Defiance

[Tormented]

         

This is going to be divided of a few sections which should further develop the story, right now only the prologue is out but I hope that as time goes by I shall be able to get a few more out and further increase the story. If you enjoyed please be sure to give me some constructive criticism.

 

The story is going to be based a round a Cyber-Punk world around data and the fact that people's lives evolve around data and how it basically is their life.

 

[spoiler='Prologue: We are you.']Why does data become such a reliable state when we are plagued by the thoughts of viruses and other forms of hardships? Surely a “reliable” way of living would have no worry of these problems? Well I've come to tell you the truth, one you may not like, one you may find awful, one you may dispose of for keepsakes but the truth nonetheless. The world as you know it is far from fair, the bitterness inside the dictator's heart is the core of creation, the good earth is no longer rich-it's soul is poured into the veins of our hatred and the cynicism of our lives has origins far more greater than our generation. Liberty. Liberty is the power of human-kind but no longer do we have this “Liberty”we live a life of suppression and captivity, why? Because that dictator we all know and love is the end of us all, he suggests that he doesn't want to rule or conquer, but alas his lies are like his cleverness, as thick as nails and as rough as the wire. Power, power has been taken from our lives-we are no longer people, we are cannon fodder in a fight greater than one we have ever imagined.

Where is this going I here you ask? Well brutes have risen to power, but we need to fight back, using the wit of our cores and the power of our processors, we shall fight back oppression with an iron fist. I can create these speeches as if they are like kilobytes, however it takes you to fully unlock the potential of that specific file and the size is dependant on your belief. Join me. And thousands of others to fight back against the lies and greed of our oppressors!

We are like the pirates of the data core, we shall share these lies and further increase the poultice of our goals and continue to create copies of these truths, right now we are being lied about, politicians suggest our goals are for our own. And I'm here to tell you the argument is being tipped on it's head. The so called leaders of our society are the venom inside the snakes teeth. Venom is lies, and lies leads to actions and actions leads to tragedy and tragedy leads to venom. As you can see it all leads back around to pivotal point.

We are the Data Sharks.
We feast on the lies.
We do not forget.
We are you.
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[Orochii]

This looks very interesting. It's too hard to comment on it just yet so I look forward to a first chapter. The criticism I can give is that a few bits in there look a little iffy on terms of grammer. That might just be me though.