ZeRainbowDash Posted March 17, 2013 Report Share Posted March 17, 2013 The world was muffled and cloaked in the night’s raven mantle and silence reigned on the small patch of road that was illuminated by a few stray beams of moonlight that shone through the broken clouds. The rain fell equally silently, just a fine mist that was felt but not heard or seen. The night grew vivid as lightning cleaved the air. And suddenly the silence was broken. Thunder boomed, and it sounded like the roar of a massive beast striving to break out of some hell. As the thunder died, the silence settled back onto the night. Lightning cut the air again, but this time there was no thunder. “That’s bad luck,” remarked a tall young man, breaking the silence that had settled again. He was roguishly handsome, tall and slender, with mischievous sea green eyes and long blonde hair with black streaks through it, showing he was not from around these parts of Cyren, where most were short and stocky with dark hair and dark eyes. “it’s never good when there’s lightning without thunder.” Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AsianGuy1137 Posted March 17, 2013 Report Share Posted March 17, 2013 That's definitely a solid setup to whatever it is you're trying to create, but as of now, your fanfic needs more than just an intro. You should read through the guidelines on the requirements for posting fanfics and then fix things accordingly so this doesn't get locked: READ ME! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ZeRainbowDash Posted March 17, 2013 Author Report Share Posted March 17, 2013 its not fanfic. its just a beginning of a random story i felt like sharing. if i made a reference to something out there it was completely unintentional. but thanks for the feedback Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AsianGuy1137 Posted March 17, 2013 Report Share Posted March 17, 2013 Sorry for calling this a fanfic. I use that term too generally. Regardless, there's a minimum length requirement for anything displayed in this subforum and right now, this intro by itself doesn't satisfy the requirement. Maybe you could some more content? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ZeRainbowDash Posted March 17, 2013 Author Report Share Posted March 17, 2013 sure. it may take a little, but how long is the minimum requirement? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted March 18, 2013 Report Share Posted March 18, 2013 2 pages for anything not a prologue. You have 24 hours to make adjustments. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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