Jokers Underground [ OOC / Started / Not Accepting ]

[Astolfo]

I'm not a good reviewer, but as promised, I'll try my best.

 

1. Starlight Joker sounds better to me.

2. Playing with model guns and/or paintballing? =o It's a nice addition.

3. Almost translucent skin? What, so if I wave my hand behind her, I can see it?

4. Nothing wrong with her looks. *shotgunned*

5. Karate? Yeah, this doesn't really seem like a girly girl to me. xD

6. Someone who actually follows the uniform code? Heresy!

7. Who gave this girl a f***ing assault rifle.

8. The gentle and wants friends type? Sure. =D

9. I like the mini-story.

10. I like the personality. A lot. I'm jelly.

11. Powers are great.

12. The Special Attacks are really nice, balanced, and the effect is great too.

13. Future Powers/Abilities seems unnecessary for right now kind of, but I like what they are.

14. Wait, she's Blu's character's sister?! Why is Yukio 20? And Yamada is different from Yamamoto.

 

All in all, please accept this character. It's beautifully crafted, and I'm seriously jealous. >.<

[Aix]

I'm not a good reviewer, but as promised, I'll try my best.

 

1. Starlight Joker sounds better to me.

2. Playing with model guns and/or paintballing? =o It's a nice addition.

3. Almost translucent skin? What, so if I wave my hand behind her, I can see it?

4. Nothing wrong with her looks. *shotgunned*

5. Karate? Yeah, this doesn't really seem like a girly girl to me. xD

6. Someone who actually follows the uniform code? Heresy!

7. Who gave this girl a f***ing assault rifle.

8. The gentle and wants friends type? Sure. =D

9. I like the mini-story.

10. I like the personality. A lot. I'm jelly.

11. Powers are great.

12. The Special Attacks are really nice, balanced, and the effect is great too.

13. Future Powers/Abilities seems unnecessary for right now kind of, but I like what they are.

14. Wait, she's Blu's character's sister?! Why is Yukio 20? And Yamada is different from Yamamoto.

 

All in all, please accept this character. It's beautifully crafted, and I'm seriously jealous. >.<

No, her brother simply has the same name.

[Astolfo]

Oh okay. Where it says same as Blu's character made it kind of confusing IMO.

 

EDIT: MaKi is best pairing. obv. *shotgunned*

 

EDIT 2: I approve. Angel Beats! FTW.

[Admiral_Stalfos19]

EDIT: So to make sure all apps are reviewed in a fair manner, I will also have my good friend Desu helping me to review the apps. This way, it won't just be one man's opinions.

 

....

 

All the confidence I had of possibly being accepted is now gone -_-

[Gαr]

....

 

All the confidence I had of possibly being accepted is now gone -_-

 

You're not the only one.

[Astolfo]

Desu has like a personal grudge against me or something. :I

 

*starts writing out the will for the app*

[Admiral_Stalfos19]

Desu has like a personal grudge against me or something. :I

 

*starts writing out the will for the app*

 

You're not the only one. He seems to (strongly) dislike me as well. Explains why I'm losing confidence.

 

...

 

The only way this'll be remotely fair is if Blu starts blind-feeding him the apps to review, I reckon :/

[Astolfo]

I don't get Desu.

 

My best idea would be to share thoughts.

Desu's a critic, Blu's more of an optimist.

Why not someone like Kyng?

Or Kaka, if you want someone really strict?

[Crystal Remnants]

Aw man, I can't believe I'm just now finding out about this RP. I guess I need to get on YCM more often. Blu's RPs are always the best, and they really give me a chance to flesh out my writing skills (or lack thereof). Too bad :(

 

Still, it'll be fun to read the apps. The best thing about having such a great host is that the applicants always put forth their best return. Hopefully I'll get another chance to apply to something like this in the future.

 

Edit: If you need someone to review any apps, I'd love to! If not, that's fine. I know Desu's a smart guy, and he'll be plenty of help by himself.

[Astolfo]

You still have like 4 hours and 40 minutes if I calculate correctly.

[Crystal Remnants]

You still have like 4 hours and 40 minutes if I calculate correctly.

 

Well I have like, an hour-and-a-half in my timezone before I need to get to sleep. Gotta take an SAT tomorrow, so I need my rest. And I wont be able to scramble together an app good enough to get accepted in that time. I can't ever rush these things.

[BANZAI!!!!]

My app. If anyone would be so kind as to review it. I'll do the same if you ask, but i can't promise i'll be of much help.

Here you go, Blu. Hope it's good enough.

 

[Spoiler=Kazuma Ito, The Burst Joker]

Name: Kazuma Ito
Age: 17
Gender: Male
Date of Birth: August 7th
Blood Type: B-
Hobby(s): Baseball (watching, playing, talking stats, etc..), Girls (he's quite the flirt),  Martial Arts, Mecha anime (secretly), eating spicy food
High School Year: 3rd Year
[Spoiler=Appearance]

"Everything always comes down to one moment, one specific place and time. When you get there, make sure you're going full speed ahead. Then, nothing can stop you."

 

Kazuma stands at about 6 feet tall. He is well toned, and In excellent shape, although he appears smaller than other boys his age due to his rather slender build. He has hazel eyes and usually wears a large smile. His grey hair is fairly long, and it looks messy more often than not. Although he doesn't flaunt it, Kazuma is actually quite attractive, and he looks very good in the school uniform. When not in his school Uniform, Kazuma prefers to wear a brown jacket (usually with some sort of t-shirt underneath it, but he sometimes forgoes the t-shirt when he is feeling extremely casual) and jeans. He tends to wear a brown and grey wristband on his right arm to cover up a particularly nasty looking burn scar on his arm. He wears a red headband and a grey baseball cap at all times. He even wears them at school when he can get away with it, and often gets in trouble with the faculty when he is caught doing so. He also tends to wear a simple silver necklace that his mother gave him a few years ago. It is usually tucked into his shirt. When pitching for Kumagawa High School's Varsity Baseball team, he wears their standard black and white Varsity Uniform. He has distinct bright red cleats and a black baseball glove. He is number 09.

Notes: Although the picture above shows a scar on his left cheek, Kazuma has no such scar.[/spoiler]
[Spoiler=Personality]  Usually the one to start a conversation, most people find Kazuma to be a pretty normal, fun-loving teenager. At first glance, Kazuma seems to be a typical high school athlete. He exudes confidence, is good with girls, and isn't academically inclined.Those who don't know him see Kazuma as just another loud, obnoxious jock. However, if one were to get closer to him, they would find a much different boy behind the "jock" exterior. Kazuma is actually quite friendly, and isn't  nearly as mean spirited as some of his teammates tend to be. In fact, he is very empathetic. Kazuma always offers his support when his friends need it, and at the very least gives his trademark wide smile to someone with whom he is not so well acquainted. Of course, Kazuma's most defining character trait is his love for Baseball. He is obsessed with the sport, and takes every opportunity to train and improve himself (he even stood a girl up once to go train, although he never did so again). He dreams of one day playing in the American major leagues. Kazuma is quite lazy when it comes to things he has no interest in, like school. Although he is very intelligent, he usually just scrapes by with the bare minimum of effort needed to pass his classes, prefering to hang out with friends or practice his curve ball to doing homework. He is also quick to anger. Kazuma has never been afraid to get physical with someone, and has been in his fair share of fights. However, he is smart enough not to throw the first punch. When angry, Kazuma is very loud and vulgar. When it comes to girls, Kazuma has a bit of a wandering eye, although he rarely gets caught staring. He is also quite the flirt. Despite this, he is rarely in a relationship for long. Kazuma also has a more childish side to himself. He often cracks dirty jokes, and has a fairly good sense of humor. He is secretly a mecha anime fan, and has a small collection of gunpla cleverly hidden in his closet. He will steadfastly deny this if asked, however. [/spoiler]

[Spoiler=Combat Information]
[Spoiler=Weapon] Force Breaker: Kazuma's weapon of choice is his own fist. To augment this, he forms a red metal gauntlet that he calls Force Breaker around his left arm. Force Breaker is, for the most part, form fitting, although the forearm portion seems to be quite a lot thicker, so that it can parry attacks. The gauntlet forms around the arm up to the top of the bicep. It has five fingers, and also materializes a red shoulder pauldron as well. [/spoiler]
[Spoiler=Powers]

Phasing: As a Joker, Kazuma is able to utilize Phasing to go between the two realms at will.

Spatial Shift: A common ability among human and spirit Jokers, this power allows for Jokers to perform extraordinary feats of acrobatics such as jumping incredibly high and far, dodging speeding objects and attacks, levitating and flying, and even instant teleporting by means of manipulating space. When using Spatial Shift, a Joker displaces his/her position in space and shifts himself/herself to a new part of space. This shift can be gradual (a high jump) or instant (teleportation) and will appear accordingly. A Joker can also suspend his/her position in space (levitation) and continue to move while still being suspended (flying). Each shift (except for suspended shifts) is accompanied by the flickering of a golden luminescence under a Joker's feet.

 

Motion Burst: Kazuma's powers allow him to manipulate kinetic and potential energy at will. Since he is inexperienced, he can only affect himself or any object he touches. He can vastly increase the potential energy of any object, and then convert the whole of this potential into kinetic energy. In other words, he can accelerate any object (including himself) to speeds hundreds of times faster than the laws of physics would normally allow. He has named this ability "Motion Burst" due to the instantaneous manner in which he can accelerate objects. In combat, Kazuma will usually use this ability to accelerate objects that he throws from his left arm. However, he is also quite fond of accelerating himself. This, combined with his ability to spacial shift, means that he can strike with incredible destructive force. However, maneuvering either himself or thrown objects is extremely difficult due to his still human reflexes. Its is quite possible for him to move these objects in any way he wants, its just that he almost never has more than a millisecond to do so. If either a thrown object or Kazuma himself has an unobstructed straight path, then in theory it could accelerate infinitely.

 

Motion Guard: Kazuma can also vastly decrease the potential or kinetic energy of an object. He can use this power to make an object immovable, or even decrease the destructive force of an enemy's attack. However, the limitation of his own reflexes still applies, and he must be able to react fast enough and make physical contact with the object in order for this to have any effect.

[/spoiler]

[Spoiler=Special Attacks]

 

Radar Breaker: One of Kazuma's Typical attacks. He uses his Joker abilities to manipulate a piece of nearby matter and change it into a spherical form. Then, he throws a fastball with it and uses his Motion Burst ability to propel it to extremely high speed. He has likened this ability to being hit with a heavy artillery shell. The longer the distance the projectile travels, the faster and more forceful the hit will be.

 

Force Buster: Using his Spacial Shift ability, Kazuma flies up to a great height (usually about 50 feet above his opponent, to give himself distance to accelerate, but not so much that they have time to dodge). Then using a combination of gravity and Motion Burst, he descends at his opponent with a superman punch. This impact is usually stronger than one generated by Radar Breaker.

 

Warp Buster: Similar to the Force Buster, Kazuma accelerates himself using Motion Burst. However, before he reaches his target, he teleports to their location, combining the instantaneous motion of the teleport with Motion Burst to massively increase his destructive force. However, this is a double edged sword because the sudden stop that occurs when Kazuma makes contact is enough to give him whiplash. This is by far his strongest attack. [/spoiler] [/spoiler]

 

[Spoiler=Other Information]

Kazuma's Favorite color is red, and his favorite food is curry with rice.

His favorite Baseball player is Hideki Matsui

Kazuma practices mixed martial arts to keep himself in shape. He is experianced in Muay Thai and Jiu Jitsu[/spoiler]
 

[/spoiler]

 

Yes, I know he isn't a joker yet, but I felt like explaining the names for his attacks. So i suppose he will name them in the future. I'm also not sure his third special attack is physically possible. Thoughts? Is he overpowered in any way?

[Astolfo]

I'll take a gander at it and edit it into this post. And wouldn't it be more powerful to just keep running or w/e for more acceleration?

Wouldn't teleporting take out some distance and stop it right then, creating the whiplash effect, unless you can teleport seamlessly and perfectly like a portal?

 

le judgement:

 

Gonna go right to appearances. Nothing important above.

 

1. The overused picture makes me wince.

2. Basing it off it and changing to your own and adding other details is okay I guess.

3. The pervy jock? With a secret like of something that wouldn't seem to fit? Seems cliche, but I'm not one to talk.

4. The weapon should be fine.

5. Although I hadn't released it first, I had the acceleration idea in part I guess. This isn't anything important, but two similar Joker powers? IDK. Your call.

6. The powers themselves seem good and balanced-ish okay.

7. Any weaknesses or extra details about the special attacks? Seems okay.

8. The Other Info is eh, but okay.

 

It's kinda interesting how a lot of us put the favorite color thing. 

le rainbow powers~! *shotgunned*

 

Note though, I'm not the best reviewer by far. Just my 2 cents.

[BANZAI!!!!]

The way blu described teleporting makes it seem to me like the joker moves themselves through space near instantly. I figured since he is still technically covering that distance, it would factor into the force of the blow. In other words, he adds his own acceleration to the near-instant motion the teleport provides. its more or less like going at infinity +1 speed, if that makes any sense. Obviously, stopping suddenly at that speed would kill any normal person. luckily, he's a joker, and so it just gives him whiplash. Its probably severe enough to knock him out of the fight too, now that i think of it.

[Aix]

Seeing as Desu hates everyone, we're all on equal footing here, aren't we?

[Astolfo]

Desu actually likes some people though, like CS.

[.:Blu:.]

Hey guys, don't worry about Desu, I asked him to review apps with me before and when he does say an app is bad, he also provides valid reasons to which I can also agree on or see close to his point. He's impartial when it comes to these types of things. I hope you can trust me on this issue.

Remnants, man, I wish you could've made an app, you did so well on the last RP.

Zai, actually the teleporting is an instant shift. What you're describing is more of a gradual shift but intensified exponentially.

[Astolfo]

Could one use Spatial Shift to dodge attacks? =o

[.:Blu:.]

Neph, oh yeah, most definitely. It's kinda design for that and to reach long distances exponentially faster.

[Astolfo]

Then, was DWG's Ghosting necessary?

[BANZAI!!!!]

well then, i must get back to the drawing board. My attack doesn't work. Haha.

[.:Blu:.]

Neph, sure. Most Spatial Shifts will be gradual and not instant so if an attack is faster than your gradual shift, you will still get hit regardless. Ghosting allows an attack to pass through entirely.

Zaifire, it's an easy fix so don't sweat it ^^

[Astolfo]

Okay thanks for the explanation Blu. ^^

 

I really hope my work gets accepted, but I hope if there's someone's who's done better, they get accepted. *cough Admiral cough Axi cough others cough*

 

EDIT: I'm going insane from the anticipation. 3 hours and 22 minutes to go.

[BANZAI!!!!]

edited his final attack. It is more powerful now, but the recoil is also much stronger. It will usually put him out of the battle barring some kind of outside intervention. (Better befriend the white mage!)

Here you go, Blu. Hope it's good enough.

 

[Spoiler=Kazuma Ito, The Burst Joker]

Name: Kazuma Ito
Age: 17
Gender: Male
Date of Birth: August 7th
Blood Type: B-
Hobby(s): Baseball (watching, playing, talking stats, etc..), Girls (he's quite the flirt),  Martial Arts, Mecha anime (secretly), eating spicy food
High School Year: 3rd Year
[Spoiler=Appearance]

"Everything always comes down to one moment, one specific place and time. When you get there, make sure you're going full speed ahead. Then, nothing can stop you."

 

Kazuma stands at about 6 feet tall. He is well toned, and In excellent shape, although he appears smaller than other boys his age due to his rather slender build. He has hazel eyes and usually wears a large smile. His grey hair is fairly long, and it looks messy more often than not. Although he doesn't flaunt it, Kazuma is actually quite attractive, and he looks very good in the school uniform. When not in his school Uniform, Kazuma prefers to wear a brown jacket (usually with some sort of t-shirt underneath it, but he sometimes forgoes the t-shirt when he is feeling extremely casual) and jeans. He tends to wear a brown and grey wristband on his right arm to cover up a particularly nasty looking burn scar on his arm. He wears a red headband and a grey baseball cap at all times. He even wears them at school when he can get away with it, and often gets in trouble with the faculty when he is caught doing so. He also tends to wear a simple silver necklace that his mother gave him a few years ago. It is usually tucked into his shirt. When pitching for Kumagawa High School's Varsity Baseball team, he wears their standard black and white Varsity Uniform. He has distinct bright red cleats and a black baseball glove. He is number 09.

Notes: Although the picture above shows a scar on his left cheek, Kazuma has no such scar.[/spoiler]
[Spoiler=Personality]  Usually the one to start a conversation, most people find Kazuma to be a pretty normal, fun-loving teenager. At first glance, Kazuma seems to be a typical high school athlete. He exudes confidence, is good with girls, and isn't academically inclined.Those who don't know him see Kazuma as just another loud, obnoxious jock. However, if one were to get closer to him, they would find a much different boy behind the "jock" exterior. Kazuma is actually quite friendly, and isn't  nearly as mean spirited as some of his teammates tend to be. In fact, he is very empathetic. Kazuma always offers his support when his friends need it, and at the very least gives his trademark wide smile to someone with whom he is not so well acquainted. Of course, Kazuma's most defining character trait is his love for Baseball. He is obsessed with the sport, and takes every opportunity to train and improve himself (he even stood a girl up once to go train, although he never did so again). He dreams of one day playing in the American major leagues. Kazuma is quite lazy when it comes to things he has no interest in, like school. Although he is very intelligent, he usually just scrapes by with the bare minimum of effort needed to pass his classes, prefering to hang out with friends or practice his curve ball to doing homework. He is also quick to anger. Kazuma has never been afraid to get physical with someone, and has been in his fair share of fights. However, he is smart enough not to throw the first punch. When angry, Kazuma is very loud and vulgar. When it comes to girls, Kazuma has a bit of a wandering eye, although he rarely gets caught staring. He is also quite the flirt. Despite this, he is rarely in a relationship for long. Kazuma also has a more childish side to himself. He often cracks dirty jokes, and has a fairly good sense of humor. He is secretly a mecha anime fan, and has a small collection of gunpla cleverly hidden in his closet. He will steadfastly deny this if asked, however. [/spoiler]

[Spoiler=Combat Information]
[Spoiler=Weapon] Force Breaker: Kazuma's weapon of choice is his own fist. To augment this, he forms a red metal gauntlet that he calls Force Breaker around his left arm. Force Breaker is, for the most part, form fitting, although the forearm portion seems to be quite a lot thicker, so that it can parry attacks. The gauntlet forms around the arm up to the top of the bicep. It has five fingers, and also materializes a red shoulder pauldron as well. [/spoiler]
[Spoiler=Powers]

Phasing: As a Joker, Kazuma is able to utilize Phasing to go between the two realms at will.

Spatial Shift: A common ability among human and spirit Jokers, this power allows for Jokers to perform extraordinary feats of acrobatics such as jumping incredibly high and far, dodging speeding objects and attacks, levitating and flying, and even instant teleporting by means of manipulating space. When using Spatial Shift, a Joker displaces his/her position in space and shifts himself/herself to a new part of space. This shift can be gradual (a high jump) or instant (teleportation) and will appear accordingly. A Joker can also suspend his/her position in space (levitation) and continue to move while still being suspended (flying). Each shift (except for suspended shifts) is accompanied by the flickering of a golden luminescence under a Joker's feet.

 

Motion Burst: Kazuma's powers allow him to manipulate kinetic and potential energy at will. Since he is inexperienced, he can only affect himself or any object he touches. He can vastly increase the potential energy of any object, and then convert the whole of this potential into kinetic energy. In other words, he can accelerate any object (including himself) to speeds hundreds of times faster than the laws of physics would normally allow. He has named this ability "Motion Burst" due to the instantaneous manner in which he can accelerate objects. In combat, Kazuma will usually use this ability to accelerate objects that he throws from his left arm. However, he is also quite fond of accelerating himself. This, combined with his ability to spacial shift, means that he can strike with incredible destructive force. However, maneuvering either himself or thrown objects is extremely difficult due to his still human reflexes. Its is quite possible for him to move these objects in any way he wants, its just that he almost never has more than a millisecond to do so. If either a thrown object or Kazuma himself has an unobstructed straight path, then in theory it could accelerate infinitely.

 

Motion Guard: Kazuma can also vastly decrease the potential or kinetic energy of an object. He can use this power to make an object immovable, or even decrease the destructive force of an enemy's attack. However, the limitation of his own reflexes still applies, and he must be able to react fast enough and make physical contact with the object in order for this to have any effect.

[/spoiler]

[Spoiler=Special Attacks]

 

Radar Breaker: One of Kazuma's Typical attacks. He uses his Joker abilities to manipulate a piece of nearby matter and change it into a spherical form. Then, he throws a fastball with it and uses his Motion Burst ability to propel it to extremely high speed. He has likened this ability to being hit with a heavy artillery shell. The longer the distance the projectile travels, the faster and more forceful the hit will be.

 

Force Buster: Using his Spacial Shift ability, Kazuma flies up to a great height (usually about 50 feet above his opponent, to give himself distance to accelerate, but not so much that they have time to dodge). Then using a combination of gravity and Motion Burst, he descends at his opponent with a superman punch. This impact is usually stronger than one generated by Radar Breaker.

 

Warp Buster: First, Kazuma builds up as much potential energy in his left arm as he possibly can. Then, similar to the Force Buster, Kazuma accelerates himself using Motion Burst. Instead of Charging with his fist outstretched, however, he keeps his arm at the ready. After he has accelerated sufficiently, Kazuma Teleports to his target's location using Spatial shift, and converts all of the potential energy in his fist into kinetic energy as he punches his target at point blank range. This combines the already incredible acceleration of his motion burst with a punch that routinely strikes with more force than a freight train. (for reference, there is about as much energy in a freight train traveling at 60 mph as there is in a nuclear warhead). This by far Kazuma's strongest attack. However the sheer force of his strike combined with the speed of his arm movement and the sudden stop will always cause damage to Kazuma himself. Usually in the form of whiplash or, in worse cases, a hyper extended arm. Thus, the attack is a double edged sword that will often put Kazuma himself out of a battle. [/spoiler] [/spoiler]

 

[Spoiler=Other Information]

Kazuma's Favorite color is red, and his favorite food is curry with rice.

His favorite Baseball player is Hideki Matsui

Kazuma practices mixed martial arts to keep himself in shape. He is experianced in Muay Thai and Jiu Jitsu[/spoiler]
 

[/spoiler]

 

Yes, I know he isn't a joker yet, but I felt like explaining the names for his attacks. So i suppose he will name them in the future. I'm also not sure his third special attack is physically possible. Thoughts? Is he overpowered in any way?

[Astolfo]

A warhead-level power seems a bit strong, but that's Blu/Desu's judgement.