WN - My SOTW6 Entry [Updated: July 3rd 2013]

[Astolfo]

This shall be my current showcase hall of collections. Whenever I come up with something new, I shall post it here, and update the title as such.

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[spoiler="March 30 2013"][spoiler="Item 1"][spoiler="Raibread Logo"][spoiler="Version 1"][/spoiler]
[spoiler="Version 2"][/spoiler]
[spoiler="Version 3"][/spoiler]
[spoiler=Notes]I was attempting to keep to a simple and clean theme (No KH pun intended). The reason I made this was because of the more or less well-known nickname of .Rai: Raibread. RAI, I KNOW YOU SEE THIS.[/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler]
April 28 2013 Entry - Removed by Neph due to mediocrity

[spoiler="May 13 2013"][spoiler="Item 1"][spoiler="The Mayushii Who Leapt Through Time"][/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler]
[spoiler="May 15 2013"][spoiler="Item 1"][spoiler=Revolutionaire][spoiler=V1][/spoiler]
[spoiler=V2][/spoiler]
[spoiler=V3][/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler]
[spoiler="May 21 2013"][spoiler="Item 1"][spoiler=PsychedelIAc][/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler]
[spoiler="May 24 2013"][spoiler="Item 1"][spoiler=Hivergence][spoiler="Version 1"][/spoiler]
[spoiler="Version 2"][/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler]
[spoiler="May 28 2013"][spoiler="Item 1"][spoiler="Brushing out Skynet"][spoiler=V1][/spoiler]
[spoiler=V2][/spoiler]
[spoiler=V3][/spoiler]
[spoiler=V4][/spoiler]
[spoiler=V5][/spoiler]
[spoiler=V6][/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler]
[spoiler="June 4 2013"][spoiler="Item 1"][spoiler="Beautiful Nevermore"][spoiler=V1][/spoiler]
[spoiler=V2][/spoiler]
[spoiler=V3][/spoiler]
[spoiler=V4][/spoiler]
[spoiler=V5][/spoiler]
[spoiler=V6][/spoiler]
[spoiler=Notes]The right side is ew for the first and second. The overly excessive details on the first one, and the overly large gear mask for both. But whatever. Also, it's my first time working with a real-life type of render. I cropped it a bit for 2 versions iirc, but not sure if it's good. Bleh.[/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="June 8 2013"][spoiler="Item 1"][spoiler="You are Free"][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="Notes"]First smudge tag.[/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="June 9 2013"][spoiler="Item 1"][spoiler="Into Nothingness"][/spoiler][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="Item 2"][spoiler="G-Bang"][/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="June 11 2013"][spoiler="Item 1"][spoiler="Explosive Will"][spoiler="V1"][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="V2"][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="Notes"]I would've uploaded this yesterday, as I had finished yesterday, but goddamnit, YCM was giving me the Cloudflare error.[/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="June 19 2013"][spoiler="Item 1"][spoiler="Oily Buttflies"][spoiler="V1"][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="V2"][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="Notes"]This version of the tag started out with a butterfly render for a smudge, then with everything, I got rid of the render and smudged a buttfly-monster thing on there. S: I have no f***ing idea what I was doing.[/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="June 20 2013"][spoiler="Item 1"][spoiler="Kill(ua)"][spoiler="V1"][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="V2"][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="Notes"]I know, I know. The text on the first is really illegible, but it's supposed to say 'Gar'.[/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="June 27 2013"][spoiler="Item 1"][spoiler="Luster Moon"][spoiler="V1"][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="V2"][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="V3"][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="V4"][/spoiler][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="Dark Luster"][spoiler="V1"][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="V2"][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="V3"][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="V4"][/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler]

 

[spoiler="July 3 2013"][spoiler="Item 1"][spoiler="Scion of a Seraph"][/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler]

[Catman25]

Very simple yet effective. I think more could be done than just a fleur-de-lis mask though. 

[Astolfo]

Any other parts I should work on? Or just the fact more could be done than just the fleur-de-lis mask? Whichever way, thanks for the critique. ^^

[Catman25]

Just noticed the slice of bread actually. Maybe some sort of darker brown outline would work. Nice touch though.

[Astolfo]

ahhh

/shame

this one doesn't feel as natural and good, but without knowledge of how to make logos nicely and all, not sure how to do better besides look at tuts.

asdfgsfgimsorry

/sob

Review please.

[Astolfo]

le bump

 

I didn't mean this as a necro, but it was due to planning to add future works to this thread. Apologies if it is a necro...

[.Rai]

I think, because of the fractalish texture, a lot of the tones are lost to this murky grey. Tone it down a bit, I think. The depth is clever; you could even emphasise it more. It helps the motion of the piece. You've turned it into a very textural thing. It would work better as a flow-based piece with movement. Play around with bubble C4Ds. Remove the yellows on the left side: you already have three colours to work with (blues, greens and purples). Add a few Levels adjustments to boost the shadows and just clear the light balance.

Text really just fades into the thing quite needlessly. If it adds little impact, you might as well get rid of it, in case it becomes distracting.

[Astolfo]

Thanks .Rai for the review.

^ ^

 

Is it cluttered? That's what I was kinda worried about. And thanks for the help too. =D

[Aix]

I'd say erase the fractal that is over her hand and remove the text or put it somewhere else.

[Astolfo]

Bump.

I'll say, I'm rather proud of this one.

inb4itgetstornapart

[Aix]

The guy needs to stand out more.

[Tormented]

SHARPEN mayteee. Sharpen can improve the overall quality of a lot of images. Also need to work with your coloring, your usage of g-maps isn't brilliant. But the design is far from bad.

[Astolfo]

Not really sure about the bottom right corner for this one and some other stuff, but take a gander at it guys. ;3;

[Astolfo]

Bumpy.

Two additions people haven't posted for reviews yet.~!

[Aix]

It's too blurry and the divergence number is out of place.

[Astolfo]

I was trying to keep the focal as her face, and keep the others to the side, but I get what you mean.
I'll upload the clean version backup.

EDIT: out of place as in location? or as in doesn't fit in with theme?

[Astolfo]

Bump~!

[Astolfo]

 

Fine then. Don't reply. I see how it is.

CX

*shot repeatedly*

 

Any favorites? Other criticism?

Also, does anyone have some kind of tut where it's less of a how-to-make-this-exact-tag tut, and more of a you-can-use-this-and-that-function and gives info on functions, uses in things, etc?

[Aix]

Also, does anyone have some kind of tut where it's less of a how-to-make-this-exact-tag tut, and more of a you-can-use-this-and-that-function and gives info on functions, uses in things, etc?

Very doubtful as good sigs are typically unique and are built on some sort of concept and suiting the concept with the render.

[Astolfo]

hey hey hey
v5 is my fav and best prob
review pweaze?
;3;

[.Rai]

I actually prefer the fourth version to some extent, although the fifth is neat. Logos really should accentuate some features, and not add unnecessary details. I'm not sure what the theme of the logo is, but an edited font as well as big-ass planat with rings behind it could get distracting. Not a bad logo, but definitely something to take in mind. <3

[Astolfo]

I like the fourth one as well.
And thanks Raibread. C:
Torm's posting another series of avis, and wanted me to make a logo for him. ;3;

[Astolfo]

Le bumparoo.~!
I like Version 2 a bit better.
The right side is ew. The overly excessive details on the first one, and the overly large gear mask for both. But whatever. Also, it's my first time working with a real-life type of render.

[chairman ali]

Newest tag is simply great. Not liking the thing on the right though.

What did you exactly do though? I'm interested to know.

[Astolfo]

@Eli: I don't really know.

I got a render I liked, found some stuff to blend in like stocks and all, and messed with the effects till I liked it.

 

xD

 

Want the PSD?

 

Also, bump.