try and edit these into your app, we may be able to accept you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Origin 뮤 Posted December 24, 2013 Report Share Posted December 24, 2013 Alright Vigilante...Kyng helped me up and we came up to these points for App. [spoiler=The Points] - Name does not reflect Bio (since when does anyone in the Amazon name people Abel Destin, which is clearly not a Tribal Name? Bio also does not state a Name Change took place) - Very Skilled Hunter and Warrior, yet personality indicates he'd never want to even pick up a sword. - Desolation is not an Element. - Carries one-handed sword: would be arrested if seen carrying such weapons in a public space without a license which he clearly doesn't have. - Manipulates disease, yet does not have said element. - Seems to confuse disease with poison: both are /very/ different things - Paralyzing Glare: all he has to do is look at you and keep looking at you. Doesn't seem to require any concentration, can be abusive. - Desolating Slash: all he has to do is keep slashing you and he makes you sick. Extremely overpowered. - How would this fellow live in Atlas? It is a modern city, and I have a feeling he doesn't even wear clothes that aren't included on his appearance, nor does he have a job. [/spoiler] If you can try and edit these into your app, we may be able to accept you. Thank you for going over the application, but I would like to bring up the issue of the attacks that you deemed abusive. I don't see how they are any more powerful than characters like Rayleigh who can move so fast that no one can even see him or Tharon who can literally suck everything that could possible be thrown at him into a single space, not only providing the ultimate defense, but also a decent offensive move as well. I don't see how the ability to make people feel ill even compares to abilities like that. Now of course you are host, and I am not going to refuse to change things, nor do I want special treatment because 'I'm a noob and deserve a little leeway' or anything like that, but I just felt like it should be pointed out. I don't say this to be confrontational, argumentative, or just a poor sport, nor do any of my comments reflect my feelings on the characters created by other people as I believe everyone's characters are superb and have been rightfully accepted, but I just feel the need to voice my comment. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Blu:. Posted December 24, 2013 Report Share Posted December 24, 2013 Seeing as how you brought Rayleigh up, let me just clear up some things and, don't get me wrong, I'm not doing this to counter your arguments about whether your character is overpowered or not, I'm doing this to give clarity to my character. Anyways, the purpose of Rayleigh is that, in fact, he is supposed to be a powerful character; that's what I had in mind when writing him up. I've already decided that a long time ago and Sonic had approved it before I started the app. Many times in my app I have either directly stated or hinted at the fact that he is virtually the strongest human combatant within the U.W.A and even amongst the non-humans, he is considered powerful. However, I've also taken into account that he is still only a human and there are some limitations his body can't overcome through normal means. Some of his habits are detrimental to his health including smoking and overworking himself. I imagine the Theans and TheaBrids are, physically, superior to normal humans so there's more of a chance for them to be considered overpowered. Now, I don't really have too much of a problem with the Paralyzing Glare and Desolating Slash but I'd be concern with Black Death. Even though he can't use it all the time, its effects are, arguably, fatal with each successful hit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Origin 뮤 Posted December 25, 2013 Report Share Posted December 25, 2013 Seeing as how you brought Rayleigh up, let me just clear up some things and, don't get me wrong, I'm not doing this to counter your arguments about whether your character is overpowered or not, I'm doing this to give clarity to my character. Anyways, the purpose of Rayleigh is that, in fact, he is supposed to be a powerful character; that's what I had in mind when writing him up. I've already decided that a long time ago and Sonic had approved it before I started the app. Many times in my app I have either directly stated or hinted at the fact that he is virtually the strongest human combatant within the U.W.A and even amongst the non-humans, he is considered powerful. However, I've also taken into account that he is still only a human and there are some limitations his body can't overcome through normal means. Some of his habits are detrimental to his health including smoking and overworking himself. I imagine the Theans and TheaBrids are, physically, superior to normal humans so there's more of a chance for them to be considered overpowered. Now, I don't really have too much of a problem with the Paralyzing Glare and Desolating Slash but I'd be concern with Black Death. Even though he can't use it all the time, its effects are, arguably, fatal with each successful hit. Lol, and you see that was the ability that I thought would be called into question. And I understand that your character is supposed to be powerful, so please don't take anything I said as being offensive, merely an example. But, yes, thank you for the clarification on your character. I didn't realize that it had been discussed previously, so I'll promptly put my foot in my mouth and shut up, lol :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asriel Dreemurr Posted December 25, 2013 Report Share Posted December 25, 2013 Okay, sorry about the long wait but I've been spending time with la familia for Christmas. Anyways, I'm trying to work out where Tharon might fit the best into the conflicts going on right now. Edit: Nevermind Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Origin 뮤 Posted December 25, 2013 Report Share Posted December 25, 2013 Corrections have been made to my application, btw Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Crystal Remnants Posted December 27, 2013 Report Share Posted December 27, 2013 Hey Boss, is it cool if I get in on this? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted December 27, 2013 Author Report Share Posted December 27, 2013 @Vigilante: On the way to check! @Remnants: MY SNOW GUARDIAN RETURNS! XD Sure can!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Blu:. Posted December 28, 2013 Report Share Posted December 28, 2013 Keto, is Tharon part of the U.W.A? From the app, his faction says neutral. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted December 28, 2013 Author Report Share Posted December 28, 2013 Keto, is Tharon part of the U.W.A? From the app, his faction says neutral. My bet...is that he's lying about it. Ya know, characters playing the deception card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Blu:. Posted December 28, 2013 Report Share Posted December 28, 2013 After scouring through Tharon's bio (which really should be cut into smaller chunks), it appears he is part of the U.W.A and, in that case, his faction should say U.W.A instead of neutral. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted December 28, 2013 Author Report Share Posted December 28, 2013 Huh, well...he never mentioned that... Welp! I'm gonna have to change that bit ^^; Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Blu:. Posted December 28, 2013 Report Share Posted December 28, 2013 Really, his faction should've said U.W.A this entire time. Because his faction says neutral, I had Rayleigh asked Tharon for a badge assuming that he wouldn't have one... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted December 28, 2013 Author Report Share Posted December 28, 2013 Right, so to avoid confusion I fixed that ^^ So now we have no confusion!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asriel Dreemurr Posted December 29, 2013 Report Share Posted December 29, 2013 Okay, sorry about that bit of confusion there. Leaving Tharon Neutral was accidental on my part, but I think it still works for his character. He may be working with the U.W.A. but his own personal goals are far from aligned with them. He is simply waiting to find the Thean that he is bound to serve, and in the event that such a Thean cannot be found he'll be going off on his own. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted December 30, 2013 Author Report Share Posted December 30, 2013 Oh boy...first bump...o.o Where be everyone? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyng's Old Account Posted December 30, 2013 Report Share Posted December 30, 2013 I'm here, though I've got nothing to work with. Grace has literally been blanked so, unless I break her character entirely by making her obnoxiously try and get attention, I need to wait for something that'd actually prompt her. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Blu:. Posted December 30, 2013 Report Share Posted December 30, 2013 I don't have much to write about aside from responding to the whole badge thing. I was waiting to see if you'd have Aaron make his escape but I'll try to scrape something together. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted December 30, 2013 Author Report Share Posted December 30, 2013 Alright, all I needed to hear! I'll get with a post, post-haste!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asriel Dreemurr Posted December 31, 2013 Report Share Posted December 31, 2013 I'll throw a post up later today. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Super Chaos Sonic Posted January 2, 2014 Author Report Share Posted January 2, 2014 Well, Vigilante...welcome to Earth2! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Origin 뮤 Posted January 3, 2014 Report Share Posted January 3, 2014 Well, Vigilante...welcome to Earth2! Thank you good sir. Will post later today or early tomorrow :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Blu:. Posted January 3, 2014 Report Share Posted January 3, 2014 Sorry I haven't posted yet. I've been busy these past days with family and friends but now I should be able to post normally again. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Asriel Dreemurr Posted January 3, 2014 Report Share Posted January 3, 2014 I will probably not post for a few days, as I am getting my wisdom teeth removed in eight hours. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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