OCG Question

[RaythXC]

Me and a friend are currently designing some cards and are unsure of how this card should be worded:

 

[quote]

This card cannot be Set. When this card is Normal or Flip Summoned: Change this card to Defense Position. Once per turn: If this is the only monster you control, you can redirect an attack by your opponent's monster to your life points. During your Standby Phase: Tribute this face up card; then Special Summon 1 "INSERT CARD" from your Hand or Deck.[/quote]

[Aix]

Cannot be Set. When this card is Normal Summoned or Flip Summoned: Change this card to Defense Position. Once per turn, when your opponent targets this card for an attack and this card is the only monster you control: You can have your opponent attack directly instead. During your Standby Phase: Tribute this face-up card; Special Summon 1 "INSERT CARD" from your hand or Deck.

[Zazubat]

A few things wrong with your fix, Aix. Flip Summon and Normal Summoned have become the same thing now, only if you want to make it so it's also when it's flipped face-up should do you need to say "or flipped face-up", which I don't think is the case. "redirect" is not a word used in YGO, instead use the wording Astral Barrier uses. Life Points isn't capitalized. The "then" after the semicolon shouldn't be there. "Hand" shouldn't be capitalized.

 

Here's my version:

Cannot be Set. When this card is Normal Summoned: Change this card to Defense Position. Once per turn, if this is the only monster you control, when your opponent attacks: You can make the attack a direct attack instead. During your Standby Phase: Tribute this face up card; Special Summon 1 "INSERT CARD" from your hand or Deck.