Broken Stars [ OOC / PG-16 / Started / Not Currently Accepting / Co-hosted by Kyng ]

[Astolfo]

@Corona: I'm not meaning to rush. Just saying.

 

@Aix: Dead Dream RWBY Machine Neph Studios.... I know... :P

 

I dunno about the year. Just wanted to do some fancy stuff. I'll make up some explanation later.

 

EDIT: Didn't see the third page. I'll check apps in a few. Gotta eat. Then I'll look over other stuff. No fighting. Best one wins. Variety helps. And Corona's post (post #50) is correct.

[Nexev]

I can see a variety of ways to use T-morph, my character does not however as U-Grade helps increase the volume of her own voice.

 

You can make your own blood acidic, you can turn your veins into a ant hive which when combined with the bug charmer power will allow you to be a walking swarm of infinite tiny hellbeasts. You can streatch your arms so you can engage someone in a sword fight twenty feet away. ETC

[Astolfo]

I can see a variety of ways to use T-morph, my character does not however as U-Grade helps increase the volume of her own voice.

 

You can make your own blood acidic, you can turn your veins into a ant hive which when combined with the bug charmer power will allow you to be a walking swarm of infinite tiny hellbeasts. You can streatch your arms so you can engage someone in a sword fight twenty feet away. ETC

Good thinking.

[~Tico~]

By check apps, are you just going through them to see if there are any errors or are you doing the accepting process already? Your edit sorta made it seem like the latter, but I might just be reading it wrong.

[Astolfo]

I'm looking through possible errors and such now and starting to rank them mentally.

 

EDIT: Aix, a poisonous blood would be T-Morph.

 

Currently, Kyng's and TJ's are my favorites. They're amazing.

 

Others are great too. They're all great. ._.

 

AAAAGH.

[Nexev]

Thank you, I have made my last edit, giving her a fighting style and finally provided songs that Public Dissent plays.

[Justice Master]

Not gonna make an app after all. It's for the best.

[Kyng's Old Account]

I'll be going through apps today with heavy critique, in order to try and help Neph to decide which apps'll get in.

[Nexev]

What about your own, this may have been a mere oversight but you forgot to fill in your personallity. It makes it difficult to know if your character is Sigfried or Nightmare you must understand.

[Kyng's Old Account]

I do intend to finish my own before reviewing, however I know reviewing my own will include bias. I am having an external body review my own application to counter-balance this.

[Nexev]

Alright, I am intersted in seeing what you come up with. 

[Reinforce]

I'm currently working on the app, so I've posted this much here for now while I work on it.

 

[spoiler=My App]"Calm down, it will not do for my prey to get spooked."

Personal Information
Username: Simdoggy Entity
Name: Saya Hayashi (though she's only revealed her first name, Saya to the rest of the Starfell)
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Date of Birth: 23rd August
Blood Type: B-negative
Nanite Type: U-Grade
Hobby(s): Archery, Hunting, Reading Novels
[spoiler=Appearance]

Saya appears as above, although she has silver eyes rather than blue eyes, a result of the Nanites being unable to figure out the pigment to return the eyes to their original blue colour after they've been damaged, and silver being an easier pigment for them to create. [/spoiler]
[spoiler=Personality]Saya is fairly passive usually, prefering to end arguments she's part of quickly, or avoid joining them when she can. Despite this, she does have a fairly short fuse, becoming angry very quickly at a couple of things, usually when someone insults her archery abilities. She is also good at focussing on what she is attempting to achieve, which is useful since she needs to be able to focus on her aiming as an archer. She is quite friendly to those she trusts, though she can take a while to trust those she doesn't know, especially given the current situation, but she does tend to trust the other Starfell, being as they are united in a common cause at the moment. When the Daedalus Meteor fell and Saya anded up as one of the Starfell, she made the decision to help out against those seeking to opress them. She has also developed the ability to switch into the mindstate of a killer, something she needed to develop so as to kill unsuspecting humans from range without ruining her personality by either guilt or excitement over the kill. [/spoiler]

Combat Information
Weapon Type: Archery from range, and a hunting dagger if she has to get up close
[spoiler=Primary Weapon] A longbow, made out of a type of dark coloured and fairly flexible wood specific to Torovia, and medival style arrows. She keeps 24 of these arrows with her at a time, kept in a quiver on her back. In addition to those, she also carries around three more similar arrows that have been tipped in the venom of a poisonous snake native to Torovia. These arrows look identical to her normal arrows, aside from having a leather cover over the heads, which keeps the venom from drying out or getting into contact with her skin. These are kept in a second section on the left side of her quiver (from her perspective while it's on her back), which holds the three arrows together in a pocket with a cover up the top that when shut holds them in place with very little room to move around. Her other main weapon is her hunting dagger, about 40 centimetres long, with 30 centimetres of that consisting of the blade, and the last 10 being a leather-bound handle. The blade looks dull, though it was well forged and is actually rather sharp, and is curved over the last couple of centimetres, connecting to the reverse side which is blunt and not designed to be a blade. This is worn in a leather sheath on her belt, and is easily accessable to just be pulled out and used when needed.[/spoiler]
[spoiler=Fighting Style] Saya fights best at range, away from her enemy where she can effectively wound or kill them without giving them much chance to get close, making use of her skills as an expert archer when she does. If she is forced into a close combat confrontation, she will use her hunting dagger to try and keep them at bay until she gets a chance to escape, or alternatively, to kill them if she thinks she is skilled enough to manage it. She's also been trained as a knife fighter by one of the other Starfell she has met since the incident, though her teacher has since been caught by Rebirth's army and put to death. She also has a last resort weapon in her hunting knife, though it's not a particularly powerful weapon, being designed to be used to prepare dead animals rather than to actually fight, so she uses it only if she's right up close to her enemy, and they aren't expecting an attack.[/spoiler]
[spoiler=Secondary Weapon(s)/Equipment]Her hunting knife is her secondary weapon, and is a small blade only 20 centimetres in length, about half hilt and half blade, and has a similar shaped blade, though on a smaller scale, to her hunting dagger. The handle is also leather-bound, and it is kept in a leather sheath on a leg-strap. In addition to that she also carries around a small bottle of medicine stored in a pouch on her belt. This medicine bottle contains the only known antidote to the venom contained on those arrows, a special liquid made by storing a petal of a flower native to Torovia inside a vial containing some fresh venom of the snake itself and left to mature for a few days. The resulting medicine is used by drinking a couple of drops of the medicine within an hour of the venom entering your system, so as the medicine has enough time to counteract the venom before the venom can kill the target. The untreated venom can kill the target within 3 hours of entering the target's system.[/spoiler]
[spoiler=Special Technique(s)]

Quickcast - Saya is rather efficient at the motion of pulling out an arrow, notching it to the bow, pulling back the bowstring and firing, being able to complete the first three of the actions in just a second, and being able to repeat the action within about a second of firing the previous arrow.

Quiet moving - As an experienced hunter, Saya has learnt how to move stealthly and quietly, making it harder to notice her when she doesn't want to be seen, and easier for her to track you if she wants to.

Tracking - Not so much a special technique as just an ordinary skill she's learnt over hears of hunting, she can spot traces of where other living creatures, human or otherwise, have left signs that they have been through the area.[/spoiler]
[spoiler=Power(s)] Improved Eyesight - The mutation she gained from her Nanite, a sharpening of her vision and the capabilities of her eyes, along with the ability to completely regenerate her eyes in perfect condition within a couple of minutes something happen to them. This takes away from the regenerative abilities of the Nanites spread throughout the rest of her body, as the majority of them are forcussed in her eyes, but as she still gains marginally improved regenerative abilities anyway, she's happy with that. Due to the increased vision in her eyes, she is also capable of accuracy with her bow over a longer range than most would be capable of.
Thermal Vision - An extention of the increased capabilities of her sight, Saya has also gained the ability to control her iris and pupils to open the pupils further than would be possible without the help of the nanites. In this state she can increase her nighttime vision, as well as opening the pupils far enough to slip out of viewing the visible spectrum, and instead to be able to see the thermal spectrum. In this way of vision, she has a harder time making out details of the area, but can see the heat from any sources painted out easily in her eyes, which increases her ability to find nearby enemies.[/spoiler]

Other Info
Saya is a native of Torovia, and is a fan of fantasy novels. She also owns a single pet, the snake that the venom on her special arrows comes from, who she usually feeds about once a week with a live rat that she catches from a large colony living in the forest behind her house. Also, when she wants to milk the snake's fangs for the poison, she usually would do that the day after she feeds it, so as it has plenty of poison in the fangs to obtain, but isn't so agressive since it's not as hungry. She would also turn off the heat lamp she usually has going over it about an hour beforehand so as to make the snake less active for when she actually wants to take the venom.[/spoiler]

 

EDIT: The app has been finished and is ready for criticism/anything I need to fix or improve on it.

[Sweetie Belle]

[spoiler=Sweetie Belle - Elliot Creed]

"You see an army of two hundred men? I see a mass of two hundred corpses."

Personal Information
Username: Entity
Name: Elliot Creed (responds only to Creed)
Age: 27
Gender: Male
Date of Birth: March 9
Blood Type: A+
Nanite Type: T-Morph
Hobby(s): Tinkering with machines and various mechanisms.[spoiler=Appearance:]
Just another terrible attempt at me trying to draw the hyoomans. Don't mind the awkward cutoff on the right arm; I didn't want to draw it. He's caucasian, and his hair is a light lavender color.
[/spoiler]Personality:
    Creed is quite unstable at times, and is known to go into random outbursts. At other times, he can be cold and calculating. He is definitely insane, but he is quite strategic, and is oftentimes referred to as a genius for his prowess in the field of electronics and computers. He is unbiased, willing to strike down anyone who interferes with his goals.
    He is fueled by revenge, for the loss of his sister, who was also a Starfell. He is convinced that she was killed by Rebirth, and will go to all ends to see his own justice dealt. He is cruel, and quick to judge. He refuses to accept help from other individuals, and rarely works together with others as well. He uses and even sacrifices others to further his own goal, forcefully using others as protection in combat.
    He is highly confident about his abilities as an able fighter, and will even arm his opponent as to even the playing field and showcase himself better. Even without using his T-Morph abilities, he is able to take on hordes of enemies. He trained against monsters in western Temeris, and is capable of holding his own against a Skulvern. It is rumored that he was able to take down a Yohg-Shuggor, but this rumor is unconfirmed.

Combat Information
Weapon Type: A wooden blade, complemented by T-Morph usage.
Primary Weapon: A hand-carved wooden short sword. It measures approximately 1.5 feet in length, and has a relatively sharp blade for a wooden weapon. It is sharp at the point, and is suitable for stabbing. The blade is coated with resin to help it retain its shape. It is made of red oak, and is decently solid. The handle is wrapped with black tape and has no handguard. It also has a bamboo sheath, which is padded with cloth to prevent the sword from moving around while sheathed. The sheath is also coated in resin to help prevent cracking and breaking. At the bottom of the sheath is a 4 pound weight to give it extra force. The sword is often carried in his hand. When fighting, Creed does not initially unsheath his sword, but fights with the sheathed sword instead.[spoiler=Fighting Style:]
双閃爆破流 || そうせんばくはりゅう || Sōsen-Bakuharyū || Twin Flash - Burst Style
The Sōsen style, an ancient style developed around X9500 by an unnamed creator, is centered around frequently attacking one or multiple targets with quick, weak, but very precise attacks. It takes many years to develop the accuracy required to master Sōsen. Sōsen is made up of five styles, all of which must be mastered in order to master Sōsen itself: River, Rush, Earth, Life, and Wind. Burst is Creed's own derivitave style, which uses his T-Morph ability to complement his attack style. He can attack much quicker and harder, however his stamina is greatly decreased from using his T-Morph ability. Creed has only mastered River and Rush, and is only beginning Wind training.[spoiler=Sōsen Styles]
River: River style teaches balance and versatility. One must be able to defend and strike from any angle, even with the back turned to the opponent.
Rush: Rush style emphasizes closing the distance between you and the enemy. It required extremely fast reflexes to be able to react to ranged attackers.
Earth: Earth style teaches standing one's ground, and emphasizes solely on defense.
Life: Life style emphasizes on constant change, and requires the user to be able to utilize any weapon. The user must be able to learn quickly and accurately.
Wind: Wind style teaches the passivity of Sōsen. You must be able to recover quickly from a blow, and relies solely on evading attacks.
[/spoiler]-Strong attacks
-Extremely accurate
-Extended range[hr]-Slower attack frequency
-Decreased stamina
-Minimal defense and evasion
-Requires constant focus on combat
[/spoiler][spoiler=Secondary Weapon(s)/Equipment:]AR Goggles
Augmented Reality Goggles. When he wears them, he can read the information about the environment around him. It can measure exact distances, and in combat, calculate exact points to strike for the most effect. Can also switch to infrared mode, although the AR function does not work in this mode. 
[/spoiler][spoiler=Special Technique(s):]Back Taunt
Creed taunts his opponent by turning his back and appearing disarmed. The opponent is lulled into a false sense of security and attacks. However, once they connect, Creed sublimates and reappears behind the opponent. The opponent will be disoriented by Creeds sudden change in position, as well as breathing in some of the smoke. At this point, Creed is able to easily overcome his opponent.
Launch Sword
While fighting with his sword still in its sheath, he can "launch" the sheath off of the blade towards the target.
[/spoiler][spoiler=Power(s):]Sublimate
Can turn himself and anything he is directly touching (holding in his hand) into smoke and back. He can travel short distances (about 5-10 meters), and through any cracks in a material as this gas. Breathing in the gas will cause one to become disoriented or in more concentrated or longer doses, unconscious.
[/spoiler]
Other Info

• Has knowledge of all types of locks and can break through most of them.
• Immediately hates anyone who resembles Rebirth.

[/spoiler]

Everything seems to be in order here. Hopefully not too overpowered?

Also, what exactly does Rebirth look like?

[encapturer]

Alright, I'm done. Took out the crossbow portion, using darts/gale module only, and starting myself off with only 1 mist.

Of course this means Daena would only be able to bleed things to death in combat, since the sleep darts wouldn't really work in battle. Which I guess is fine since she's built to be more of a support character, anyway. Just hope she doesn't die too early if picked X.x

EDIT:It is here, by the way. Also, is there a mod watching this thread? o.o

[Nexev]

How did Teslanians conquer roughly the outer half of every continent and Rebirth has assumed power within 3-4 days?

 

Cause a half-week is pretty short time for all that to happen.

[Astolfo]

Gah! I'll edit a bunch when I get to my computer. :P

[bury the year]

EDIT:It is here, by the way. Also, is there a mod watching this thread? o.o

I'm watching this thread. The profanity powers, by the way, are a bit borderline but I'll let it play out first before passing judgment.

[Nexev]

Borderline in that it may be unappropiate or as in it's too powerful?

 

Cause the former I can get and for said reason I will not work around the censors, meaning a lot of stars.

 

If it's the latter IDKW, the empathize power can get incredibly powerful if her powers advance without cap (Since i dont know how this rp will progress i do not know what kind of progress curve will be used, if this has time skips and the like she'd get a lot stronger then say if it takes place across a month or something). And beyond that I figure her disability would equal out most of her power. I'm going to assume the former for now.

[ListenToLife]

Sorta finished my app, I guess. It's not perfect or brilliant, and I'm slightly disappointed in it, but meh. It'll do, I reckon. 

 

http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/297819-broken-stars-ooc-pg-16-not-started-accepting-limited-co-hosted-by-kyng/?p=6150772

[Nexev]

You know despite your PHDs you fogot to give your character a medical licence. You can study plenty of techniques and herbs to improbe medical practices but your character is not legally allowed to do it himself.

 

You might want to edit that a tad, though a proffessor character would be interesting it didnt seem like what you were doing.

[ListenToLife]

You know despite your PHDs you fogot to give your character a medical licence. You can study plenty of techniques and herbs to improbe medical practices but your character is not legally allowed to do it himself.

 

You might want to edit that a tad, though a proffessor character would be interesting it didnt seem like what you were doing.

 

True. He hardly has to be a registered doctor, but good point.

 

I'll add that in.

 

And his reaction to the Nanites thing. That'd probably be needed. >.>

[encapturer]

I'm watching this thread. The profanity powers, by the way, are a bit borderline but I'll let it play out first before passing judgment.

 

It's more that... something... happened to my post.

 

It was kind of weird.

[Astolfo]

FFFFFFF- I typed like 6 paragraphs, and I needed to search something, and accidentally hit CMD-R, not CMD-T. FFFF-
 
I'm doing this on Word. Sorry people. I'll come back in a while, cause I'm going to be busy for the next hour thirty-ish doing some stuff before coming back.

EDIT: X is roughly BC, and XD is roughly AD. Everything should be fine. I'll review the apps when I'm done with work. Any questions or such, just ask here.

[Aix]

Alas, I is done my application. http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/297819-broken-stars-ooc-pg-16-not-started-accepting-limited-co-hosted-by-kyng/?p=6150867

 

Please tell me if he is in any way OPed and I will do my best to fix him.

[a bad post]

My app will be done by tomorrow is that alright Neph?